Rudhita Drabble: A Love Astray

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Posted: 4 years ago
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As Aniruddh declared his decision, Bondita couldn’t help but stand still looking at blankness while a lone tear made its way through her left eyes to her cheeks. He knew what he wanted. In fact he always knew what he wanted. She swallowed the lump in her throat as she shifted her gaze to look at the man standing in front of her. His face was firm and strong, in fact happy after the declaration. He’d always wanted this, didn’t he? Still Bondita looked at him in a hope that he’d change his words, as her eyes brimmed with tears, threatening to fall at anytime now. But alas, Aniruddh did nothing but turn his back to her and slowly walked outside the room.


He wanted to marry Saudamini.


The moment she got her barrister certificate, it wasn’t the happiness which overwhelmed her. It was the fear, fear of losing the man she loved which overwhelmed and ruined all her senses. Aniruddh had fulfilled his promise; he had made her self sufficient. Now it was her time to pay back. To set him free, so that he can make a life of his own – with the one whom he loved.


Bondita turned her head to look at the door of what was their room for the past ten years even though she lived alone there, to see Aniruddh’s slowly retreating figure. He stopped at the door step to turn and take a look at her. Bondita looked at him, trying her best to not reveal anything even though she knew he was aware of her feelings. Before her eyes were blurred with tears, she tried hard to find any trace of love for her in his eyes but she couldn’t see anything other than the care which has been from the day he married her to save her life.


Bondita bit back as she felt her lips trembling as she was on the verge of breaking into sobs as she kept staring whom he called her husband with so much pride all these years. Bondita quite ironically passed a faint yet strong smile at him through her tears while Aniruddh looked at her intently. Did he feel guilty? Why would he?


But after a moment of glancing at her, he walked away. She heard faint voices of him asking Bihari Kaka to help Bondita pack her bags. For a moment she felt so jealous of Saudamini, who was lucky enough to get this man’s love all her life while she wasn’t even lucky enough to be considered for it. Saudamini had waited her whole life for him. Responsibility, she was!


She collapsed on the floor on her knees as she broke down into uncontrollable sobs as she felt her whole world crashing down with her hearts turning to a huge mess of tiddly particles, from where she couldn’t even find them to at least try to mend it. Well how can she, when the one in whom she hid her whole damn world just left her to live with his memories to be with the one in whom he hid his whole world.


“Kehti hai ishq duniya jise,

Kehti hai ishq duniya jise

meri jann-e-mann,

Iss ek lafz mein chupi kainaat hai.”


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A take of Rudhita if Saudamini being a loyal and true lover waited for him while Aniruddh fulfilled his responsibilites, his heart always loving his first and only love.


I know this exceeds the word limit of a drabble, but I didn't want to call it an OS. Its super random.


Not asking for anything,

Love,

Sujz!❤️

Edited by Sujz - 4 years ago


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Posted: 4 years ago
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It's bittersweet. I don't know what say apart from typing that you are a brilliant writer who knows how to pull the strings of heart and when. The icing on the cake was the lyric from Aayat. Brilliant. I'm simply speechless.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Its so damn beautiful dear.

I love the way you emote emotions, you are one of the fan fic finest writer whose work i have read in my lifetime.

I dont know what to say, but i did feel Bon 's unrequited love and i can feel her pain, its so beautifully written, all i want was it to be longer, i just couldn't stop reading it, i would love if you can write a ts or whole series on it.. It is one of my fav genre and you wrote it so well.. I just couldn't stop but read it again and again.

Thank you so much for this peice ❤️

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Sujz it's so deep 💔❤️

I can say only one thing you have written a whole story with so much depth with a few words 👏You're an awesome writer.

And that "Ek lafz me chipi kaynaat hai" makes it more meaningful and touching ❤️❤️

I must learn writing drabbles from You and Octo

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Posted: 4 years ago
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It's bittersweet in true sense! Heart breaks for Bondita but can't blame Anirudh either!

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Posted: 4 years ago
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You bring out the reality with so much deep emotions only with a few sentences ♥️

This would be the real life and your take on this is amazing and the way you bring it together with your words is beyond brilliance ❣️

Wondered by your writing😍😍😍

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Sujz I opened this drable thinking to read some Rudhita moments but you made me cry 😭

Yes if Soudamini would have been a loyal lover their story would have been different. But in this way🥺

Boni was always his responsibility but how can he leave his first love who is waiting for him💔

In a love triangle one heart has to break.. Loved the last para my fav one💔

the way wrote it has my heart❤️



I don't why I am asking but still do give a 2nd thought to continue it.. It will be little complicated as Soudamini is positive still want you to write more of it. If possible then please.

🤗

Edited by Apsana14 - 4 years ago
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Posted: 4 years ago
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Omg....this is heart breaking yaar😭

It's so sad yet beautifully written👏

I like reading drabbles since I always find it too difficult to emote through short words..I'm really bad at it

Your story premise is interesting 👍🏼because it opens up a possibility that what turn the story would have taken if mini was really a selfless and dedicated lover....I wish the makers showcased a grey mini but


I honestly can't see bon crying 😒but liked the part she tried to suppress it and smile holding her emotions😭Ani walking away was so sad too😒

The last four lines 👏it's superb ❤️...it concluded the exact summary....😒


Do try more drabbles

try poems too dear ....you have good taste in it👍🏼

Eagerly waiting for your ball dance OS

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Though it was heartbreaking to read about Bondita's unrequited love, yet this concept and your writing was very beautiful. Had a good time reading this 🤗

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Sujz this is so wonderful behen..Thank you for writing this. This is truly appreciative and wonderful👏👏


I just loved it. In fact, this drabble made me emotional as it reminded me of something personal...


You have penned down the emotions so aptly.. I can connect to their feelings here. It's really good Sujz.. Emotional stories had a great impact on readers.. And you have slayed it with your words so gently yet with damn superb perfection... This is my favorite work of yours... Superb it is!!!👍🏼


Bondita's pain and turmoil of losing close one can be picturised clearly with the way you presented it... Thanks again for writing this...


Do write more of this emotional stories.. I liked it..❤️🤗

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