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Posted: 3 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: sathwi_99

Pragya I'm huge fan of your dual Time line stories and this has a mystery element too.

I'm too much excited to know what's next.

I really loved the update.

Kalyani loves malhar raag and it's similar in both the timelines.

Atharv toh yaha bhi kamina hi niklaa, kalyani still loves him and wants to get back to him.

Poor moksh, is in orphanage and today it's his birthday, so sad.

I really hope ki malhar ki galat fehmi door hojaye, kalma aur pillu paas aa jaye.


Thanks a lot Swathi 💞💞💞💞

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Chapter-3

It was a sunny Sunday morning after so long. Malhar was shaving when his phone beeped. It was a message from forensic lab.

"Fingerprints of the subject matched," Malhar sighed and his expression became hard and unforgiving.

The Ayah at the orphanage was looking frazzled due to handling all the kids alone without any help. A baby was playing by himself on a tiny wobbling chair when he suddenly saw the Ayah playing with other child. Furious that the Ayah was giving attention to a kid other than him, the baby started crying, asking the Ayah to lift him up on her godi.

It felt to Kalyani as if her heart was pierced with hundreds of poisonous arrows. Her baby needed the love of his mother, but she was so helpless. She couldn't afford to let anyone in the orphanage know she watches Moksh stealthily despite signing on the paper which said she'd not try to keep contact with the child after giving him up to the orphanage. She was the worst and unluckiest mother in the world. But what she could do? Ever since she was pregnant, Atharv wanted her to abort the child. He didn't want to become a father and lose his freedom. And when Kalyani found out Atharv was secretly giving her food that could cause miscarriage, it was the first time Kalyani lifted her hand on Atharv. She knew he was having an affair and a child would make it more difficult for him to begin a new life with his mistress. But she never thought he could think to kill his own child. When Moksh was born, Atharv had not even seen his face and Kalyani had no choice other than to give up Moksh to an orphanage because she knew for sure Atharv would try to harm him again if Moksh stays with Kalyani.


Moksh was now crying harder and in an effort to reach Ayah, he shifted on the chair and the chair lost his balance. Kalyani despite herself ran towards him when a man caught hold of Moksh and prevented him from falling down.


"Mera baccha," he said to Moksh in baby language, "Dekh Baba aa gaye hain na. Ab to rona band kar. Mera Gussail baccha." Moksh looked at the man's face for a second and then a big smile broke out on his plump face and he began laughing.


Kalyani was shocked beyond limit.


"What are you doing here Malhar?" Kalyani was incredulous.


"Can't you see I'm spending some quality time with my son? Hai Na, Moksh. Look at this Gandi Aunty. She couldn't see anyone happy. Go to her godi now, I'll go and complete the adoption formalities," Malhar said, handing Moksh over to Kalyani.


Kalyani waited for Malhar to go inside orphanage office and when she was sure no one was seeing her, she kissed Moksh all over his face and his teddy like arms.


"Mera baccha," Kalyani was saying repeatedly. After one long year, she was holding her baby in her hands. She knew now that he was adopted by that Malhar Malhotra, she may never see him again. But at least she got to hold her child.


Malhar wiped the corner of his eyes. His phone rang. It was Saarthak on other sign.

"Have you signed the adoption papers?" Niketan asked.

"Yes," Malhar said. His voice was choked with emotion.

"Don't you think you're going too far now by using a one-year old to catch his mother and put her behind the bars?" For the first time Malhar felt Saarthak doubting his actions.

"I don't have any choice," Malhar said, leaning against the wall, "And there's something else. I don't want Moksh to live the life of an orphan like I did. I had you but Moksh has no one. He doesn't deserve this. I don't know why I feel some connection with him. Like there's some Raabta between us."

When Malhar was sure, Kalyani had spent considerable time with Moksh, he went back to them and said, "Hey, what's your name?"

"Kalyani. Kalyani Deshmukh."

"Yeah, Kalyani Whatever," Malhar said carelessly, "Hey! It's my first day with Moksh. Can you please help me buy some clothes and things for him. Look I would have done it myself but women know these things better and I don't know any woman..."

Kalyani retorted, "You don't know any woman? What about the girls you told me in our first meeting who are crazy for you..."

"Oh them," Malhar said, mentally cursing himself for his stupid mistake, "They would give anything to have me looking at them just once but they are not mothers. I mean, they don't have that maternal behenji vibe."

"Ok," Kalyani thought to end this talk there itself. She was getting a chance to spend more time with her child, without hiding. She can't let this chance pass.

Malhar opened the car door for her and went into the car from driver's side.

"Babes, can you please hold Moksh?" Malhar said, "I have to drive."

Malhar smiled on seeing joy in Kalyani's eyes. He turned on the radio.

"You can turn it off if you have any problem," Malhar suggested.

"No, it's fine. How come you're adopting Moksh? You don't seem like the type..."

"Ah," Malhar said waving this hands, "There's no more exhilarating feeling than having girls throw their hearts under my feet. But deep down, you know I have a paternal bone lodged somewhere in myself. Maybe it's a thing from some previous birth."

"Yeah, sure," Kalyani scoffed. Just then Moksh dropped his pacifier on the car floor.

With Moksh on her lap, Kalyani bent down to pick it up when her hand brushed with Malhar's who had already picked the pacifier. And the song playing on the radio was:


https://youtu.be/aVPwXQgY2QI


Guys please tell me your feedback on this chapter.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: kalma_lover


You writing skills is just😍😍

Malhar was thinking that she was selling heroine.Feeling bad for Kalyani 🥺🥺 She is all alone.. Waiting for Malhar to learn her truth 🥺🥺❤️❤️ Story is wonderful 😍😍❤️❤️❤️❤️ Please update soon❤️❤️


Thank you so much Anu 💞💞💞 I've updated the third chapter just now.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Aww sorry prayu for late comments but had a really terrible headache last night ..isliye nahi aapayi but now I am commenting for both the chapters...I love it it's awesome kaise like leti hai tu itna acha saachi dono stories ko itne achein see represent karna badhiya mazeedar...🤗🤗

Malhar is doubting kalyani in drugs case because atharav used to do this business ohh poor girl she have to pay for her husband's wrong work ..kalyani ki story sachmain bohot emotional hai Matlab kalyani pregnant hogayi jabhi atharav ussein kabhi pyaar nahi kar paaya aur abb malhar uspien Shaq Kar Raha hai ...she is now also waiting for his return not for her but at least for his son only aww poor girl 😭😭

Malhar and sarthak scene cute and funny how malhar is spending money on finding the culprits and how sarthak is scolding him for that I loved how he has that pain for kalyani loved how he is not feeling good for spying on kalyani like that 😭😭

Aww past story here kalyani is a rich architect daughter and malhar is poor guy who come to her after having a terrible accident and she lovingly named him malhar Atul is so cruel here hm..Paisa Paisa basss kalyani is just like her mom sweet and helpful ...second chapter is so emotional being a mother she could not hold her child and gets a glimpse of him. .aww poor baby moksh 😭

Malhar got a confirmation of kalyani being a criminal ohh abb Kya hoga ..but malhar is such a nice human being here whi still cares of her in name of arresting her he adopt moksh but still still gave kalyani her own sweet time to spend with her son loved how they both taunt each other 😳😆..

Raabta song ohhho vo bhi moksh ki wajah sein itni cute journey mil gayi awww..😳


Ee pragyu Meri ek request Hain ek aisi story likhana Jahan par ye dono saath rekhar kalyani kein pregnancy period ko enjoy karein mujhein ISS baar Teri story main vo dekhana hai tu likhti hi itna acha hai ki Meri farmayish nikal hi aati hai kahin na kahin sein 🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Aww.. Chapter three was so emotional..

Kalyani is working as an Ayah just to get glimpses of her child.. 😭

Yet she cannot reach out to him.. 😭

Atharv the disgusting man tried to kill the baby in her womb😡

Wish Malhar will punish him for his deeds.

Omg Malhar has adopted Moksh.. And Sarthak thinks he's doing it to arrest Kalyani..

Malhar didn't deny that but apart from it he feels for Moksh... There is a raabta between him and the child.. ♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️

Though the fingerprints have matched, Malhar probably feels bad for Kalyani as well, that's why he's providing her these little chances of being with her kid by asking her to help him shop clothes for the kid.

And last scene with the song..

Hope Malhar gets to know the truth soon and Kalyani gets to be with her child and the man who can love her too..


Loved it❤️❤️❤️❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago
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The chapter is sooo emotional pragya. I loved it totally.

Malmoksh ka raabta is too good.

Becahri kalyani kitna pyaar karti hai apni bacche se phir bhi wo usse door rahna pad rahi hai, this atharv as usual, apne hi bacche ko maarna chahta hai aur kalyani bhi kya karti.

Despite fingerprint matching, malhar doesn't want kalyani to be involved in crime, but he can't do anything. So, providing her small happiness.

Malhar loves moksh and feels a connection towards him.

It's good pragya, waiting for your another update.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: kalma_lover

Your story made me emotional 😭😭 can't see kallu in this position.. He loves her bacha so much but I know Malhar will not take him away from her.. I hope we will see their happy family soon❤️❤️❤️ Sarthak won my heart. The way he tried to console Malhar was the best.. And that evil Atharva 😤 she used kalyani and tried to kill his own blood 🥺🥺 but Malhar will support her and will love her truly ❤️❤️


I'm glad you're liking this story Anu. The emotional parts have just begun and they'll grow more intense with each chapter.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: Phlo

Aww sorry prayu for late comments but had a really terrible headache last night ..isliye nahi aapayi but now I am commenting for both the chapters...I love it it's awesome kaise like leti hai tu itna acha saachi dono stories ko itne achein see represent karna badhiya mazeedar...🤗🤗

Malhar is doubting kalyani in drugs case because atharav used to do this business ohh poor girl she have to pay for her husband's wrong work ..kalyani ki story sachmain bohot emotional hai Matlab kalyani pregnant hogayi jabhi atharav ussein kabhi pyaar nahi kar paaya aur abb malhar uspien Shaq Kar Raha hai ...she is now also waiting for his return not for her but at least for his son only aww poor girl 😭😭

Malhar and sarthak scene cute and funny how malhar is spending money on finding the culprits and how sarthak is scolding him for that I loved how he has that pain for kalyani loved how he is not feeling good for spying on kalyani like that 😭😭

Aww past story here kalyani is a rich architect daughter and malhar is poor guy who come to her after having a terrible accident and she lovingly named him malhar Atul is so cruel here hm..Paisa Paisa basss kalyani is just like her mom sweet and helpful ...second chapter is so emotional being a mother she could not hold her child and gets a glimpse of him. .aww poor baby moksh 😭

Malhar got a confirmation of kalyani being a criminal ohh abb Kya hoga ..but malhar is such a nice human being here whi still cares of her in name of arresting her he adopt moksh but still still gave kalyani her own sweet time to spend with her son loved how they both taunt each other 😳😆..

Raabta song ohhho vo bhi moksh ki wajah sein itni cute journey mil gayi awww..😳


Ee pragyu Meri ek request Hain ek aisi story likhana Jahan par ye dono saath rekhar kalyani kein pregnancy period ko enjoy karein mujhein ISS baar Teri story main vo dekhana hai tu likhti hi itna acha hai ki Meri farmayish nikal hi aati hai kahin na kahin sein 🤗


Thank you so much Vanshu Rani 💞💞💞💞💞

Ab headache kaisa hai tera? Dhyan rakhna apna. I understand yaar. Meri timings bhi bahut odd ho gayi hai. Din me time hi nahi mil pata workload ki vajah se isliye subah 6 o clock par baithkar update likhti hoon. Jab ghar me thi to itne baje to neend tak nahi khulti thi. Pregnancy to pakka nahi keh sakti but I promise is FF me tujhe KalMa ke bittersweet moments zaroor doongi.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: rekha_crm

Aww.. Chapter three was so emotional..

Kalyani is working as an Ayah just to get glimpses of her child.. 😭

Yet she cannot reach out to him.. 😭

Atharv the disgusting man tried to kill the baby in her womb😡

Wish Malhar will punish him for his deeds.

Omg Malhar has adopted Moksh.. And Sarthak thinks he's doing it to arrest Kalyani..

Malhar didn't deny that but apart from it he feels for Moksh... There is a raabta between him and the child.. ♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️

Though the fingerprints have matched, Malhar probably feels bad for Kalyani as well, that's why he's providing her these little chances of being with her kid by asking her to help him shop clothes for the kid.

And last scene with the song..

Hope Malhar gets to know the truth soon and Kalyani gets to be with her child and the man who can love her too..


Loved it❤️❤️❤️❤️


Thank you so much Rekha. I'm so glad that you liked it. MalMoksh Raabta ka idea mujhe CVs ke genius dimag se hi aaya when they introduced the track of Atharv trying to claim Moksh as his son by blood. Sach me agar is twist ko CVs further explore karte na to Raabta gang ka sabse puraana and bada Raabta to MalMoksh connection hi ho jata.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#30

Originally posted by: sathwi_99

The chapter is sooo emotional pragya. I loved it totally.

Malmoksh ka raabta is too good.

Becahri kalyani kitna pyaar karti hai apni bacche se phir bhi wo usse door rahna pad rahi hai, this atharv as usual, apne hi bacche ko maarna chahta hai aur kalyani bhi kya karti.

Despite fingerprint matching, malhar doesn't want kalyani to be involved in crime, but he can't do anything. So, providing her small happiness.

Malhar loves moksh and feels a connection towards him.

It's good pragya, waiting for your another update.


Thank you so much Swathi. I'm really happy that you are liking this.

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