Samasya thumbnail
Posted: 4 years ago
#1

Happy holi !

Hope you all are healthy. I wrote this as means to wish holi though it's not based on holi...enjoy



Lakeerein

"Hello...

...Geet? " He called softly a notch higher than a whisper. Cautious, not to wake up his grandmother sleeping in the next room. It was late at night ten past two. He had just laid down after spending hours in work finally it concluded. He felt tired. His lid felt heavy with sleep. He had just closed his eyes . When her name flashed in the vibrating mobile.


He picked up the phone in the first ring. Surprised and tensed. She never called this late. Since the day they started talking over the phone they never talked beyond ten. It was a rule in her family. No one was allowed to call or receive a phone after ten. Though they chatted over whatsapp late till 12 clock. Beyond that not even whatsapp. Never. She was an early sleeper too.


"Maan…" she managed to whisper his name then the sobs followed. He sat up frantically. Myriad fear gripped his heart. He could hear his own heart beating fast. Restlessly.


“Did Brij Bhaiya say something?”


Brij, Geet's beloved brother, wasn't in favour of their wedding. Brij liked Maan but not for his baby sister. For geet he wanted someone of defence background like they were. Their generation had served the nation. Maan admired and respected Brij veerji. Brij stood by him through thick and thin and most importantly for had it not been Brij there, their love story might have started at all.


Geet had come to St. Xavier convent school in mid session at XII standard. Amid Pressure of board exam she came as a wave of distraction for the whole batch. Sleepy class became the drooling class with all the boys admiring her. She had been blessed. In all means. Her intellect shone in her Marks. Maan heard her praises though he wasn't lucky enough to be in her class. She was in bio stream and he was in maths. He wasn't like the boys of their age. He focused on studies, determined to get through Jee advance. Prelims. He knew he would crack.


One day, she had approached him.


"Maan? Right."


He held the handle of the bike. One feet touching the ground and the other on a bike He looked confused. Reading his question she explained .


"Woh...Mishra sir recommended you for some physics numerical...he thinks you could help...would you?" Her big deep expectant eyes held his eyes.


He had seen her many times. At prayers, lunch, playground and where not. Like the boys of his class and junior she had held his attention too. He was no exception. Though Hard on resolution she still managed to creep in his dreams. Days, he reserved to fulfil his dadi's dream.


"Will you? "


Her eyes expectant but faltering his silence seemed like a big no to her.The most beautiful eyes he ever came across ever.


"Are you listening?"


"Hmm? He snapped of the spell she casted on him


"Now?"


She nodded with a pout "If it's alright with you."


He made his bike stand. Keeping the notebook on it. Began solving it with rapt attention. She looked curiously where she missed. Within a minute, he solved the numerical.


She looked puzzled for the moment. Then her big doe eyes got filled with the exhilaration and later she hugged him.


"You solved this i tried this till late in the night"


Bewildered, he looked here and there. They are just by the side of the school gate. School Vans , buses and many students were still around. Colour crept his cheek and he felt them warm. Then a sting pain course through the body. The girl was snatched from his embrace. A well built man was beating him mercilessly breaking him.


.............

A hairline fracture was ensued in his right leg. His cheek swelled and blue and a bandage across his forearm.


Incensed his dadi threaten to complain to police. Much aware of young blood and temper she didn't want to spoil the young man's career.


"I will help maan" Geet proposed to both the parents. Brij glowered at Geet standing by the bed Maan had been lying on. She definitely ignored Brij. Her eyes are puffy and red. She was feeling miserable. It’s her fault. She went to him. She hugged him. Her brother bit him black and blue. So penance should hers only.


"I will pick and drop him to the school and help him study too."


She implored looking at savitri devi. Savitri devi looked at the girl. Geet later had narrated everything clearing the misunderstanding that clutched Brij.


"Only if you approve it"


Mr.and Mrs handa accepted the proposal earnestly seeing the Brij fault.


Brij on the other hand first felt guilty for beating a boy much younger to him. Later he too accepted geet's proposal as they studied in the same school their approaching board exam.


Afterwards when their friendship bloomed and when his sister was in love with maan, head over heels. He was the first to raise objections. One even came on their engagement ceremony from then on Maan and Geet were on tenterhook.


......

She sobbed more as her delicate body shook with her crying.


"Tell me what happened? You are scaring the hell out of me, Geet. I am coming at our place" he was pacing restively across his room.


"No!"


After a long pause and drawing in long breath she continued "I am just tensed" She didn't want him to visit her at an inhuman hour when highways are generally full of fast riding trucks.


"Woh… aaj pink took me to a palm reader and he said we won't get married" she told him coyly. After letting him know her fear. She felt a bit relaxed and silly too to disturb him at this hour.


Listening to her , Maan sighed Frequent glitches and obstacles in their marriage had made Geet paranoid and anxious about their marriage.


He inhaled deeply. "Come may what, we will get married. I promise you Geet"


………

It was early dawn and birds were chirping.


Geet felt fresh and rejuvenated after washing her face. Talking to Maan made her relaxed. Now that he had promised her. They would get married. She inhaled the cool gentle breeze seeping in through the window. A paper rocket came crashing down at her feet.


Darwaja kholo"


She looked down. There her Maan was standing in grey trousers and cream coloured shirt.


She had tried her best to open the door noiselessly but it had made some noises. Unsure of who at handa place awake. She let in Maan and stealthily in her room.


"Maan AAP itni subah nahi raat ko yaha kya kar rahe hain"


" Woh sab chodo Geet pehle yeh batao chaku kaha hain"


"Chaku!"


"Haan chaku" he looked here and there in her room.


"Shayad kitchen mein" she answered confused.


"Maan aap kaha ja rahe hain dekh lega" she followed him lowering her volume.


Reaching the kitchen he traced the knife along the line in his palm.


It scared Geet a bit.


"Maan yeh aap kya kar rahe hain"


Lakeero mein itni Takat nahi hoti geet ki woh hamari tekdeer likhe...tumhara aur mera ek hona sitaro pe likha hain


Saying this in nanoseconds he cut his thumb with a knife and filled her partition.


"Yeh kya ho raha hain?"


It was Brij who had caught them. He had seen Maan entering their house. But wanted to see what they were up to. In his heart he knew no one could love Geet more than Maan so he too gave his nod to their marriage.


"Woh Veerji Geet began but Maan bent down to seek his blessing. Brij instead hugged.


Parso tak ka wait nahi hua"


Pink hue spread both their cheeks.


Brij tapped his back "lekin bidai toh parso hi hogi."


A Smile spread Brij across his face nevertheless he sued Maan…


Saying "ab geet se Milna julna shadi tak band"

........






Please do let me you like it or not

Edited by Samasya - 4 years ago

Created

Last reply

Replies

13

Views

1k

Users

12

Likes

33

Frequent Posters

taahir004 thumbnail
Posted: 4 years ago
#2

A Beautiful OS


And a Refreshingly Fantastic Read !!!!


Maan and Geet at the same school though she was a later entrant

he had heard about her beauty and grace

while he too had dreams about her

and when she came to seek his help , he was at first dumbfounded but later helped

and even got a beating from Brij

probably the beating had carved a way for Maan and Geet to become friends

and later lovers

wow Maan coming to Geet's home filling her partition with his blood

but great that Brij approves them together

ferdouz thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 4 years ago
#3

Wow always a pleasure to read any Maaneet stories.

Maan and Geet and their childhood love blossoming 😍

They passed all the hurdles and obstacles and won Brij's heart too.

Congratulations for a lovely story.

Niharika.Nair thumbnail
IPL 2024 Participants Thumbnail IPL 2023 Participants Thumbnail + 9
Posted: 4 years ago
#4

So cute!!! Reading an OS after ages...

Beautifullies thumbnail
Posted: 4 years ago
#5

It was such a sweet OS. I thought Brij will be difficult to handle and maybe there will be separation but the way you changed Brij thinking was sweet. The most important thing should the love between the couple, if it is not there then no relation can work out and it was nice that Brij understood that no one can love Geet more than Maan and Geet sirf Maan ki hai.

My favorite line was sleeping classes changed into drooling classes, that was too funny even while writing about it I am smiling.

Waise Maan and Geet ki love story toh woh teacher ki wajah se start hui.

Would have love to read more about their moments while they were in love or in the process of falling in love.

But this was sweet light hearted and fun OS to read.


Thank you for writing it and entertaining us.

khwaishfan thumbnail
Visit Streak 1000 Thumbnail Visit Streak 750 Thumbnail + 9
Posted: 4 years ago
#6

Happy Holi!!

Amazing OS!

of cos Maan was concerned about Geet when she called so late

sad that Brij was not in favor of their wedding

well Maan heard a lot about the beautiful and talented Geet

when she approaches him he is stunned

great that he helped her

hate that Brij hit him cos Geet innocently hugged him

glad that Geet wanted to help Maan

at least Geet cleared the mu with Maan's dadi

well her parents had to relent as Brij was at fault

not surprised that they become friends and then fell in love

so Geet was upset as the palm reader said that they will not get married

loved that Maan filled her maang assuring her

Thank God Brij accepted Maan as he knows no one will love her as much as Maan does

Edited by khwaishfan - 4 years ago
aparna3011 thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 4 years ago
#7

wonderful

loved reading very much

asmani thumbnail
16th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 500 Thumbnail + 8
Posted: 4 years ago
#8

so awesome.. loved it. please write more.

mkd.70 thumbnail
Visit Streak 500 Thumbnail 13th Anniversary Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 4 years ago
#9

Lovely ❤️ OS . thank you 😊❤️💕

Creampuff thumbnail
6th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 30 Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 4 years ago
#10

What a sweet story !!!

I loved how maan filled her partition

& Brij blessed them .

I love ❤️ happy ending !!

Thank you for the story

Related Topics

Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee Thumbnail

Posted by: TangledThoughts

5 months ago

Maan Geet One Shot: || The Heartbreak ||

Title: The Heartbreak Maan and Geet had been inseparable for years. Their love story was one of those rare ones that had withstood the test of...

Expand ▼
Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee Thumbnail

Posted by: Queen0fDarkness

7 months ago

MG - The Taser One Shot

The Taser Maan prided himself on being a man of precision, intellect and control. But sometimes, there comes a moment when even an intelligent...

Expand ▼
Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee Thumbnail

Posted by: Queen0fDarkness

7 months ago

One Shot - Beneath the Broken Sky [When Souls Collide] One Shot - Beneath the Broken Sky [When Souls Collide]

I was rewatching old epis here and there of GHSP and this title suggestion - 'Beneath the Broken Sky' came from @nushhkiee for another SS I was...

Expand ▼
Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee Thumbnail

Posted by: tellyme

7 months ago

Mg One Shot - Woh Humsafar That Mg One Shot - Woh Humsafar That

Woh Humsafar Tha “Geet Geet,… where are you” shouted Tayijo, frustrated at Geet’s regular habit of disappearing “Biji, let her be. You know she...

Expand ▼
Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee Thumbnail

Posted by: nushhkiee

9 months ago

MG FF - For One Night - 12/03/2025 - chapter 12 updated Pg 24

Author's Note - Hello, dear readers! 🌸 This is my very first post dedicated to the iconic Maaneet. I recently watched Geet Hui Sabse Parayi ,...

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".