A reasonable persuasive essay by me!

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xSaiyaara

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Posted: 19 years ago

few days ago i asked u people's copmments on thsi topic here is the essay i submitted plz read and post your comments and u cna mark it too! i m in grade 7😉

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Edited by anjali207 - 19 years ago

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Posted: 19 years ago

stop chewing gum, and start eating paan. 😆 😆

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Morgoth

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Posted: 19 years ago

good work, hon. 😊

Here are a few minor things:

Para 2: change "anyways" to "anyway"

Para 3: change "sanitary" to "sanitation"

Para 3, page 2: change "their (gross)" to "there" and delete the "gross"

conclusion: remove "what i'm trying to say" -- it weakens the sentence.

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Pooja

@Angeleyes 2

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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: T.
good work, hon. 😊

Here are a few minor things:

Para 2: change "anyways" to "anyway"

Para 3: change "sanitary" to "sanitation"

Para 3, page 2: change "their (gross)" to "there" and delete the "gross"

conclusion: remove "what i'm trying to say" -- it weakens the sentence.

yeah those are the only ones but it was good👏