AbhIya FF : It's the end's beginning. (PAGE 60 ). - Page 9

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Posted: 13 years ago
#81

Originally posted by: mandy1024

It was very impressive 👏 Loved it Koyel, am Mandy 😊 U r a brilliant writer. Loved the 1st chap n CS 😊 Please continue n PM me next time u update 😊


Hey Mandy , i remember you 😳..sure , i'll pm you. 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: shivanipandit29

Wow it's amazing dear the character sketch it's brilliant love it

It's going to be very interesting
Thanks for the pm and I sended you a buddy request.


haha , hopefully it will turn out okay..and thank you! 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
#83
DISCLAIMER , PEOPLE! :

PAGE 1 CONSISTS OF THE FIRST PART OF THE FIRST CHAPTER...ITS NOT THE ENTIRE CHAPTER...THE SECOND PART OF THE FIRST CHAPTER WILL BE UPDATED SOON BY TODAY AFTERNOON OR EVENING AT LATEST.

THANK YOU FOR YOUR CORPORATION. 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
#84
Ok..!!😳
Will be waiting Koel...😃...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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CHAPTER 1 , PART ll : THE FORBIDDEN FRUIT.

The four barriers of concealed red walls were still echoing the sky's tears , where the peels of the scarlet wallpaper were crumbling due to the storm's threatening to the universe as one force of nature was ruthlessly destroying the other making God's body crumble to pieces..but Piya...her body was on a wooden bed , but her soul was somewhere else...the transparent figment of her body was still within the thick flares of emanated and fatal swirls of fire exhaling through a body not made of skin...but those eyes!!!!!!!!...are such eyes created on any living creature?'a scorned swaying iris that stretched beyond the edge of his cheekbones...his cheekbones were haughty , proud gold hues of plateaus, where the figments of bronze sediments within his cheekbones never made a single reflex across the sand granules of time...yet those rugged , weather beaten cheekbones uphold huge pools of stitched and multi coloured shades of his iris' texture..the edge was threads of absolute black slowly entwined its layers within dark brown stitched colour that descended to the layered light hues of brown , where an afterglow of amber flared with a stagnant promise of intensity in the end..Piya's soul still had not gone back to her body...rather, her lifeless body wondered if her soul will ever come back from this day on..her soul held her tightened breath as she tried to touch those eyes of illusion...she mumbled in suffocated whispers'..."Who are you?...if you are alive'are you human..or if you are not..are you the devil'?"

"PIYA!!!!!!!! WAKE UP PLEASE! I KNOW I AM A BITCH , BUT I AM STILL A HUMAN, BABY! WAKE UP'YOUR "DEVIL" IS MISSING YOU!!!"

As Piya's lifeless almond carved honey brown lakes slowly found life within themselves'and she felt air flowing through her body'suddenly her viens seized feeling frigid.."Alvira.." she mumbled in humble whispers "where am I?" '"In hell!"' shouted a rough , stout yet soft pink and pearly layered mouth..rouch because of the capricious words emanated from those lips as long as she can remember '"piya? Enough of your schizo soap opera! Get up!".."Shut up Alvi! She is still kind of semi conscious" , mumbled a terrified , sincerely worried Pri quivering her thick scarlet lips..Alvira rolls her expressive dark brown pools of brandy lakes which look dark and mysterious from a distance..Pri and Piya don't seem to remember the last time Alvira's gorgeous irises did anything but roll their liquids in sarcasm.

Piya's eyes finally feel life completely seep into them'"Guys,where is he!?!?"'Alvira furrowed her perfectly knitted eyebrows and mumbled to Pri.."I think it's time I send her to my aunt's clinic..which "guy" is she talking about!?!? "..Pri playfully hits her olive skinned shoulder and tells her to stop instigating Piya in this state.."Guys , I swear" beheld a quivered , fascinated yet confused Piya'"I saw him..".."Who are you talking about?!?" ..replied a considerate Pri...Piya's soul suddenly felt like it came off her body and cynically whispered to her cream skinned ears'"Darling!! Didn't you know'No one can see him..because he is the forbidden fruit!!!" 'Piya kept on wondering against her sense of sanity in child like wonderwithin her uncountable swirl of thoughts.."why can't I see the forbidden fruit..will I die if I even touch him..like Adam and Eve did when they touched it? If he is the forbidden fruit..how did I see him..am I destined to be destroyed by him then..and if I am..then why does my heart desire it to be the most beautiful and wishful form of death..as if such a sea of death would actually begin the life that belonged to me ...'Maybe Alvira is right..I might go to some clinic already..."

"piya!!!" , shouting surprisingly fiery yet scared Pri.."Let's take you to your apartment now..your father must be worried.."Piya nodded in numb anticipation..

[to be continued!!!!!!!!!!!]

Edited by austenrox - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#86
Yippee..!!me first again..
Fab update koel...!!!Loved the way u describe everything..👏Pia has just seen Abhay/Amon..and look what he has done to her...😍..You explained her condition really well dear..😊..
Now I'm just waiting for them to meet again...
So continue soon...😃
and thank u for the pm...
Edited by qwerty-sonu - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#87
it's awsome...
perfect...!!!
pleez add me in ur pm list...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#88
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it's awesum..evrything was perfect😃
cont. soon n pm me
Edited by abhiya_pkyek - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#89
Awesome update. U are just a mindblowing writer. This story is really mysterious. I loved it. Pls continue soon and thanks a lot for the pm.
Edited by Rmuk - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#90
wow great story plz update soon

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