The moment I saw you-Prida FF(Update pg 17 4/09/10

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It was raining and raining hard.The girl dressed in a pale blue kurti shivered.She wasn't used to standing in the rain and she wasn't used to being made to wait for anyone.She was Damini Gujral and most people bowed down to her.It had partially to do with the immense wealth and partially to her strong will.In a man's world she had made her name and to do it she had to be twice as strong and intelligent as any man.

They had all succumbed to her intelligence or to her charm.Every man who had crossed paths with her-except one.
Her heartbeat accelerated as she thought of him and for once she didn't resist the longing consuming her.

It had been raining when they first met.Raining and how'

The sky snarled as the huge burst of water hit the racing car.Damini gripped the steering wheel hard as she glanced at her sister who was grimacing at her.

"Are you sure this is a good idea,Avni?"
Avni looked at er pleadingly.
"I mean Avni,for god sakes its raining cats and dogs!What will we do in his farm all day?"
Avni looked panic stricken.
"Its Sameer's birthday and I want to be there with him."
Damini sighed.Sameer and Avni were best friends and frm the two times she had seen them together they seemed to be perfectly in harmony.At 22 Damini had learned how untrustworthy men could be but Sameer seemed different.

He was waiting for them in he drive in and as soon as Damini slowed the car Avni jumped out.She smiled as they greeted eachother.
" I will park the car and come back."she told them.

She drve faster as she moved forward ignoring the churning of the wheels in wet mud.Her mind was still on Avni's happy smile and then it happened.Her car skidded two feet to the left and before she knew it she lost control of the steering wheel.The tyres squealed underneath her.She clutched the wheel trying to steer it but the car was not obeying her anyone.With a crunching sound the car swerved and the landed with a huge splash.

Damini was screaming by this time.The moment the car stopped,she looked up,spluttering,What she saw was no less than a death trap.She had landed in admist gushing water.She rearranged herself to stare out.The car dipped further almost sinking down.With an effort she uprighted herself.
Donot cry!It wont help.

She stared hard around hard.There was nothing she could see except water.She knew there was no help possible.Only death.
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"That is almost sucidal."Sameer protested shaking his head.

Prithvi shook his brother's hand off .
"If I dont go it would be almost murder.I cant stand here watching someone die."
He took his shirt off and walked off.Sameer walked with him.
"I will come too,bhaiya"he insisted.
Prithvi shook his head.
"You stay with Avni."

He scrambled down the wet muddy patch a he descended slowly.He mde a last jump and the water splashed around him.Taking a deep breath he went underwater.The water was moving fat almost gusing around him.He fought with the torrents,determined to reach the girl.It was a few minutes before he saw the bright black frame of the car.He slowed down reaching the window.

The girl sat with her head resting on the steering wheel.He reached out and tapped on the window.She looked up,her eyes wide.
"Open the window"he mouthed.

She looked completely bemused.
"You crazy?"she mouthed back.
He grimaced.He hated when women took to thinking for themselves.
"Open the window or you die."he mouthed furiously.

There was a moment during which she simply stared at him.Then she rolled down the window.As she predicted the water rushed into the car.Prithvi almost smiled at the why-did-I-listen-to-a dumb-stranger look she gave him before it transformed into a scared look.He held out his hand and clutched her wrist.She gasped.
"Come on out of the window."he commanded.
She grabbed his hands with a strong fierce hold.He was surprised at her sure hold.Most girls he knew were completely pushover.She scrambled over to the windowand tried to heave herself out.
"If I die I will come back and kill you."she almost screamed.
He pulled her hard.
"This is the only you might survive.The only thing I could think of which could save you,"he replied.
She was halfway through when she screamed.
"Too bad it isnt working."
"Too bad you arent slim enough to get through the window."he retorted.

That earned him a if looks could kill expression.She pushed him hard and with a sudden leap she was in his arms.He circled her tiny waist and held her tight.Her hort wet hair were just below his chin.They smelled heavenly.
She was clutching the front of his shirt and breathing heavily.
"You okay?"he asked
She nodded and looked up.He stared at her.There was no trace of fear in her face now,no tears spilling down .It was amazing.The one thing he hated about woman was the amount of tears they spilled on every possible occassion.This girl fought with death and was still dry.
That made him stare as did her brilliant brown eyes and the soft lips.He shook his head.

They were still in mortal danger.They needed to swim back.He reluctantly let go of her and looked down of her.She still clutched his shoulder for support.
He asked slowly.
"Can you manage to swim?"
She lifted her chin and answered.
"Yes I can!Can you manage to swim?"she asked.

Prithvi had an urge to laugh.She was also offended at the thought of being helpless.She let go of him and starting swimming.Prithvi fell behind her.The currents were strong and Prithvi waited for the girl to give up.She had been through an ordeal and she would go into shock soon.

But she showed no sign of giving up.She fought the currents and only looked drained once they reached the shore.A strong independent woman.Prithvi thought approvingly.He jumped up the huge fallen tree and held his hand to help her.

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Damini took a deep breath.She was near the dry land finally but her limbs were giving up.Now that respite was near her body was giving up to exhaustion.She hardly had the strength to clutch the hand extended towards her.She held it firmly and waited as he pulled her up.Her feet skidded on the slightly slippery skin of the tree trunk and she toppled over.
Two strong hands steadied her.One went firmly against her waist and the other held her shoulder.
She looked up finally seeing him properly.It was a great mistake.She stared at his chocolate brown eyes staring intensely at her.His sharp features,a prominent jaw and something shifted within her.
There was an aura of masculinity about him which made her feel different.She stared at him as he stared back.Interestingly he found something fascinating about her too.

"Are you okay?"he finally asked.There was a husky note to his voice.She shivered and he pulled her closer.The hand near her shoulder brushed slightly at her cheeks.It was then she realised how closely they stood and how possessively his pam held her waist.

Her heart leaped up and she coloured.He watched her intently as the colour spread through her cheeks.His eyes softened and he looked down staring deep into her eyes.She felt unreal.
He placed feather-light fingers on her cheek.

"You are beautiful."he murmured.

She blushed furiously and jumped apart.What was she doing?Practically hugging a stranger and melting all inside because he was staring at her.
This was unacceptable behavior.
He moved closer to her again.She stepped back,staring at the leaves well above his head.
"I am sorry.."he said."I dnt know what I am doing.We just met and'"
She tried hard to bring the situation with her grasp.
"You should be sorry.You made my car sink."

He smirked.

"I also saved you.'
She folded her arms trying to ignore the current that swept through her at his smirk.
"That's a moot point.Anyways.you have to pay me back for my car .I hope you do something other than saving random strangers cuz that was hell of an expensive car."
She knew she was blabbing but her brains seemed disfunctional.

"I am Prithvi Saxena."he said

"Oh'Saxena as in Sameer's Saxena's brother.?"she asked.

"You know him.?"he asked,wanting to see her lips move again.
She nodded.
"He is my sister's best friend.He is adorable."she said with a sweet smile.

"It runs in the family."he said,feeling obligated to move but wanting to stay here forever.

"I am Damini Gujral."she said shyly.
He grinned."I know."

She shivered in the rain,feeling as though she had lived through that day again.It had started that day-the longing that consumed her even now. Do let me know what you think😛
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey that was really good
amazingly written👏👏👏
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really good
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It has been six months since that day but everything about the day was burned down in her memory.The birthday party was a blur.She could only remember the electric chemistry that had existed between herself and Prithvi even when they stood several feets away from each other.She remembered how it was impossible to stop her eyes from turning towards the corner he stood every few minutes.Whenever she looked at him,she felt his eyes on her and everytime their eyes met a hint of a smile crossed over his perfect face.

They hadnt spoken though and as she stood with Avni several hours later in the drive in waiting for Sameer to bring over his car,the horrible truth sank in.It was possible that they might never speak again.They didn't belong to the same social circle neither did they live in the same city.Sameer and Avni could meet because they both studied in University of Toronto and were leaving for Canada soon.

It might be years until I see him again.The thought was like a physical stab.He didn't seem to care.He didn't even come to say goodbye.

"Oh no!"Avni exclaimed suddenly interupting Damini's depressing thoughts.

"What happened?"Damini asked trying to act normal.

" I left my handbag inside."Avni said turning back.

"Don't worry.I will get it."Damini murmured.She turned back and entered the living room.Avni's black handbag was resting on the couch.She smiled politely at Mrs.Saxena sitting at the other end of the room.She crossed over to the couch.This part of the living room was in semi-darkness.She sighed heavily.He had stood here for so long.

You are a sucessful business woman.Stop acting like a teenager.
She had picked up the handbag and turned around when someone pulled her suddenly into the alcove.Before she could progress the fact that she had been almost assaulted,her back was pressed against the wall and she was looking into his eyes.

He was standing close to her,very close.She could feel his breath caressing her cheeks. A rational part of her was protesting against such intimacy with a stranger.It didn't however feel strange!
It felt good.It felt right.
She realised this with a blush.His eyes softened again as he took in her flush.

"I love it when you do that."he murmured softly,his eyes still holding hers.

Then it struck her.
"Your mom.She is sitting right across the room.She may…"she spluttered.

He smirked and leaned towards her.He reached at the switch over her head and turned it off.They were standing in complete darkness now.The fact that she could see him didn't help much.
Somehow the darkness made her more aware of him.It seemed every cell in her body was highly aware that he stood a bare inch away from her.The need to move closer flooded through her.She blushed hard scolding herself for such wanton thoughts.

Then fortunately he spoke.She concentrated on his words only.
"I know this is crazy…but I need to see you again,"he said.

Crazy but perfect.

Normally she would scoffed at the idea of feeling the compulsion to meet someone but now she knew she had to meet Prithvi again.She didn't want to…she needed to.
"I need to see you again too."she had murmured.

They had exchanged numbers and for the next few days Damini lived in the constant expectation of his calls.But they never came…nor did he made any attempt to see her.Six months had passed since then and Damini had promised herself to move on.

Hence when her mother told her to meet Inder few months ago,she had agreed.Inder was a nice guy,adored by her family and who adored her.He would keep her happy.Yet she sometimes felt like she was being disloyal to someone.And that was extremely silly.

Meeting with Prithvi was like a beautiful dream and Damini wanted to think of the brief acquaintance as just that.-a dream.But she couldn stop herself from spending every waking moments thinking of them.Nor could she stop the dreams she had about him every night.She measured every action of Inder's with what she expected Prithvi to do and she hated herself for it.

There was no escaping Prithvi now…yet she was determined to move on.So when Inder proposed she said yes.They had become engaged two days ago and then…

Damini Gujral to wed Inder Bajaj!

The city of Mumbai experienced a grand treat yesterday when business tycoon Damini Gujral got engaged to Inder Bajaj.The engagement party was an affair the city isnt likely to forget in a while….

"I simply love it when they praise us soo much."Roshni had chirped excitedly.

Damini smiled at her excitement.She was glad that she atleast had Roshni.Avni had been unable to come as it was the middle of her semester.Then the phone had rung.Damini looked down.The number was unknown.

She clicked on the accept button.

"Hello…"she said.
There was a short silence.
"Damini.."a voice murmured.The voice was as familiar as though she had heard it every single day of her life yet she had heard it only once six months ago.

She had the urge to slam the phone down but something stopped her.

"Its been so long hasn't it.?"he continued.Inexplicably she felt tears trailing down her cheeks.

So long have I waited to hear your voice.So long I have waited to know that it wasn't only a dream,that you exist.So long you have been....

"What do you want?"she snapped.
Another silence followed.
"I want to meet you."

"I DON'T WANT TO."she almost screamed.
Didn't she want to see him again.Didn't she want to look into those chocolate brown eyes.
"I will wait for you at 4 at the Cuppa Coffee."he had said.

That had been it.He had known she would come.And she knew she had no choice but to come.Now she stood here waiting for someone who would undoubtedly cause a ruckus in her life.Yet she was here….

And it was raining as it had then.Was this a premonition that this would end as that did?
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Posted: 15 years ago
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thx neha
im reading it
comment soon
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wow very sweet
he is such macho man
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey naha continue soon yaar
plz if u hav time plz write more
it contain so emotion i feel
very nice
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Hi neha ,

a beautiful story!! amazing writing!!!!!!! please keep it up ..
and if u are making a PM list then plz add my name in it !!

Thanks for doing a wonderful job
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amazingly written.. great story.. update soon...
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Hey Neha, u have got to keep this going!! Loved both the parts, u sure r a nice writer!!
do continue very soon..
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