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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: Hamlet53

yun hota to kaisa hota

Foreword: scene 6th december 2010. The scene is a personal favourite,as it stands out as mostly non-verbal where actions speak louder than words.Dutta's persona as a man of action with very few words is brought out,also Nakku's silent ,helpless looks cover an inner strength. When the two finally strike verbal contact,it appears a battle betwit the two,where both justify their personal stand and grounding behind individual actions. My continuation is just a feeble attempt at showing what might have transpired if the verbal action might have continued perchance...
Love's Sore
Dutta kicks the cushion on the floor and makes his way to leave his room,whilst Nakku looks on in abject saddness and hopelessness. Saab whimpers Nakku, Dutta stops midway between her and the door. Hmmm, he murmers without facing her, Saab,she repeats, mujhe samajh nahi hai aap ko kis baat ka ghusahai?, he reels around, and she can visibly see his frigid eyes,and stiff mouth spells anger ,but more so shock at her nerve to question him. Dutta parts his lips and spurts out Kya boli tu?! Saab, she repeats kis baatse naraz ho?. He stiffens his head and moves defiantly towards her with slight briskness than normal,but stops at the foot of his bed. Kis baat se? he poses a question upon her question,looking at her with narrow eyes,and shortly fires another question towards her, Ye sawaal tu apne ap se pooch Nakku?. She becomes helpless under his querying onslaughts and feels her wounded arm nimbly with her little quivering hand before disintegrating into tears. Dutta decides to soften a tad,as he observes her tears, he points to her wonded arm, Haan yehe tu Nakku! ye tera ghao!, pun Saab aap ko bas! he raises his palm and points his erect fore finger at her, Thujhe beech mein aany ki kya zaroorat thi? he quizzes her furiously, Balkay thujhe wahan aaney ki kya zaroorat thi? he continues to raise his voice, Woh Saab mein whispers Nakku, Ghup! ek dum ghup!, Nakku mujhe apna dhunday mein teri madaat ki zaroorat nahi,he hollers, Pun Saab,Nakku tearfully urges on, Mein aap ki patni hai,aap ki rahsha karna mera faraz bunta hai!.The corners of his mouth bent downwards stubbornly and his narrow raging eyes softened at her response which was as he expected from her, and he walks past the foot of the bed and comes around sits on the edge of the beside her. Dutta examines her with helpess eyes,with slightly twitched eye brows, and he looks intently into her watery eyes,as he attempts to reason with her ,as opposed to gunning her... Nakku, teri jaan bhi ja sakte thi ,he explains to her,and suddenly stands up beside her and continues speaking, or aggar aisa ho ja ta ,tou Dutta aapnay ap ko kabhi maf nehi karta! Nakku cluthes on to his tender gaze which he pours on her while he stands. He breaks away from the eye contact and on hearing her snivel,he bends on the beside table ,pulls out a tissue from the tissue box and passes it to Nakku icely. He watches her as she dabs her eyes and face dry, and says, Bas kar aur tu aram kar, abhi main chalta hai. Nakku catches him glance at her again before he turns and gradually walks out of his room, with her in his bed! Nakku can clearly see that his on display
frosty armour of steel, stands in contrast with the camoulage of pain and hurt that bubbles inside him. She also knows where he is heading for to drown his trauma,his usual temporary painkiller ,alcohol!
Heavily Nakku considers,if only he can let go of his insecurities,his fear of facing betrayal, his disbelief in the sincerity of her love, his in acceptance of the sanctity of marriage,at least this time.. But when that can be,only time can tell,untill then she can continue to nurse her love's sore...



beautifully done hamlet...thank you so much...u know this was one scene where i found that he felt discomforted by the closeness between them...when the mangalsutra got suck and he was so close to her...i could sense a man's need in him for first time...otherwise he had always been so restrained with her...thats why i felt that the SR on 28th march should have been treated with some more patience and time...but alas...but still we can have such a beautiful scene here..right!
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Posted: 14 years ago
Thanks Hamlet.Beautiful scene👏The thing i like about Tasha is they both have so much unspoken between them,that as viewer u are left with only speculation. when good writers like u,Shilpi,Jayati,Lekha & all others just pick these scenes & give them ur beautiful words,the same scene turns into poetry.Simple reader like me is always left wordless👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
hey Hamlet,

once again... loved ur post...

D n N dont need to speak... their conversations are left for us to imagine n how beautiful meanings r conveyed... got carried away...

i wish nakku was brave enough to hide his painkiller!!... no such luck, poor gal...

tc
divya
Edited by dc17-7 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
res :)

I need to do somethings...but promise will be back to comment :)

* Edit:

Hamlet :)

wonderful part...amazing...very well written...
so much the silence really spoke loud hear...
i loved it :D
thanks for such a baeutiful part...
I always thought this scene could be so much better
and u did it 😃

great work...do write more :)
Edited by dg0628 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
hi Lekha,

oh... that was really nice post of urs... such subtle stuff between TaSha... sorry, i somehow skipped it...

amazing dear...

tc
divya
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Posted: 14 years ago
Oh wow wow wow

yun hota is rocking thses days

thanks to Lekz and hamlet


first Lekz awesome post love it :D

the way u described the morning
sigh kassh aisa hota

i just love it!
and Lekz u should write , i can see germs on good writer in u


and Hamlet

wow wow wow

i love that scene and u just make me love this scene more

love his anger when change in concern !

great post

loved it :D
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Posted: 14 years ago
@Lekha

Awesome post... loved Dutta wistfully wishing... 'Saab mein chai leke aati hai '

@Hamlet

That was great. It is one of my favorite scenes too...the suppressed passion and tension between them is so over powering that it is almost tangible
😳


@Shilpita
Word. Dutta came closest to losing control over himself while trying to remove the mangalsutra. Wonder what would have happened if DSP has taken a minute longer...Then it would have been a different story
😳
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Posted: 14 years ago
Yun Hota to Kya Hota :)

ok so this was written couple days ago ...randomness came to me while watching a movie😆
anyway hope you like it ...




As usual Ganapat came home drunk again, he begins his normal rambling of non-sense which ends up in a fight with Babi. Both are at it and when Naku tries to interfere, Ganapat yells at her and gives her on big push away. Naku goes crashing into Dutta's arms, who was standing there staring at the happenings. All are shell shocked, more so as to when he came and how much he heard. It seemed as thou he wasn't there long, he uses his hands to gesture Naku to stand to the side while he walks in his stern manner toward Ganapat. It was almost as if Ganpat could now predict his future. What was coming his way was definitely not a hug, rather a good bashing. Babi stands mum in shock, while Ganapat starts shaking in fear. Naku watches from behind. Dutta tells Ganapat off. He says that Naku may be his daughter but she is his wife and doesn't care who, but if anyone think to lay a finger on her with the intention of hurting her, then they will never see daylight again. Ganapat being drunk rambles more non-sense infuriating Dutta. Dutta then raises his hand to give a good bashing when Naku gets in the way to stop him, saying whatever he did, she is his daughter. Dutta retorts saying and you are my wife, I can't just watch someone hurt you like that, Naku while admiring him says that Ganapat is her father and she also can't see anyone hurt him, no matter what he does. Dutta drops his hand and turns to face her. Naku sighs in relief. Dutta then says 'fine, I will not do anything to him, but I can't have you stay here under this man's watch, you will stay with me' he grabbed her wrist and dragged her out of the room. Babi and Ganapat are shell shocked with his sudden decision and Naku couldn't believe what she had heard. Her parents were shocked more concerned about her color secret but Naku, she was more concerned about being in his presence, in his room...

Dutta as normal as ever can be...walked right to centerstage at PN and told all of his decision, not a word came out of anyone. AS nodded in approval and Dutta carried on leading Naku to his room. Dutta lets her go in his room and still in anger he stands facing away from her. 'Saab' she called out...that name it always made everything else seem like nothing. He turned to face her and gave her a questioning hurt look. "Why Naku, why didn't you let me hit him...he needed it, some people won't learn unless it's the hard way" Naku smiled "Because he's my father, whatever he does I'm used to it and I've learned to let it go, that's how he was, that's how he is..." Dutta interrupted "then let me change what he will be then...how can you let him hurt you like that?" Dutta really frustrated with not hitting him. "Saab, he wasn't in his senses, he was drunk...thats how he is leave it na" Dutta angry tone "If he's drunk, it doesn't mean he can hit you" Naku thought for a while, and figured that he won't let this go unless she points something out. "Saab...can I say something?" she asked smiling a bit.. Dutta still in anger "Bol" his voice rough. "If he did wrong for pushing me like that while drunk, and that's his punishment that what punishment should we be giving you, for all that you've done drunk?" Dutta turns shocked that Naku just asked him that..but she was right...he had no answer to that. "Saab, everything you do when you're drunk... I know you do it in anger and you're not in your senses and sometimes you don't even know what you're doing. If I can see that and understand that and know that deep inside you don't mean any of it and I can forget it, then why do you think that I won't do the same for my dad?" Naku knew that was not quite a response he expected and she also knew it left him speechless. Dutta has a flash of all the times he's hurt her from when they were friends to the gunpoint wedding, all the torturing he did after that...and then remembers her saving him and his family, him setting her free, the JMM1 moments, and Anna's den hug...he looks at her apologetically. Naku walks closer to him, Saab I didn't mean to put salt over the wounds, I just want you to see that when one is not in their right mind, whatever they do is also not them...I have lived with my father my whole life experiencing this, maybe that's why I'm able to understand this whole thing better with you..I know that I'm your wife and you won't stand to have a single person lay even a hurtful gaze towards me...but he is my father...so for me please forgive him..." Naku waited for her response when Dutta just nodded. She smiled and then said "Sorry" Dutta kind of surprised asked her "for what? I should be the one to apologize if anything" Naku shakes her head in disapproval "No saab you have no reason to ask for forgiveness, I'm asking because I think I talked a little too much to try to make you understand, what can I do this mouth sometimes doesn't know to stop" This diminshed the anger on Dutta's face "It's a known fact na...but you know although initially I found your talks irritating I always enjoyed them... even now your voice, your reasoning's, your logic it just makes me a proud husband" his lips curved into a mischievous smile knowing that Naku would be at loss for words now...he knew his effect on her...He glanced at her and admired her while she was looking down and playing with her fingers. He smiled and said "Ok come"
she looked up questioning the call. "Come? ...come where?" she asked hesitantly. Dutta smiled "I'll give you a tour...of this room" he smiled knowing she would panick... "Tour? Saab it's not needed I know this room, it's not the first time I'm entering..." she stuttered as she spoke fast. "Haan, thats true, but before you came to give things , straighten things up...but now, that's not why you're here" Naku was turning red, she was already nervous about this decision and him teasing her like this wasn't helping. She couldn't take it and she turned to head to the door when Dutta catches her wrist. "Chal" he said as he led her to further inside..he was purposely showing her things like their closet the bathroom, tables where he works ..as if she didn't know already but he was enjoying her reactions to it all...and finally he led her to the place that she was hoping he wouldn't go that far to tease, but she thought wrong. He walked her to the bed and stood behind her...she was all ready in embarrassment at the mere fact that he even took her there. She was silent throughout. He creeped up close behind her, brought his head to her ear and whispered "and this is OUR bed" his closeness and words sent chills up her spine he then turned her to face him. She was all shades of red, but thank god for her black color, or else how would she hide it...he put his hands on her shoulders... "so tell me, what do you think of your new room"..Naku didn't know what to say, she looked here and there "uhh ...saab ...voh" Dutta hid his smile and pretended to be serious "haan Naku, I'm listening, bol" Dutta gave her a look "nothing?" he let go of her and started walking towards her, Naku started walking backwards "oh so you have nothing to say now, and you were worried that your mouth never shuts" he continues . Naku heart was racing, she couldn't even make eye contact anymore. "Voh Saab, acchi hai" she said with looking up at him. "Accha...aur ?" Dutta said taking one more step closer to her when she bumps into the bed is about to fall when he catches her. Both stare into each other's eyes. And then Naku breaks eye contact which brings Dutta back as he lifts her to stand up straight. He smiles when she without looking at him says she has work to do and runs off. While Dutta stares after her smiling.


Edited by dg0628 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
RES!!
gee i wud 1st like 2 say...can u pleaseee pleaseee continue 4rm ere...cuz i tink this scne haad alot of potential...it is 1 of my fav scnes cuz it leads 2 d beautiful song sequence n curtain wala scne...but i wana see a re-take of dat scnee...can u do it.pretty plsss
bak 2 d os...
it was beaituful...rely loved d scne on screen n d way u did it agen...brought bak sooo many goood memories...
loved it how naku questiond him...they rely shudv used this i=bit wer naku asks dutta bout wa punishmnt shud b 4 him in dat case!!! WOW the girl rely has gutta...a true sherni of a sher!!!
n d part afta that...
dutta bein michievious n naughty!! love it!!
it was soo cute...can jus imagine dat lil naught grin/smirk on his face...while waiting 2 see nakus reaction hehe...
it was a rely sweet re-take daya...rely duna y u wer sooo woried bout it!!!
want mor of dis...yh yh ikno i can b greedy wen it cumz 2 tasha...but do u rely blame me...



Edited by mIsHeZ.x - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
r2

ah one spot late :(

but i am happy its taken over by my buddy Mishelz :P

oh Dhayani

love ur post :D

loved this scene how D takes N to her room but the scene gcut off really fast

but here u are wishing my deisre

love how N turns the table at D :P

heheheh and Finally Gadha understnds

love the naughtiness of Dutta

it indeed bring a smile on my face :D

LOve it honey :)
Edited by kiran255 - 14 years ago

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