Hum dil de chuke sanam-fanfic 4 KA - Page 6

OMG I did not read this till now. It is a lovely story - you have such talent. You should take up writing short stories and have them published.
Yes don't let it have a tragic ending.

Melissa snap!
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Esti aunty

Part-24.....pammi,kavya,slok
dance:chalak{Devdas}.K faints
vomiting blood. P
brings a Dr. Dr:I'm
sorry,K's condition is serious. P
was upset.she looks after him
well. K:pammi,why r u
doing this? P:why,u can't
tolerate my presense? K:ur
effort will b waste.that's why
I'm upset.i no that I
won't liv long. K:pammi!I no
that u r talking like this
due 2 ur hatred 4 me.i'm bad
no. K:I don't think u r
bad. P was surprised:then?
K:I feel that u r nice.
P:ur hatred 4 me has gone? K
smiles:yes. P:now what's
ur feelings 2wards me? K:I
feel a liking 2wards u. P
was very happy. K:if I did'nt
no anjali,I wud've luved
only u.but anjali is my
everything.so plz don't expect
anything from me misti. P
cries. K thinks:the hearts
of both anjali & pammi r
paining due 2 me. K
dreams both A & P dancing 2
the song Dolare….
K:pammi,I want 2 go 2
anjali. P::no
kavya.now it's the time 2
rest. K:why shud I
rest?whats the use?bcoz my
death is near. P:plz don't
tell like that. K:but
that's the truth.let me go.i
promised her.if I don't keep
my word,again I'l b a
cheater 4 her. P weeps.
K gives a letter 2 her:giv
this 2 slok. K goes. S
cumes 2 P's
house. S:call kavya.i've
brought licker 4 him. P:kavya
is too weak 2 hav even a
drop.if he drink again,he'l
die.do u want 2 see his
horrible death? S was
speechless. P:kavya went
away. She gives that letter.S
reads it. P:whats written?
S:that he's going 2 see
anjali.he has written that its
anjali's bead necklace
that's giving him the strength
2 liv.i'm getting tensed
thinking about him.i only
destroyed kavya by giving
poison. He breaks the glass
bottle of licker & wounds
his hand. P:r u mad?kavya wil
become sad if he cumes 2 no
that u did this. P puts
medicine on his wound. K
looks at the bead necklace
given by anjali.the beads fall
down.K takes all the beads
2gether & puts it in the
pocket.   ;

u really write well 😊 ..cant wait for the next part 😳

Can't wait for the next episode - keep writing!

Esti aunty

Part-25....Kavya was really tired.he gets tensed:oh
god,wil I b able 2 reach
anjalu? He reached near
A's house .he faints.
yug;s mom cums 2
A & Y:1 guy has fallen b4 our
house.he's almost
dead I feel.he was drunk. A
was shocked.she thinks:wil
he b kavya? A:who is he?whats
his name? M:no idea.
A:had he worn a bead necklace?
M:no.had worn a small
gold chain & a ring.i think
he's rich. A thinks:if he
has'nt worn the bead
necklace,then he won't b kavya. She
was relieved. M:but ppl
found sum beads from his
pocket. A was shattered.tears
cum from her eyes:that's
given by me.he's kavya. Y
was shocked. 1 servant
cums:that person is not
dead.we made sure.he is
breathing. A was
relieved:let me go & see him. M:why
?no need. A:yug,plz let
me go.kavya is my life.
mom was shocked. mom becomes
angry:no u can't go 2 see
ur lover. A:plz mummiji..M:u r
married.but still u want
2 b with ur lover? A:plz…its
4 me A traveled such a
long distance eventho he's
sick. M:no u can't go. A
was determined:no,I've 2 go.
A runs. M:yug,catch
ur wife.she is mad. Y did'nt
move. M:what kind of
husband u r? mOm tells the
servant:catch
anjali.don't allow her 2 go.
Yug:no,don't b an
obstacle.let anjali go.otherwise
she'l die. mom was
stunned. kavya moves his
lips:anjali...A reaches near
K.she weeps:kavya! A keeps
his head on her
lap:kavya....K:anjali,I came 4
u.i've 2go soon. A
cries:don't go kavya.
Song:kabhi alvida na kehna……. A's
tears fall on his face. Yug
cumes & snatches A's
mangalsuthra.A was shocked. Y
wipes her sindoor.A was
stunned. Y:these were the
obstackles of ur luv.that r
detached from u.u r needed
most 4 A.not 4 my
son.anjali...kavya is like this bcoz of
me.bcoz of my
relationship with u.now that's
over.go with kavya. A
was surprised:yug! Y:yes.i'll
help u 2 giv him
the best treatment.i'm sure
that kavya wil cum back 2
life.bcoz u both r made 4 each
other. A:than ks a lot
yug.i'vent seen such a gr8
person in my life.u used
2 call me Parvathi Devi.but
the real God is urself. Y
smiles:funny. A:I promise
that tho our relationship is
over,I'l b ur subham's mom's
4ver. Y smiles:thanku
anjali.but our relationship is not
over.i'l remain as ur
best friend. A smiles. After
sum months:anjali in the
pooja room is praying:kabhi
khushi kabhi gham…..Sindoor
is seen on her 4head.kavya comes
near her with a smiling
face & prays.A puts the prasad
into his mouth. The bell
rang.A goes & opens the
door.they were surprised 2 see
pammi there. A:pammi! K:what a
gr8 surprise!
P smiles:I came 2 see u both.u
both rock 2gether.
A-K smile. P:it's a gr8
pleasure that God made u
both 1. A:cum,hav prasad.
They giv pammi a gud
treat. B4 going P:Best wishes
4 ur happy married
life. K:thanks a lot pammi.
A:u've 2 cum again. P
smiles & goes. A-K look at
each other & smile.
K:I want 2 liv seeing u
always. A smiles:finally god
heard our prayers. K smiles
& hugs A. THE END

aww it was so sweet 😳
great story!! 😊

awsomely sweet.write more fanfics pls 😃

omg! I cant believe how wonderful u r at fanfics! I have read all the parts b4! jus read the last parts now! its awsome! sorry I did not comment! I actually comented on it, but it got deleted coz I exceeded the number of posts n I couldnt post a reply! soo sorry huni! ur story is very sweet!

n the best part is, u potrayed the end very realistically and beautifully! where all characters r happy! I particularly liked yug's character! 👏 👏
ur characterisations r very gud! try be a writer or director in future! u will surely make it! the dialogs r soo simple and natural! 👏

gr8 job! keep it up! keep writing fanfics! 👏 😳

wow, awesome 👏 👏
sorry for not replying earlier, but i was reading the fanfic everyday 😳
gr8 work done, we want more 😳 😛 😃

😭 I;m in tears of joy Jas 😳 , you had me on tender hooks right til the end as very passing chapter seemed to confirm tht his fate would be the same as Devadas's and i'm am so thrilled how you cleverly veered the story to make all the characters content with their lives!! 😃
I knew Yug would be the saint in this story as you hinted early on in the story of his understading and honest nature! 😊 That is the sign of a gr8 writer..one who plans a story so knows where it will end before even wrking on the middle!! 😉
Neelu is rite, the ending was so beautiful...you made it even more memorable then the oringinal! 😆
Your imaginative flare for screenplays is gr8..you could easily wrk for Ekta's creative team!! 😊