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Posted: 14 years ago
#21
Absolutely loved it!

Shanak are the best ... I could so imagine all of it.

Loved their moments together ... desperate and craving for each other.

when will u continue with the next part? pls do soon.

~Cheers,
Dish
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Posted: 14 years ago
#22
Ayshaa ... FF pleaseee !!!!
This is will be Kinda new ... A FF of Letters !
Niceee !
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Posted: 14 years ago
#23
Aysha...this is just awesome...you should write more often..it indeed was like watching RBO...the surprise element in the beginning and in the end were both very scintillating...

Kids waking up at midnight was the surprise Khanak was thinking about earlier???

The pink Odhani touch was very touching...OH...I'm really missing RBO now with passion...WHY it had to end??????

Aysha...will like to copy your line here...

You're not getting away so easily...either...looking fwd to ShaNak's romance, so expecting another update from you SOON...

I also felt good and better after reading the OS😃


Loads of love, Ann,xox




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Posted: 14 years ago
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hei aysha,
ufff...finally i finished reading this..
since the time u posted i'm opening it in a tab n doing some work that came midway..now tho i catched up..
aysha..it would have been a real waste if u just have it in ur desktop..
it is amazing aysha..simply superb..i so so so loved the way u penned their feelings n the kids antics n everything..thankfully unlike ani's sia n anay arjun n naina didnt do too many antics n didnt trouble them a lot to sleep..i hope they'll sleep soon after sometime..
ok..coming to the update..
the way u wrote abt khanak pampering herself when the kids were asleep n her eagerness to see her hubby after a looonnnggg 5 weeks..the disappointment when he said he'll be coming tomoro n the surprise when he was there behind her..i visualised all the expressions frame by frame..
then her reaction to him..superb aysha..
kids getting up n the way shaan played with them..picture perfect..the way u wrote abt the kids reaction on seeing their dad..marvelous..i so loved it..may be i'll be repeating this a lot..but wat to do..i did really love it a lot..
then their dinner n kids playing with rest of the family..shaan catching up with sunil n akshay..kushboo offering to have the kids with them for them to have some quality time..
oops!!!! i forgot to mention abt his gift for her..that was awesome..both of them reminding abt the letter n the significance of the pink odhani in their life..their intimate moment spoiled by the knock on the door..
shaan thinking let it not nbe harilal..LOL!! but there is kushboo n akshay with their kids..poor them..didnt know that these 2 have the habit of getting up midnight to play..shaan's irritation immediately turning to a smile seeing his kids..
PICTURE PERFECT!!!!
aysha..when r u starting the FF???
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Really Good...sb picture aankhoke samne chal raha hai...husband-wife duriya-njdikiya romance,love...n parents love...awesm
sbkuch emotionse bhara hua
:)
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Posted: 14 years ago
#26
Hi guys! 😃

Just wanted to THANK YOU all for the AMAZING comments that were left appreciating my OS! ❤️ Loved each one, and in all honesty i wasn't expecting such a positive response! Reading them made my day! 😳 Thanks to those who pressed 'like' too! 😃

Will thank everyone individually below, but before i do that i need to clarify something... some of you have asked when i'll be updating next or have requested that i write another part... just wanted to let you know that i won't be continuing this as it's just an OS. Sorry to those who wanted it to be longer, BUT i will be starting an FF at some point to make up for it! 😃 It will be completely different to the story in the OS, but i wanted to do something for those members who have been asking me since i wrote the letters... hope you don't mind. 😳

Onto the Individual replies! 😃

@Bona: Awww thanks for the awesome comments! 😊 So glad that you could imagine it all because i wanted for people who read it to be able to visualise everything and i'm happy that you could! 🤗
@Rooj: Wow 'perfect' is a strong word and i don't think the OS deserves it but thanks! 😃 And by 'similarities' do you mean the colour combo of the gift...? Wasn't intentional because i only had Shanak in mind when i was writing this... for a change! 😆 😉
@Beeni: I love your comment! It's so unique! ❤️ It was like reading a dream? What does that even mean?! 😆 I'm glad i said comments are compulsary... imagine if i'd missed out on yours! Lol. Thank you so much, it's a huge compliment coming from an awesome writer like yourself! 😊
@shaan_khanak: Sorry i don't your name 😳 but thank you for the lovely comment! I'm Aysha. 😊
@Priya: I'm so glad you said that Khanak's insecurity was natural, that's the bit i was worried about the most! Didn't want to offend... 😳 Thanks for appreciating! 😊
@neethurose: Thanks for the lovely comment and welcome to the forum! I'm Aysha. 😊
@Sangita: Wow my writing is crisp and articulate? I had no idea! 😆 Thank you! 😃
@Kari: I'm sooo glad you were online the day i posted this! 🤗 Thanks for the awesome comments, glad you thought it was full of emotion! 😃 Oh and a big kiss to you too! Mwah! 😳
@Shals: Glad you liked the reference to the letters and pink odhani... wanted to tie the OS to the letters somehow and this was the only way i could think of! 😳 Thanks for the comments, you're too kind! 😊
@Isra: Wow you thought it was perfect too...?! Thank you so much! 😃
@yashran_rocks: Thanks for reading and commenting! 😃 Don't think we've met, i'm Aysha. 😊
@ABlank90/Nisha: Thank you so much for appreciating both the OS and the letters! 😃 Awww sorry i disappointed you by not continuing, but i hope my upcoming FF will make up for it... 😳
@n_gem/Nehal: So glad that you liked the OS and found it to be full of emotion! Thanks for reading, i'm Aysha. 😊
@snigdhanager: Thank you for appreciating and welcome to the forum! 😊
@May: Thanks! 😊 Happy that you thought i captured our burthals properley! 🤗
@Rida: Thank you! 😊 Yep Shaan koh pareshan hona hi tha... have to keep him in character! 😆
@Ani: Eeeks i love your looong comment... you picked up on so much! ❤️ Haha at the 'thinko thinko' part! But dudette it wasn't the kids room, it was theirs... both times they got interrupted! 😆 I agree... we do seem to have a bond with the kids! Awww cutiepies! Love that it reminded you of so many RBO moments, hopefully that means i got the characterisation right! 😳 That's a huge compliment that this influenced you to start writing your own again... think you should dedicate the next part to me! 🤣 Just kidding! Looking forward to reading it. And thanks! 😃
@Naveen: Thanks, glad you liked it! 😃
@Afiya: Thanks for your awesome comment... it put you in a happy trance... didn't think my writing was capable of that! 😳 Will defo write more. 😊
@Suchi: Thanks, so glad you liked it! We've not met before... i'm Aysha. 😊
@Dish: Thanks for reading and appreciating! 😃 Glad that you could imagine it, i was hoping everyone who read it could. 😊
@khush1432: Thank you, glad that you loved it. 😊
@Ann: It was like watching RBO? Wow thanks, that's a huge compliment! 😃 I miss the show too... 😭 ...but glad that this made you feel better! 😊
@Ramz: Awww thanks for the lovely comments Ramini, my OS would have been incomplete without them! 😳 You could visualise frame by frame? Wow thanks! Yeah i didn't go into depth regarding the kids antics... that's Ani's forte! 😆 Will start the FF when i have some free time... sorry for keeping you waiting. 😳
@_sweetshona_: Thanks for saying it was full of emotion, glad that i was able to portray their feelings! 😊

Phew! I'm finally done... this is nearly as long as the OS! 😆
Edited by -mesmerised- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi i just read this update...great going ...the twins were really adorable and you described the whole family interaction in a very beautiful way...plz continue soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Beautiful OS Aysha...
Sorry for the short reply, but am trying to type as much in a short time for which I have the lappy!!😛😆 BH is strict!! 😃
It is a beautiful relationship.. a parent has with their child/ren... yes and your portrayal of those emotions in Shaan is perfect! Typical possessive father to his daughter...😆😆😆😆😆
👏👏👏👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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@sharon18: Thanks for your lovely comments, so glad you liked it! 😃

Regarding a continuation... please read the note above... 😳

@Jess: Awww thanks Jess for commenting... don't mind that it's short... just glad to see you on the forum safe and sound! 😳

So glad you thought my portrayal of emotions was on the right track! 😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wowww!!!!!!!
I am so out of words at this amazing writing!! this OS made me miss RBO even more...not that it made me sad...i was actually re-living it all...i would want it to be like this if it had continued...*Sighs* The twins are the CUTEST...i think it suited them well to get twins, as you said "picture perfect family"...The way she yearned for him...missed every little thing of his was superbly penned...haaye! And the Khandelwals...they are supportive and adorable...Akshay and Khushboo;s characterization was exactly like it was in the show...Also the part where they try to get close but are interrupted was also adorable...i could sit here and gush over all the detailing but that would result in more than multiple pages...LOL...

"You know something Shantanu? When you come home, everything feels... so right... so complete!" Khanak sighed with happiness and rested her head on his shoulder. "For me too..." came Shaan's simple reply as he tilted his head sideways so that it touched hers. They stayed like this for several seconds, unknowingly creating a moment that was worthy of being captured forever... the image of their picture perfect family.

The bestest ever!! for me... 😊

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