Fanfic - Realization of Love

Guys this is my new fanfic with a completely different story line but the destiny gonna be the same. Have fun, n lemme know ur views.....

Episode 1:

On the night of mooh dikhai function of Dorris….

Debonita acts as if she hurt her leg and Prem gives her ride to her house…. On the way, blushing Debonita asks,

Debonita: Prem, waise aap is waqt kahan jaa rahen hai..😳

Prem: kya matlab? [gives why-do-want-to-know look]😡

Debonita: mera matlab, is waqt party chod kar kahan jaa rahen hai?

Prem: tumhare ghar, aur kahan?

Debonita:[smiles shyly] nahin, mera matlab uske baad…

Prem: main kahan bhi jaon tumhe kyaa?? Waise, tum aaj hamare mehmaan ho, isliye bathatha hoon.. main pooja karne jaa rahan hoon.

Debonita: aap??? Pooja bhi karthe hai? Aur is waqt?

Prem: ofcourse, why not… main ladkiyon ki pooja zyaada aur bhagwan ki kam karta hoon..😳 yeh batao, tum yeh sab kyon pooch rahin hooo?

Debonita: kuch nahin, aise hi.

After a while, Prem breaks the silence..

Prem: tum dance acha karti hooo.

Debonita:[blushing, goes red] shukriyaa, woh kya hai na, meri maa…..

Prem stops her abruptly,😡

Prem:[says to himself- yeh nautanki bhi naa..😡] Ms. Madhushala, main tumhe sirf ek compliment diyaa, teri history nahin poochaaa.

Debonita is embarrassed and turns her face to the other side.😕

Prem: [thinks to himself] waise bhi, Ms Madhushala achcha naatak karti hai.. kyon na main isse Mukti ko sathane ke liye use karoon….😉

Prem: [praising his brilliant idea says to himself that he is awesome!!!!]😈

Prem: [knowing her melodrama] Debonnniiiiiiitaa, we are organizing an event for our product launch and humein ek achchi dancer chaahiye. Main soch rahan tha ki kyon na main tujhe hi select karoon…[Debonita is all happy-Prem continuing his wit] Hmmmm, Nahi, Debonita, rehne doooo, tumnhari pair mein mooch aaayi hain aur event tho ek hafteke andar hain…..Tum nahi kar paogi….

Debonita: Arre Prem, moch to gayi hain…dekhiye naa…..main teek hoon. Dard nahi ho raha hain [Debonita twists her ankle and shows to Prem to prove herself]

Prem stops the car suddenly.

Prem: that's fantastic. Ek Kaam karte hain, kal tum auditions keliye aajana. And r u sure ur leg is perfect?

Debonita: [doesn't want to miss the great opportunity] haanji, dekhiye bilkul teek hogaya.

Prem: Very good. Actually I am getting late so Y don't u go home by yourself since ur leg is perfectly alrite. I am sure u wouldn't mind Ms. Madhushala.😳😳😳

Prem praised himself for his success over Ms. Nautanki😈. Debonita has dug her own hole and she got out of the car angrily😭. Prem sped away to carry on with his flirting business.

Next day morning 6.30 a.m, Bajaj family n Mukthi except Prem is doing pooja. Prem couldn't sleep anymore with prayer songs played at high volume in the background. Prem then came down shouting angrily "Aaj yeh kya ho raha hain"😡. With one serious look from Prerna, he lowered his voice and asked the same question. No one bothered to give reply to his stupid question. He gave a whatever-kinda look and headed towards kitchen.

Prem: Bijjju kaaka, aaj nashte mein kya hain.

Prerna comes to Prem.

Prerna: Aaj ghar mein pooja rakhe hain. Tum pooja karke bina, breakfast nahi karoge.

Prem: Kyaa….yeh kaunsi nayi rule hain?😡

Prerna: Haan, khana hain to, jaa nahake poooja karke khalena…..

Prem: Mother India, mujhe jaise jeena hain waise jeene deejiye….Dont try to force ur principles on me.

Prerna: kyon na karooon. Waise bhi tub hi janta hain, ki jo main kahoongi, tumhe woh sab karna padega. [Prerna dusting off his shoulders] So beta, u better get back to the work.😉

Prerna smiles slyly at him and leaves. Prem without uttering another word storms off to his room to follow his mom' order. After some time, Prem gets ready and comes downstairs. After doing so-called prayer, he sees Mukthi leaving the house. He calls out for her as Ms. Basanti. Mukthi stops at the door and turns around to face him.

Prem: Gud morning Ms. Basanti, tum itni subah yaha kya kar rahi hoo.

Mukthi: subah tere liye, hum sab keliye nahi. Ab time nau (9.00am) baj chuke hain.👏

Mukthi feels satisfied for giving him a tit for tat answer. Prem stares at her angrily for losing this time😡. Cookie overheard their conversation and laughs out loud. Cookie and Mukthi go out leaving Prem in anger. Prem after having breakfast goes to his room and starts listening to the music. Prem falls asleep in couple of mins. After an hour, he gets a call from Bajaj. Bajaj asks Prem to come to office immediately. Prem gets up with an irritating look on his face.😡

Prem: kabhi mother India tho, kabhi yeh budda bajaj. Godddddddddddd.

He leaves to the office.

Great job! I'm sure I'll love this fanfic as well!

But Prem seems a bit too crude with Debonnita -- which is NEVER his style when dealing with flirtatious girls. You should consider changing "teri," "tujhe," etc. cuz doesn't seem Prem's style... which is always a bit flamboyant and classy.

omg so many PM fanfics great going yaar

Originally posted by: broken heart

Great job! I'm sure I'll love this fanfic as well!

But Prem seems a bit too crude with Debonnita -- which is NEVER his style when dealing with flirtatious girls. You should consider changing "teri," "tujhe," etc. cuz doesn't seem Prem's style... which is always a bit flamboyant and classy.

I dont think Prem has ever given respect to Debo and neither was he interested in flirting with her. Its Debo who is always behind him. And I jus kept in mind wat Prem does to achieve anything he likes no matter wat others feel.

Most importantly, I dont speak much of hindi though I understand the language very welll. So I am not exactly sure where to use those "teri" "tumhe" kinda stuff explicilty. Sorry guys, if I made any grammatical mistakes in the hindi.

ur fanfic is really gud and it'll probably be as gud but cud u add
more problems coz for sum reason i like a few
misunderstandings 😳 they always add spice. its nice keep up
the gud work!!!! 👏 👏

hey i love it..if u don't mind is it okay if u write in english..its easier for me to read cuz i am a punjabi and i do not speak n read well...thanks if u can't its okay...btw great job 👏

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good plz continue!!!!!great and Realistic!!!!!
good work!!

wow!!!!gr8 work.plz continue. 👏

wow its gr8 plz Cont. soon yaar!!!!