Journey to the centre of my Earth (Shivi TS)(partly 18+)(pg7, 29/11) - Page 6

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Posted: 3 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: maanmeet1

every entry made me more and more emotional.....his reply was superb too ....


this reminds me a dialogue/scene from one of my fav movies socha na tha....BHAAG GAYE


https://youtu.be/P_XDxKtBhR4


I would love to see SUSU ka face once hardik gives the letters🤣


m glad someone took matters in their hands and left the toxic place to start something new....eventually they will be back but everything would be sorted by den

Hello! I'm glad you loved this piece, and I love your favorite dialogue too!!! Aise bhi bhaag jaate kya log? 🤣🤣

SuSu ka naak kat gaya letters dekhe, aur kya🤪?! And yes, they've taken time for themselves away from all the toxic influences and interruptions there family provides!

Also, read the second part yet? Updated it yesterday, this is now officially a TS!!! And Shivi are coming back in this part! Have fun reading it!!! ❤️

PS What may I call you?

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Posted: 3 years ago
#52

Sathyaa, I liked this part for exploring their relationship after they eloped. It only made them stronger. Shiva and Raavi had some time for themselves for them before they returned home and Shiva has become her pillar of support. As for Raavi going from bahu to beti and ultimately calling Suman as Maa, though took its own time, was gradual but was beautifully written❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: mpks1

Sathyaa, I liked this part for exploring their relationship after they eloped. It only made them stronger. Shiva and Raavi had some time for themselves for them before they returned home and Shiva has become her pillar of support. As for Raavi going from bahu to beti and ultimately calling Suman as Maa, though took its own time, was gradual but was beautifully written❤️

Akka🤗!!! I feel like Raavi has been supporting Shiva for a very long time now, and it's Shiva's turn to step up and be her pillar of strength now. The family's support may help Raavi, yes, but Shiva's support as her husband will make her so so brave!

And I'm glad you loved the progression of Suman and Raavi's relationship! I was fairly nervous writing it because I've been feeling very disconnected to Suman recently and didn't want to bungle her emotions up... 😆

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Posted: 3 years ago
#54

Oh How I Have Loved this...


JTTCOME was one of my most favourite stories on the forum that involved Raavi's diary entries. The subtle heart flips that it gave me in between specially in the entry Shiva had written in the end.


The first part had me smiling throughout, maybe a different reaction was expected but I felt so overwhelmed with happiness. Such a lovely cocoon they were in and she was in her personal cocoon of her husband, protected, cherished, loved more than she ever thought she could be.


ADORED the certain lines that stated his possessiveness, I do stan a possessive Shiva. The book shelf description is basically MY HOME description right there. I have a wall shelf too. With books ranging from classics to what not (even physics) and that place is my cocoon. I loved it.


Thanks for the dupatta throwing because we all know what hitlist that is on. Dupatta deserves to be shredded. Period.


The hair bit? YIKES! Bas. Samaj jao aage. ☺️


Do you realize what a beautiful Shiva you've written here? What a gorgeously flawed Suman along with the redemption? It was something very risque to write and that's why it was so breathtaking to read. Kudos.


This whole story has my heart. My Whole Punctured Heart. ❤️


Mujhe aaisa aur stuff chhaiye.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#55

Oh God it's so good Sathya

I loved it❤️❤️

You wrote really well how they come back to Pandya Niwas

And I really really loved how Raavi and Suman relationship progress🤗

This is what I really want with the story in show

It was so cute and perfect👏

Thanks for tagging😳

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Posted: 3 years ago
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How sweet was this! And what a pleasant surprise!❤️

From Raavi and Shiva getting a little hot and heavy *cough cough* which I loved btw 😳

To the wholesome family moment, it was done gradually and so smoothly. Reminded me of how PS used to actually be a family show; despite the show having ruined the 'family' aspect for me, I thoroughly enjoyed your portrayal of the family enjoying their moments and Suman's redemption. I know for a fact that everything will be swept under the rug in the show, so I really appreciate you writing this 🤗

My favorite part was when Shiva wanted to take her back but also promised himself to keep her happy and to not let her feel the pain of the past again; I'm a sucker for softy Shiva 🥺💖

For me, ShiVi living their best life and being truly and deservingly happy is always a joy to read!❤

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Posted: 3 years ago
#57

Originally posted by: Khoobsurat123

Oh God it's so good Sathya

I loved it❤️❤️

You wrote really well how they come back to Pandya Niwas

And I really really loved how Raavi and Suman relationship progress🤗

This is what I really want with the story in show

It was so cute and perfect👏

Thanks for tagging😳

Thank you Anupama❤️! Agar makers yeh sab dikhate, then I would be a very happy person indeed... But I'm sure they'll sweep things under the rug and so I decided to write Suman's redemption myself! Iss show ki fan banke mujhe kya kya karni padti hain re Baba?!!!

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: blissfulcanyon

How sweet was this! And what a pleasant surprise!❤️

From Raavi and Shiva getting a little hot and heavy *cough cough* which I loved btw 😳

To the wholesome family moment, it was done gradually and so smoothly. Reminded me of how PS used to actually be a family show; despite the show having ruined the 'family' aspect for me, I thoroughly enjoyed your portrayal of the family enjoying their moments and Suman's redemption. I know for a fact that everything will be swept under the rug in the show, so I really appreciate you writing this 🤗

My favorite part was when Shiva wanted to take her back but also promised himself to keep her happy and to not let her feel the pain of the past again; I'm a sucker for softy Shiva 🥺💖

For me, ShiVi living their best life and being truly and deservingly happy is always a joy to read!❤

Shyna🤗! Glad you loved the smut because I spent the longest time writing it! 🤣

I may have started watching for Shivi, but I stuck to PS for the family too, so the fact that you think that the family scene in this work is reminiscent of the old PS we all fell in love with is a HUGE compliment for me😳!!! Your favorite part was also one of my own personal favorites! Raavi has been through so much since the Diary kaand that she deserves to be protected and cherished now!!! ❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago
#59

Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.

Oh How I Have Loved this...


JTTCOME was one of my most favourite stories on the forum that involved Raavi's diary entries. The subtle heart flips that it gave me in between specially in the entry Shiva had written in the end.


The first part had me smiling throughout, maybe a different reaction was expected but I felt so overwhelmed with happiness. Such a lovely cocoon they were in and she was in her personal cocoon of her husband, protected, cherished, loved more than she ever thought she could be.


ADORED the certain lines that stated his possessiveness, I do stan a possessive Shiva. The book shelf description is basically MY HOME description right there. I have a wall shelf too. With books ranging from classics to what not (even physics) and that place is my cocoon. I loved it.


Thanks for the dupatta throwing because we all know what hitlist that is on. Dupatta deserves to be shredded. Period.


The hair bit? YIKES! Bas. Samaj jao aage. ☺️


Do you realize what a beautiful Shiva you've written here? What a gorgeously flawed Suman along with the redemption? It was something very risque to write and that's why it was so breathtaking to read. Kudos.


This whole story has my heart. My Whole Punctured Heart. ❤️


Mujhe aaisa aur stuff chhaiye.

Ritu🤗!!! This comment made my day! So much that I've re read this at least 5-6 times by now... 🥳

I think when I set out to write the first part, I was trying to give Shivi a very playful, carefree vibe... Something reminiscent of their harmless banter and nok jhok woven through the smut. Writing from Shiva's POV was meant to be exploration as an author because I've never been hugely interested in smut from a male POV. 😆

What I ended up with was this carefree happy Raavi and a protective Shiva who was having his fun too... But the joyful Raavi I'd written was such a good foil to the Raavi who'd been in so much pain in the first part that I let it be. Didn't have the heart to change things when I realised that what I'd written wasn't what I'd intended... 😆So the happy place the first half put you in was exactly where I hoped readers would be! 😳

The book shelf is a dream I aim to fulfill whenever I buy a home for myself. But for now I make do with a wooden almari my parents had made specifically for me and my brother because we're both bookworms...

🤣

Glad you loved the dupatta and the hair bits!!! Main samaj gayi!!! 🤣

I knew writing a redemption for Suman was a risk with the way her character's going on the show, but I used to love her so much when she was gray that I couldn't help myself!!! So I'm very happy that people are loving it! ❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Reswa! I am finally here ❤️

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