BRUISED :A MEEVAN STORY ( CHAPTER 2 UPDATED ) PAGE 3

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hi guys finally got little free time from clg so thought of writing something . Not good at writing so plz.tell where to improve
DISCLAMAR : a story and characters are completely diff from show if possible try to relate with them

TEASER:
It was dark at night raining heavily for some it was rain of badluck but who knew at for someone the night which always used to be darker than this night but bring some light
A speeding car was approaching a T point . A terrified girl wearing a bridal dress and sweating, breathing heavily was running toward T point. Suddenly a sound of screeching brakes of speeding car is heard. A young guy in his 20s gets out of his car and is shocked

Why is he shocked ? Who is he? Why was the girl terrified ? Why was she wearing bridal dress? Whats is store for this T point?

Stay tuned


Guys i know this is not good but will try to improve and plz do comment and tell me how was the teaser
Havent thought if it is FF OS TS it all will depend on your response and offcourse time i will get free from college
I promise the story wont be as bad as teaser
Do tell


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Posted: 7 years ago
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Love to read. Update soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Nice teaser, will be waiting to read this!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Nice teaser Continue soon please
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Chapter -1 FIRST MEETING
Amaya: ( scared) shit bhai mai maine jaan k nai kiya
( tears started rolling her eyes)
Vivaan : Amaya stopping crying i know it was a mistake but ye ladki car k samane khud kyu aai
Aamaya was a medical student she composed herself
And checked the girl
Amaya : bhai her pulse is weak . We should take her home and i ll just call doctor
Several questions raised in Vivaans mind looking at girl
Who was she , why was she in bridal dress , why would she come in front of car , has she run away from wedding but he knew that is was need of hour to take girl to his home
They picked her up . Put her on back seat Amaya gave her first aid
Vivaan was driving car
Vivaan : Amaya who is she and did you look at her she is in bridal dress what if she is married her husband might be looking aur koi kyu car k neeche ayaga
Ik baar jab ye stable ho jaye to hum isko ghar bhej dennge
Amaya : ok bhai i know dont worry vaise external.injuries to nai hai shayad she fainted
They reached home put her on amayas bed
Doctor: Amaya injuries to nai hai she fainted due to hypoglycemia isko hosh aa jayega 4 ghanta mein
Amaya : thank you doc
Amaya saw the state of girl . She just took a sponge Nd washed the mud off her body and changed her clothes
She saw how beautiful she was . Her face was pious but she felt something amiss looking at her

AFTER FOUR HOURS
Girl was slowly opening her eyes she looked around her
She was in a unrecognised space . Room was much bigger than hers . She turned and incidentally vase on side table fell
Amaya got up with jerk
Amaya : with sigh relief) thank god you got up you scared me
Girl was tired and was just recollecting were she is.She was confused Amaya knew and clarified
Amaya : you are at my house vo tum faint ho gai thi to mein leke aa gai vaise hi amaya she said extending her hand for friendship
Girl was looking at her with confused looks
Amaya took back her hand bcz she knew state of the girl
Amaya : tumhara naam kya hai aur from where you are kisi ko call karna hai koi family vale ka no.

Hearing the word family her eyes started filling with fear
Amaya noticed and thought it was due to accident
Soon sound of. Door knob turning came
They both turned to look at the door it was vivaan
Suddenly seeing vivaan girl started panicking
She started breathing heavily, she got up buried her face under legs
Amaya noticed you ok kya hua vivaan also worried
And approached girl hearing his footsteps
He started crying with fear and started clutching her self tight
Amaya and Vivaan were shocked they had no idea why a girl who was just fine started reacting this way
Was she scared of Vivaan but why

Sorry guys i dont know how it is but just wanted to pen something diff
I will try to improve furthur chapters

Plz give your feed backs
Coming chapters will be good if you all are interseted in reading
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Posted: 7 years ago
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It's very good and interesting dear
Continue soon!!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Pls continue loved to read this story
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Sounds really interesting! Please continue! :)
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Good writing attempt
P.S: can i add u as a writer for Raat kamal hai mask party summary ?
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: .ROSY.

Good writing attempt

P.S: can i add u as a writer for Raat kamal hai mask party summary ?

Thank u and yes you can add me

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