Me bck with 1 more os (lst prt in pg2-plz do read)

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Hi friendz'..me bck again. I knw iknw, after readin the title u all must be thinkin "are yeh fir se aa gayi hamara sad khane", I m sorry pad main kya karu'''.each n every present epi is makin me so tensed dat I keep guessin wats goin to hapn nxt? N ends up makin my own story''so heres my nw os. Ab to zarur bologe, "ab yeh pakayegi hamey 😡"''''.hm''..thoda bardasht kar lo''''n do read it.

Ya don 4get to leave ur comments after readin'''''..hope u wl like it. Agar nhi pasand aaye to fir bhi gusse ki barsaat kar sakte ho''''..hehe

Story so far: both raj n samrat has come to knw nupur prt 2s real identity. As we all knw samrat is also aware of the involvement of nupur, mayank n not to mentn his beloved chashmish who at the moment is nothin more than jst gunjan bhushan''''..he leaves the college in a fleet of anger leavin behind a heart broken gunjan and devasted suhani.

Others of the gang were present xcept raj, who by nw has become a prt of it. Mayank as usual tries to control the whole situation''..advicin both suhani n gunjan to go to raj n sam respectively in order to clear the whole mess.

On the other hand raj comes to college searchin for suhani''''to get an xplanation of this whole drama. Both of them eventually meet. At first raj out of frustratn blasts on suhani accusin n cursin her, but on findin her cryin n pleedin for forgiveness he regains his lost affection n forgives her''''askinb her abt the whole matter. He too decides to help her to get bck her bro n also hlp nupur mayank n gunjan in pacifyin samrat.

Samrat at present unaware of all these is in his home breakin thinks, puncin on sand bag-----------he still cannot believe that gunjan, his very own chashmish has lied him n dat too for dat girl, suhani''''.he wants to hate gunjan but alas "some things are easy to be said than done"''''he in turn is only hurtin himself'''''.suddenly the phn rings, samrat is not in a state of answerin ne body's call. Lekin yeh kya shayad aaj yeh phn bhi samrat se be wafai karna chahata hai isiliye to use chain se rhene hi de raha''.

He finally picks up the phn, without lookin at the caller no''''the caller from the other side, "hallo samrat''..." as soon as samrat hears the voice he disconnects the call. It again rings, again he picks, "hallo"'''.samrat discon'''''but he cant as the voice requests, "plz samrat plz phn mat kaatna, ek baar sirf ek baar meri baat sunlo"'''..samrat angrily replis "ab kahene k liye bacha hi kya hai gunjan, sab kuch to tumne already kahe diya", "samrat tum galat samajh''''''."

"galat!!! Ha galti maine ki hai''tumhe apna samajhne ki, tumse pyaar karke''''.par aur nhi"

"samrat tum mujhse aise kaise kahe sakte ho'''''"

"kyun nhi agar tum mujhe itna bada dhoka de sakte ho'''''''ab aur kuch nhi bacha, kuch nhi'..

Gunjan cant believe her ears'''.."sa''''am'.ra'.aa..t"

"I hate u gunjan, I hate u'''ab kabhi mujhe phn karne ki ya milne ki koshish mat karna" and he disconnects.

Nothin more is left for gunjan, sab kuch khatam'''..almost dead from inside''..only a body in the form of gunjan who is nothin more than a statue returns home where diya, benji n uday along with bui is watin for others (tho nothin is told to bui yet''..)

Bui: are baat kya hai koi mujhe batayega'''.tum sab itne pareshan''(the main entrance door opens as gunjan enters)

All except bui runs to her''.."gunjan kya hua''..ha sammy se tumhari baat hui''''gunjan kya kahan samrat ne''''."'''''''''..she answered none of their questions and straight away goes to her room, shuttin herself inside.

Bui: ab ise kya HUA'dekho baat kya hai mujhe batao wrna''''''.

Another group enters----------------mayank nupur adhiraj n suhani

Raj: kya hua diya? Samrat''''..

Nupur: gunjan kahan hai?

Diya: wo abhi abhi lauti hai''hum ne usse baat karne ki koshish bhi ki par usne bina answer diye hi apne kamre mein chali gayi''''shayad''..

Bui: babloo beta tu to mera achcha beta hai na'.tu bata na ki aakhir baat hai kya!

Then tho reluctantly babloo narates the whole story'''..after hearin bui''.."kya!!! Main na kahe ti thi'''.yeh ladka mujhe pahele se hi thik nhi lag raha tha''.."

Nupur: uffo bui isme samrat ka kya dosh hai

Bui: tu chup kar , tujhe to main baad mein''''.and as she proceeds towards gunjan's bedroom, mayank stops her "bui plz abhi nhi, hume gunjan ko kuch der k liye akele chod dene mein hi bhalai hai. I m sure kal subha tak sab kuch thik ho jayega'.." bui agrees.

But mayank's expectatns proved wrong''''.none of them was able to communicate with either of them-------------gunjan or samrat. Agle do din tak dono hi subha sab k uthne se pahele hi ghar se nikal jaate the aur raat ko jab ghar laut te the to inte thake k baat karne ka koi faydaa hi nhi tha'''aur samrat, wo to jaise gayad hi ho chuka tha'''..

On the second nite after the incident every body includin bui was sitting in the drawin room of bhushan house'.bui, "bas ab bahaut ho chuka, ab bhaiya ko bulana hi parega''''."

Nupur: bui!!! Plz bauji ko mat bulaiye, hum sab kuch na kuch'''''.

Gunjan enters ''''."gunjan'''

"plz di kal baat karte hai, aaj main bahaut thaki hui hu''''." and without a singl more word the leaves

N bui calls up gunjans father

Next day bhushan house, gunjan's room''''..every body standin with tensed face'''..a doctr is chekin up gunjan. It so hapend after lst nite today wen nupur woke up she found gunjan still fast asleep. As she touched her body to wake her'''''''..to her utter dismay gunjan"s whole body was burnin , her eyes already had developed blck patches around''''.a shoked nupur called the other members n the doctr was cald. On hearin the news mayank, who was stayin wid raj 4 d pst 2 days comes along wid suhani.

"ratna''''." every body luks bck-------------gunjan's father is standin out there''.tryin to understnd the reasn for the gatherin.

still writin
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Posted: 15 years ago
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continuation.........................

Scene: Doctr after chekin gunjan.

Dc: inke nerves bahaut hi week hai. Aisa lag raha hai ki peechle do tin din se inhone kuch nhi khaya hai.

Everybody: kya!!!

Dc: mujhe to aisa hi lag raha hai.

Gunjan in her unconsciousness: sa……..m…….r…a….. Mu…..h……..u…..j……..ma…..a…..f……..ka……..d….o s…………….a……m……r………..

Dc: lagta hai inhe koi gehra sadma pahaucha hai

Nupur: plz dctr kuch kijiye. Kuch aisi dawai dijiye jisse meri bahen puri tarha se thik ho jaye.

Dc: dekhiye medicine se insaan ki sharirik beemari thik ki jaati hai , mann ki nhi………(after thinkin of sumthin) waise yeh samrat kaun hai?

Everybody is shocked to hear this name. mayank: samrat!

Dc: actually yehi naam patient tab se behoshi mein le rhi hai……………mujhe lagta hai unki asli dawa yeh medicines nhi , balki wo insaan hai.

Thinkin somethin , mayank leaves takin benji along wid him. On the other side after gunjan's father's arrival took him to another room n narrated the whole story……………………………………….

Bui: ab samjhe bhaiya, main na kahetithi is ladke pad bharosa mat karo…………ab dekho

Gun's pa: ek minute ratna……………abhi in sab pad gaur karne zyaada hume gunjan k baarey mein sochna chahiye. Hume uske paas hona chahiye, chalo.

N both goes to gunjan's bedroom

Here, mayank n benji are searchin for samrat everywhere……….in his house, college, caf treat--------but he is no where. In the mean time , nupur informs mayank over phn that gunjan's condition is detorioratin……….she requests him to come bck soon.

therefore both of them takes the shortcut route to gunjan's house------------the route frequently taken by samrat.

While passin they saw ………………aw………………….samrat!!!

Sittin on the bench of a tea stall, with a glass of tea in his hand. His expressions are vague…………nothin can be make out, but apparently luks lost. This is the same tea stall, his favourite plc which among his friends was first visited by gunjan on valentines nite after the ball.

Pinki, the daughter of tea stall owner & samrat's first luv comes n sits beside samrat…………."samrat bhaiya yeh kya, chai to thandi ho gayi aur gunjan didi kahan hai……….wo nhi aayi? Aap dono to hamesha ek saat hi aate hai!

Samrat comin bck from his reverie…………….."u…….h………ha?"

"inse kya pooch rahe ho…….inhe kahan kisi ki parwa hai", samrat finds both mayank n benji standin in front.

as he turns to leave the place…………………

Mayank: ha ha chale jao……………waise bhi tumhe kya fark padta hai, gunjan k hone ya na hone se.

Samrat pays no heed n strts walkin ………………..

Mayank: dekha jaye to yehi thik hai. Tum jaise ladke se pyaar karne k liye gunjan jo maut ki sazah hi milni chahiye………………………

What!?!?!?! Samrat cant believe his ears. Whatever has happened………let the circumstances be nethin, how can he deny the fact of still lovin gunjan the most.

He runs bck to mayank…………………….."kya kahe rahe ho tum mayank…………………kya hua hai use……….."

Hurrah! The medicine has started workin. Mayank continues………"kyun tumhe kya hua? Tumhare liye to wo dhokhe baaz hai na. fir chahe wo dhokha usne tumhare khushi k liye hi kyun na di ho. Kya fark padta hai agar wo last 2 days se bina kuch khaye piye apne aap ko saza de rhi hai----------------saza tumhe thaes pahauchane ki. Kya fark padta hai agar aaj hume uski sansey sunai nhi de rhi; agar kuch sun sakte hai to sirf ek naam------------SAMRAT …………….jo behoshi………………………"

Before mayank could complete he heard the rolling of engine n within fractn of second, samrat's bike passed them in high speed in the directn of gunjan's house.

Both of them also leaves………………….

hey guys.........wat do u wnt, shall i continue or stp it here..................do plz tel me. agar tum log nhi bologe to main continue nhi karungi................achcha lage ya bura plz do tel me watin.....................
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Posted: 15 years ago
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great os... i really luved it..!!! do continue soon... plzz.. n add me in ur PM list..!! seriously, it was awesome.. gr8 job.. 👏 👏 👏
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Posted: 15 years ago
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oh god yaar pls dont ask but continue without a second thought...its just amazing!!! u have gr8 talent..especially i love those os that are very much from the current story...and urs is like that only...i even loved ur last one as well...and this time around didn't want to leave such a beautiful story without a comment!! it was just superb!!!
***claps!!!***~~~

and ya pls tell me your good name frnd...so that i can call u like that only...oks!!!
take care
malika

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Countinue countinue Pls and pm me when you do
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awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee yaar
plzzzzzzzzzz continue i wanr to read more plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz continue it
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ok friendz so me bck with the lst prt-----------------thnx for ur lovely support...................so here's the end u all were watin for................n joy

On his wa to gunjan's house samrat is not in his normal state of mind…………………..he cnt think of ne thin else, only the wrds of mayank are buzzin like humin bees……………………….."kya fark padta hai gunjan k hone ya na hone se………………………….dhoka usne tumhare khushi k liye kyun na di ho……………….lst 2 days se bina kuch khaye saza de rhi hai tumhe thaes pahauchane ki……………………………uski sansey bhi hume sunai nhi de rhi………………………………….."

Scene: drawin room of bhushan house……..diya n uday sittin on sofa while nupur is walkin in tension………………………..she looks at the door steps………."tum! Tum yahan kya lene aaye ho ab, ha bolo?" nupur shouts. Without sayin a single wrd the person comes inside and asks diya, "candy, gunjan kahan hai? Kya hua hai use? Kaisi hai wo?", without sayin a single wrd diya pionts out to gunjans room………..answerin samrat's queries with a single gesture……….samrat runs to meet gunjan, his chashmish .

As he is abt to enter the room, somethin stops him……………….he finds some familiar faces present inside-------------bui, suhani n raj. Samrat is shocked to find suhani sitting at bui's feet with closed hand as if beggin for somethin…………….."bui plz plz aisa mat kijiye…………bhai ka isme koi dosh nhi hai. Plz aap gunjan ko moraena wapas mat leke jaiye. Agar………..agar gunjan chali gayi to fir bhai…………bhai zinda nhi rahe payega, gunjan uski zindegi hai…………"

"ha ha , isiliye to wo uski jaan lena chahata hai", bui sternly replies.

"nhi bui aap galat soch rhi hai……….samrat ne……."raj tries to say somethin but is stoped. "tu rahene de babloo, aakhir mumbai aake tu bhi badal gaya na………….in do bhai bahenone mera hi pariwaar mila tha kya…………..jab se humare zindegi mein aaye hai sab kuch ashubh hi ashubh ho raha hai……….."

Suhani standin up , rubbin her tears, "thik hai bui, agar aap ko yehi lagta hai to main wapas chali jaungi. Aur…………..aur fir kabhi bhi india wapas nhi aaungi apni yeh manhuss chehera lekar, lekin plz plz aap gunjan aur bhai ko alag mat kijiye, warna un dono mein se koi bhi jee nhi payega……………..wo dono ek dusre se bahaut pyaar karte hai…………….."

"achcha to ab tum hume bataogi k hume apni bachchi k sath kya karna chahiye aur kya nhi???"

"samrat…………" raj calls out as he finds him standin outside the room.

Bui anger gets doubled………….."ha ha aa jao bas tumhari hi kami thi………" then pointin out at unconscious gunjan…….."dekho dekho ek baar is masoom bachchi ki taraf, dekho kya haal bana diya hai tumne iska. Moreana mein to kitni bari bari batein kiye the na…………..tum sab se alag ho………….kabhi mat badalna…………..aur ab! Yeh silha diya hai tumne uske achchai ka? Uski zimmedari utrhai thi na…………aisey bnibhai jati hai zimmedari ha……..bolo…………"

Samrat cant say nethin, he goes n sits beside gunjan…………..his eyes turned red……….his vission gets blurred ……………….tears starts fallin breakin down all the embankments drenchin his whole cheeks……his neck ………………his shirt…….."chashmish………………………." the word vibrates in the room.

Bui irritatingly leaves the room, while raj tries to console samrat, "dc ne kahan k uski halat bahaut bigar chuki hai, subha se ek baar bhi hosh nhi aaya hai………sirf tumhara hi naam le rhi hai………….bukhar bhi bahaut hai…………….."

"sa………………am………………..ra………….pl…………e…….muh…..se………..naf………….rat…………..mat ………….karo……….plz……………i……….a……………sorry"---gunjan still utterin the same wrds……..

"nafrat , kaise chashmish, samrat nafrat karega aur wo bhi apne chashmish ko. Kya tum apne samrat ko nhi jaanti…..ha bolo…………….kya hua chashmish, tum kuch bolti kyun nhi………….tumhe pata hai na tumhari silence main bardasht nhi kar pati hu……………….agar tum mujhse naraz rahogi to fir main kahan jaunga…………plz chashmish plz apni aankhen kholo……………plz meri taraf dekho…………..(then just like a child, he holds raj's hand) adhiraj shayad chashmish mujhse naraz hai, pad tumse to nhi hai na………..plz plz tum use bulao na…………..dekho tum jo kahoge main karunga……………..agar tum mujhe basketball team se bahar bhi kar doge to bhi main kuch nhi kahunga………but plz plz meri chashmish ko mujhse baat karne bolona……" raj unable to say nethin, as he too have no wrds to say…………samrat runs to suhani standin at a distance, vigorously cryin at the condition of her bro………….he holds her arms n shakes her" suhani tum to uski achchi dost ban gayi thi na…………..tum bolo na……….plz………(he even goes down on his knees in front of suhani with folded hands)…………….main jaanta hu suhani main ek achcha bhai nhi hu…..aur nahi ek achcha boyfriend………..lekin tum to achchi ho na, wrld ki bst sister…….den plz plz suhani plz meri chashmish ko bolo na k wo mujhse baat karein, apna gussa thuk de……….i promise main fir kabhi uspar gussa nhi karunga , kabhi nhi chillaunga…………..wo jo bolegi jaise bolegi main sab kuch waise hi karunga…………….(he can say no more n strts cryin vigorously) pl………..z bolo na

He goes bck to gunjan , in the mean time bui gunjan's father, diya n nupur have already enterd the room

"chashmish, dekho main promise karta hu main fir kabhi tumhe tangh nhi karunga…………kabhi class bunk nhi karunga……………aur ha sidi se bhi nhi aaunga………..aur dekho maine suhani aur raj dono se maafi mang li hai…………..plz chashmish plz ab to maaf kar do………….yeh lo main apna kaan pakar leta hu.(n he holds both ears)

Tum mujhe daato, chillao………….lekin aise chup mat raho…………….

Uday comes ninforms dat the mayank n benji has turned with the dctr. Raj "samrat, dctr aaye hai use dekhne k liye , chalo hum neeche chalte hai"

N he holds him, takin him down……………everybody includin bui n gun's pa looks at samrat………….

Raj, diya, benji n uday sits in the drawin room downstairs while samrat goes to a room nearby………..the room where gunjan comes every day in the mornin………this room is mostly visited by gunjan n then nupur (only wen she is introuble). This room is actually decorated by gunjan------------it's her trempl, wher she came on the day of talent parade………..wen she came to knw abt the bet, wen she first realised her love for samrat…………..whem samrat went to jail……………n on that day as well when she came bck from moreana with samrat, to express her gratitude…………………………..

Now samrat is standin in gunjan's place all alone……………………………..

Raj, "yeh samrat kahan chala gaya?'

Uday "pata nhi……….." diya, "main dekhkar aati hu………" n she starts searchin for samrat. She finds her in the temple room……….."sammy tum yaha…………..aw…………sammy……..!! Yeh , yeh tum kya kar rahe ho???"

Samrat standin in front of the idol, his right palm touchin the flame of the acred aarti…………

"sammy yeh sab………….."

"ha candy……………aaj main bhi dekhna chahata hu k kaun zyaada ziddi hai, main ya chashmish. Main yahan aise hi khada rahunga aur tabtak nhi hilunga jab tak chashmish khud mujhe nhi pukarti………..aakhir mujhe bhi to punishment milni chahiye…………." diya leaves n informs about it to others…………..

Dc: strange, patient ki condition mein thodi changes aayi hai………….bukhar dheerey dheerey kam ho raha hai, lagta hai medicines work kar raha hai………"

Maynk: yes dctr apke prescribed kiye gaye har medicine humne sahi samay pad use dene ki koshish kiye hai……………(and he winks at benji who in return shows a thums up)

After about 15-20 min………samrat still standin the same was his hand has already started turnin blck from red……………but he is dogged determined…………….suddenly, "samraaaaaat!"

Somebody shouts out---------loud n clear, a very familiar voice………..the voice which samrat was eagerly watin to hear for so long.

Without wastin a moment, he runs to gunjan's room, n finds gunjan sitting on her bed lookin horrified………samrat rushes to her "chashmish"…………….."samrat……..samrat tum thik, to ho na………tumhe kuch…….."

"chashmish main bilkul thik hu…….mujhe kya hua hai………..ha" he says these words holdin her face with his palms. As gunjan tries to hold his hand, "aah" a short …………" kya hua samrat……."

"wo ………..wo kuch bhi to ………………."

But b4 he could complete gunjan already saw the burnt……….."ah…………samrat yeh……….(she forgot her weakness)…………yeh sa…………..tum bhi na itne laparwa…………"

"sach mein chashmish…………..peechle bada ghanto se khud bed pad leeti hui thi aur mujhse puch rhi ho k main thik hu k nhi????...........agar meri itni hi chinta hai to mujhe itni badi punishment kyun de rhi thi. Kya muhje tumpar gussa hone ka itna bhi haq nhi hai!!!.............agar phir kabhi tumne aisa…………."

"achcha saari galti meri hai…………aur yeh kya hai ha (showin his burnt area)……….tum mujhe padeshaan karna kab chodoge!"

"kabhi nhi………..samjhi"…………samrat replies stubbrnly……still nw everybody was smilin at this convo

Raj: arey yeh kya samrat kuch der pahele hi to tumne promise kiya tha ke gunjan ko fir kabhi nhi sataoge………." (he asks naughtily)

Samrat (stammers):…………ha…………a……….wo to maine use hosh me lane k liye ………….aise hi………..

Bui: kya aise hi…………..dekha bhaiya ………….dekha yeh ladka fir se jhut………..

Guns pa: ratna………..mujhe kuch bhi dekhne ki zarurat nhi hai…………….mujhe sab kuch moreana mein hi pata chal chuka tha………(every gets a big shock aw………..)……….isiliye maine gunjan ko samrat k bharose yahan bhej diya…………kyunki mujhe pata tha ki yeh dono ek dusre k bagar saas to le lenge pad jee nhi payenge………aur sach batau to yahan aake jab maine sab kuch suna to mujhe dukh nhi balki apni bachchi pad fakr mehsus hua…………..usne jo kiya bilkul sahi kiya….tha . Aur mujhe kisi se koi shikayat nhi hai…….tum bhi samrat ko maaf kar do ratna…………..aakhir yeh hamare hi bachche hai………..aur galti kis bachche se nhi hoti?

Samrat: (his head bent down) bui plz mujhe maaf kar dijiye………..main……………fir kabhi bhi aapko shikayat ka mauka nhi dunga.

Bui: maaf kar sakti hu pad ek shart par……….

"mujhe aaki har shart manzur hai" instant reply 4m samrat.

Bui: tum fir kabhi gunjan ko is tarha musibat mein nhi daloge aur nahi………..suhani ko daatoge

Samrat: thik hai bui…………….(in a weird tone) pad aapko to tangh kar sakta hu na!!

Bui: kya !!! Rukh badmash main abhi tujhe maza chakhata hu………..rukh

Samrat hides behind gunjan, while bui runs after him……………..everybody bursts into laughter.

hey friendz batana zarur ud kaisa laga......................so for nw bye ...............phir milenge ek aur naye os k sath kisi aur din til den.................njoy watchin mjht.

luv u all
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Posted: 15 years ago
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OMG dear

what an update
it was fabulas terrific awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeee end
really very well written
sana!!
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey guys wats up? kya ud itna bakwaas hai😭
plz do reply😭
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Posted: 15 years ago
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great update dear..!!!
it was awesomeeeee... luved it..!!!
omg.. in d end bui running after samrat n samrat hiding behind gunji... aawwww.. hw sweet...!!!
really well written.. keep it up..!!

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