Delivery Boy - a Fan Fiction - Updated 11/22/2021 Ch. 3 on p. 4 - Page 2

Yes, they are similar in some qualities. Or, as Jaya said to Raghav once when he called Vijay sanakī on the show, "If you were a girl, I would have proposed your marriage to him."

I was inspired by that scene on the show with Raghav showing concern for Vijay on the street. I had hoped that the writing would continue in that direction, but since it didn't, here we are in fan fiction. Yes, Raghav is caring, but Vijay can't see past Raghav's disrespectful words, so I thought an assignment from Sharada and a visit from Luṅgīvālā Raghav were needed.

Thanks for the encouragement, inlieu!

Hey Dear Writer,

I absolutely love this story. The witty and know-it-all personality of Raghav and as usual vain and proud Vijay Deshmukh. I love their banters and how you depict every conversation that takes place between them. The way Raghav called him a buddha actually made me smile.

I really enjoyed reading it. Can we get a part 3 please? I would like to see where Pallavi stands amid the chaos between her husband and Vijay Deshmukh.

Keep writing! ❤️

I didn't expect this update so I was pleasantly surprised when I checked my notifications. This story of yours is my personal favourite and the bond Raghav has with each of the Deshmukh family members is depicted so well. I remember the inital promos of the show were about whether someone will accept Pallavi's sasural and here we have a story dedicated to that. Also does this take place before the fic where Pallavi gets Raghav arrested? Anyways I liked the small misunderstanding that happened and was cleared just as quickly. Poor Manasi, seems like a sensible character here who deserves better. Raghav and VD scenes are the best. I like them more than Sharada Raghav scenes too. I like how the drugs bit was also cleared here. The characters have personalities and are not all villains. I absolutely love this story and am waiting for the next part.

I didn't realise that the name of this fic is delivery boy which is one of my favourite scenes from the show.

Thanks for tagging. Great realistic take on D's and their relationship with Raghav. Hoping to see Pallavi too in the next chapter.

Thank you to everyone who reacted and commented. I feel honoured that you want a Chapter Three with Pallavi in it. After she dominated my first fan fiction (Antarāya-timir'opaśāntaye Chapter One), how did I leave her out of both chapters of this one? Now that Raghav and Vijay are being civil to each other, it should be safe to involve Pallavi.

I had to end Chapter Two with Raghav's pause, because we all know Vijay won't give us a happy ending so easily. 🥺 Chapter Three, what will I do with you?

I wasn't aware of those promos, hapc. The early episodes made me think that the Deshmukhs would be developed as characters and have their own one-on-one moments with Raghav (such as Sharada calling him Delivery Boy for Manasi's keḷavaṇa gifts). Soon we got scenes of Raghav talking while they all stood in silence around the room, and the show got stuck in that habit. Maybe I did a little better with my waiting-for-breakfast scene, but if I can think of scenes between Raghav, maybe Pallavi, and one to three Deshmukhs, those might be easier to balance.

Technically, Raghav hasn't gotten arrested in my story yet, but yes, hapc, Pallavi is visibly pregnant in "Antarāya-timir'opaśāntaye" when Raghav's arrest is imminent, and in "Delivery Boy" children are only a hypothetical that Sharada brings up as a reason for Raghav to learn diplomacy. "Delivery Boy" takes place some time after Mandar's return in "Hasta-prāpya-stabaka-namito bāla-Mandāra-vṛkṣaḥ" - and after a conversation between Kirti and Mandar that I haven't written yet. However, in "Delivery Boy" so far, Vijay only knows Farhad as Raghav's man, and must be unaware of the romance that I hope to write for Farhad and Mandar in "Hasta-prāpya-stabaka-namito bāla-Mandāra-vṛkṣaḥ." So, I will have to run these two stories in parallel.

Hi, this is absolutely fantastic. Loved it

Part 2 of this FF was definitely surprising but it was a pleasant one

the fact that you are developing the relation between VD and Raghav is something different--Raghav and Aai are love...Raghav considers her as a mother to him and asking for advice

I definitely think you can start adding Pallavi in the FF now because whole delivery boy joke wouldn't have been there without her in the show

the update was all hilarious and witty with the perfect pinch of humour and Raghav's last line(not telling you but somewhere inside me it's wishing that Raghav might have said these words aloud)

Mansi's character is a sensible one here--they have destroyed her in the show--glad she is not obsessed over Rahul here and moving on

definitely eager for next part

Originally posted by: ReemShah

the update was all hilarious and witty with the perfect pinch of humour and Raghav's last line(not telling you but somewhere inside me it's wishing that Raghav might have said these words aloud)

Mansi's character is a sensible one here--they have destroyed her in the show--glad she is not obsessed over Rahul here and moving on

You are naughty, ReemShah! Here I am, mentally apologizing to my elders for putting buḍḍhe in a punch line, and you wish Raghav would say it aloud! All of his hard work would be washed away if he did that.

Manasi does nothing as a negative character, and is thus the worst written character on the show, in my opinion, but I don't think I ever saw her obsessed over Rahul, only misunderstanding Pallavi for no reason. When Asha was taking Rahul away, he looked at Manasi and she sensibly refused to marry him against his mother's wishes. Then Rahul felt rejected by Manasi, and she cried over their breakup. Later, when Rahul got engaged to someone else, Manasi grieved, naturally, because she had to give up hope. I think that if Raghav on the show said what I had him say in my story, Manasi would react the same way. The character that I wrote differently here was Raghav. Outreach by Raghav to Manasi should have been part of his effort to reunite Pallavi with her family on the show. If this story's Chapter Three is to include Pallavi, I think Manasi belongs in it as well.

I really appreciate your comment: "hilarious and witty with the perfect pinch of humour" - those are nuances that I aim to manage in my writing.

Originally posted by: BrhannadaArmour

You are naughty, ReemShah! Here I am, mentally apologizing to my elders for putting buḍḍhe in a punch line, and you wish Raghav would say it aloud! All of his hard work would be washed away if he did that.

Manasi does nothing as a negative character, and is thus the worst written character on the show, in my opinion, but I don't think I ever saw her obsessed over Rahul, only misunderstanding Pallavi for no reason. When Asha was taking Rahul away, he looked at Manasi and she sensibly refused to marry him against his mother's wishes. Then Rahul felt rejected by Manasi, and she cried over their breakup. Later, when Rahul got engaged to someone else, Manasi grieved, naturally, because she had to give up hope. I think that if Raghav on the show said what I had him say in my story, Manasi would react the same way. The character that I wrote differently here was Raghav. Outreach by Raghav to Manasi should have been part of his effort to reunite Pallavi with her family on the show. If this story's Chapter Three is to include Pallavi, I think Manasi belongs in it as well.

I really appreciate your comment: "hilarious and witty with the perfect pinch of humour" - those are nuances that I aim to manage in my writing.

True all efforts Raghav made to finally convince VD that he is not VD thinks him to be would go down the drain but we cant ignore the fact that Raghav is quite an honest and straightforward person most of the time and he isnt afraid to make little quirk comments about people

Her character graph is really wobbly--you can never predict her behaviour written by the writers. I think you can give shape to Mansi's character in a much better way than the show in the next chapter

I cant wait to read it