A Heart's choice-feelings-dear tear(updt..pg 1)

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Well dear friends poetry writing ka kida..bole to has bitten me again...so I guess here I am about to torture you with two new ones..*ducks*...

Bole to first one is for Ganga who actually wanted me to write something about Kesar's misery and the murder truth burden..he faced..so this one's due to Ganga...thanx for inspiring me

Today also I was all alone

at my side there is no one

I was a single man in the path of life

still I was here to survive

living life lifelessly

churned,choppedc,cheerlessly

The one I loved played tricks with me

she was all ready to kick me

I bore the burden of the sin commited

to tell the truth...I was prohibited

Still I chose to sit quietly and did not blame

Destiny..was about to play a cruel game

everyone thought...I became a cool Guy

coz I tried to find love and joy

They didn't knew when the sea is calm

its a sign of heavy storm

Which eventually led the volcano to be erupted

and now the sinner is sorry for the methods he adopted

To play with the emotions of a family who respected him so much

though he lived life in repentance...but the ghosts of your evil deeds can not leave you as such

Now I feel I can provide solace to my bruised soul

coz the sinner is punished and I have achieved my goal


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Now the next one I had written long ago...and this poetry is written from a third person's point of view and Kes -Gul love and hate relationship story is compared to waves and rocks...bole to apna kesu is waves of passion and apni poor gullu...rocks

Love in a new Form

Life is so hectic makes me bore

I rather prefer to walk on the shore

the cool breeze ,the soothing smooth sand

the kokum trees ,the turquoise blue sea with no end

Sometimes I see the rocks and sometimes the waves

and try to analyse who's more brave

the power of the waves to hit the rocks

or the power of the rocks to bear these shocks

I couldn't understand is it rivalry or passion

It may be their mode of seduction

Waves are dancing and poor rocks are stable

The pain of rocks is really ineffable

But I see contentment is the last resort

Atleast they are getting someone's love

no matter in the form of painful shots



bhago ...chappal na pade..sorry if I pakaoed you😉



Dear all well my last poetry for kes -gul...My heart breaks 😭..gulaal ending...so pls bear with me...Well this poem is about kEsu' feeling...about his dream..one night


Dear Tear


In my dreams one night

I had a huge fight

with my adorable spouse

sitting in the garden of my house

about a scene

in my dreams I've seen

in her eyes I was there

not as a shadow but as a tear

but I was happy in that form

in her eyes I was born

on her cheeks then I rolled

lived my life but can't hold

ended my life on her lips

still happy to end the trip

I lived my whole life with her

and I always want to be her tear

Another part of the dream was aweful

with her tears my eyes were full

but I did not cry

can you tell me why

In my tears she was there

and I was suffering from a fear

To lose her if I cry

Cry ?Why should I?...




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*Reemz* thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
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I had read your other poem on my phone so forgot to reply but I think you're really talented 👍🏼 You really are in sync with the emotions of Kesar and Gulaal.
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Originally posted by: *Reemz*

I had read your other poem on my phone so forgot to reply but I think you're really talented👍🏼You really are in sync with the emotions of Kesar and Gulaal.

Thanx Reemz...😃..Oh I so love this jodi😳

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Piyaa Piyaa...bole mera jiyaa...
Ye kya tune kar diyaaa...
Fab and excellent re my PIG...Partner in Ghatiya-poetries😛
and waise you need to reserve in saffron boy's b'day thread...
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Originally posted by: -Srushti-

Piyaa Piyaa...bole mera jiyaa...
Ye kya tune kar diyaaa...
Fab and excellent re my PIG...Partner in Ghatiya-poetries😛
and waise you need to reserve in saffron boy's b'day thread...

Haila PIG.😡..you too🤣thanx for liking it😳

hey I will hit the like buttons...oops oh acha..forgot😳

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piyu piyu piyu i just loved all three poems yar, superb talent u have got 👏 the first two poems r so sweet, i mean second about love n first one about kesu's pain but u have written it so sweetly n its like kesu saying this...

n third poem, it is just excellent excellent excellent, ise favourite men kese daalun piyu like VMs, Videos ko favourite mark kar dete hen na hum, i want to mark this poetry as my favourite... i think i vl write it down some whr with me so that i can read when ever i want, its fantastic 👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Brilliant stuff Piu - especially like the opening of the first one, and the concept of the second one!

Keep them coming - and don't go bragging about how bad you write anymore - we've got serious talent here! 👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Great - i saw your last one as well
You should keep writing, you are talented 😊
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Originally posted by: JZephyr

Brilliant stuff Piu - especially like the opening of the first one, and the concept of the second one!


Keep them coming - and don't go bragging about how bad you write anymore - we've got serious talent here!👏

AWW Jzee you actually read it*rubs eyes*.😲..Thanx.😳Bole to Jzee ne kaha mujhme talent hai...meri to kismat hi khul gayi😲

.I wrote one more and posted it under the topic sufferings..pls read it too😳

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Originally posted by: Lennie

Great- i saw your last one as well

You should keep writing, you are talented 😊
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Oh Lenn thanx..😳where were you.😭.I saw that you liked the last one too😃..Oh Lenn see I miss your kes-gul posts😭..*wonders when will we get to read them again*😳

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