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The entries are in next 4 posts, 10 each for ease of discussion and quoting.
Entry 1
Arjuna (in battelfield) : Jayadratha, you will be killed! If it doesn’t happen before sunset, my life is forfeit! "
Jayadratha: laughing (leaves, hide)
Krishna (shield sun).
Jayadratha (appeared).
Arjuna: Jayadratha, you killed my son!"
Arjuna's arrow severed his head, fell into Jayadratha's father's lap, to earth, broke into thousand pieces.
Entry 2
Supine Bhishma rebukes Shrikrishna.
Bhishma:“Vasudev. Unarmed Karna was killed. A pious, kind soul! What kind of Dharmayuddha are you doing?”
Krishna: “He would otherwise kill Arjuna. I was left with no other choice. This battle would have ended with all purposes lost. Karna who is now a martyr, would then be biggest villain!”
Entry 3
Sanjaya tells Dhritarashtra.
Mice: "Be our gracious protection,virtuous cat."
Cat: Granted! Obey me! Carry me to riverside!"
(Cat grows fat)
Mice: "Uncle‘s getting stronger, we‘re getting less."
Dindika: "Go to riverside, will follow with uncle".
(Mice at riverside, confused)
Kilika: Uncle‘s a hypocrite! He‘s our enemy!"
(Mice run away)
Entry 4
Bhishma Rebuking Vidura for Mahabharat.
Bhishma: “Why aren’t you stopping this? This battle arises from all personal agendas. Amba wants to kill me, Drupad is avenging Dronacharya! Draupadi wants battle as her revenge. Are all these conflicts mounting to Great Mahabharat? What happens to innocent soldiers and their families? What is the message to humanity?”
Entry 5
Krishna: "Radhe! I have to leave you to fulfill my Dharma and Karma."
Radha: "Yes Krishna, the day finally came when I have reached the last step which is your bhakti."
Krishna: "Radhe, Your bhakti'll be greater than my karma. The world'll always take your name before mine."
Entry 6
Hidimba: He is huge, almost like a giant. But he is so beautiful. I can sense that behind that exterior was a kind and giving heart. I want him. I need him. And I will fight the world to be with him. Bhrata, I wish to marry him.
Entry 7
Bharat, created with love, and marred by rejection of the very father he adored. The boy’s heart quivered seeing his mother’s tears.
Bharat: Your love is enough for me, Maa. We don’t need him. Gods are a witness to this; they won’t spare Hastinapur for making a mother cry.
Entry 8
In the forest.
Arjun: Are you certain this is the right path?
Bhima: Definitely.
Nakul : Nope, we're definitely lost.
Yudhishthir: I trust Bhima.
Sahdev : You think he knows where we're heading?
Yudhishthir: I wouldn't go that far.
Nakul : We aren't, we've circled this tree thrice.
Entry 9
After the bloodthirsty battle of Kurukshetra ended, final rites were being given.
Krishna: Parth, Karna was your eldest brother, he too deserves a shraddhanjali. Don’t hesitate from your dharma.
Arjun: Madhava!!! My dharma was to give my life for my brother, not taking it!!! I’m a collapsed, defeated man today.
Entry 10
Lachit : Mother, you taught me to be brave, but if I lose like Abhimanyu?
Nageshwari: He didn't die due to courage but because of incomplete knowledge .
Lachit: But didn't his bravery get wasted?
Nageshwari: No, his courage is the reason even his failure is remembered with dignity, son.
Entry 11
Gandhari: Why have my children failed me? Why has my womb failed me? It has been two years. Two long years of wait, two years of agony. But my Swaami's patience is dwindling. I will die rather than fail him. The thought of failing me haunts me and kills me.
Entry 12
Bhima was blessed by Nagas, and he tormented the Kauravas in mischief. Arjun enjoyed the view from atop a tree.
Yudhishthir: Stop, Bhimsena! You've gone insane with power, this isn't you!
Bhima: Of course, I have. Have you ever tried going insane without power? It's bland and boring.
Entry 13
Kunti: I am sorry, putri. I did not know it was you.
When a mother loses a son, her only desire is to see the rest of them together. To never lose them. I just acted like a mother.
On the last day of the war, Draupadi finally understood Kunti.
Entry 14
A Clever Move.
(Draupadi is angrily removing her jewellery with maidservant's help)
Maid : "My brother says wise never get angry !"
Draupadi: " How can Parth bring another queen to Indraprastha??"
Maid: "What if she's not a queen but a humble servant seeking refuge in your lotus feet?"
Draupadi (Smiling) : " As clever as Govind, Subhadra !!!"
Entry 15
After the War.
Panchaali walking. Uttariya caught in doorway yanks her back. Glaring, she pulls at it hard enough to tear it. Yudhishthira walks in.
Yudhishthira: He is dead, Panchaali.
Panchaali (glaring at him): Unlike my pain. Unlike my memory.
Panchaali walks off. Yudhishthira sighs. The torn uttariya flutters in the doorway.
Entry 16
Prativindhya (blowing conch): "Abhimanyu's slayer! Fight me."
Dauhsasani (twanging bow): "After Duryodhana or Yudhisthira, who rules? Neither Laksmana nor Abhimanyu remains - it's you or I! Whoever is quicker!"
Prativindhya (shooting arrows): "I promised Uttara!"
Dauhsasani (shooting arrows): "Either your wife or mine for company!"
Prativindhya's arrow slices off Dauhsasani's head.
Entry 17
Yuyudhana (doffing armour): "I told Duryodhana, 'Kill me gloriously, playmate! I've seen enough slaughter.'"
Bhojya (cleaning his wounds): "My childhood ended when you fought Sauviraraja for me."
Yuyudhana shrugs.
Bhojya: "My ten playful babies lie lifeless outside ... ten days already. When I can go to them, what will I see?"
Entry 18
Made with Love.
Vidura: Coarse fare, Vaasudeva, unlike any you must have consumed before.
Background lights up. Woman with plate of food seen running behind laughing child. Krishna, dimly visible, smiles, implying only he can hear it.
Foreground lights up. Krishna, still smiling, takes another bite.
Krishna: No, wise one. Not for years.
Entry 19
Dasarni (shrouding Sikhandin's corpse): "Lady, who are you?"
Sthuna: "Sthuna Yaksa. Your husband doesn't need my manhood anymore."
Dasarni (aghast): "A hero's cremation ..."
Sthuna: "Ashes of my organs!"
Dasarni (distraught): "Manhood was his life. Womanhood in death?"
Sthuna becomes male. Sikhandini's body, bifurcated by Asvatthaman's sword, has one breast dangling.
Entry 20
A WARNING.
( Nahush is making Saptarishis pull his chariot to Indrani's quarters)
Agastya : " Thou art wedded to the daughter of Mahadeva. Do not commit the sin of Indra by lusting another man's wife."
Nahush : " I was tied to AshokSundari before I was born . Is that fair ? Sachidevi is mine and rightfully so !! "
Entry 21
Princess Pritha stood indecisively taking in her new palace, her identity changed overnight being given away in adoption to her maternal uncle, Maharaj Kuntibhoj. Caressing little Pritha’s downy head, king asked
Kuntibhoj: Will you accept me, my child?
Pritha: Pitashree, the world will now call me Kunti, your daughter!
Entry 22
Sikhandin (blowing conch): "Hiding behind Asvatthaman and Drona, your life's last seven days ... Face your death!"
Bhisma (laughing): "Wait, Amba!"
Sikhandin (uncomprehending): "Who? 'Mother' ... Ganga?"
Bhisma (blowing conch): "Pandu's five sons want to fight me together. I'll enjoy that battle first, then die."
Bhisma's arrow breaks Sikhandin's bow. Sikhandin falters.
Entry 23
During a hunt.
Arjun: Don't worry, I've got a few arrows up my sleeve.
Nakul: You mean knives?
Arjun, pulling arrows from his sleeves: No.
Sahdev: Do you accept constructive criticism?
Bhima, without realising question wasn't for him: Only juicy fruits.
Entry 24
Draupadi: Why did I have to suffer this fate, Sakha? (breaks down) Why do women always have to suffer? Today I fell weak even with five husbands to take care of me.
Krishna: Don’t cry, Sakhi. Dharma never spares those who commit adharma. Can you hear the conchshells?
Entry 25
Amba: Bhishma has ruined me. I want to kill him, Lord Parshuram, I want to destroy him. But he isn't the only reason for my agony. Salva failed me. His love was so weak. But my vengeance won't be weak. I will burn Bhishma to the ground.
Entry 26
Arjuna: "What about, me marrying your sister?"
Krishna: "You are a perfect pair!"
(Arjuna went to Subhadra’s kingdom)
Arjuna: "Beautiful Subhadra, hear me, become mine!"
Secretly Arjuna takes Subhadra with him.
Krishna (to his family): "Arjuna is the best partner for Subhadra. Give them your blessings!"
Entry 27
Vyas warns Satyavatimata.
Vyas: “Mother, please understand you have a choice here. Children born from me can never be true heirs to Kuru Dynasty. Understand messages given from the universe to your plans and ambitions. Take learning from King Bharata. Otherwise, as I perceive, your acts will create Mahabharat in near future!”
Entry 28
Paritranaay Sadhunam, Vinashayach Dushkrutam!
Bheeshma: “Mahabharat has ended finally. Had the sides reversed that Pandavas ruled Hastinapoor empire and Kouravas asked for share. I wonder whose side would you then be on?”
Krishna (smiling): “Do you genuinely believe, Pitamah, that all this bloodshed is just for a piece of land? Righteousness is my side!”
Entry 29
Kunti: You look as radiant as your father, the Sun God. But you are a mistake, an error of my childishness. Farewell, son. That is all I can give you, my precious. I am the most unfortunate mother, and, I know that my misfortune will ruin your destiny.
Entry 30
Krishna puts Draupadi in place.
Draupadi (screeching): “If your sandhi succeeds, then what about my untied hair?”
Krishna: “If I don’t go for Sandhi, what about Duryodhan’s ego whom you humiliated for his father’s physical disability? What happens to the hair of all Hastinapur women who are also my sisters? IT'S NOT YOUR PERSONAL BATTLE!"
Entry 31
Kuchh hua, Bas Kasam li!
Krishna: Parth, pain at your son’s death is understandable; but your oath to sacrifice life……not pardonable! When will you understand the larger purpose of this universe? Draupadi vowed to tie her hair only with Duryodhan’s blood. Each one of you lives in your tiny silos refusing to look beyond.
Entry 32
Ksatradeva (to himself): "Training at gurukula, I dreaded mangling handsome Laksmana's body someday." (aloud) "Fight, Dauryodhani!"
Laksmana (to himself): "Ksatradeva was always serious. Today it's really life or death." (aloud) "Saikhandina, let me see you laughing once!"
Ksatradeva (laughing): "You won't capture Yudhisthira!"
Laksmana throws a spear into Ksatradeva's heart.
Entry 33
Sanjaya: "King! The Saindhava horses." (guides Dhritarastra's hand)
Dhritarastra (feeling): "Duhsala's messenger said, Ajaneya breed. Tall, swift, untiring." (guides Gandhari's hand) "They'll draw Drona's chariot."
Vidura: "Beautiful animals, unseen ... winds yoked to fight our friends."
Gandhari (feeling): "Ajaneyas ignore noise and pain to finish the fight. What colour?"
Sanjaya: "Blood."
Entry 34
Ulupi : I have never seen anyone as beautiful as you, Prince Arjun. I am sorry for using my magic on you, but after so many years, I feel like a person lost in a desert, and my heart feels alive. I wish to marry you, oh Great one!
Entry 35
The last Kaurava!
Bheeshma (eyes red in anger): You all are cousins and you fight like cats and dogs! And for what? Piece of land that’s not yours from any perspective? In this Mahasabha today, I- Bheeshma- the last Kaurava throws this Rajdand and challenges you to defeat me to pick it up.
Entry 36
Stree ka doosra naam- Bandini
Draupadi: When I got married, the one marrying me called me Bheeksha! My mother-in-law, in spite of being a woman, advised me to bed five men! Yet, I fulfilled every duty of mine to each of them. In my humiliation, not one husband of mine fulfilled their duty to me!
Entry 37
Draupadi’s revenge: The ultimate fruit
Draupadi (Lamenting): All my sons are dead, how?
Krishna (holding her, consoling): What else did you expect, Sakhi? Revenge is boomerang! You throw it at someone but it always comes back to you. That’s why forgiveness is the greatest virtue! You refused to forgive Duryodhana, outcome is you becoming childless.
Entry 38
Krishna's Purpose in Mahabharat: Dharmsansthapan!
Uddhav: Why didn’t you stop this whole destruction?
Krishna: Vidhata’s Vidhan destiny! A person is made aware time and again of righteousness, but he ignores his inner voice. Then only death can make him face the truth! From this destruction, righteousness will burgeon. Humanity now has the boon of Geeta!
Entry 39
Kanha : Looks like a pigeon!
Arjuna: It's pigeon.
Kanha: Seems like a vulture.
Arjuna: Vulture it is.
Kanha: Its the majestic Garud.
Arjuna: Indeed!
Kanha: Parth, why wouldn't you tell me what you guess it is ?
Arjuna: O Kanha, you're Paramarth. Why would be I so foolish to contradict you ?
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