FF: Unnamed (NivRen)

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Introduction:

Heya everyone. I am Bahar (Peacefulblossom), and my fellow story makers are Rani (Kahani_Ki_Rani), Pooja (Sunshine234) and Priya (Anuragtani4ever), we all met in Chand Chupa Badel Mein (CCBM) forum and decided we should write our own strange story šŸ˜†

So we thought we'll share it with you all. Hope you enjoy.

Since we met in CCBM the central characters are from there. But a mix of other characters too šŸ˜† (read and see šŸ˜‰)

If anyone wants to help us plan the future of the story, join us 😃

Brief synoptic:

There are many types of people in the world...some ordinary and some not. This story resolves around two not so ordinary individual. One a lost soul looking for her body and another a cursed Ninja. In the mist of their journey faith brings them together. This story follows their journey through the different worlds and their strange but wonderful encounters.

The adventure starts to break their curse and somehow faith has its own plans and a unusual love story between a cursed ninja and a lost soul begins...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Characters: (Will be updated as the story progress)

Leads:

Viren (Ninja): Played by Kinshuk Mahajan

Nivi (Lost Soul): Played by Neha Sargam



Grey Shaded:

Jawahal (Cursed dream demon inspired by Freddy Krueger) : Played by Ashish Kapoor


Vamps:

Chanchal (Evil Cinderella/Witch): Played by Payal Nair


Holy Hunters (with Magical Powers):

Pin Man (Gang Leader)


Wolverine (Gang member)


Knife Man (Gang Member)


Unnamed (Female Gang Member)


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This unusual tale started many years ago with soul...A soul Nivi looking for her body and her journey far across the realms of the 13 lost worlds. Unknown to her the Pin man & his gang of holy hunters are following her. This gang using their unique style and magical piercings to capture and destroy their victims, have become known throughout the 13 world as the most fierce and deadly bounty hunters that ever lived. They were following her for her mysterious powers that she is yet to know of.


Chapter One: The Meeting

It was a silent night in the abandoned old factory. Not a soul in sight and piles of old factory waste material shattered around everywhere...tonight was a strange and mysterious night...like everything was waiting for something to occur..


The silence was such that you could hear the tiny drop of left over rain making its way down a old pipe one by one until it reached the ground in a splash...


Suddenly the silence was broken by a gasping sound echoing around the factory. And then a flash of light was seen. It looked like a glowing women running through the factory wall in a hurry. And then silence... like nothing happened.


In a matter of seconds the silence was yet again disturbed by loud foot steps. A strange looking man appeared. This man was no ordinary man he was wearing a black long coat and and several blades piercing through his mouth. He was Wolverine a member of the holy hunters.


He stopped and looked around seemly looking for something or someone. A tiny evil smile appeared on his face when he looked at the factory wall where the glowing women went through.


"Found you" He muttered as he made his way to the entrance of the factory and kicked the door in.


Inside the women sat clutching to her knees in the far corner...out of breath and frightened... She seem to have stopped glowing now.

Wolverine slowly made his way towards her and took one blade out of his mouth, aiming the blade ready to stab her...


"You lost soul...your ours now...no more running and fighting..."...


One more step near her...


Suddenly a flash of movement and the blade was kicked out of Wolverines hand. Before he could defend himself he received another kick on his face and was thrown through several walls (true 70/80/90s style Indian action). Wolverine fainted and then slowly started to disappear and teleported back...to recover...


The rescuer looked down at the shivering women on the floor. He was dressed in black ninja clothes top to toe. The only thing you could see was his piercing wild brown eyes. If one looked deeply inside them eyes you would see a wounded and lonely soul.


"Are you ok? Looks like the man has disappeared and gone back to his group" Ninja ask


"You can see me?" The women replied back (Nivi)


"Did you hit your head...ofcourse I can see you"


"I'm ok thanks" She replies in shock and confusion to why he can see her. The gang member had special weapons to catch souls but he seems normal why can he see her.

She decides to keep it to herself and didn't want to enclose her weakness to a stranger even if the stranger had helped her.

Nivi decided to get up and make her own way back until a tiny shiver made its way through her. For some reason attacks on her were increasing day by day and she did not know how to protect herself.


After some thinking Nivi decides to ask the ninja to become her bodyguard.

Ninja disagree at first but when he finds out about her ability to cross realms, he readily agreed.

Because he too has a secret curse he wants to get rid of...and travelling the realms could help him.


On the corner of the screen a pair of red eyes flashed...someone or something was closely following the ninja.

The red eyes focus on the direction of the Nivi and Ninja and then the eyes fade into the shadows...

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Chapter 2: Who Are You?

"I think we should get out of here, get some rest before we set out on our journey. Are you ok to walk?" Ninja recommended after they decided to travel together.

"Yes, somewhere less depressing would be nice, we have to wait until after sunrise to travel anyways" Nivi replied

"Follow me" Ninja replied back has he started to walk outside.

Nivi started getting up when she noticed the exposed arm of the ninja covered in scars. She was just about to ask him about them but stopped herself. Being too familiar was not a good idea. And it looked like he had a hard life and the last thing she needed was him to stop protecting her because of her curiosity.

Keeping a few steps behind him Nivi followed him out of the factory grounds.

On the corner of his eyes he kept a close eye on Nivi behind him. Firstly he was a little wary that he couldn't hear any foot steps behind him. He looked behind and noticed that Nivi wasn't really stepping on the ground but kind of flow walking behind him. He thought that was strange but didn't comment. I guess everyone's entitled to their own secrets its not that he was telling her exactly what he was. He thought to himself.

The ninja stopped near a little hut house, opened the door and signaled Nivi to go in. Onces inside Nivi nervously looked around. There was a small bed in the corner which looked like its never been slept on and nothing much else. Ninja followed her in and noticed her nervousness.

"Don't worry I'm not going to do anything to you. You can take the bed and I'll just sit in the other far corner. This is my temporary house." The ninja commented.

Nivi nodded and made her way to the bed. She just didn't have the energy to say anything. She wanted to give him the bed and tell him she wasn't scared that he'll do anything to her. Well its not that he could touch her or anything if he wanted to anyways.

Questions clouded her mind as she made her way to the bed. Who is he? Why was he in the deserted factory so late at night? Why did he help her? He can't be a just a normal human, no normal human can flight with such speed? And why can he see her? Why did she feel safe with him?

But the second she hit the pillow all thoughts were forgotten has she fell into a deep sleep. Weeks of tiredness was catching up with her.

The ninja sat down in the far corner in his own deep thought when he suddenly noticed a glow. He looked up towards the now sleeping girl...she was giving out a light glow. And it seemed like she was kind of floating on the bed then actually sleeping on it.

This girl is a mystery...who is she? How does she have the power to cross worlds? Why did he feel a strange link with her? Like he was meant to protect her?

Numerous of question raised in his mind has his eyes slowly closed and he too fell fast asleep.


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Chapter 3: The Journey Begins

A bright day in a green field with long sunflowers.

A loud girls giggling was heard.

The girl's long silky hair trailed behind her has she ran past different sunflowers, she stopped and turned to look behind, her hair covered her face but the numerous of piecing in her ears could be seen.

"You can't catch me" She screamed back and then turned around fast and ran ahead.


"You wait till I grab you!" A deep carefree male voice was heard from behind.


Suddenly everything went pitch black.

"Where are you?" The male voice questions warily, suddenly stopping and trying to judge the new environment.


But only silences greeted him back, suddenly a light switched on enough to just cover his legs, he was no longer in the field but some street.

A sound of something dripping besides him was heard. He looked down, something red was dripping...from him?

A piecing pain shot through him has he realised his hands were cover in blood and numerous of sword lashes covered his arms...


"HELLLPPP!" The girl's voice screamed in agony.


"WHERE ARE YOU?" The male screamed back, forgetting his own wounds and fanatically looking around.


"AHHH" Another scream and then silence...


"RANIII!!!!!!!!!!!!''''."

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"RANIII"...shouted the ninja as he shook up from his nightmare. With a confused look he looked around. Sweat poured out from his still covered face. It took him a few seconds to register that he was in the hut house.

The same dream again, it's never going to leave me alone, the ninja thought to himself. Even though he thought this deep down he never wanted to forget that dream. Because it was this dream that always reminded him why he was still alive and the meaning for this pitiful life.

After recovering from his initial shock he remembered about Nivi on the bed. Looking around at the bed, he signed in relief when he saw that Nivi was still asleep.


"She must be really tired not to have woken up with my shout" The ninja stated to himself.


He looked outside the first light of the day was starting to cover the area. He got up and made his way out of the house to refresh himself.

By the time the ninja came back, Nivi woke up and was ready to set out for the day.


"Oh your awake...sorry there is nothing to eat, maybe grab something later on... shall we make our way out of here before everyone wakes up?" Ninja asked when he saw Nivi was awake.


"I'm not hungry" Nivi replied back...not like she could eat anyways. "Let's head out"


Ninja showed the way around the dark alleyways avoiding the sunlight and people.

But when moving from one corner to corner a drunk half-conscious man got up from the other corner and walked towards them...and suddenly tripped..

The ninja quickly turned around to protect Nivi but was too late. But to his surprise the man did not even touch Nivi but went straight through her and banged his head on the wall and fainted.

Nivi looked up shocked at the ninja...her secret was no more...

The ninja shell shocked looked at Nivi...Waiting for an explanation.


"Ermmm" Nivi started to explain'"Well'..."I may as well tell you, it's not like I can keep it to myself...I am missing my body...all you can see is my soul, actually I was pretty surprised when I found out that you can see me...I hope this is not going to affect your decision to travel with me'"

The ninja didn't reply for a while'Nivi started to get worried..


"Which way?" The ninja suddenly replied.


"Sorry?" Nivi replied in shock.


"Which way...we are out of the area...which way to the first lost world?... Or we'lll be going in circles" The ninja replied in an amused voice.


"This way'" Nivi replied with a sign of relief and a smile.

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As Nivi and the Ninja slowly walk towards the direction of the Sun knowing it would lead them to where the Ocean, Earth and Sky meets... where this world ends and the 1st lost world known as Shahkaj (Short for shahruck & Kajol ) begins.

The Ninja, confused as to how Nivi gained her ability to cross in to the lost worlds decided to ask her questions, hoping she would reveal her secrets...


"Ermm" said the Ninja


Nivi looks towards the Ninja.

"Did you say something?" ask's Nivi


"Yeah... I did... how did you exactly lose your body? ... I mean how does that happen?" replied the Ninja


Nivi looks at the Ninja...staring deeply into his eyes wondering... thinking... should she trust him?... a man who saved her life, a man whose helping her still, a man who she's mysteriously drawn to. As she continued to stare hypnotically into his eyes.

The Ninja cheekily said "I only asked because your body might have run away and if that's what happened I'd like to be warned in case it happens to me"

Nivi smiled back saying "no that's not what happened"


"Hahaha...I actually thought your going to run away when you found out about my lost body...when was the last time you saw a soul floating around?"


"I'm used to the weird and wonderful" The ninja replied back with humour in his voice..."So..."

"I lost my body because I thought I was doing a good deed and it all went wrong. A forth night ago I went to sleep and dreamt the strangest dream. In this dream there was a man named Jawahal who asked me if I was willing to sacrifice a small unimportant part of me that I wouldn't miss in exchange for eternal happiness. Although I didn't need it for myself I thought that my sister whose sad face I can never see could do with some happiness so I said ok. He took me to a room where in front of him was a tattered book, he started reading and I heard him chant that to gain eternal happiness my soul would be traded... I shouted my body needs my soul and so do i... how do I live without my soul?... he smiled and then I knew I was never going to leave this place... I prayed I woke up, I screamed, I shouted but nothing!... no one came to help me... I knew then that I was alone... I ran up to him hitting him with all my power he shouted your ruining my chant, if its broken now I don't know what will happen but it won't be good I promise you!... suddenly I woke up, panting, shivering I felt a little better thinking it was all a dream... only to find out my dream wasn't a dream it was a nightmare and now my nightmare had become real... I had no body and nobody could help me."

The ninja looked at her with a slight sadness in his eyes like he knew what it was like to have his life ruined...as they both melted away from this world...and headed into the unknown...

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Hey, i only just started reading this n it's interesting, i love reading fantasy/sci-fi books & this looks good n i like the writing style too!
I've only read the intro n first chapter so far tho, will read the rest tomoro n comment, can u
PM me when u update if u dont mind too much? Thanks😊
PS: I'm wondering what ur gonna name it?!! The Ninja and the Soul...there are so many possibilities lolšŸ˜‰
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wow yaar...such a different plot...loved it a lot dearšŸ¤—!!!
continue soon dear...awesome ff!!!
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Originally posted by: anjaani07

Hey, i only just started reading this n it's interesting, i love reading fantasy/sci-fi books & this looks good n i like the writing style too!

I've only read the intro n first chapter so far tho, will read the rest tomoro n comment, can u
PM me when u update if u dont mind too much? Thanks😊
PS: I'm wondering what ur gonna name it?!! The Ninja and the Soul...there are so many possibilities lolšŸ˜‰


Thanks 😊

Still haven't decided on the name. Just waiting for the others to came back.

Sure I'll PM you.

Originally posted by: Resh_kinhafan

wow yaar...such a different plot...loved it a lot dearšŸ¤—!!!

continue soon dear...awesome ff!!!


Thanks 😊 We tired to keep in original šŸ˜†, Wait till you read the rest of the crazy plot.

Originally posted by: Abicool

really different yaar

very interesting


Glad you found it interesting 😊


Originally posted by: vavaponnu8889

continue dear...nice ff...


Thanks for all of us 😊

Just going to update the next chapter soon.


Thank you all for reading from Bahar, Rani, Pooja and Priya 😊
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Chapter 4: Evil has a Story too

Whilst, the ninja and the lost soul made their way through Shahkaj, Jawahal sat in his basement with the furnace on full blast. He stared deeply at his reflection where he saw a old discoloured face it seemed the layer of skin has melted away leaving a face will patches of skin and muscle. His eyes shifted to his right hand where three claws gushed out of his knuckles. He started to get lost in his thought and he wondered how a normal man turned into a dream demon who is after innocent souls and all this in the name of love?He was flooded with memories of how his life was once normal and how he thought he was in love with the woman whom had the key to his heart. He would have done anything for her, he would have given his life for her but little did he know at the time that, that's what his lover was after. Her name was Chanchal, it was love at first sight for him and he wanted to settle down and start a family with his beloved but she had other motives in mind. She was like Cinderella always mistreated by her step-mother and step sister. Jawahal thought he was going to be the prince charming whom Chanchal was waiting for but In reality, he discovered she never loved him, she was just using him for his soul, she had in fact compelled him many times. She wanted to acquire his soul in order to'.well he had no idea why she stole his soul, she had already booted him out, he was now just a useless corpse wondering the Underworlds.
Jawahal shed a slight tear, he was appalled with himself for tricking an innocent girl in her sleep and he still couldn't do the job right, maybe Chanchal was correct when she labeled him as 'useless'. Jawahal was trying so hard to recite the spell correctly but the girl kept shouting and shouting, which confused him and angered him further for his actions, he chanted a few incorrect words which led to another lost soul wondering the world. Still in his thoughts, he continued to think that there was no way in hell, he was going to attempt to steal another soul, it felt downright wrong BUT he needed a soul in order to take his revenge with the woman that betrayed him.Jawahal now had two options, he could either track down the lost soul and have it for himself or find another victim, he continued thinking which option to opt for.
Chanchal, a tall, thin and long frizzy haired woman sat in her tower admiring herself in the lit up mirror. She looked out the window eagerly waiting to see the love of her life, he was everything she wanted, he was tall, bald with a few white hairs, he had a tanned skin tone, and what she loved most about him was the unique piercings he had. It made him look dangerous, wild and she was one to love the thrill, the experience. Chanchal tried directly asking and indirectly leaving him hints many times to trap her Pin man into her web of love but nothing worked but she knew he was worth the wait. After all, her Pin man and the holy hunters, were attending to some work for her. And then all of a sudden, a wicked smile crept up on her lips as she thought of a brilliant idea, which would finally bring Pin Man and her closer together.

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Good goin guys...
Will wait for te next update eagerly!!
Thanx a lot for te pm dear.

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