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LAST CHAPTER:

Returning back to home they found things pretty normal. When asked by nupur to gunjan, she shyly said Samrat is now pretty much with her to.

A day she said soory n sobbed her heart out, he loves her too much and cant stay away too, feeling her being punished he too himself felt at punished too

Gunjan: pls Samrat…humain maaaf ker dain..hum se apki yeah khamsohi bardsht nhi hoti pls Samrat…pls Samrat….humain aur saaza na dain hum nhi bardsht ker pay gay

Samrat: apki yeah saza humary liyan assan hai kiya, jitni apko takleef daytay hain khud ko bhi hoti hai,

Gunjan: hum sach mein sab samhj gay hain , apki kasm jhoot nhi bol rahy ,,pls,..samrat…hum tum se door nhi rah sakty

she wept and droped on floor, still crying, he moved forward and hugged her, she closed her eyes to feel him so closed after so long, she pulled him closed and kissed his cheek whispering a thnks…..

that also actually made the house environment back to a family place..n slowly u too realize who peaceful it felt to have such harmony at home

………..

Muhammad , Muhammad ,,rukho pls beta rukahin…idhar aay ap, a five year boy was running in the house and a woman was running behind him with a bowl of food, he went to climb up the sofa jumping from one to another running away

SA: ya khuda larkay ap gir jay gay…neechay utra

Muhmmad: dadi jan kuch nhi hota, yeah dekhin, hum is se bhi bari jump lga sakty hain

Nupur: Muhammad, she gasped at him , as he jumped from three steps down n rushed to hide behind gunjan..

Aram se chachi ko dekh ker…ya khuda

Gunjan pakar rekho is ko, subha se kuch nhi kahya hai, aur poray ghar mein hungama macha rahin hain

Gunjna: kyun bhi champ, kya baat hai

M: chachi, look at the food, so non taste mjh yeah nhi kahan

Gunjan: phir kya kaho gay..hum abhi baty hain

M: chocolate muffins…yumi

Gunjan: thik hai…chalo abhi banaty hain…

M: yupi thik hai hum bhi banay gay…..

Nupur: koi zaroorat nhi hai gunjan is hatlat mein is ki farimayishy pori kerny ki, ap aram kerain, wasy aj ap ko ghar k kam kerna tha, aram kerian ab….ab hum dekhain lain gay

Gunjan: aray hum thik hai bhabi ..is ny bhi tu kuch nhi kahaya hain

Nupur: ap choray hum bantay hain

Gunjan: bhabi..thak gain hain ap…subha se yeah 4 cheez hai jo try ker rahin hain ap…

M: uffu..ap dono pls jaldi sochain k kiya kerna hai..mjhy bhook lagi hai

Mayank: uff meray betay ko bhook lagi hai

M: baba jani…he rushed to him n he picked him n kissed him…humain bhoook lagi hai, aur ami chachi ko muffins nhi bany day rahin

Mayank: apko pata hai na chachi ki tabiyat thik nhi hai aur ap un k kayal nhi rakh rahy un se kam ker rahy hain..yeah tu buhat bori baat hai

M: nhi nhi woh thik hai, subha tu dadi ny kaha.."gunjan koi kamal nhi kerain ap, sab kertay hain aur 20 20 logo k kahan bhi bantya hai, itni dramy na kerain..aur jay kitchen mein kuch bany"…he complete mimicking shilpa….see tu im not troubling chachi she is my friend

And all of them looked at him, and suppressed there laughter, while samrat burst in to laugh.

S: wah champ aur kiya bola dadi na…aur bhi suno….

G: Samrat..bacho ko maat begaro…bori baat Muhammad asa nhi kahty …

M: okay sorry…per muffins

Mayank: chalein hum bakery se lay ker atay hain….

Gunjan: bhai ap sab mil ker na…humain kuch nhi kerny daytay….

Mayank: aray bhi ap humara promotion ker rahin hai tu hum itna tu ker sakty hain

……………..

Mayank: kya hua janab..dekh rahin hain beta kiya agay shoohor ko bhool gain ap

Nupur: mayank Muhammad yahin hai abhi..chorain…

He had pulled her close, sliding his hand on her waist…and with her complain he pulled her more close

Mayank: yeah dialogue ab ap k 5 saal porana hogay hai….dekhain..ab tu mjhy apany betay se jealousy horahi hai bhi…achi nhi chorain ga bus

Nupur: mayank woh sab samhjta hai…pls na abhi ajay ga..pls na…

Mayank: no pls na..he pulled her close…so much that she wasn't now able to look at him..

Nupur: m..a.yan..k…..

Muhammad: babaaa….he came ruing opening the door and thay sprang aprt, luckly he didn't saw them so close…

The were starlet …

Mohammad: baba..yeah dekhain I made his…zooo…yeah asay fly kerta hai

Mayank: let me see…he took him in his arms..and start looking at the plane he made from his lagoo…mayank was enjoying his technical explanations, true nupur is right he is an pretty good observer, at time he feel he isn't that much aware of his son, yet he tried to make it as much as possible..being out for works almost whole day he at time is missing his son growing up..yet wht ever time he get he spend with him..and than they being husband n wife are missing their share of quality time …. Yet this phase of life had made them more close, experience new things together…

Mohammad: mama common we will have a group hug..

Mayank: kya..

Muhammad: yes chacho told me..woh chachi ko zoor se squeeze kertain hain phir mjhy..phir hum teeno..he say is we came close…n stay like a family like this .comon na

Nupur and mayank looked at each other, with nupur with a blush, and mayank with a smirk

Mayank: layin ap humain kah rahi hain…dekhain apka deewar..kya kya sekha raha hai… Explanation bhi dayta hai…suno…aur kiya bola beta chacho ny..

Mohammad: common ami pls naaa…

Mayank: common na mom…

Nupur: mayankkk ap bhi…

Mohammad: yeah mom itni red kyun horhin hai…abhi tu hum ny un ko squeeze bhi nhi kiya…chachi tu usk baad hoti hai…..ami its cheating

Mayank: beta yeah ur ami special hai….yeah tu her waqt hoti hain…

Nupur: mayank ap bhi…aur ap chotay mayank ji itni maar lago gi na ap ko..abhi pata chalta hai…

M: he chukled baba ami is gonna beat u…he laughed

Mayank: beta har ghar ki kahani hai…….chalo champ..we will do it..

Mohammad: yes baba

The both move towards and pulled her in a hug, with giigles and chuckles..the both ahmeds place a kiss on her cheeks..and she glared her hubby with a blushed …

At night lying on the bed, she was stroking her sons hairs, while her hubby was hugging her back. She looked at her either side, with contentment and bliss feeling. She planted a kiss on her son cheek, and moved her head a bit back and kissed mayanks forhead.

Mayank: he pulled her close turning her to his side..beta so gaya kiya jo, shoor per pyar araha hai..

Nupur: han soo gaya..

Mayank: hmm..sath hai na humaray ab nhi daary ga…

Nupur: pata nhi kyun dar raha tha….she said with a pout

Mayank: bahanay hain ap k sath sony kay…wasy us se zayda tu ap daar gain thi….

Nupur: mayank.kk

Mayank: kya mayank…Muhammad se zayda zoor se tum cheekhi thi…he chukeld with low voice..and pulled her close..and she straighten and found him leaning close to her

Nupur: mayank ..beta yahin hai…

Mayank: so gaya hai..ignoring her any protest he kissed her..and broke away not to have sum air rather because…

Muhammad: ami dekho naa…he said sumthing in sleep and they moved apart in shock…

Nupur suppressed her giggled..

Mayank: kal se yaeah apny kamray mein saoy ga..is per parh ker poka kero…

Nupur: mayank..bacha hai… she pouted

Mayank: really…lagta hai sirf apk hai….aray jani..mazak ker rahao hoo mein..mera beta bhi hai mjhy bhi fikar hai uski..per kya kero ap bhi tu aj kal kam kam milti hain humain…

Nupur: wasy ap bhi…..

Mayank: chalo kahin bhar chalty hain..sirf teen din k liyan..

Nupur: ji nhi…

Mayank: aray kuch nhi hoga..muhammad gunjan ya diya api k pass baray arm se rahy ga…

Nupur: no way hum apny betay ko chor k kahin nhi jarahi hoon…

Mayank: acha tu betay ko sath lay ker to chalein na…wasy hi kafi akelay hogay hain yeah…apko nhi lagta he need company….

Nupur: acha really….soch lay phir tu hum apko bulkily hi nhi milay ga…

Mayank: aray kasi baatein ker rahin hain ap….ap bhag ker tu dekhain …tu done we r going….

Nupur: mayank abhi kasay

Mayank: nupur ap man jay warna apko chup kerany k aur bhi tareqay hain….

Nupur: yeah galat….

Her words were left incomplete as he used his way to make her say yes..moving away..he grin at her blushing face…

From the other side Muhammad moved closed and huged her from the one side and sungled in her….and with the other side he smirk and mayank cuddle to him

Kiising both of her the most loved people in her life, she slept with contentment

With all that happened from strt to end, through out there journey, together they made this journey ..blissd and content

Edited by drfizaahmed - 13 years ago
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Epilogue:

Marriage are made in heaven yet celebrated on earth..i hate this line when evr its written in any wedding card..lol..but somehow true yet with a change, maybe partners are selected in heavens but marriage is made by the partners selected by heaven above right here.

This ff is just a way to define and to make all the girls familiar with the kind of thing a girl has to face in there in laws.

Walking with you starts as journey of two person being selected by destiny for each other, and the believed that destiny has decided the best. Being the boy taking the first step to make a relation and the girl accepting it. The first point I wanted to show was

When ur working to make a relation, apart from lovey dowey talks , its better to try to know each other with questions like." Wht u thought of ur life"'" wht your parents mean"..these all are sum question that can make u understand a person better. His priorities, his expectations and his flexibilities to life. Answering the question be honest and read between the lines so that u donot get shocked knowing the other after marriage. Knowing a person for sum hours and living 24/7 is two poles apart things. Its not only the case of arrange marriage, same goes with love too'

Married life just not consist of love, affection, romance. There many other practicality wch are around u and u need to handle it patiently. Nupur though being in arrange marriage made it in a full love marriage, gunjan being in love marriage miss using the thought ruined it completely..no matter what at end of the day a mother cums before a wife and its quite fair too'so messing with mother in laws can be trouble sum

A person never is quite because she can't argue or say with a more high voice, yet its better for the sake of the peace of home, and ur relation..plus u gain respect and trust of ur husband and ur in laws like this'.give them time to know u and trust u'.

I wish I can make boys read it to, as the only thing they lack is to say what they actually feel for there wifes..they never felt like saying wht they felt..though some how there gesture told u they cant even mange a day without u'.

A part that u all never objected, that I added deliberately, was this FF doesn't have a verbal confession..Neither mayank nor nupur once in this ff said " I love you" or ever used the word mohabbat .. yet u all can feel it so much. It's not necessary ur husband or u say that to him , it's the feel u have in you..confessions at verbal level isn't always necessary..n most of the time wont happen, but does v really need that..

Edited by drfizaahmed - 13 years ago
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Note:

Phew finally from past 15 days I am trying to write it n still I am not at all satisfied with the ending line….

This the longest ff I ever have written, a completely non planned ff turned into such a huge long and loved ff, I never thought so. The though came up when I was writng Wajood and just clicked me that it can be a very pretty beautiful arrange marriage concept too.

Thanku so much for making it my one the longest and ur most favorite ff, waitng for ur epilogues as I know u all write more beautiful rather than me when it comes to epilogue.

Thanks a lot all loving it so much…

And waiting for ur comments , pls silent readers pls comment , I will be appreciating ur elaborated coments…

Apki ray humary liyan buhat qeemati hai..shukriya shahmilay safar rehny k liyan….

Lov

Fiza

Hopefully cya at GAR MJH KO YAQEEN HOTA

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SIGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

"WALKING WITH YOU"...😍😍😍

It is my most fav ff...as u know it very well...😳
its like a dream journey i had wid "WALKING WITH YOU"...😍❤️😍
it was a journey of MAYANK n NUPUR...
n it was a journey of US...wid dis MAYANK n NUPUR...😳
An "ARRANGE MARRIAGE" can't b better dan dis...😍😍😍
from d begining...to its ending...it was d best journey i had wid any ff...
so i was all in...for a serious crying SESSION...:'(
bt d last part didn't let me do sooo...😳
as it was sooo wonderful dat soothed my heart more dan anything...😍❤️😍
m really glad wid its ending at dis sweet moment...bt will missed it alwaysss...
STILL I WILL RMMBR DIS FF THROUGHOUT MY LIFE...sigh!!!

I LOVED IT...❤️
I LOVED IT...❤️❤️
I LOVED IT LODSSS...❤️❤️❤️
I LOVED IT TO D COREEE...😍❤️😍

Wht i loved d most in dis ff was d sweet n pure n adorable relationship of MAYANK n NUPUR... of..."MayUr"...😍
d way dey were wid each other...WALKING WITH EACH OTHER...is d best thing in dis ff...😍😳😍
as u know...I LOVE DIS MAYANK D MOST!!!!!!!!!!!!😍☺️😍
DIS MAYANK IS MY MOST FAV MAYANK FROM ANY OTHER FF I HV EVR READ...😍❤️😍
I SOOO WANT SOMEONE LIKE HIM...SIGH!!!😍😍😍
N DIS NUPUR...SHE IS ALSO D BEST...😳
I LOVED DIS MAYUR SOOO MUCH...❤️😳❤️

D way der story started...
Humey bilkul nhi pasand ke koi kese kisi se bina puche uski shadi tey kar dete hain...so i didn't like it at all...bt slowly jese Mayank made sure ke Nupur unhe janey...unki atleast photo hi dekh le...n jaise unhoney har baat par unki sehmati li...unka nazariya pucha...unhe IZZAT di...i dont think isse behtar koi apne shoohor ke liye wish kar sakte hain...HE IS D BEST...

n Nupur jaise unhoney itni dafa try kiya ke unki raza-mandi li jaye ya unko bhi samjha jaye...n e-mail chatting ke time jaise unhone apne parents ko izzat dene ko kaha Mayank se...phir unhone jis tarha shadi ke baad APNE GHAR ko sambhala...she actually can b an "IDOL"...as SHE IS ALSO D BEST...

In dis ff...we not only saw d most beautiful relationship of a hubby n wifey...bt also d BEAUTIFUL RELATIONSHIP of...SISTERS...BROTHER-IN-LAWs...MOTHER...MOTHER-IN-LAW n FATHER-IN-LAW TOO...

Dia api ka pyar n parwa Nupur ke liye n Nupur ka apni api ke liye...Adiraj jaise jija cum BHAI ka apni sali cum BEHEN ke liye...Samrat jaise DEWAAR ka apni BHABI ke liye...Samrat ka Mayank ke liye n Mayank ka Samrat ke liye...Mayank ka Nupur ke ammi n Dia Api ke liye...n Nupur ka apne SAAS-SASUR n apne DEWAR ke liye...n evn Gunjan ke liye bhi n last mein Gunjan ka unke n apne parivar ke liye...n MAYUR ka unke BETE...MUHAMMAD KE LIYE...SAB...EACH n EVERYONE n EVERYTHING WAS TOO PERFECT N NOT TOO FORGET TOO "REALISTIC"...

n mostly it was a learning experience also...😳
i got to know may things whc evn i dont know d meaning of my own religion...like wht is "ISTAYGARA"...well...i still dont know hw to do it...bt i now i know abt it...n why Walima is done...n many more things like dis...😳 n hw life cant be always a fairy tale...n we have to live in a reality...n we evn got to see...TWO DIFFERENT KIND OF MARRIAGES...1.ARRANGEED...whc with time became more dan a beautiful LOVE MARRIAGE...n 2.LOVE MARRIAGE...whc became a total mess for some reasons...or some misconceptions...

as i told u many times earlier dat i loved d Muslim background very much of dis ff...i always wamted to read something like dis...A proper Muslim Family...another thing is URDU language..pehle toh samjh ne mein thori si mushkil huyi humey...bt ab adat ho gayi hain...n khass karke unka ek dusre ko app bolna humey bhttt accha lagta hain...n iss ff ki aur ek khass baat hain ke iss ff ke har ek couple apne apne partners ki bht izzat n pyar karte hain n utna hi bishwas bhi karte hain...i think in every relationship dis is d most important thing...n i loved it...😍😍😍

Mayank ka woh pehla E-MAIL...uff!!! YA ALLAH!!!😍☺️😍
hum kabhi bhi nhi bhulenge...wen i saw his pic in dat part...
i was actually BLUSHING LIKE ANYTHING...☺️☺️☺️
i wish yaar mujhe bhi plzzz koi asa e-mail karne wala mil jata...BY GOD!!!
bt...sigh!!! ab Mayank toh sirf Nupur ka hi hain na..n upar se meri family itni strict bhi nhi hain ke humey e-mail se baat karna parein...😳😆
bt i sooo loved dos e-mail convo of MayUr...BY GOD!!!!!!
dos were d most memorable...lovable n ADORABLE MOMENTS of dis ff...😍😍😍
as long as i will b alive i will always cherish dis memories...😳
jese Mayank ne Nupur ko khud ko janne ka... Tasvir hi sahi par dekhne ka mauka diya n jis tarha unhone kuch bhi lene se mana kar diya...n har baat chahe woh dress ya unke room ki decoration ho har baat par jis tarha unki SEHMATI li...DAT WAS JST AWESOME...har ladki yehi toh chahti hain ke unhe koi samjhe...unki izzat karein...unka n unke family ka khayal rakhe...unhe pyar karein...unki raay le...unn par bharosa karein...so MAYANK of dis ff IS D BESTEST HUBBY EVERRR...BY GOD!!!!!!😍☺️😍
i wish sabko unke jesa hi koi miley...inshALLAH...AMEEN!!!😳

dis ff can be a best example of hw to CONVERT AN "ARRANGE MARRIAGE" INTO A "LOVE MARRIAGE"...

Nupur of dis ff is an IDEAL WOMAN...who can b a perfect daughter...daughter-in-law...sister...sister-in-law...a PERFECT WIFE...n even a perfect mom...i loved her too in dis ff very much...all d characters of dis ff were jst PERFECT YET TOO REALISTIC...

N d most important thing is dat i nvr NOTICED dat dey nvr Verbally Expressed dat dey both LOVE EACH OTHER...coz evn B4 marriage d way dey both felt for each other n d way dey used to express sooo much LOVE n PASSION for each other through der EYES...n evn der simple lines...like HAMARE JINDEGI KA HISSA BANNE KE LIYE...HAMARA SATH NIBHANE KE LIYE...HUM PAR BHAROSA KARNE KE LIYE APKA SHUKRIYAN...i think dis simple line hold sooo much dat der was no need to say "I LOVE U" for dem...n i think ke kisi ka kehna ke..."HAMARE ZINDEGI MEIN ANE KE LIYE APKA SHUKRIYAN" ya... "APKE BINA HUM APNI ZINDEGI KE BARE MEIN SOCH BHI NHI SAKTE" yeh sare batein 100bar "I LOVE U" bolne se jyada mayne rakhta hain...apka kisi ke zindegi mein hona agar unke liye shukarguzar ki baat hoon toh isse jyada kisi ko aur kya chahiye ke ap jiski zindegi mein hoon unke liye yeh KHUDA KI REHMAT se kam na hoon n uske liye woh KHUDA ka SHUKARGUZAR hoon...

OK!!!!!!!!!! i guess hum ne bhttt bari bari batein karli hain toh abhi kuch normal batein karte hain...

THANK U...THANK U SOOO VERY MUCH FIZU API FOR WRITING DIS FF..."WALKING WITH YOU"...
i can't say how much i love u for writing dis ff...😳
Love u lodsss API...*dil se*...
dis MayUr r d bestest i have ever read...n known...n loved...
i love dis Mayank n Nupur "THE MOST"...
DIS FF HAS D MOST SPECIAL PLACE IN MY HEART......
I WILL ALWAYSSS LOVE DIS FF...

n der is another bt MOST IMPORTANT THING ABT DIS FF IS...WHILE WALKING WITH ""WALKING WITH YOU""...I GOT MY 1st ""API"" HERE...I GOT TO KNOW U...INTERECT WITH U...SOOO DIS IS VERY VERY VERY SPECIAL FF AS IT GIVES ME MY ""FIZU API""...
SO THANK U VERY MUCH API...🤗
LOVE U LODSSS...*actually* LOT MORE THAN A LOOOTTT...TILL *INFINITY*...🤗🤗🤗
May ALLAH ALWAYSSS BLESS MY FIZU API N SHOWER HER WITH ALL D HAPPINESS N SUCCESS OF DIS WORLD...AMEEN!!!🤗

n lastly abt ur "EPILOGUE"...😍😍😍
HATS OFF API...⭐️⭐️⭐️
I JST LOVED IT...😍😳😍
U SAID EVERYTHING SUCH NICELY DAT M SURE DIS WUD GONNA HELP MANY GIRLS OUT HERE...😳
awww...ME TOO WANT GUYS TO READ DIS FF...😳 AS DEY CAN ALSO LEARN MANY THINGS FROM OUR MAYANK OF "WALKING WITH YOU"... ;)

YOU DID A MINDBLOWING JOB...🤗
I LOVED N "LIVED" DIS JOURNEY WITH DIS "MAYUR" OF "WALKING WITH YOU"😍😍😍
HATS OFF TO U API...⭐️⭐️⭐️

LOVE U API...ALWAYSSS *PUREY DIL SE* 🤗🤗🤗

Anila... urs...ANU...😳
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annie..i need ur words...aj pls all silent readers..
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*Its very lenghty... don't tell me I didn't warn you* 😳

Okay so where do I start... So much to say...

Firstly... I love the title of this FF. Walking Wiith you. Its not only creative, but it also defines the whole FF. You have definitely given this FF the best title. It makes you smile everytime you read it. :)

Coming to the story. You have written an amazing FF. The journey of Mayank-Nupur. You have not only written a story, but you have also given a written example of how a marriage really works. You have gone to the depth of every aspect of marital life, and written it very beautifully. Its not only an FF you enjoy reading, but also one you can actually learn from.

Coming to the story. Mayank & Nupur's journey from the moment they lifes got tangled together till the end where there souls got connected. Each and every chapter have been a pleasure to read and you have written it int he most convincing manner, it all seemed less like story and more like a real life...where you can visualize everything.

From the very first moment you have showed Nupur's emotions in a very realistic way. From the time her life's biggest decision was made. Her hesitation, her anger, everything. I've to admit... the way the marriage was settled, I was not at all familiar with it. Mere liye yeh sab bohat naya tha. Haan hamari family main bhi, auratein parda karti hain, aur auratein aur mard ek saath nahi baithte.. Par shaadi k maamle main itni sakhti... K ek tasveer tak nahi dikhaiy Nupur ko... Kya aaj k zamane main aisa hota hain?
Kyunke I've seen jho kuch rishtey kuch log pakistan say bahar reh kar pakistan main karte hain... Phir bhi itne tareeke hain, baat karne main. Like Facebook, twitter, MSN and now even skype aur cellphones...
Jab aap ne yeh likkha tha, I was quite shocked k itni sakhti hain aur woh bhi aaj k zamane main.

Khair moving on... One thing I have always adored by you FF is the sisterly bond between Dia-Nupur. Dia ki shaadi ho chuki hai, toh woh Nupur ki kaafi madat kar sakti hain... Aur ek baat bohat he achchi lagi k Nupur jho bhi karti hain woh pehle Dia say ijazat mangti thi.. Iss say yeh pata lagta hain, k woh Dia ki izzat karti hain.
Another sweet relationship was the one between Adi-Nupur... he was very supporting, and fulfilled all her wishes which Dia couldn't... Behnoi say ziada woh Bhai tha.. :) That wasvery beautifully potrayed.

And of course the few snippets we got of Dia-Adi. Along with MayUr I enjoyed reading their scenes. :)

Okay then coming to MN.

Kya kahein... I think throughout the whole FF aur throughout their "journey" the most innocent part was their e-mail communication part. Unki rishtey main yeh sab say ziada khubsoorat lamhe the... Thori se hichkichaahat, thori se sharam, aur woh thora sharmilapan...😳 Woh waqt mere hisaaab say, bohat he khubsoorat tha. From both sides. Mayank being the naughty one, while Nupur shying away. Those updates were truly the best ones. I enjoyed reading those ALOT. 😳

And then the wedding prepreations starts. Then again the rituals started... Another side note...Mujhe yeh kaafi achcha laga, kyunke kuch aisi rasmein thi jinka mujhe nahi pata tha, aur jho humari family main nahi karte... So it was nice to know. And it brought Mayank-Nupur one step closed to each other.

And then finally the grand wedding came... That last step they were taking as strangers towards each other, and on the other side they took the first step into the marriage. For me that pre-wedding journey was no less than a blessing. :)

Then the wedding night... Okay.. Looking at it chapter wise... This was the sweetest one. 😳 And the most remembered one... Mujhe kabhi bhi... itni sharam nahi aiy koi FF parthe waqt. I seriously wanted to close my eyes at that moment. Aisa lag raha tha, k sach much main kisi couple k bedroom main hain. It was bit too realistic. 😳 And I think.. you wrote in a very special manner, issiliye it seemed so real. :)

And then their journey began.. They had their shares of ups and downs but they came through every challenge "together". And it was all very realistic. All from settling in a new house, to the first little misunderstanding between you and your in-laws. Kaafi achchi tarah say aap ne likha hain... Showing not only the good side of marital life but also the bad side. And even within all this you have constantly showed the unbreakable bond between Mayank-Nupur in such a special way. That whatever may come their way, it could not break their bond. But it just made it al ot more stronger. 😳

And I must add. They might not have verbally said they love each other, but it was always there. Lafz shayad na istemaal kiye ho unho ne, par unki khamoshi bohat kuch kehti hain. Iss say zaida, Nupur ka character shuruat say khamosh he tha, woh khamoshi main bohat kuch keh jati hai. Mayank usske opposite hain, woh express karta hain. Aur uss ne shayad kaha na ho, directly confess shayad na kiya ho par uss ki harr ki hui harkat say muhabbat saaf saaf nazar aati hain. Toh woh na keh kar bhi bohat kuch gaya, same case with Nupur, theyway she responded. :) Inke rishtey main lafzon ki zarurat nahi, shayad yehi inke rishtey ki khaasiyat hain. :)

Oh and I also liked SG. Especially Gunjan.. You showed us two different marriages, and how the different realtions grow and how they cope up with each other. Another fact to love about this FF. :)

One thing I missed in this FF is the journey of becoming parents and the day they became. And then again, how life is after your blessed with a child. You did show us a few snippets of it, in the last chapter but for me skipping that "special joruney" and reading after that was a bit incomplete. I wished you showed us that. I don't mean 15+ chapter showing that, but just some few glimpse of that period. But then again the flow you have in your story, that might have ruined that, and the journey itself... so maybe it was better this way. :)

Okayy..yeh bohat ziada hogaya hain... So I'll stop.

In short... You showed Mayank & Nupur walking hand in han together in every phase of life. Be it the good times or the bad ones. They're always walking togther.

Beautiful FF Fiza, you have written in the most beautiful manner, that made every chapter a pure pleasure to read.

Oh and I forgot to add the most important part. Reading this FF in pure urdu has been amazing. I really enjoyed it. Especially updates that were only in urdu. Thank you so much, I know it was difficult for you to write so much in urdu considering your other readers. But still you did write a lot for me, and I'm very thankful. Urdu just made the FF a whole lot more special. :)

Thank you so much for writing this, I've loved reading this. And enjoyed Mayank-Nupur's journey to the fullest. :)
Thank You once again for writing Walking With You. 🤗

-SilentPrincess-

PS: Added a few lines...
Edited by .SilentPrincess - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
HEY FIZA,...
NICE AND BEAUTIFUL STORY...REALLY AMAZING...
THE WHOLE STORY IS SUPERB...
AND I VERY MUCH LIKED THE FACT THAT IT WAS IN URDU👏...I LIKED THAT IT WAS BEING WRITTEN IN URDU...YOU WON'T BELIEVE THAT AFTER READING YOUR UPDATES, THIS LANGUAGE HAS SUCH A IMPRESSION ON ME😳😳 THAT I USED TO TRY TO TALK IN THIS URDU STYLE WITH EVERYONE AROUND ME😆😆...AND THEY JUST WONDER WHAT HAS HAPPENED TO ME, THAT WHY I'M TALKING LIKE THAT 😆😆😆

ITS ONE OF MY FAV STORIES I READ...ITS EMOTIONAL, ROMANTIC, FULL OF FAMILY DRAMA AND SOME WHAT FUNNY TOO...ITS REALLY HEART TOUCHING...
AND AMAZINGLY WRITTEN BY YOU...
AND HATS OFF TO THE EPILOGUE YOU HAVE WRITTEN...EVEN I DIDN'T REALIZED THAT THEY NEVER SAID I LOVE YOU TO EACH OTHER AND YET WE FEEL IT...AS YOU SAID...

SUPER COOL STORY...
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Posted: 13 years ago
That was wayy longer than I intended it to be. 😳

I'll just say "Good Luck" 😆

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Posted: 13 years ago
nice words
r u updating agr mujhko ton8?
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: kheya-mayur

nice words
r u updating agr mujhko ton8?

nopes not today...
u need towait for it..im trying to write it

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