YuNa POEMS: Updated - 25/2 pg 15 Sealed Lips

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Posted: 15 years ago

#101

great MJ..
Mypast!!
All i can do now, is hope and pray,
That Naina never goes away!!
hope she never goes away!!

sri:-)

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koolaries4

@koolaries4

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#102

Originally posted by: priyanka4340
wow realy heart touchable poem lov it

Thanks priyanka.. m glad you liked it!! 😊

Originally posted by: 1kaarzoo
gal i luvd da last line👏 but u knw wht i was gonna request u to write a poem on Raj's entry but i think dil ka connection clicked it!!! i wanna pull RAJ's cheek 'coz i was da 1 who wanted a BHAI in YuNa's life i knw am mad mere jaisa piece dhoondke nahin milega😉

Lol.. they say twisted minds think alike, innit? 😉 so i had to write the poem on Raj's entry!! U what? U wanted a Bhai? 😲 lol.. now deal with it.. he is probably going to uncover Yuvi's deepest secrets and that is soo not good for YuNa!! oh, and i love Raj as the bhai - i think he is growing on me!! 😳

Originally posted by: Starry_night
Its awesome MJ.....the last two lines are so poignant......true....he would be emotionally traumatized if Raj causes any harm to Naina or even try to get close to her but at the same time he would be helpless otherwise he may spill out his secrets .....even Naina would be suffering......its gonna be so painful for both of them.....and you have described it amazingly.....its superb !!!

Thanks Priyanka.. i agree.. Yuvi will be emotionally traumatized if anything happens to Naina.. he is never going to forgive himself if Raj harms her.. but like we know.. its not Raj but Yuvraj who is going to harm her!! *sigh* Its going to be very very very painful, and being the Romanto Sadist i am, i want to see it!! 😳 And i am glad you liked it !!

Originally posted by: ilive2laugh
really nice poem
and raj is cute :P

Thanks Sneha!! Raj and Cute?? definately, but Yuvi is magnetic!! 😉

Originally posted by: Tushtih7
i luvd the rhyme n rhythm in the poem......

'And from you i shall hide'

i wish yuvi reveals to naina, at least an outline of his past....

n the ironical truth is very well portrayed abt raaj n yuvi's anger for raaj wen he tries to get closer to naina.. lovely one

Thanks Yami!! Am glad you liked it!! and i also hope Yuvi tells Naina the truth himself rather than her finding out in a very ugly manner from Raj!!

Originally posted by: ilive2laugh
And you too better not whack Mac eh? you can whack that Raj.. hehe.. Naina wanted a Raj and she got one.. now she is stuck between Raaj and yuvraaj.. 😆😆😆 Lucky her!!
i can never whack mac - thats rhymes😆

and i agree someone ppl are sooo lucky

ek ki jagae 2 raaj 😍

but what about us? how come we dont even have a single raj :(

LOL Sneha.. that definately rhymes.. and i know, its soo unfair.. how comes we dont get even one Raj and Naina gets not one, but two two Raj's!! *sigh* such an unfair world!! 😆 And i am glad you can never whack Mac... *hugs*

Originally posted by: Sofna
Aww th last line touches a chord deep in 1z heart!!
Beautiful, simply beautiful...

Yuna r 2 such utter contrastin charac's. Naina who livz in a fairytale, wer only happines prevails n njoyin n livin 4 th momnt! Her 1 tear f devastation wud b th shatterin f foundatn f her beliefs!!

N Yuvi who has emerged 4m darkness,violenc, wer nly despair prevails, survivn 4 th futur in harsh conditnz... 4 him 2 b th cause f naina's hrtbrk wud b lyk surpressin light in 1z life.

They're both headin n stranded 4 pain...n so much pain...its diffclt 2 ndrstnd who wud recovr 1st n who heal whom!!

U r 1 awsm writer Mj....!! May u succeed in vrythn u put yr mind n heart 2!!

Thnx n *hugs*. Tc n keep smilin (:

Thanks Sofna.. 😳😳 Am glad you liked it.. And i love your explanation.. Both are headed for heart break but it remains to be seen who will heal whom in the long run.. and not only that, it is sad because Naina will experience darkness for the first time in her life, whilst Yuvi will retun to the shadows forever bitter this time, because he now knows what he has been missing so far!! *sigh* Ishq i tell you, its Ajeeb!! And you too keep smiling dear!! *hugs*

Originally posted by: sri_4
hey Mj
great n apt poem for raj ...telling abt yuvis feelings..
i too think hes a threat..from yuvis past..
loved the last lines,,

Lest she sees my past,
And out of pain,
from her eyes, falls a tear.

great!!

sri:-)

Thanks Sri.. i am glad you liked it!! Thanks for your comment!!

Originally posted by: princessuma
awww i know this will make her cry!!! really good MJ!!!

Yes sumi.. this is going to make her weep for years to come!! *sigh* i am soo not liking Chief for this! 😡Thanks..

Originally posted by: dmgfan03
hey MJ u got really nice writting skills......awsome poem.....hope this raj doesn't creat too much problem for our cutest yuna....

Thanks Neha.. 😳 Oh, Raj is going to bring a Tsunami in yuNa's life and he is going to enjoy every minute of it.. he is such a cute sadist!! *sigh*

Originally posted by: josephina_vegas

absolutely MJ......cin raj makes our blood boil, rightly said. darlin ur great writer, keep it up👏. u have dug yuvis demons, he needs to face in the most acurrate way. i must congratulate u for penning the rite words in a rhyming form.
just hope allz well for our fav jodi, yuvna.......n raj uncle does not destroy a fairytale story..............i guess dats the irony of the whole situation.

MJ, i wud suggest u to write a sequence,revealing their emotions with a tesion cum rommantic paked theme.it shud be in a present continuous tense .i mean it shud be a happening( taking place) sequence, n trust me if u try.........ur gonna rock it.

god job gal, god bless n keep writing............it brings out the emotional side out of u.............u actually meet urself 😊

Thanks Jo.. Rhyming is my favourite part of poems, but its soo hard to get the correct rhymes 😆.. but thats why i enjoy it soo much.. it makes my mind jog 😆😉!! The irony is that Raj is not here to play Cupid, but he is out and out to destroy every dream YuNa have seen.. and he is going to make sure that their dreams shatter into a million pieces along with their hearts.. and Sadist Raj will reply, "Dil ho ya sheesha, aakhir tut hi jaata hai " 😆 Write a tension cum romantic packed theme?! wwoooo, thats hard, but i wil try once i get some time!! Thanks for your suggestion!! 😃 And yes, writing does bring out so much that i had forgotten for many years now!!

Originally posted by: Pocahontas

MJ,

That is quite an expression of Yuvi's anger and fear of Raj who represents all that Yuvi was once upon a time. But I am finding it increasingly difficult to sympathize with Yuvster.Your own fears are no excuse to put somebody else' life at stake.

Poco Loco *hugs* thank you so much for replying.. i thought you did not like my previous poems thats why you were not replying 😳😳😳 but i am glad you replied to this onE!! 😃 And i agree, Yuvi has no reason to put Naina's life in danger.. but i think he knows that Raj wont harm Naina physically - and that he can cause much more harm by revealing the truth!! *sigh*

Originally posted by: sups2222
Wow MJ that was so beautiful, I sumtimes wonder where u get theses ideas serously *HATS OFF TO U*..well i dunt have a hat rite noy but u can have this:........Well the last line rock babes "And out of pain,
from her eyes, falls a tear. ". ..that was very heart touching last thing yuvi want to see in this world is naina crying..well now wondering how will yuvi deal this new RAJ NAMED[cute , romantic, mischieveious, viedeo game lover, talcum powder blower, lovable😳 hey from ma side]TYACOON n will save nanzie from him.......u go gal......

Thanks Supriya!! 😳😳 And i too dont know where i get these ideas from, they just pop in my head 😆😆True.. the last thing Yuvi ever wanted to see is Naina crying, but she will cry and that too because of him, what an irony!! And the reality is that he can run away from the truth, but for how long will he hide the truth from Naina.. she has to know it one day or another, and i say better now than later!! Even i am looking forward to seeing how Yuvi will deal with Raj but atm he is completely helpless... and i soo hate seeing him this way!!

Edited by koolaries4 - 15 years ago

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koolaries4

@koolaries4

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#103

Originally posted by: Starry_night
MJ...am in love with your poems......this one is just outstanding.....especially the first four lines and the last two lines are are so touching........he so wanted to leave his past behind but his past never ceases to haunt him....he is again into a problem and this time its really big.......and Naina is at stake....hope everything is fine soon.

Thanks alot Priyanks 😳😳 Yes, his past is bound to catch up with himsome day or another and he should have realised that earlier.. and this time he has everything to loose !! *sigh* poor yuna..

Originally posted by: 1kaarzoo
U DONT WANT DA LADY 2 HO AWAY JUS SAY DA TRUTH DUDE UR WRTH AS A PARTNER kaassssssssshhhhhhhhh woh mujhe mile or main use yeh bolo.......... wow lady nice poem simple n straight🤗

Yes he is.. but the problem is that he doesn't see it that way.. he fears that just like everyone else, even Naina will leave him.. *sigh* Thanks for liking the poem!! 😊😳

Originally posted by: princessuma
ooo MJ that was soo good!! and I am sure Yuvi is thinking the same thing....it's too much for him....handling love and his crazy past!!

Thanks Sumi... yes, it is getting too much for him to handle both.. as if Naina wasn't enough 😆😆 but his safest bet is to tell Naina the truth himself, which he is soo not going to do.. *sigh*

Originally posted by: ilive2laugh

no worries yuvi
naina wont go aways...we will bring back for you :P nice one MJ...you keep on pulling all the amazing poems out of nowhere - let me borrow some of your talent too so i can come up with funny os :P

Actually .. we will bring her back to you but we will whack you on the way so you never hurt her again.. 😆 Jhooti... your OS are soo nice and funny? mera talent kya borrow karogi, mujhe toh lagta hai ke tumhare paas tuition lene aau 😛 😉!!

Originally posted by: adiarmaan
sooo beautiful MJ, can't find words to describe how beautiful appropriate your poems are..👏.even after describing the complicated yuna situation, they are simple...loved it 😊

Thanks Adiba.. am glad you liked it 😳😳...

Originally posted by: sri_4
great MJ..
Mypast!!
All i can do now, is hope and pray,
That Naina never goes away!!
hope she never goes away!!

sri:-)

Thanks for your comment Sri.. am glad you liked it!! 😳😳 andi hope she goes away so he can realise her actual importance when she returns!! 😊

Edited by koolaries4 - 15 years ago

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josephina viegas

@josephina_vegas

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Posted: 15 years ago

#104

Originally posted by: koolaries4
Hey guys.. Thanks for all your positive comments and replies!! :) I am abit tied down with time today so i cannot reply to all your comments!! 😳 I will do it as soon as i get abit of time on my hands.. But for now, I have written a poem on Yuvi's expression of his past and future colliding:

My past.

The truth i have to conceal,
and my heart was ready to heal,
now its her love that i feel,
yet, there is a fear,
that this is all too real.
So my past came back,
Without any notice,
To leave behinds its track,
forever on my neck.
All i can do now, is hope and pray,
That Naina never goes away!!

Hope you guys like it..And apologies about the weird spacing.. i tried to correct it several times but it is not showing up!! *sigh*

Looking forward to your thoughts..

tc

MJ

xxx

dont worry MJ, naian is not goin anywer.............pyaar nahi toh nafrat keliye she will be wid him

and after yest'd precap im think abt all the possible xplanations

@ purple: love those line, so true its a dream for sumone to hold happiness wen all he can understand is pain. just hope he heals widout any problems, n has the guts to face the truth wid naina in his arms.

lovely poem MJ.............good goin

Edited by josephina_vegas - 15 years ago

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dmgfan03

@dmgfan03

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Posted: 15 years ago

#105

really nice lines....every line gives the current felling of yuvi.....his fear..his love and concern about naina....

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ilive2laugh

@ilive2laugh

Rocker

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Posted: 15 years ago

#106

@MJ...the only reason my os turns out good are cause

sumi is awsome writer and have witty sense of humor

but you work on your own and come up with these

amazing ideas and all the emotions that you bring

out in your poems and OS are just amazing...

all we write is abt Mac in boxers being stupid, Sid being

confused, Yuvi being mean/romantic, Naina being

bossy towards Yuvi and Tammy being back with Sid

but you hun go beyond that. you bring out emotions

of pain, hurt, love, laugh, betryal etc

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Interstellar

@Interstellar

Inactive

Posted: 15 years ago

#107

MJ... loved ur lines

"now its her love that i feel"

... n this is my favourite line

happy atleast i get to feel about yuvi naina luv here...

thanxxx for dat..

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koolaries4

@koolaries4

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#108

Originally posted by: josephina_vegas

dont worry MJ, naian is not goin anywer.............pyaar nahi toh nafrat keliye she will be wid him

and after yest'd precap im think abt all the possible xplanations

@ purple: love those line, so true its a dream for sumone to hold happiness wen all he can understand is pain. just hope he heals widout any problems, n has the guts to face the truth wid naina in his arms.

lovely poem MJ.............good goin

Thanks for your comment Jo.. and you are right.. Naina is not going anywhere because she wil always be connected to Yuvi, either by Love, Hatred or Pain.. She will share everything with him unknowingly! *sigh*

Yes, For yuvi, Naina has been a lost dream come true.. for the first time in his life he has understood the meaning of happiness and what it feels like to be complete - and he is going to lose it because of his own actions!! *sigh* I am glad you liked it!! :)

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koolaries4

@koolaries4

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#109

Originally posted by: dmgfan03
really nice lines....every line gives the current felling of yuvi.....his fear..his love and concern about naina....

Thanks alot.. i am glad you liked it!! 😊

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koolaries4

@koolaries4

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#110

Originally posted by: ilive2laugh
@MJ...the only reason my os turns out good are cause
sumi is awsome writer and have witty sense of humor

but you work on your own and come up with these

amazing ideas and all the emotions that you bring

out in your poems and OS are just amazing...

all we write is abt Mac in boxers being stupid, Sid being

confused, Yuvi being mean/romantic, Naina being

bossy towards Yuvi and Tammy being back with Sid

but you hun go beyond that. you bring out emotions

of pain, hurt, love, laugh, betryal etc

Lol Sneha.. but your work is more efficient because you check each others works lol.. i have to wait for a few days before rechecking my work and then post it.. it takes me aggeeeessssss.... and both of you conmbine your talens = maha talent and superb work!! 😃

Thanks alot for your kind comments ... am glad you like the poems!! 😊

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