Originally posted by: PixieDust91
I agree with what Rashmi said. That was a good suggestion. I have a few more suggestions.
1) Add some literary devices(similes, metaphors, alliterations, hyperbole). It makes it flow by smoothly and adds some interest.
2) Go a little slower. Harry leaves the house in the first two lines of your fanfic. Try adding some more in.
3) Make your chapters a little longer. Readers get more attatched to longer chapters and stories.
Other than that, you have a great story going! Update soon!
THANKS 4 THE ADVISE PIXIE DUST--IT IS JUST THAT I DON'T HAVE ENOUGH TIME. I DO THIS JUST TO ENTERTAIN YOU GUYS A BIT. I HAVE 2 OTHER FAN-FICS AND I HAVE SO MUCH HW LOAD. I WILL TRY MY BEST TO DO ALL THAT. I KNOW MY CHAPS ARE A BIT TO SMALL. EVENTUALLY, VERYTHING WILL FALL IN PLACE---BY THE WAY
I ONLY UPDATE MY FAN-FIC IN THE FAN-FIC SECTION, SOO IF YOU WANT TO READ IT PLEASE CLICK ON THE FAN FICTIONS LINK.
LUV,
K+K
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