Maaneet OS: Woh Kaun Thi? pt3pg20

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Deepa

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Posted: 13 years ago

#41

nice part...
cont soon...
thanks for the pm...

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Anuja

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Posted: 13 years ago

#42

Awesome OS👏...

Thanks for PM

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faria86

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Posted: 13 years ago

#43

wow nice OS plzz continue 😊

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Tich

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Posted: 13 years ago

#44

awesome OS shivangi...
i loved it.
do continue soon.

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Divya Nair (aka Piya)

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Posted: 13 years ago

#45

O my laadli don't cry your Di was busy hence couldn't read your beautiful OS

aur this like button se mera chatiz ka aakta hai again its not working sorry jaan

I loved the starting Shivu MSK shouting at Sasha aur Sasha ro rahi thi hehe I felt like dancing 😆😆😆 haan mujhe pata hai k dusro k rinepar hasna nahi chahiye par kya karu meri dili tamanna thi k serial mein ek baar shasha ko rothe hue dekhu ab waha toh ye hua nahi but meri laadli ne meri isha puri kar di 🤗for u

hmm...chalo maan dadima se milne jaa rahe hai and he feels someone is waiting for him hmm... dejavu type sensation chalo dekthe hai kaun intezaar kar raha hai

so maan mussurie pauchkar pehle geet se mile and imediately he felt a strange connection

Shiu u have to continue soon and this is an order warna ye suspense meri jaan le lega k wakai mein wo kaun thi

aur yaar mere maaneet ka ff bhi update kar doh kabse jungle mein mangal ka wait kar rahi hoon😉

love u

urs Piya Di

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Anu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#46

Awesome update dear. Do continue soon.

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Pratiksha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#47

wow nice start rockstar its sounds diferent

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Mansi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#48

It is nice a OS and am having shak that u too r in 12th std like me ok in the story they don't unite in the end yaha aisa mat karna

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Shivangi.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#49

Part 2

Maan couldnt take his mind off that face... A face that made a deep laid mark in his soul. Their eye contact for a few minutes had blown away and defeated our sinewy MSK... When he reached mussorie... He had become a imystery for dadima... There were hours in those days where maan would just stand facing the Dehradun Valley and would be lost in some deep thoughts... for a few days he didnt speak much. But as time heals everything and so as days passed at Mussorie... Maan forgot about the girl and the memories faded away. It was when he was returning back that he recalled geet. He wondered if she was still at the station... And remembered him and their triffle meeting... He decided to reach dehradun asap.He stopped at dehradun and saw that beautiful face selling flowers at the station. He rushed to her and asked her anxiously, "hey!" she smiled at him and replied,"hi!". Maan was ecstatic to find that she remembere him still. With much hold on him...

She complained- kahaan the aap? Maine aapka kitna intezaar kiya... Roz main aapka intezaar karti thi yahi platform pe...
Not only her words... But even her eyes complained selflessly about that unusual wait.

Saying this her eyes moistened... Maan was delighted to hear this... It was like the saying- aag dono taraf se barabar lagi hai... (lmao)

Maan tried to act normal... He replied to her calmly...
"Tum aaj yahaan phool bech rahi ho... Us din to chai lekar aayi thi na?"
"ji... Aaj mere paas ke baagiche mein bahot khubsoorat phool khile the... Toh socha yahaan kaam karne waalo aur aane jaane waalo ke liye le aaon... "
"Hmm... Aur mere liye koi hai kya?"

Geet blushed as she hesitantly took out a white rose...
"Haan... Maine aapke liye yeh gulab bacha ke rakha hai!"

The girl had said it all... Her face and her smiles said what she couldnt. Maan happily boarded the train this time never to forget her again. All the way, those deep passionate eyes spoke to him and his journey was so short for him... It seemed he reached as soon as he started thinking of geet... "I am in love with you" he smiled as he remembered her picture. He had captured her pictured but dared not see it because he thought that not even a snap should be better than Geet herself... His own live doll...

At KC he would be lost in her thoughts and would gaze at the flower without a blink in his eyes... Adi and Pinky were apalled at this new the MSK... He would never scold a person whatsoever...

As his day of returning back neared. He became anxious. He still had that wrinkled rose flower in his diary and while packing he placed it very carefully as sif it costed diamonds like. Maan reached dehradun earlier than expected. But to his disappointment... She was not there at the station. He rushed to the stationmaster to inquire if all the vendors were removed from the platform. No 5. The station-master was amazed as there was no vendor at that platform and it remained untouched because it was deeply located in the station. He asked him twice about a girl who sold tea. The station master laughed at his dreamy stories.

The situation was appalling. Maan rushed to the station platform 5 . It was silent and even birds did not even chirp near the station. There was just one aged tea man who was selling tea on the train that was halted. All the vendors that maan had seen the other day were absent. He rushed to the tea vendor- ji yahaan pe ek ladki phool toh kabhi chai le kar aati thi na?
"Haan saab aati toh thi... Lekin kai saal pehle se woh aayi nahi!"
"main usse pichle mahine hi mila tha... "
" wahi toh asambhav hai beta... "
"kyunki woh ladki paanch saalon se nahi aayi... Kya naam tha uska"

he tried to recall... Maan knew it very well... And so...
Maan blurted out- GEET!!!

" haan shayad geet hi tha"
" bhai lekin main toh usse usi din mila tha"
" phir wahi baat"
"kyun?"
" kyunki paanch saal pehle uske pati ne use train ke saamne phek ke katal kar daala tha"

Maan was appalled. What could he have heard more? That girl... Whom he ha given away his heart at one sight didnt exist in reality? What was that then... Who was that girl who met him as geet.
The tea vendor pointed to an old beggar sitting near the end of the railway station where platform sloped to the level of the track - Saab woh aadmi... Us geet ka pita hai... Aap usse jaa ke pooch lijiye agar aapko meri baat ghalat lage toh... Maan couldnt make himself believe this fact... Was this really happening or was he in some dream... It was something hard to digest and even a man like maan shivered at this moment...

Maan hurriedly rushed to that old man. When maan went near he saw that man was weeping looking at the tracks and held a doll in his hand. He would kiss the doll and then beat his hand on the mud near a mound. Some roses were spread on the mound. Maan asked him gently- ji bhai saab... Main aapki beti ke baare mein kuch poochna chahta hoon.

That man's eyes gleamed with pain. He kissed the doll and said- yeh use bagut pasand thi... Humesha isi se khela karti thi... Lekin na jaane kis manhoos ghadi mein paisonke lalach mein maine uska baal vivah kar diya. Aur aaj bhi uska fal bhugat raha hoon. Aaj bhi yaad hai... Woh din jab maine use aakhiri baar dekha. Mere damaad ne uske mooh pe patti bandh rakhi thi... Aadhe hosh mein thi woh... Usne toh mere haath pao bhi bandhe the.. Kitne gunde laaya tha... Ki koi ek aadmi bhi meri beti ko bacha nahi paaya... Sab khade dekhte rahe tamaasha... Kis tarah usne gaadi ke awaaz sunte hi geet ko mere saamne train ke aage dhakel diya... Yahi isi jagah mujhe uski laash mili... Lekin keval dhad... Uska shareer to tha... Par sir nahi..."

Maan had tears by the time the man finished- kya aapke paas geet ki koi tasveer hai...
Man- haan hai na... Dekho... Bilkul pari si thi meri geet.

Maan was stunned. She was the one he had met a month back. Was that even possible... He took out the snap taken a month back and was astonished that the camera hadnt captured geet... All he could see was the dull platform No. 5 without even a single life on it. He was shivering... With pain and fear... That day... He stood at the station waiting for the train back to delhi when some sweet bells jingled around. Maan stood still... As ice. The winds ceased and so did all the sounds. Maan turned back and saw HER.

She stood wearing the shawl over a strange dress which had her legs bare and shivering. There was unusual gleam in her eyes... And a strange grin on her face... There was a slight tinge of evilness in that grin but yet they showed an unusual emotion in them. Maan, knowing about her story, still hot deviated by her glowing face. Maan saw the flowers in her hands... She slowly whispered to him... "Maan"

GUYS THIS IS THE SECOND PART... HOPE YOU LIKE IT... PRESS LIKE AND DO LEAVE A COMMENT... Sorry for the late update... I was busy with my final exams... I'll update the last part of the OS soon...
Shivangi

Edited by CIDMaaneetNaksh - 13 years ago

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Shivangi.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#50

Will send in the PMs soon... Muah to you all...