ss:kal kisne dekhapt2pg2. note on pg3

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hey guys this is my first ss. i have never written anythin but now afetr readin all of your ff's and ss i want to try writin.so plz forgive me if any mistakes.this story is real and is not fiction.its related to someone's life.
hope u all like it.today i m just protaryin the characters and the update u wil get soon.
JAI WALIA: he is a common man comin from a poor background and is 37yrs old.he loves his family alot and is very attached to his niece Anu.he is very carin and fun lovin person. he has two wish in his life :
one to buy a flat of his own and other to see his son become somethin in life.he is everyone's fav.
BANI WALIA:she is jai's wife. 30 yrs old. loves her children alot and is very supportive.
NACHIKET WALIA: he is an elder brother to jai and he is from middle class background and tries to help his younger brother in every possible way . he has two sons. he is very kind , carin, and can do anything for his family.he has taken over everythin after his father's death and today is more like a father to evryone than as brother.
PURVA WALIA: she is nachiket's wife. very strict to her sons but loves them alot and has a very good relationship with her devar jai.
JIGYASA BALI: she is married to a NRI. she is jai's elder sis and is very kind, carin and many a times borin too. but she loves her younger brother alot . she has one daughter and she loves her alot.
ADITYA BALI:he is jigyasa's husband and became a good friend of jai. he loves his daughter to the core and fulfills all her wish.he is a retired businessman and now lives in india with his family.he is from middle class family.
JASVANT AND NIKITA MEHTA: nikita is jai's younger sister and jasvant is her husband.they have one daughter of 5 yrs of age named vidhi and a son of 2 yrs named divya.
MINIT AND HITANSH WALIA: minit and hitansh are jai and bani's sons. they are 11yrs and 5 yrs respectively.they love their father alot and can't stay without him.
minit studies in 5th grade and hitansh is in 2nd grade.
ANU BALI:16yr old. loves her jai mamu alot. shares all her secret with only two people in her life that is her jai mamu and her best friend pooja. bubbly girl who always keep talkina nd so her mamu calls her badboli.as she is the only girl she is loved by everyone in her family and spoilt rotten by her jai mamu.
she loves her parents alot. and studies in 11th garde. she wants to become a doctor.
BHAVIK WALIA AND JINIT WALIA: bhavik and jinit are nachikets and purva's sons. bhavik is studious where as jinit hates studies. bahvik is 17yrs old and is in 12th grade.Anu and bhavik are in same classes(tutions) but ofcourse diff std. jinit is in 9th grade and he too is very talkitive and very innocent .
KRISHNA WALIA: she is jai's, nachiket's, jigyasa's and nikita's mother.her husband passed away wen nikita the youngest of all was 3yrs old . from that day she has never seen happiness in her life and wen there was happiness comin God took that away from her.(this u will get to know in the updates). she stays with her elder son nachiket.
ok these all are the characters. jai walis and nachiket walis do not live in same house they live differently but they live near only.
plz tell me if i shld continu or start to write or not.
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lovelyyrose thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
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chararcters have been well portryaed waiting for the story
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey guys

64 views and i reply
shld i start the story or shld i not
plz i want to know
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey jinal
do cont soon
the intro of characters is good
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey jinal...
i liked the characters....
do cont.soon....
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Hi everyone here's my first part hope u all like it. I know its very borin part but plz bear with it

At Bali's house:

"Mom, hey u there. Mom I am going to mamu's place." Said anu as she entered her house.

"arre an pehle muh haath toh dhole . u just came from college and tell me hw was ur college and r u selected in ur homibaba project? And haan I forgot to tell u that u have to go to ur massi's place today as vidhi has some project and u have to complete it"

"Aah mom, wats this now I m not going there tell massi to come at mamu's place. And as it is I m tired today and I m not at all in a mood to do her silly project. Can't massi do that herself? And rahi baat project ki toh sabse pehle I'll tell mamu then pooja and then u all." shouted anu from her room while dialing her mamu's no.

Suddenly someone comes and takes away the phone from her hand.

"Dad, oh hi how are u dad and give me my phone back. I want to call mamu and tell him that I m coming there." said anu while trying to get the phone from her dad's hand.

"jigyasa I think this girl is getting spoilt everyday by her mamu.tell ur brother to stop spoiling her as she has grown up now and is no more a kid." said aditya

"dad I know I m grown up and I m not spoilt by my mamu. Its just that mamu loves me more and I love him too. Ok so now give me my mobile back I want to call mama."

Aditya: no arguing anu didn't ur mo told u that u have to go to ur massi's place for the project.?

Anu: (sulkin) I told u na I want to go to my mamu and I will go there only no where else and

Tring tring………

Anu: dad that's my mob give me back I know its mamu

Aditya:( picking up the phone) hello. Hi jai. How are u?

Jai: I m fine. And aditya where is Anu?

Anu(snatching the phone) hello mamu its me and I m here only its dad who took my mobile and on top of that mom is not letting me come to ur house. U tell mom to allow me. Here I m givin it to mom.(showin her tongue to her mom)

Jigyasa: ( in an angry manner ) Anu!!!!!

Jai: arre badboli ruk zaraa. Kya hua aaram se bata. And tell me how was ur project and r u selected?

Anu; mamu I will tell only when I come to ur house. I want to tell u a lot of things happened in the college. So u plz tell mom and haan vidhi has got some project from her school and massi wants me to do it so can I call them there plz mamu.

Jai: arre yeh bhi koi poochne ki baat hain . ok come fats and u will have ur lunch and dinner here only and I will call nikita then. Now u ok na? ab koi problem toh nahi.

Anu: who toh thik hain mamu but mom won't allow me to come there. She wants me to go to nikita massi's pace and I don't want to go there.

Jai: ok give the phone to ur mom.

(anu hands the phne to her mom)

Jigyasa: hello jai. How r u ?

Jai: hi di. Di I m fine and everyone is fine. Send Anu here why r u stopping her from comin let her come here and hann she will have her lunch and dinner here only and u and jiju are also coming here.

Jigyasa:arre no jai I have to go out with ur jiju to buy some household stuff and on top of that anu has to do vidhi's project so she won't be able to come there. And plz there is no need for dinner and all.

Jai: arre no di its absolutely fine. Aur waise bhi nachiket and all are comin here for dinner so y don't u and nikita come here we will have a small get together and even bani will like it.

Jigyasa: but.. jai won't it be so many people

Anu: don't worry mamu we will come and I will surely help bani mami she won't mind as I comin there its only my mom who has problems .

So my mamu I keeping the phone I 'll be there after lunch ok bye.

(and cuts the phone)

Jai: arre Anu…. Hello… hello..

Yeh Anu bhi na phone rakh diya

Bani: toh wat did they say are they comin here?

Jai: haan they are but they will have only dinner

Ok later at 3:00pm anu is at her mamu's place

Anu is helping minit with maths while Jai is resting .

Anu: mamu come here plz I have some doubt.

Bani: Anu wats the prob tell me I'll help u let ur mama rest for few min he is not feelin well today.

Anu: (now panickineend to what happened to mamu?

Mamu ur fine na ? did u want me to call a doctor?

Jai getting up from his place tries to go near Anu but then suudeenly

Anu : (screaming) mamu!!!!!!!!!!!!

Plz leave comments and tell me whether I should continue or not.

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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey jinal that was such a sweet part
anu really loves her mamu aka jai an lot
kitni utavli hai yeh aanu apne mamu ke ghar jane ke liye
plzzzzzzzzzzz cont soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey hun.. that was a really good part.. continue sooon.. ofcourse u should contine.. wow wat happened to jai yaar.. jai behosh hogaya kaam kar kar ke.. bechara.. i love it hoe everyone loves eachother here.. lol.. anywayz conitnue soooon..
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Posted: 17 years ago
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jin i read the introduction....now i need to go have breakfast the will be back for commenting and readding the first part...but i realy love this JB married and two sons bonus mai..wow lol..
mina
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Posted: 17 years ago
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yaar really love the first part
its cute homely thing
wait what happened to jai
cont soon

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