PRIDA FF, tu janey na....part 16 pg37 last part

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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey guys , i knw u ppl must be wondering shes on trip and how can she come and post sstory well i have got this piece of idea frm my frnd , i got some time to write the character sketch for this , i had been writting since 4 days and today i finally did it with characters, presenting you tu janey na...


tu janey na….


Ela gujral : she is known to the world , India 's one of most famous business woman , she is homemaker , she loves her both kids a lot , prithvi gujral and roshni gujral , after death of his husband mahesh gujral she did lot of hard work to bring up gujral enterprises and her first born gave his teenage life to help his mother , she is sometime very much scared for him , but knows what is best for him .

Prithvi gujral : hes 28 years old , he knows whats right and wrong , he is mature person , obedient son , and a loving brother , just because of so much determination gujral enterprises stands at a peak today , he loves horses , they were his first love , toofan was his first horse which his father gifted him , like he and toofan grew up togetter ,and loves guns as well.. he hates lie, his temper shoots up when someone lies to him , he cant bare betrays and lies at all , he is engaged to sonia mehra , he doesn't love her but he accepted her for his mother happiness , LOVE isn't for him according to him , he has two best friends sameer khanna and dr. ashmit sharma. Inder is nowadays also in his good books , its very much hard to come in his good books. He respects women a lot because his world is starts with his mother and ends at his sister.

Roshni gujral : shes 22, roshni gujral , hot and happening , she loves her mamma and bhaiya very much , .shes clumsy , she sweet and cute , prithvi has always fulfilled her wishes , shes princess of the house, she knows how to make everybody cheerup when they are sad .she has too much crush after college's nerd varun but he always runs from her.

Sonia mehra : shes 25 , shes daughter of akash mehra , shes totally dumb head , she just wants prithvi's money nothing else , she just shows fake love towards him because she find prithvi extrme boring , and not her type , when she is with prithvi just one sound repeats in background SHE WANTS UR MONEY

Balraj saxena : he is journalist who is actually from manali but lives in Mumbai with his family , his career was not all stable till 10 years but then his luck cheered up and he found his life stable then he called his wife suman saxena , daughter damini saxena and son varun Mumbai .he very much protective towards his family and doesn't want any of his family member to get near his profession .

Suman saxena : she is homemaker , she loves her kids most , she spent her whole life after her kids and husband , she loves doing things for them . she want her daughter damini to be like her and get involved in home chores but… she want her to get married as well but no chance right now . shes very much happy for her son varun who is just mama's boy.

Damini saxena : shes 26 ,she is tom boy , she loves doing gun shoots and horse riding , she works in adventure club in manali for summers as her mother doesn't allow her to work in Mumbai … she hates being typical women , she hates men who show their over confidence and useless sympathy for women .

Varun saxena : he is .22. hes college nerd , he loves books , and books , hes mama boy and respect his di a lot . and doesn't like girl chasing him .
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Posted: 15 years ago
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yaah.....fab skethch..

will luv 2 see ila and pri as mother and son..

continue soon...

arre haan.......add me 2 ur pm list 2.....
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cool sketch. continue soon and pm me too.
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plz also add me in your pm list and really luking forward yo read it.
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This story mostly consist of flash backs , the present will be in bold and flash backs will be in italic .
PART ONE

Its all dark in the room , but still it seems that storm has hit it , hes throwing every single thing he finds near him , hes crashing everything …. Y? Y did u do this to me ? y ? he thinks I loved you damn it … y me? He threw his hand on mirror, mirror broke and went in depth in his hand , he threw the bed sheets , the pillows and couch all things in his room was gone mess , he couldn't control his anger , his betrayal , his frustration was not expressed well he wanted to destroy everything himself as well … kyunnnn!!!! kyunn kiyaaa mere saath aisa finally he screamed , kyun kiya?ahhhh He was crying … he broke on his knees , still screaming and crying out loud , a heartbroken man , like his heart was been sliced slowly slowly …. His head was lowered …. Aj kush ho gi na tum mujhey barbad kar ke … he saw their wedding picture laying near him , the glass was broken of the frame the perfect crack was their between them , mere saath aisa kyun kiya?? His voice was trembling .. in his head everything started to spin … her betrayal … her fake love… her fake tender and how she used him …. He was still on his knees , he took support of bed frame and stood up he went towards his cupboard … as he opened it … the fragrance welcomed him … her smell… for which he used to get lost … he picked up her each and every accessory … one by one looking each and everything… he had each memory flashed back with every single accessory , how used to she look in sarees , her shalwar kameez , her western wears … her earnings … her bangles … her scents … everything was ou as he was empting the cupboard he threw everything in middle on the rug …. He saw wine on the side table … which he ordered last night for success for being one…. Last night its drank in order to celebrate !!! and today he picked it up for celebrating his sorrows , for his greatest achievement , to prove himself as a failure in love , today love defeated him , he sprinkled some wine on her belongings and gulped all the rest of the wine … he took out the match box which he used last night to brightened his life and today hes burning his life with this match box… he lightened the match stick and threw it over the rug!.... itna bara dhoka dene se acha mar dena tha mujehy! Is dhoke me jene se bhetar tha!!! Choking his voice .. He lay down near the fire … murmuring its going to be over … its going to be all over….
Gujral mansion was under dark coulds today … today in morning something else was set up for something else and something else happened… roshni who was very much scared and disturbed after what happened in evening … she could listen her pri bhaiya crying it loud , it was echoing everywhere … she was with her mamma ela gujral … she had her hugged tight after what happened…. Ela was extremely afraid for her first born …. She could estimate of his pain which caused him today … he screaming and crying voice was hammering her … she knows her son was broke up … she knew things wont come back to normal easily .. she was gaining confidence to stand infront of her son , she could hear more those were heavy rocks falling on her … she grabbed roshni's hand and started to move slowly… roshni nodded her head in no.. mama bhaiya… mama I cant come I am scared … no roshni we have to face it prithvi needs us … come on saying confidently cupping her princess face in her hands… there feets were glued to the floor they even didn't want to move… but still they moved slowly slowly … roshni used to get more scared as they were getting near to his room … his pleading could be heard clearly … roshni wanted to get deaf at that time… ela grapped her daughter's hand more tightly and asked her to face it … as they were near they noticed smoke… smoke coming ou of his room and his voice stopped and they got extremely silence … ela couldn't believe she ran towards his room and was gone dumbhead when she saw her first born lying there between the fire… his eyes were still open … they were red blood red… it seemed now blood will fall not water! He was still awake his whole body ached… his hands hand deep cuts and one cut was that bad that it cutted his wrist as well , he got burn as fire trapped him but… he didn't care about these physical pains , he now just couldn't bear the pain what he received few hours ago… he wanted to end this all , he wanted to finish this all … he was still murmuring its going to be over … its going to be all over and closed his eyes…. Ela watching this couldn't stand she broke her voice and screamed for servants … they rushed speedly upwards… she asked them to bring buckets of water and some more workers to bring him out.. roshni was nudging her mamma ….mamma bhaiya … mama bhaiya….they couldn't move now they saw this and couldn't believe their eyes now .. they wanted it to be a nightmare but not in real… ela's son strong as rock was now compeletely broken … she knew now who could fix this up…servants hurriedly stopped the fire and picked up prithvi and settled him in another room , ela called ashmit prithvi's friend for concern , he came as soon as possible, he aided prithvi's hands first … he took out tiny tiny pieces of glass and stopped his blood to flow, then he medicated the burns and started his check up , he was best pal of prithvi , he was good doctor as well , he asked everybody to stay out till he checks him up, after a long time he came out and talked to ela… ela's strength was pri and roshni , he was her biggest support and today her support was lying hopelessly…ashmit made them sit in on the couch , and finally broke the silencr.. um ah aunty , pritvhi is not well , hes gone into depression , he tried to kill him self but hes ok now , stress is not good for him , he needs you and patted his hand on roshni and you, I am always wit him , if we support him and cheer him up he will surely recover… ok and ela thanked him to come and after he left she entered in the guest room where his son was laying , he looked pale , weak and broken, she sat near , she could see his tears still flowing even in closed eyes…
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CHARACTER SKETCH PG 1
PART ONE pg 1
PART TWO pg 3
PART THREE pg 5
PART FOUR pg 7
PART FIVE pg 10
PART SIX PG 13
PART SEVEN PG 14
PART EIGHT pg17
PART NINE pg 21
PART TEN pg 23
PART ELEVEN pg25
PART TWELVE pg27
PART 13 pg30
PART 14 pg31
PART 15 pg35
PM LIST pg 2



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Posted: 15 years ago
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wow....

man wat happened 2 pri????
who betrayed him....who.....?????😭

wat happened frnd...i jst cant stand de suspense...pls update soon...
i mean 4 de second time in my life i m crying after reading a ff....!!!!

pls update soon.....pls....
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Posted: 15 years ago
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like it. i know damini betrayed him na.just guessing.update soon. 😛 😛
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Posted: 15 years ago
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uff.. nw dats smthng totally new ! TABLES turned !! hmm i guessing smdng.. bt yeah wil wait 4 u 2 reveal d suspense 2 see wetr im rite !

did i say its AWSM ??!!👏 👏

keep up the gud wrk dear.. do cnt soon..

-Luv Niki ! 😳


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Originally posted by: aparajhita

wow....

man wat happened 2 pri????
who betrayed him....who.....?????😭

wat happened frnd...i jst cant stand de suspense...pls update soon...
i mean 4 de second time in my life i m crying after reading a ff....!!!!

pls update soon.....pls....



aww apsy please dont cry dear ... when i was writting i was emotional at tht time , please love would have to wait for the suspense becasue it wont open soon , now flash backs would appear !!!

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