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Ayesha Malik

@mehraal

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Posted: 15 years ago

Okz folks so !

to begin with....

"Dil Dharaknay ka Sabab Yaad aaya" (Found a reason for my heartbeat)

Main characters will remain the same :

Amber-Dhani
Madhu-Avinash
Sudha (Dhani's Mom)
Sarla (hidden identity)
Amber's Dad (Mr. Raghuvanshi)
Amber's Brother (Sumer)
Amber's Bhabhi (Gauri)

one new character (hidden identity)

a quick teaser:

The weather was utmost pleasant with cool breeze and he could hear the birds chirping. The sun was about to rise and he wanted to witness as if there was a new beginning of his life. He wanted to compare his life with the rising sun but all he could do was lean against the tree and just stare in the space. He had a digital recorder in his right hand and a prized possession in his left hand. He just didn't want to let go of his possession so he kept feeling for the soft texture, soothing voice , warmth of sincerity around him. An hour went by and sun had risen completely and now he was heading back home. not to forget with his prized possession

will be waiting for the comments...

P.S. i will be updating the FF whenever I have time from my studies . right now I have to go and start preparing for my exams which are on tuesday :)

so Alta la Vista

Edited by mehraal - 15 years ago

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Ayesha Malik

@mehraal

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Posted: 15 years ago

even though I did not get any written response but I saw 15 people viewed my post so will just write the first part of it and if you guys like it then do post it...if not then I will not write anything....

7 am : Amber's room:

"Amber! wake up....its 7 am....aren;t you getting late for your work? Amberrrrrrrrr"

A pretty girl wearing yellow chiffon sari with silver border, silver earings, silver and yellow bangles, and just a mangalsutra around her fair neck and her mang filled with sindoor - the color of her love, Amber..comes near the bed and tries to wake her husband who is fast asleep and looks like an innocent kid.

"Please wifey! let me sleep...its just 7 am and the institution does not open before 8 am...pleaseeeeeeeeeeeee"

"No Amber,,,it does not matter if you are the head of the insitution or not...work is work" she keeps on tidying the room as well trying to wake him up.

"Oh my lord! why do I have the most un-romantic wife of the world" Amber sits with a jerk...he's in his pyjamas and t-shirt with messed up hair and looks adorable when he yawn and stretches his arms.

"Well now you do have a wife so just live with it" She's still mad at him for waking up late

"Yeah Yeah! I know my wife.....wife kum aur hitler ziyadah...Arghhhhhhhhh! ..Anyways, now I am up so could you please pass my stick"

She just looks at the stick and zoom - a lot of flashbacks come....her sitting on the jhoola,Amber rocking it,,,her sitting in the lib, Amber helping her to make notes...her sleeping on his shoulder while watching A walk to remember....her irritating Amber when he's trying to dress up and go to her dad for her hand in marriage...their wedding...their moments together....but NOW it seems everything was a dream....anyways she is the girl who lives in present and not past while Amber wants his past to live with his present....SO WHAT IF HE"S BLIND

she passes his stick and walks away from him when Amber tries to catch hold of her...she just excuses herself " I have a lot of work to do Amber, i have to make breakfast for everyone so just get ready quickly and come downstairs"

Amber just sighed...he knew that his wifey was avoiding him...and thats been happening since the day he lost his eye-sight.

" I wonder what makes her go away from me everytime I try to touch her and get closer to her" he thought aloud but then he got pre-occupied with his insitution work and tried to get ready

4 months ago:

Newspaper head line

"Amber Raghuvanshi looses his eyesight in a fatal accident in which he loses 3 family member"

Raghuvanshi family was once a very happy family with Mr. Raghuvanshi living with his two sons Amber and Sumer...Sumer was married to Gauri , a dutiful wife and daughter-in-law and best friend of Amber...Amber was a 23-year old ambitous boy for whom sky was the limit...he was a good-hearted person with a poetic touch to his character....during college, he fell in love with a pretty and nerdy girl....they went out for a while and then decided to get married...the girl was very practical, she only gave in for marriage coz Amber insisted for it...After marriage, Amber opened an insititute for handicapped people as he just felt something special for them and his wife stayed home for a while and then joined a nearby school as a grade 10 teacher. Life was smooth until that fatal accident....Amber lost his eyesight,his dad,bhayya and bhabhi but unfortunately their bodies were not found so Amber still believes that they are alive but his wife has coped with thr situation and accepted the fact they are not going to come back and helps Amber in dealing with his lost of sight...Days have passed by and now Amber can walk and do his own work with the help of his stick but there is something missing in their lives...

Who is his wife?

Are they alive?

what is missing in their lives?

stay tuned to DDSYA

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shwetha

@LegolasGondolin

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Posted: 15 years ago

u posess great writing skills
but the accident and amber losing his eyesight was tragic.

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Ayesha Malik

@mehraal

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Posted: 15 years ago

was just waiting for even one reply to continue writing :)...next part is coming up !

thanks for your support!

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Ayesha Malik

@mehraal

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Posted: 15 years ago

Days have passed by and now Amber can walk and do his own work with the help of his stick but there is something missing in their lives...

Who is his wife?

Are they alive?

what is missing in their lives?

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4 months ago:

Near a village:

A dusky and tall girl wearing light purple ghaaghra with tea-pink choli and a purple-pink chunni was running after her cattle which were grazing in a meadow but now they were lost. The girl went towards the jungle as thats where her goats and cows were seen the last but instead she found 3 wounded people, an elder person, a married woman and a man. She shouted for help

"aray koi hay! is there some one around? I need help otherwise these people will die"

she kept on shouting and people gathered around them. After some difficulty, the farmers were able to put the injured in a cart. there was no vehicle found near them so everybody assumed that they must have fallen out of the car and rolled and landed in the jungle. the villagers took them to their village " Amba Khera"

the girl's mother: Sudha

"Chori! who have you brought home? Do you even know who they are? the look like some rich people, How will you keep them in this small little hut?"

"Amma! why ydo you worry? we are poor so what! our hearts are big enough to fit them all in. You don't worry. I am going to Ved je (doctor) to get some medicines for them, look how much they are bleeding? but shukar hay ooper walay ka! the injuries don't seem to be that deep"

the girl goes away and gets some medicines.After few days of attending them , the injured people seem to be doing fine,

!!!!!!!!!!!the elder person was Mr. Raghuvanshi, the married lady was Gauri and the man was Sumer!!!!!!!

for some reason, all three of them had gone mute. It was probably most-trauamtic stress disorder but no body in the village knew about it so they just accepted them as they were:

Mr. Raghuvanshi became Kaka ji of the girl and Sumer/Gauri became bhayya bhabhi for the girl.

"Bhabhi! tell me something. I know you can't speak but phir bhee..do you have any other family member apart from kaka ji and bhayya?"

Gauri remembered Amber, his mischievousness, his smile, his ambition. she replied with signs that there is one more person in their family but they don't know where they are.

dheere dheere, all three people merged with villagers as if they were living with them forever. 4 months have passed by :

Sudha: "chori,kaka ji ko khana day diya? aur bhayya bhabhi kidher hain?"

the girl replied with affirmation that kaka ji had eaten and gone to sleep and bhayya bhabhi are just outside in the veranda looking at stars and may be trying to find their lost one....

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In the city:

Amber: I know i can't see but i can feel my loved ones around me, I know I can't see the stars but I also know that my bhayya bhabhi are looking at the stars at this time too. Oh lord! I know i can't explain this to my wife but how can she not know whats going on with me, when i am saying they are alive, then why is she behaving like that? where is my love who used to understand me without saying anything, why is our love, understanding missing, why are there so many distances between us? OMG! i am going to be crazy if I don't find these answers, I need to talk to her right now

Amber searched for his stick and went towards the sutdy room coz he knew that his wife would be working on tomorrow's lecture.

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so now we know that:

Amber's family is alive

it was love that is missing in amber's life

but the questions remain:

Who is Amber's wife?

Who is the girl in the village?

Stay tuned to DDKSYA

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Mona Maurya

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Posted: 15 years ago

Gud job mehraal 👏 👏

i enjoyed it a lot...plzz continue..i hv add ur FF link in Archive section so other people can also find it if ur post is not on front page.

looking forward for more...😉

Thanx once again for ur fantastic creative writing skills... no doubts u r a very good script writer...u should try in Media field 😳 m sure u'll get success. 😉

Keep smiling...😊

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Ayesha Malik

@mehraal

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Posted: 15 years ago

Thanksssssssssss Mona
u just made my day...i didn' even realise that ppl were actually reading it...
thanks again
.....

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Ayesha Malik

@mehraal

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Posted: 15 years ago

Starting from where we left off:

Amber goes to talk to his wife in the study room. He knocks at the door before entering and tell himself "I am entering my own's wife room with her permission. I don't know where did everything vanish to? Our love,understanding and most importantly TRUST but I have to talk to her and explain her my feelings. May be she feels burdened by living with a blind husband"

Amber : Sarla!

(yes folks, Amber's wife is Sarla and the girl in Amber Khera is Dhani)

Sarla : Yes Amber! Do you need anything? She gets up from her chair and walks towards Amber.

Amber : Why? Can I only come to you when I need something, I cannot come and talk to you and share my feelings with you? Whats wrong Sarla? Why have you turned like that? You were the jovial,bubbly yet serious girl that I loved so much and now look at you. You have turned into a robot, working all day night, don't you care for me any more? you don't care about the turmoil that I am going through, I know you would say that Why am I talking about that accident again but can't you just believe me for once that Babu ji,bhayya.bhabhi are alive...Why can't you think like that they are ALIVE and We have to find them?

Amber started to hyperventilate after talking so much in one breath. He had never imagined that he will talk to his APNI Sarla in this tone but he had to vent out everything in his heart. He stopped talking and waited for Sarla's reply

Sarla :Amber ! I don't want to talk about this matter any more. We have already talked and decided that our family is dead and they are not going to come back then why are you so stubborn. Trust me Amber! Police could not find a clue about the accident. everything is gone. Why can't you get this thing straight?

Amber : I can't. I just can't and Don't...Don't come near me to pacify me. I know that I am a burden on you because I can't see any more...If you want to leave me, you are more than welcome to leave me and never again come back

Sarla's face turns pale after hearing these words from her beloved husband who once loved her like his own life.

Sarla : Amber! What are you saying, Leave you? Are you in your senses. Her voice raises.

Amber : Chillao mat Sarla! I am feeling a change in you after my accident. You earlier gave consent to our marriage only because I said so. you were not even ready for marriage at that time. I thought my love was enough for both of us but NO I was wrong. You respected our friendship and just for my sake you said Yes... I am sorry Sarla, I should not have bothered you that much..Just leave me alone for a while, please...

Sarla just looked at Amber with a blank face and expression-less eyes...She didn't even cry and just moved out of the room....

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