Mauka Bhi Dastoor Bhi Premeer One Shot :)

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Hey Guys... well I have not been writing for a while, all thanks to my semester exams and they are not over yet 😔. But this is one piece of my so called Bakwaas which was frolicking in and out of my brain while I was revising my stuffs.The current track of the show is beyond pathetic and therefore this one I wrote is pretty light headed stuff. I dont know , what I wrote coz I did not edit it. but one thing's , I really like the way the scene started and proceeded. Maybe I ended it little abruptly. Now its time for you people to decide what it is really like. Enjoy!!!

Heer stood by their room's window, watching the rain. She loved rains; she loved the rhythmic pour nature showered the earth with. She loved the wet, cool texture of the rain. To enjoy it fully, she inclined her face towards the window, to feel the droplets over her face.

"Bheegi Bheegi Raaton Mein

Meethi Meethi Baaton Mein

Aisi Baarsaton Mein

Kaisa Lagta hai?"

She heard him sing and felt his arms enclosing her waist, resting his head on her crook at the same time.

She smiled and let his name out through her mouth,

"Premmmm…."

Oh! How he loved the way she played with his name. In answer he just let out a "huh?"

"Kya kar rahe ho?, she asked turning her head little, so that she could face him.

"Kya? Don't tell me tumhe mera gana pasand nahi aya", he pretended a pout and Heer pinched his nose in answer.

"Ow!! That hurts Heer", he let go her waist, rubbing his nose.

"Deserves you.", she smirked

"and why is that?", he questioned.

"Kabhi bhi romantic ho jate ho isiliye", Heer stated in a matter of fact tone.

"Kabhi bhi kaha?", he raised his eyebrow. "Aj to mauka bhi hai, aur dastoor bhi hai", he let out those words huskily and started inching closer to her, which she was not appreciating at the moment.

"Prem", she moaned in defense as she found herself being slowly being engulfed by him.

"Aj mausam ki pehli barish hai", he stated looking straight into her eyes.

"h…ha to?", she squeaked nervously.

"Abhi raat bhi hai", his lips curled slightly with mischief.

"Ha..hai to?", she shivered.

"Aur ghar pein koi bhi nahin hai', he smiled triumphantly.

"Ba…ba..bachche hai na?", she defended stammering.

"Aur bachche bhi so rahe hai", he kept his tone indifferent.

"ttt…to?", she spoke in barely inaudible voice.

"To…", he stressed the words, bringing his face near her.

Heer was about to close her eyes, accepting her defeat from her lovely husband. When her sight turned pitch black, followed by a roaring thunder.

Letting out a huge breath she mumbled quickly "Prem light chali gayi, let me bring candles", but little was her husband in a mood to let her go.

Prem yanked her back to the current position

"This one's just like a cherry on the top", he huskily replied , to which Heer turned bright red and she could bet that Prem could see her blush even in the dark.

Slowly he tightened his hold and brought his face near hers.

"Mami?"

Prem and Heer jerked off nervously and looked towards their door. They could make out through the darkness Tanu and Vikas standing cuddling a pillow and a teddy each.

Straightening herself, she made her way towards the kids and asked them with concern "Kya hua? Tanu Vikas?"

"Mami humhe darr lag hai, hum idhar so jaye?", Tanu pleaded with Vikas and in answer Heer brought them both into their room and tucked them into their bed.

Prem who was still digesting the whole thing, changed his facial expression every now and then from shock, to disappointment, to frustrated and what not,

"Prem?", Heer called him, making him look towards her

"Tum Tanu ke bagal mein so jayo, mein Vikas ke bagal mein so jati hu, I hope that's fine,", Heer stated and slid herself inside the blanket beside Vikas.

"Absolutely fine!!!", he grunted and laid down beside Tanu.


Was it good enough???? Do let me know....😃


Be honest

With Love
Priyo😃


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sweta2005 thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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its awesomeeeeeeee too cute part loved it immensely.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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It is really goodd.. Write a continious story u r a great writer
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ahahahaha that was so cute! Tannu and Vikas are just the most adorable little things ever! *pinches their cheeks*
I loved the way you wrote this. The light-heartedness, the romance, the bad timing entry of the kids, Prem's annoyance...It was so perfect!
Now go back to studying and all the best for the rest of your exams! 🤗
Love,
Bhav (:
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow..such a beautiful one-shot Priyo..I so miss your one-shots..and I so hate your semester exams ..I hate them more than you do coz they make me wait for your one-shots for so long..great work once again..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thanks guys 😊..will reply soon...

and Bhav ..thanks a lot..
Seriously xams r getting annoying....

Bulbul
Even I miss you too...




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Posted: 16 years ago
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OYE HOYE
Awesum Superb Mind Blowing
Just wish to c it really onscreen
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Awwww, Priyo!!!! I miss your one-shots!!! *hug*
Hun, that was adorable!!! I love it when the kids come interupt when Prem si trying to romance with Heer!! Prem's after expressions and stuff is so funny!!! 🤣 He is always so dissapointed!!! 🤣
The ending wasn't abrupt! *mock glare* It was really cute!! Bechara Prem!!!! 😆 I liked the beginning.............. i like anything with rain actually!!! 😆
Don't worry hun, i got exams right now too!!! But this was a great distraction!! *thumbs up* Loved it!!! Can't wait till your exams are over and you get back to those amazing ff's!!!
Love you! *hug*
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thanks Maddy and thank you everyone 😊, will reply to your comments soon.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey........ that was awesome!!!
u should reallyyyyy continue this! prettyyy plzz with cherry on top!...
waiting for more!!
-Luv Pari

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