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meftal

@meftal

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Posted: 16 years ago

#11

sorry friends i think i failed to show good romance b/w RK,but plz give ur precious comments

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dinky_05

@dinky_05

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Posted: 16 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: meftal
sorry friends i think i failed to show good romance b/w RK,but plz give ur precious comments

No dear don't even think like that😲............sabka aapna aapna style hota hain........n i liked ur style .....very simple n cute 😊.....the way u narrated all the short stories👏.....i liked all of them😃

Now my precious comments 😆........well i liked the whole conversation b/w R , S and N.......u've reminded us lovely ki english aur kullu ki vo baate😆.......n last but not least..........romance b/w R K 😳........hmmmmmmm........tum to chupi rustam nikli 😉

Edited by dinky_05 - 16 years ago

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meftal

@meftal

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Posted: 16 years ago

#13

thanx dinky but i am still feeling that something is missing in the story

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Bonai

@Bonai

Voyager

Posted: 16 years ago

#14

this time i think i m nt very late. in this story i like the 1st part most, specially kullu raj's conversation, its hilarious, u kept intact the mannerisms also, good effort i must say and also raj sanjay's convo, par 2nd part me Kranti ki baate jab woh raj ke saath khidki ke pass thi very unlikely to Kranti's character. fir bhi we can think that raj aur uski family ke pyaar pane ke baad kranti bhi pehle se kafi soft ho gayi in nature. overall bahat achha laga, dont say u r not a writter, i think others will be agree with me u wrote all the short stories very well. aur kabhi kabhi romance thora kam bhi ho to chalta hai, achha family package tha. 👍🏼

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meftal

@meftal

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Posted: 16 years ago

#15

thank u very much bonai,u r right in 2nd part i lacked something b/w RK,main achhe se explain nahi kar paai. rahi kranti ki baat to unka sirf jaghda hua tha,baki wo ek doosre ke saath khush hain,sach kahun to mujhe is post me maza nahi aaya.

Edited by meftal - 16 years ago

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sasha722

@sasha722

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Posted: 16 years ago

#16

sorry 4 late reply
love is blind u can reach at any length
just 2 b with ur loved ones
it so clearly shown
lovely sweet con bet R & K
even Kallu so sweet
best S is always hilarious
keep writing