~:OS - When You Come Home - Thank You MSG's P4:~ - Page 4

Originally posted by: imane568

Wowww!!!!!!!
I am so out of words at this amazing writing!! this OS made me miss RBO even more...not that it made me sad...i was actually re-living it all...i would want it to be like this if it had continued...*Sighs* The twins are the CUTEST...i think it suited them well to get twins, as you said "picture perfect family"...The way she yearned for him...missed every little thing of his was superbly penned...haaye! And the Khandelwals...they are supportive and adorable...Akshay and Khushboo;s characterization was exactly like it was in the show...Also the part where they try to get close but are interrupted was also adorable...i could sit here and gush over all the detailing but that would result in more than multiple pages...LOL...

"You know something Shantanu? When you come home, everything feels... so right... so complete!" Khanak sighed with happiness and rested her head on his shoulder. "For me too..." came Shaan's simple reply as he tilted his head sideways so that it touched hers. They stayed like this for several seconds, unknowingly creating a moment that was worthy of being captured forever... the image of their picture perfect family.

The bestest ever!! for me... 😊

Originally posted by: suchi_245

Hi ayesha

i m suchi, ya we havent met before 😊

u have penned down beautifully this os 😳

Hey Ayesha

Awesome,,,,,,Awesome……Awesome ……Awesoem.

Loved the OS.👏 & extremely sorry for the late reply as got bit busy,😳 kaan pakad ke sorry well you can punish me for that 😉 (Oops yeh kya keh diya maine I am scared of ayesha now)😛So now I am finally posting my comments 😊,,,,,,,,,Uff I am in dream land of this Shanak & Cute kids 😍, the kids are sacchi cuteness ki hadh.

Loved the start.😊 So Finally shaan is back & now he will be here coz studio is finally shifting here, khanak is specially getting ready for his arrival afterall they are meeting after a long time.😉 Very well described buddy.👏 Special Wow for highlighting her regular appearance with tied hair as it is impossible to handle with two cute noughty Kids.😃 Shaan calls khanak to say that he will be coming tomorrow & not today as his work got increased due to technical errors.😭 Loved the way u described khanaks expression & her way of hiding Pain of not meeting Shaan.👏 But shaan gave her a beautiful surprise.😃

Loved your deatailing in that part sacchi aisa lag raha tha that they are meeting after long time.😍 You made the whole picture alive, agar RBO abhi bhi chalu hota na to sacchi same aise hi hota sab kuch….you are awesome buddy,👏 loved their Convo & gestures & I love you.😍Shaan wanted to wake up kids but khanak says that they will be awake in a while.😃 So Cute yaar. Shaan brought a nice salwar suit for her the same kid she was wearing when he get her back Home,😍 (yaar saari yaade taaza kar di the the best days of Rbo😊) Shaans explanation on buying guifts were Feb.👏

Khanak is worried that the dress may not fit her as she has put on weight after delivery,😲 uspar Shaans reaction & their little fight.,,,,,,,Mind blowing. *phew* the kiss was super hot.😉 Loved his dialogue ⭐️"You're more beautiful to me now than you've ever been... not only are you my wife, but you're the mother of my children" the babies are awake & Shanak got disturbed,Shaan is happy that now he can play with them 😃

Awww…..the kids are so cute & loved the way they gets the feel of their fathers hands & starts playing with dad & the way shaan talks to them was brilliantly written,👏 than princess also wake up & shaan played with her.😃 Loved the way he campares daughters eyes with khanaks.😊 You have a excellance in describing emotions of Father & kids masti.😉 You & Ani both Rock yaar when u described kids & their antics,

Loved the complete family atmosphere described by you 👏 & khushboo teasing khanak.😉 Everyone is happy with success of shantanu. Khanak apologize for her behaviour earlier.😳 & they are talking about THE pink odhani there convo was super cute & nice.😍 Again there special moment disturbed by the knock on the door.😛 & this time Akki & Boo with the two cuties, loved the way khanak teases shaan. & the star line is⭐️ "They're just so stubborn... like their Daddy."

Last para was just out of this world ⭐️ & excellent & brilliantly written,👏 uff I have to stop here other wise I will eat full space here.😳 But I seriously Loved it.😊

Excellent…..Please Don't stop writing ever,

Love 😊

Pranjal.

Originally posted by: -mesmerised-

Hi guys! 😃

Just wanted to THANK YOU all for the AMAZING comments that were left appreciating my OS! ❤️ Loved each one, and in all honesty i wasn't expecting such a positive response! Reading them made my day! 😳 Thanks to those who pressed 'like' too! 😃

Will thank everyone individually below, but before i do that i need to clarify something... some of you have asked when i'll be updating next or have requested that i write another part... just wanted to let you know that i won't be continuing this as it's just an OS. Sorry to those who wanted it to be longer, BUT i will be starting an FF at some point to make up for it! 😃 It will be completely different to the story in the OS, but i wanted to do something for those members who have been asking me since i wrote the letters... hope you don't mind. 😳

Onto the Individual replies! 😃

@Bona: Awww thanks for the awesome comments! 😊 So glad that you could imagine it all because i wanted for people who read it to be able to visualise everything and i'm happy that you could! 🤗

@Rooj: Wow 'perfect' is a strong word and i don't think the OS deserves it but thanks! 😃 And by 'similarities' do you mean the colour combo of the gift...? Wasn't intentional because i only had Shanak in mind when i was writing this... for a change! 😆 😉

@Beeni: I love your comment! It's so unique! ❤️ It was like reading a dream? What does that even mean?! 😆 I'm glad i said comments are compulsary... imagine if i'd missed out on yours! Lol. Thank you so much, it's a huge compliment coming from an awesome writer like yourself! 😊

@shaan_khanak: Sorry i don't your name 😳 but thank you for the lovely comment! I'm Aysha. 😊

@Priya: I'm so glad you said that Khanak's insecurity was natural, that's the bit i was worried about the most! Didn't want to offend... 😳 Thanks for appreciating! 😊

@neethurose: Thanks for the lovely comment and welcome to the forum! I'm Aysha. 😊

@Sangita: Wow my writing is crisp and articulate? I had no idea! 😆 Thank you! 😃

@Kari: I'm sooo glad you were online the day i posted this! 🤗 Thanks for the awesome comments, glad you thought it was full of emotion! 😃 Oh and a big kiss to you too! Mwah! 😳

@Shals: Glad you liked the reference to the letters and pink odhani... wanted to tie the OS to the letters somehow and this was the only way i could think of! 😳 Thanks for the comments, you're too kind! 😊

@Isra: Wow you thought it was perfect too...?! Thank you so much! 😃

@yashran_rocks: Thanks for reading and commenting! 😃 Don't think we've met, i'm Aysha. 😊

@ABlank90/Nisha: Thank you so much for appreciating both the OS and the letters! 😃 Awww sorry i disappointed you by not continuing, but i hope my upcoming FF will make up for it... 😳

@n_gem/Nehal: So glad that you liked the OS and found it to be full of emotion! Thanks for reading, i'm Aysha. 😊

@snigdhanager: Thank you for appreciating and welcome to the forum! 😊

@May: Thanks! 😊 Happy that you thought i captured our burthals properley! 🤗

@Rida: Thank you! 😊 Yep Shaan koh pareshan hona hi tha... have to keep him in character! 😆

@Ani: Eeeks i love your looong comment... you picked up on so much! ❤️ Haha at the 'thinko thinko' part! But dudette it wasn't the kids room, it was theirs... both times they got interrupted! 😆 I agree... we do seem to have a bond with the kids! Awww cutiepies! Love that it reminded you of so many RBO moments, hopefully that means i got the characterisation right! 😳 That's a huge compliment that this influenced you to start writing your own again... think you should dedicate the next part to me! 🤣 Just kidding! Looking forward to reading it. And thanks! 😃

@Naveen: Thanks, glad you liked it! 😃

@Afiya: Thanks for your awesome comment... it put you in a happy trance... didn't think my writing was capable of that! 😳 Will defo write more. 😊

@Suchi: Thanks, so glad you liked it! We've not met before... i'm Aysha. 😊

@Dish: Thanks for reading and appreciating! 😃 Glad that you could imagine it, i was hoping everyone who read it could. 😊

@khush1432: Thank you, glad that you loved it. 😊

@Ann: It was like watching RBO? Wow thanks, that's a huge compliment! 😃 I miss the show too... 😭 ...but glad that this made you feel better! 😊

@Ramz: Awww thanks for the lovely comments Ramini, my OS would have been incomplete without them! 😳 You could visualise frame by frame? Wow thanks! Yeah i didn't go into depth regarding the kids antics... that's Ani's forte! 😆 Will start the FF when i have some free time... sorry for keeping you waiting. 😳

@_sweetshona_: Thanks for saying it was full of emotion, glad that i was able to portray their feelings! 😊

Phew! I'm finally done... this is nearly as long as the OS! 😆

Originally posted by: ABlank90

Eeeks! I'm sure your FF will make up for it though I loved this chain of OSs! But the condition is that you should post your FF at the soonest possible moment. Not a second later! 😃