OS~ shanak ki ek haseen SR ~ by mystory

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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey guy m back before time. as Mani said " tum ruk nahi paogi " , she is so true. well hi all!!!!!!!!!!!!! okay this is my first attempt at writing n SR. though I have made many SRs 😉😳, but have nt written any. so plsss spare me fr bad embarassing n besharmi momnts I have poured in here.

this one is fr "Minnu my buddy" . she ws hell-bent after me fr writing this one. actually she wantd this to b my fairwell gift to shanak, so here it is.

I hope u guys like it , actually love it. Karishma the official besharam of the forum , darling bas ek bar kehdena , u love it.

mujhay pata hay ki this is nt the worlds best SR I have written, fir bhi bahut massala dalnay ki koshish ki hay menay , although in a refined way. njoy reading it guys.

baytu I love u fr being there fr me...

SHAANTANU AUR KHANAK KI EK HASEEN RAAT

KHOOBSURAT SHEHAR UDAIPUR MEIN

chaand chakoar pura hay aaj,

taro ki tim tim say,

jagmagaya hay aakash.

kahin door ek daal par,

koyal keh rahi hay dil kay raag ,

dil kay raag, dil kay raag...

itna roshan toh kabhi na hua udaipur ka samah. aaj chanda ki chaandani aur jheel ( small river ) kay neer ( water ) ka millan hay jiskay sakshi hein shaantanu aur khanak.

jheel par chapoo ( oars ) ki sar sarahat ki dhwani ( sound ) , hawa ke jhokay se galo par thandak ka ehsaas. kitna khoobsurat hay ye lamha, jo hay shaantanu aur khanak ka apna.

khanak kay shaantanu , aur shaantanu ki khanak , udaipur ki ek choti si jheel par khoye hue hein ek dujay ki aankhon mey, hue apni nauka ( boat ) par sawaar.

khanak : shaantanu aap say ek baat kahun ?

shaantanu : khanak... kaho na khanak'''

khanak : thaanku , mujhay yahan lekar anay kay liye.

shaantanu : hayeee...

shaantanu kay chehray par who muskuraahat hay , aur who sukoon hay jisay dekhkar lagta hay ki ab usay apni zindagi say aur kuch nahi hay aas. khanak ka uski zindagi mey honay ka ehsaas uskay dil ki dharkan ban chuki hay.

shaantanu : ( apnay mann mey ) meri khanak... bas meri khanak, hamesha khush rahe meray sang...

who dono nauka ki sawaari kar kay chaltay hein apnay aashiyanay ki aur. shaantanu nay apni rani khanak kay liye Umaid Bhawan ; udaipur kay raajmehal ka sabsay aalishaan aur khoobsurat yani rani ka kaksh chuna hay.

jesay hi khanak kaksh kay kiwar ( gates ) khol ti hay , toh uska sawagat ek meethi si khushboo say hota hay.

zar-ra , zar-ra , gulaab ki pankhuriyon kay laal rang may raanga hay,

zar-ra , zar-ra motiye, champa, chameli aur bela ki sugandh se mehka hay

zar-ra , zar-ra , diya aur baati kay millan ki roshni may chamka hay.

magar bekhabar hein sab uss subha say, uss suraj ki pehli kiran say , jab, zar-ray zar-ray mey ek hi rang , ek hi khushboo aur ek hi roshni bas jayegi.

shaantanu aur khanak kay uss pyar ka rang, jismay who dono hamesha kay liye rang chukay hein. who khushboo , jo unkay jeewan ki meethas hay. aur who roshni jo unki raato ki subha hay.

khanak kay galo ka rang gulaab say bhi zada laal ho gaya hay ye sab dekhkar aur who sharma kar apna chehra apni odhni say chupa leti hay. shaantanu ahista say usay apni goad may utaleta hay, aisay ki manno kissi phool ko koi bhavra choom raha ho. sharmai si ghabrai si khanak apna chehra shaantanu kay aagosh may chupa leti hay. khanak ki ek naazuk hatheli ( hand ) shaantanu kay dilpar hay aur ek apni aankhon par.

shaantanu ka ek sparsh khanak ki kamar par hay aur ek say usnay uskay machaltay hue pairo ko thama hay.

khanak kay kesh bhi na baaz aye athkheliyon say , aur chup chap jakar thamm gaye uskay komal galo par. magar shaantanu bhi kahan itna bhola hay. uskay mukh kay ek pyaray hawa kay jhokay say khilgaye saray kesh aur shaantanu ko dediya apna desh. usnay jhat say kiss karli apni khanak kay gaalo par.

khanak : ( sharamatay hue ) shaantanu mujhay neechay utariye naa.

shaantanu : accha uttarta hoon naa. ( huskily n grinin )

khanak : please shaantanu...

shaantanu : khanak... tumhi toh keh rahi ho neechay utariye naa. toh naa toh naa ( grinin )

khanak : shaantanu aap bhi naa ( sharmatay hue jhuki hein palkay )

shaantanu : khanak... mein bhi naa ( huskily n with a mischevious smile )

shaantanu ahista say apni baahon say khanak ko uttarkar suhag ki sej par betha deta hay. khanak thora aur seham jaati hay, mano uskay ang ang mey ek tarang si lehar gayi ho.

shaantanu baray hi naaz say sehmi hui khanak kay haath ko tham ta hay aur chupkay say uski odhni hawa may ura deta hay. sharam say pani pani hui khanak uskay galay lag jaati hay. shaantanu ko phir say mauka mil jaata hay aur woh uski sunheri choli ki dori khol deta hay.

khanak : ( jhuki palkay, sharmai aankhein ) shaantanu choriye naa, meri dori khol di aapnay , ab choli bhi khul jayegi. chaliye ab ismay gath bandiye.

shaantanu : ( husky ) khanak... yehi toh mein chahta hoon... ( besharam )

shaantanu dheeray say khanak ko bistar par leta deta hay. fir uskay maathay par ek pyari si kiss kardeta hay. fir who uskay gulabi gaalo ko, uski moti moti aankhon ko, baray pyar say uski cute si naak ko apni bari si naak say sehlaata hay. uskay kano kay jhumko ko , uski gardan par uss kalay til ko, uski gori bahon ko , uski hath ki pattli lambi ungliyon ko , uski sexy kamar ko , uskay feets ki goal matoal ungliyon ko , uskay mangalsutra ko apnay hotho kay sparsh say sajata hay. uskay baalon say khelta hay . uskay hotho par apnay hotho say woh passion say bhari kahani likhta hay, jiskay ehsaas say khanak andar tak machal jaati hay.

khanak bhi chuppkay say uskay kano par ek love byte likh deti hay. khanak aur shaantanu ekdusray kay iss meethay say ehsaas ki barish may bheeg rahein hein. woh ek dusray ki aankhon mey madhosh hein. dono kass kay galay lag jaatay hein.

aur iss haseen , taro say bhari raat ki gehrai mey ek dusray kay honay lagay hein do dil uss din tak kay liye jiska koi ant nahi... ( for eternity ) .

do dil mil rahein hein,

do jism ek ho rahein hein,

do aatmaye ek adhbudh aur anokhay rass ko chakh rahein hein

bhulakay iss jahaan ko,bas apna hi shehar basakay

khoye hein pyar mein do rahi, ek aashiyan sajakay.

subha ki pehli kiran say jagmagayi suhag ki sej, toh paya ki zar-ray, zar-ray may bas ek hi rang hay, ek hi mehak hay , aur ek hi roshni hay. shaantanu ka meri khanak kay liye aur khanak ka apnay shaantanu kay liye pyaar. undono ka ye prem hi unka rang , sugandh aur roshni hay, jo janamo tak un dono ki zindagi sajata rahega.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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priya di😃
loved it .truly amazing😃
it was so poetical and magical...😳
the shudh hindi is very nice and something new...😳

i will be always be there for you🤗
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Posted: 14 years ago
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i just read half bt i had to tell this...

i dont knw y bt ur hindi just reminded me of poems...

i mean d way u write it its like a poem telling a story...

very cute...

ok back to reading nw...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: purvi08

res

*edited*

priya di😃
loved it .truly amazing😃
it was so poetical and magical...😳
the shudh hindi is very nice and something new...😳

i will be always be there for you🤗



baytu ur text is missing on the front page.

post a new comnt


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Posted: 14 years ago
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u knw d best part of hindi is in dat my name is used often... lmao

the SR was awesome priya di...

loved it...

loved the way u wrote it...

just awesome...

☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️☺️
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: mystory



baytu ur text is missing on the front page.

post a new comnt




matlab??😕
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Posted: 14 years ago
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priya...!!!!!!!!!!!
🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗v
hw are u..?
m going to read this...
n will be back with a review soon...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Roshni_M

u knw d best part of hindi is in dat my name is used often... lmao


the SR was awesome priya di...

loved it...

loved the way u wrote it...

just awesome...

☺️



yup roshgulla ?( i knw purvi calls u that, sorry fr stealing it )

well when i ws writin it , i ws wondering ki jab tum parogi toh bahut khush hogi

puri sr tumhari hi roshni say sparkle kar raha hay

ur name is the light of the sr

thanks fr likin it yaar...

love yaa


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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: hotchpotchRBO

priya...!!!!!!!!!!!
🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗v
hw are u..?
m going to read this...
n will be back with a review soon...



hi dishu

aaj tu aaya hay mera long lost buddy

so happy to see u 😃😃

m fine nw after seeing u 🤗
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: mystory



yup roshgulla ?( i knw purvi calls u that, sorry fr stealing it )

well when i ws writin it , i ws wondering ki jab tum parogi toh bahut khush hogi

puri sr tumhari hi roshni say sparkle kar raha hay

ur name is the light of the sr

thanks fr likin it yaar...

love yaa



😳😳

heheehh im always happy to see my name anywhere... lol

and ya u can call me anything... almost everyone here calls me roshgulla only...😉


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