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Hello guys this is Abhijeet Here.😃
I never thought that i could write stories. I am not much of a writer. I only occasionally write poems. But this place is a factory of talented writers. I just loved to read your stories and fan fiction.

This story is dedicated to my sister octothrope who encouraged me to write a story. She trusted very much in my ability to write a story and due to her encouragement i am here today.

But when i had sat down to write it, everything was jumbled up in my mind. I was unsure of what i was writing and i had envisioned the story in a different way. But i am very much happy with my final output.😊

But when i had sat down to write it, everything was jumbled up in my mind. I was unsure of what i was writing and i had envisioned the story in a different way. But i am very much happy with my final output.
😃

OK enough of my rant and without further ado, here is the story.😊

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MORNING AND NIGHT

Naina Maheshwari woke up with a jolt. Dreams had still not left her eyes. she was still swooning in her imaginary cocoon. She felt like someone had sealed her eyes with a spoon of adhesive and she was struggling to separate both of her eyelids. Mucus and a warm sweat spread all over her face. Slowly she opened her eyes to a dark world full of ghosts and enchantments with not a human in sight. She felt a raw grip on her waist and a heavy head in her bosom. Her husband Sameer Maheshwari was sleeping peacefully on her chest without a care in the world. She always loved to see him sleeping like a baby. He had a peaceful pallor on his face. She remembered how preeti used to sleep very easily. She admitted that it was a kind of boon for them. But she couldn't attain their state. Vague and psychedelic thoughts always encroached her mind taking her on an unprecedented journey. She found random characters following her everywhere urging to hear her story. And she could not do justice to any of them.

Slowly she tries to free herself from his hold and placed his head on the pillow neatly organized against backrest of the bed. She got up and went to the window. On the other side Sameer Maheshwari slowly opened his eyes to see if his wife naina was there. He let a huge sigh of relief when he found her to be not there. He could not do it anymore. He would have to tell her. He knew that it will break all her dreams and hopes but he just could not live with this lie anymore. He knew it was his fault. He should have been more careful. He tries to distract himself by observing the surroundings but is blinded by its darkness. An unconditioned fury rose in him catapulting his nerves and senses as he writhes in emotional pain.

Now Sameer understood why people said that mental pain was more excruciating than physical pain. In physical pain there are signs of healing but in mental pain there are no hope that you will heal. Sameer knew that whatever happened will leave a huge scar on his heart that he will cherish forever. Sameer had always seen broken relationships in his life. First the death of his father, then the abandonment of his mother from him and lastly hatred of his mother's in laws for him. Sameer was not always bitter to them. He could barely understand what happened at the age of four when his world was pulled apart. He was distraught and was continuously pulling vishakha's saree asking questions about his father. He frolicked around his lifeless body hitting his chest playfully with his little palms.

"papa utho na. AApne to kaha tha ki aap mere liye bahot se khilone layenge.Aur hum milke khelenge,He continuously greased his doll like fingers on his chest. Then he moves his hands towards his head and cupped his shrivelled face in his palms and tried moving it with all force.

The whole gathering was silent. They were unable to reveal the truth to the little boy. Sameer slowly moved his head unto his chest and lied down there. After all the playful bickering he has finally turned silent. Papa ab main bhi aapke saath soyunga. Aur jab aap uthenge mery liye jo khilona laye ho naa wo mujhe dena. Aap mujhse bach nahin sakte samjhe . Aap peechli baar bhi khilona nahi laye the aur is baar mein appko jaane nahin doonga,samjhe.He clutches his father's arms tightly and closed his eyes.But he did not understand one thing, why was his father lying on the white sheet and why there were so many people around them dressed in white?

It was a dreadful winter evening and swift cold breeze was blowing outside the window.Sameer suddenly got up and tried pulling his arm. "papa hum na andar chalte hain.Pata hai mamma ne aaj mujhe seasons ke baare mein sikhaya.Aur ye winter season hai .Aur mumma ne yeh bhi bataya ki winter season mein bahar khelne se sardi hoti hai aur app to neeche so rahe ho.Aapko sardi ho jaayegi.Bed pe so jaana,Sameer said as he incessantly tried to pull his father.

Vishakha was on the verge of the tears.All of the relatives there had motioned her to keep quiet.abhi Sameer bacha hai.Wo nahi samjhega aur nahi seh paayega.Wo aapko sawal pucchega. Unko uthane ki koshish karega.Aur wo humesha ki tarah roothke unke chaati pe so jaayega. Aap chup rehna. Wo so jaane ke baad hum use unse alag kardenge.Aur baad mein dheere dheere use sacchai bata denge par aap uske saamne roiyega mat.Varna vo sawal pucchega aur iss baar humare pass koi jawab nahi hoga.

But she had to break the silence. It was getting unbearable for her. They had to put force on him to separate him from his father. And when his mother said that "wo humesha taron ke paas chale gaye Hain, He felt some unknown pain or emotion gripping his body.

He didn't understand the concept of death then but now he does. Suddenly Sameer felt a kind moist warmth on his cheeks. Dainty droplets of tears escaped his eyes in quick succession as he pulled himself from the nest of painful memories. This is all that he could remember clearly about his father. The rest of the details was vague and incomprehensible. After her mother's marriage to Mr.somani, his step-father he had tried to live there and accept the family but the evil dadi didn't liked his presence and he was sent away to boarding school. Then he found love in the most unexpected place in unexpected time in form of his nanaji, munna and pandit and finally in Naina. That scar was completely healed by her love but now he again was lying there wounded by betrayal of his own people. The mamaji who had been the most trusted aide of his nanaji and who loved him like his own son had betrayed him. It happened six days ago. He had just taken over the chair and was checking accounts when he found a deficit in them. A shortly later when the peon came with the bank notice, he was shocked to see the amount of pending settlement. He had called guptaji, the assistant manager of the factory to his cabin to enquire what had happened. Guptaji at first was hesitant to reveal anything but under his constant persuasion had revealed that mamaji had misappropriated the funds. He never kept a definite record of the factory expenses. He always fiddled with the money kept for business for his own personal needs. Sameer had calmly enquired about everything.

"Guptaji aap mere pita saman hai to aap mujhse please jhoot mat boliyega,he asked him quietly. Wo sameer ji aapke mamaji hi sab accounts check karte the aur jab mein unko employees ko payment karne ke liye paisa mangta tha wo humesha mere baat ko taal dete the aur kehte the ki agle mahine de denge iss baar bahut machinery pe kharcha karna hai aur raw materials khareedna hai aur isiliye unko adjust karne ke liye bolo,guptaji said with a glint of trepidation.Aur kyunki wo app se check sign karva ke late the to mai bhi sochta tha shayad aapko pata ho

Sameer couid not believe this. Suddenly everything started falling into place. He never asked mamaji why he needed those frequent signatures aur rishton mein ye sab thodehi jaruri hota hai he thought. But mamaji had played his game nicely . "sonu beta sonu beta karke sab kuch apna naam kar liya aur usme bahut investors aur bank ka paisa bhi laga hua tha and he has left me with a broken company, sameered muttered in present. He had also asked guptaji why employees had not still left. Guptaji had then replied that they were indebted to nanaji so despite their problem they chose to stay back. He had barged into mamaji's house only to find different people staying there. On further enquiry he had got to know that mamaji has fled from the country with no trace.

All these thoughts barely allowed him to sleep. He knew that if he couldn't arrange money then he might have to go to jail. He had been given two weeks of time from bank to deposit the money. He had no option but to sell their properties to pay the amount. After selling all of them they might get on road but he wouid still have some money left from the collateral. He was acting before naina like everything was fine but chocked by his guilt. "She does not deserve this.I had pulled herself to this,he blamed himself.

On the other hand, naina was thinking about her failure. She had submitted the manuscripts to various publishers only to be rejected. She hated asking him for favour but had no option. She had to ask him to self-publish her book because the genre she was writing was new and publishers told her that it won't sell.

Naina returned to bed lost in thoughts only to find Sameer weeping. "kya hua Sameer,she asked in a concerned tone .She switched on the lights of the room. All the ominous evils vanished into the dark horizon leaving the room in silence. she kept patting his back and a tint of sadness pitched in as Sameer told he everything.

"Sameer sab kuch bech do", Naina said with an unwavering tone

"yeh tum kya keh rahi ho. Maine tumse kaha tha ki main tumhaare saare sapne poore karunga par main nahi kar paya
"Par yeh tumhari galti nahin he Sameer. Kya kuch bhi pata nahin he kii wo kahan gayein hain"

"Nahi naina unhone saare sabut mita diye Hain. Main unpar itna blindly trust karta tha ki mujhe kuch pata hi nahin chala.Ab tak to wo dono ne apna naam bhi badal diya hoga aur kyunki mein malik hoon unpar koi sawal nahi uthayega"

"Par yeh toh galat hai na. vo aise kaise kar sakte hain.Aur main yahan tumhe madad mangne waali thi. Tumne mujhe apna nahi samjha Sameer itna sab kucch ho gaya aur tumne mujhe kuch bataya nahin sab chup chap sehte rahe."

Naina was crying .Sameer wiped her tears. He can see everything getting ruined but not tears in her eyes.

"Tum ro maat mein humein bachane ke liye kuch bhi karoonga. Mein sab kuch bech dunga . hum Mumbai chale jaayenge .middle class ghar mein bhi reh lenge par mein jail nahin jaoonga.I am sorry naina main tumhe wo saari khusiyaan nahi de paaonga.mein tumhe apne sapnon ke saath samjhauta karne ke liye keh raha hoon.mein bahut boora hoon naina. Tum iss ghar mein bahut se sapne leke aayi thi. Sab meri galati hai"

Sameer clenched his fist with anger and exasperation. Naina lovingly looked at her husband. He had indeed grown into a matured man.

"tumhe kya lagta hai maine kya sirf tumhare saath acche waqt kaatne ke liye shaadi ki thi. Hum pati-patni hain Sameer aur hum sab kuch baantenge . Hum khushiyan aur gham dono mein ek dusre ka saaya banke rahenge. Hum ek dusre ko adhoorapan ko apna pyaar se poora karenge. Hum ek doosre ke saath hain to kuch bhi jeet sakte hain. Tumhe yaad hai maine tumhe kya kaha tha. Tum ek kamre ka makaan bhi loge to bhi main usme Khushi Khushi reh jaaungi. Tum jahaan rahoge wahi mera ghar hoga"

But still Sameer was not convinced. He wanted naina to think for the second time

"Tum chachaji ke ghar reh jao naina. Main Mumbai akela jaoonga. Settlement ke baad humare pass bas paanch laakh hi reh jaayenge. Aur main koi case bhi nahi kar sakta. Main kuch kaam shuru karne ke baad mein hi tumhe lene aaonga. Aur tumhare writer banne ka sapna bhi toh poora karna hai. Mere saath kahan ghoomti phirogi"

"tumhaare pass paanch lakh rupiye hain Sameer. Yeh bahot badi rakam hai. Aur humhare beech mein yeh tumhare mera kabse shuru ho gaya. Kya tumhaare sapne mere nahin hai"

Naina looked at her husband with a sense of deep love and redemption. Sameer was moved by her words.

" Tum itni acchi kyun ho naina. Kyu pyaar karte ho mujhe itna. Main kabhi kabhi sochta hoon ki mein itnaa pyar deserve nahi karta"

"offo Mr maheswari aap thoda dimaag ko shaant rakhenge. Itna mat socho jo hoga dekha jayega. Abhi aur ek hafte hain na."
"par sab kuch settle karne mein time to lagega na naina.itni jaidi kaise ho paayega"

Naina looked at her husband. Maybe he was right. Things are not so as easy they seem to be. But she knew one thing.

"Sameer agar koshish kiya jaaye to sab kuch possible hai. Aur tumne hi toh kaha tha ki agar tum saath ho to mein sab kucch jeet sakta hoon"

Naina starts to sing to increase the spirits of Sameer.
"Humraahi mere humraahi,
Jo tu sang hai to darr kya,
Chalna hai tere chhaon mein mujhe,
Mere humraahi

"kitna bura gaate ho naina. Tumhare aawaz ko yeh gaana suit nahi karta"

"jaise tum bade Kishore kumaar ya kumaar sanu ho. Tum accha guitar bajate ho parr tumhari awaaz bilkul acchi nahi hai"

"tum aisa kaise keh sakte ho. Main muh phulla kar baith jaoonga aur tumse baat bhi nahi karunga"

"mujhe mere pati ko kaise sambhalna bakhoobi aata hai"

"oye hoye sab aata hai.to phir batao"
Sameer winked at her with a smile on his lips. He inch closer and tried to kiss her lips. But naina moved quickly.

"Yeh toh cheating hai na naina. Tumhe sab aata hai to yeh bhi to aata hoga na

" aata hai par abhi nahi Sameer. Abhi hum bahot serious topic discuss kar rahein hai. Toh baad mein. Chalo iss bahane tum khush to huye varna tumhara sada hua chehra subah subah dekhna padta

"subah-subah. Par ab to raat hai. Subah hone ko bahot der hai naina"

"mere buddhu maheswariji ghadi pe zaara nazar dalo. Main jab uthi thi tab chaar baje the. Aur sadhe paanch bajne wale hain.mujhe to laga tha ki tum so rahe ho. Tumne jaise mujhko pakad ke rakha tha mai to soch rahi thi ki tum shaanti se so rahe ho.p ar tum toh..."

Naina become sad for a while. They had been talking lightly for a while but still the heaviness of truth persisted. Meanwhile morning started to set in slowly. Nature was preparing it's forces for the daily big fight. Birds have left their nest in search of foods and milkman and newspaper boy's rant was clearly heard across the road.

"Are naina tum to udaas ho gayi"
"kaise na houn Sameer. Kuch to sahi nahi hai"
"Ye tum keh rahi ho naina. Are tum to mera hosla ho. Agar tum hi toot jayogi to mein khudko kaise sambhaal paunga"

Sameer looked expectantly into naina's eyes. It reflected love and care. He wanted her to be strong like she always is.

"Tum to meri masterni,teacher ka jasoos naina ho na. jo humesha class mein first aati thi aur ek mark ke liye bhi ladh jaati thi"

"Wo school tha Sameer. Ab ham bade ho chukein hai.Aur uske saath saath homari responsibility bhi badhti jaa rahi hai. Tab galti karo to sudharne ka bahot mauka tha.par ab utna aasan nahi hai"

"par jo bhi ho naina hum milke jeet lenge. Kyunki itni strong humraahi sabko haasil nahin hota"
Sameer winked at naina with lustful eyes.

"Naina yeh kyaa hai yaar. Kabhi tum udass hoti ho toh kabhi mein. Hum kya Zindagi bhar aise ek dusre se baatein karenge,ya phir"
Sameer toned down his voice with a frenzied seductiveness.

Naina knew he was stressed. Maybe that is the reason he wanted to hold her and make love to her. They both had their own tribulations and wanted to lose them for some times. And ecstasies will set them free from their human bondage.

"kyu nahi main to humesha tumhare saath aise hi baat karungi,samjhe. Kyunki aage aur bhi challenges aayenge na. To baat karni padegi"

A sparked was filled in naina's eye. She knew that with Sameer there is no cage. With Sameer she is a swift encroaching the sky of life travelling to distant horizons.

" Accha to madam ko baatein karna hai. To hum kya sirf aisi vaali baatein karenge,waisivali nahin"

Sameer's eyes reflected the heat. The seductive glaze that he gave burnt every part of naina's body. Naina felt like a phoenix reborn from the ashes and a she felt very horny. She just wanted to break free. But she wanted to tease Sameer. "ab meetha chahiye to maheswariji ko thoda paseena to bahana padega, she giggled as she thought.

"Kaisivali baatein Sameer,bolo na please. Bolo naa"
Naina made a puppy face filled with innocent expressions. She pitched in her voice very softly with pressed lips and calm eyes. Sameer was confused like hell. "main jo bhi karoon ye ulta kyon samajhti hai, he thought with desperation takin a toll over his mind.

"bata doon.soch lo. Bhaag to nahi jaogi"
"Ab main bhala kyon bhagne lagi. Tumhi bata do"
Sameer started stroking her lips and hair with his fingers. He was waiting for that one look that wouid set him free. But naina wanted to know something.

" Sameer tumhe nahi lagta yeh galat ho raha hai. Hum itne bade pareshani mein hain aur hum yahan maze kar rahe hain.kucch socho?"

"meri maa tum pravachan band karogi. Are to usi se bachne ke liye hi toh yeh sab kar rahein hain"

"kucch nahi milega tumhe"
"jaise mujhe koi ummed tha. Jabse aayi ho tabse to kucch nahi mila.meri kismet to phooti hai. EK ped bhi tumse accha romance kar sakta hai"

" To jao na ped se hi romance karo. Main hi kyu chahiye"
Sameer was tounge tied. He knew that every husband had to face this. " log aise thodhi na kehte hain ki biwi ek khoonkhar jaanwar hai,he thought.

Naina was enjoying every bit of it. She loved to tease Sameer. She giggled silently her mind as she saw his morose face. She again glanced at the clock. This night was something special. They opened up to each other in the way they have never opened. Though they were doing masti right now. They knew that this was the toughest phase of their lives. They are living in a jungle. There will be many poachers who will try to pull them apart but they have to stay strong in the battle.

"Are tum phirse sochne lagayi. Meri lekhika biwi kahin tum mujhe apni kahani ka villain to nahi banane ki soch rahe ho"

Naina looked at him in a poised and brooding manner.
"ho bhi sakta hai. Tumhare alava mere life ka bada villain kaun ho sakta hai"

Naina wanted her question to be answered. ab aur nahi satayungi. bechara ghayal ho gaya hai.Par ab bhi villain main hi hoon,she smiled at her thoughts.

Sameer eyed her with desire and lust. She knew at instant what he wanted.

"ab iss bada villain apne heroine ke saath bahut maze karne vala hai. Tumhe aitraaz hai kya"

The clock struck six with the dawn setting on the dark world in full form. Like darkness is momentary.so is light. Neither can strive without each other. Both Sameer and naina knew that this light is momentary and soon they will have to face a huge boulder of darkness. But for this moment the want to get lost in this light leaving all darkness behind.

Naina ran away stealthily. Sameer also ran after her. Their happy voices echoed throughout the mansion. But soon they got tired and returned to the bed. With beating hearts. Pulsating pulse and sweaty bodies they fall upon the bed like little kids unaware about all the avalanches of the world. As they took each other into arms they shed all clothes of inhibition and made passionate love.

Nature was smiling secretly looking at them. The morning has set in giving them the oxygen of hope to survive yet another dwindling darkness of night. Trees were dancing in then joy of morning dew waiting for the harsh sunshine to permeate their strong membrane.
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So guys this is the story. Please read and give your reviews. Your thoughts matter the most to me as it boosts my confidence to push myself more into my creative pursuits.😃

Eagerly waiting to read your responses😉

P.S- I Have turned senior member with this post😃

P.P.S- Have a nice day and always believe in yourself😆😊









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Posted: 6 years ago
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Aww Abhi. Thanks Bhai for writing this shot on my insistence🤗. And congratulations, finally, no more stalking😆😆. (You listening Labhya?😆)


Coming to the story,
It's beautiful. The starting of it made me think if it's a dream or something but as it gradually moved, ah! Its interesting. That part of the flashback of Sameer's childhood when his Dad passed away, I won't lie, I had a lump in my throat and my eyes welled up because I have seen deaths and all that a lot. It just leaves me with that memory of loosing someone and all the happy memories. I'm sorry I won't be able to put it in words.


Then, I'm glad Sameer and Naina sat and talked about the problems that they are into and what could be done. I'm sure if anything like this happens, Sameer will think of leaving Naina with Chachaji until he could do something and Naina would tell him Kahan Sameer hoga Wahin uska ghar bhi. Sometimes in life, you only need that one person and nothing more, no bungalows no abroad holidays nothing, just that one person.


And of course, I'm happy that it was too sad and serious types. It had it's fun elements and that did leave a big smile on my face. Loved the way you wrote it. I think you already know I'm your fan😃. I hope you do write more. And thank you so so so much for writing this one and dedicating it to me. Means a lot❤️.
Edited by Octothorpe - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
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abhi this was too good
where were you hiding my friend
No one can say that this was your first piece of writing
I was completely engrossed in the story from the beginning to the end.
I loved it
Sameer and Naina though are facing the darkness in life currently
but with their love and hardwork light will soon knock their door.
Looking forward to read more of this
Continue soon

and yes congratulations on turning a senior member
this is just the beginning
Edited by munchkinland - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Awesome write up...apecially you are thw one who gvn us a scenario of sameers state when he lost his father...
Cmg to present i think same is going to happen in show also it will be painful to see sameer with no money his poor self bt atlast naina is with him and will boost him to show his guts and be sameer jaiparkaah maheshwari.
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Posted: 6 years ago
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First of all thank you so much for the pm
Coming to the update .. I'm speechless
It had all the emotions ...
Sameer's childhood made me cry ..you have portrayed the scenario so well .. I was in tears
Then samaina sharing their pain opening up to each other
This is what I always crave for ..
The title of the story is perfect
They knew they are in for lots of trouble but their togetherness and love will make them win in life
Starting a story is easy but giving a proper end to it is very difficult and you managed to give such a beautiful ending
Take a bow
I'm really looking forward to read more from you

Love
Laalchi reader

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Posted: 6 years ago
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This was soo beautifully written
Awesome
Sameer naina are in the phase now where they will have to face the harsh realities of life
and their love and companionship will be put too test as well
They will fight and win
continue soon
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Congratulations abhi dadajii for turning into a senior member
Ab to aap OFFICIALY senior member hogaye yaar...

Mtlb bade log... To dadaji bulana to fir bnta hi hai😃

For the update...

Its RESERVED😃
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: Octothorpe

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Aww Abhi. Thanks Bhai for writing this shot on my insistence 🤗. And congratulations, finally, no more stalking😆😆. (You listening Labhya?😆)




No miss octo i didn't hear ...

What did you say ????..

You can't stop me from doing any shararat dearie😃😃
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: Labhya


No miss octo i didn't hear ...

What did you say ????..

You can't stop me from doing any shararat dearie 😃😃


Nope, not stopping, just telling he will not just stalk anymore. 😆😆
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Very well written abhi
Badhai on turning senior member 😊

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