FF: Sacrifice For Immortality (Completed) - Page 5

Hi Nikki!!! 😎

First of all, I am extremely sorry for this delay! Was occupied with some assignments. 😒

Coming to your story, I wish I had read it earlier because today I have mellowed down a little bit with the last episode and everything. 😭

But frankly, I felt the dialogues to be a bit repetitive and Ved way too selfish. I mean she is selfish when it comes to Ansh, but she wouldn't be this persistent when it came down to Piya also. Plus the Gs seemed too dumb even by their standard. 

Ansh 😈 I expected a lot more. Yeh to galiya bhi de de, to bhi sanskari wale hi dete hain.  He controlled himself rather quickly.  I wish he had blasted the others too. 😈

Anyway, the major portion is still left and all the best with that! 👍🏼

Hello... 🤗

Like I said earlier, there is no need to say sorry. Besides, I always say, do post your reviews when you have free time. 😊

Important things come first, these can come later too...

I can understand... In fact, after reading the WU and your post, even I have mellowed down.

Well, TBH I had written this in two separate pages... And I posted it by taking breaks in between and that too I didn't edit it later on. This is the main reason why the dialogues became so repititive.

This is what happens when your diary finishes in the middle of a chapter and you have to write on a new one... 😆

TBH, I am not satisfied with this chapter... Nor am I very much happy. Isiliye end main likha tha ki agar achha na lage, to clearly bol dena ki chapter achha nahi tha...

Like I said earlier too, the flow was lost as my diary finished before I could complete the chapter... So, bas ye chapter khatam kar diya taki I can take Piansh and Ni-Sa out of the house.

Thank you so much... 🤗

Well, you are gonna be a lot more emotional when you watch the episode at night. 😊

And don't worry. It's just one chapter and that too a minor one. Remember I told you about a FF I had once written for a friend? In some chapters I just added details because they were important but I felt exhausted myself. I think I was happier than her when I could finally get to the original story. 😆

So no problem at all. Take your time. 

One good thing about today's episode - I have finally gotten the much needed push to finish my FF. In fact, brainstorming right now. I just hope the ending can become at least 10% of the real one.  

Well, you are gonna be a lot more emotional when you watch the episode at night. 😊

Well, I guess so...

And don't worry. It's just one chapter and that too a minor one. Remember I told you about a FF I had once written for a friend? In some chapters I just added details because they were important but I felt exhausted myself. I think I was happier than her when I could finally get to the original story. 😆

I agree it is a minor chapter... And yes, I remember what you told about that FF.

Here, I was actually annoyed on my diary... Galat time par khatam ho gayi. And then, I didn't even edit it after I posted that. This is the main reason of my disappointment that it didn't turn out to be what I wanted.

So no problem at all. Take your time. 

Well, next chapter is almost finished... I might post it by Wed.

One good thing about today's episode - I have finally gotten the much needed push to finish my FF. In fact, brainstorming right now. I just hope the ending can become at least 10% of the real one.  

Arre waah!! Now, this is a really good news... I have been waiting for your story... 

I am so excited now!!! 🥳 

Prologue: It's an interesting concept, and the reference which I have heard and seen is Andhakasur, but cool to find a different name, and we can already guess the power and mystery.

Chapter 1: I believe, you are writing story based on characters of Nazar, so we can take reference. So siblings scenes, perfect and Ansh bhi wow, humesha forgets important dates, and all pulling his leg and transitions was bang on. Neha involving Saavi is wise, and padosi interaction too was epic!! Ab har koi Rathods ki tarha always ready to party nahi hoga..ofc again kuch secret hoga.

Waah so your birthday matches with Piya. 

Chapter 2 : NiSa are always interesting, vikramjeet thing was really cool and description of Kundalis and NiSa knowing how Piya is in danger and her powers won't work, gosh.

Chapter 3: It was interesting again, NiSa come to take Piya and alert Rathods. Even Ansh's concern for Piya was apt, but then Ansh taking so much time to leave and Ved not allowing was stretched..I felt. Could be improvised..

Prologue: It's an interesting concept, and the reference which I have heard and seen is Andhakasur, but cool to find a different name, and we can already guess the power and mystery.

You are absolutely right on your reference to Andhakasur. That name gave me this idea of Antakasur.

Chapter 1: I believe, you are writing story based on characters of Nazar, so we can take reference. So siblings scenes, perfect and Ansh bhi wow, humesha forgets important dates, and all pulling his leg and transitions was bang on. Neha involving Saavi is wise, and padosi interaction too was epic!! Ab har koi Rathods ki tarha always ready to party nahi hoga..ofc again kuch secret hoga.

Well, I wanted to start the first chapter on a light note... Bas.

About the neighbours, well we will see... 

Waah so your birthday matches with Piya. 

Yes, my birthday matches with Pia.

Chapter 2 : NiSa are always interesting, vikramjeet thing was really cool and description of Kundalis and NiSa knowing how Piya is in danger and her powers won't work, gosh.

Thanks... 😊

Chapter 3: It was interesting again, NiSa come to take Piya and alert Rathods. Even Ansh's concern for Piya was apt, but then Ansh taking so much time to leave and Ved not allowing was stretched..I felt. Could be improvised..

Yes it was stretched... 

In fact, I told Nushy too that my diary finished in the middle of the chapter and I wrote the remaining half in a new diary. This is why, I got messed up.

And while posting it too, I had posted the first half earlier and then posted the remaining half. Uske upar se, I didn't edit it after posting.

Isiliye itna mess ho gaya...

And isiliye, I wasn't happy with the outcome...

Originally posted by: Nikki_srk

Prologue: It's an interesting concept, and the reference which I have heard and seen is Andhakasur, but cool to find a different name, and we can already guess the power and mystery.

You are absolutely right on your reference to Andhakasur. That name gave me this idea of Antakasur.

Chapter 1: I believe, you are writing story based on characters of Nazar, so we can take reference. So siblings scenes, perfect and Ansh bhi wow, humesha forgets important dates, and all pulling his leg and transitions was bang on. Neha involving Saavi is wise, and padosi interaction too was epic!! Ab har koi Rathods ki tarha always ready to party nahi hoga..ofc again kuch secret hoga.

Well, I wanted to start the first chapter on a light note... Bas.

About the neighbours, well we will see... 

Waah so your birthday matches with Piya. 

Yes, my birthday matches with Pia.

Chapter 2 : NiSa are always interesting, vikramjeet thing was really cool and description of Kundalis and NiSa knowing how Piya is in danger and her powers won't work, gosh.

Thanks... 😊

Chapter 3: It was interesting again, NiSa come to take Piya and alert Rathods. Even Ansh's concern for Piya was apt, but then Ansh taking so much time to leave and Ved not allowing was stretched..I felt. Could be improvised..

Yes it was stretched... 

In fact, I told Nushy too that my diary finished in the middle of the chapter and I wrote the remaining half in a new diary. This is why, I got messed up.

And while posting it too, I had posted the first half earlier and then posted the remaining half. Uske upar se, I didn't edit it after posting.

Isiliye itna mess ho gaya...

And isiliye, I wasn't happy with the outcome...

Thanks.

Cool..

:))

You are welcome.

Oh, that happens then..cos you have a flow. Just shared, hope you didn't mind.

Just saw you put next chapter, but will comment when you edit, as you have reserved still, 😃

Oh, that happens then..cos you have flow. Just shared, hope you didn't mind.

Oh come on!! Why will I mind? I always say that if you guys don't like anything, just say it. 😊

In fact, I myself didn't like this chapter much... Jaisa socha tha, waisa nahi nikala.

Just saw you put next chapter, but will comment when you edit, as you have reserved still, 😃

Abhi usme kaafi kuch baaki hai... Thoda time lagega. 😊

Waise, do you want me to PM you too when I complete the chapter?? Or will you check the title yourself?

Originally posted by: Nikki_srk

Oh, that happens then..cos you have flow. Just shared, hope you didn't mind.

Oh come on!! Why will I mind? I always say that if you guys don't like anything, just say it. 😊

In fact, I myself didn't like this chapter much... Jaisa socha tha, waisa nahi nikala.

Just saw you put next chapter, but will comment when you edit, as you have reserved still, 😃

Abhi usme kaafi kuch baaki hai... Thoda time lagega. 😊

Waise, do you want me to PM you too when I complete the chapter?? Or will you check the title yourself?

Bas kabhi toh formality aa jati hai. 😃 Happens.

Okay dear. That's cool. Take your time. Now since am back to the forum, no need to PM. I will check from title.