Avneil new ff post leap *neilanjana* part 4 page 2

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hi guys . A small ff on post leap track.
My take on it.
Chappals welcome.
Size 9!
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Part 1.

He saw her.
He thought he was hallucinating.
He rubbed his eyes to see whether the image vanishes.
But to his shock, no it doesn't.
She is in front of him.
He says avni.
He rushes towards her and hugs her for like 10 minutes.
Both of them cry when suddenly he pushes her.
He Shouts "traitor","dhokebaaz"ho tum avni.
U left me when you promised me that you will never leave. You are a coward person, you are very selfish, u left me.
And avni instead of fighting back stays mum.
She runs inside the orphanage shuts the room and cries and says" main Tumhe phirse nahi kho sakti neil,aaj tumne mujhe kamzor Kar Diya, I am sorry Neil, mere kaaran tumhara yeah haal hai, I am sorry, but ab tum gusse me ho and main Mana nahi paungi kyunki mein haar maana Sikh liya Hai. Either you will leave me or will take time to forgive me but I will accept whatever you decide."

This was a short glimpse.
Will continue if I get good response.
Thanks in advance.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Size 9 chappals🤣
Nice concept.Do continue.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: drbeth

Size 9 chappals🤣

Nice concept.Do continue.

Thanks for replying.
I am a big fan of u ,dragon ,Oswald do wale, and many others.
I didn't get proper response for previous ff so left it.
Thanks againnn
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: neilavni

Thanks for replying.
I am a big fan of u ,dragon ,Oswald do wale, and many others.
I didn't get proper response for previous ff so left it.
Thanks againnn

My fan😲
U must hv confused me wid some1 else😆


Do continue to write even if the response is low.People read it.Just give dem some tym😊.Besides its a gud platform to be creative.😊.All the best.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: drbeth

My fan😲
U must hv confused me wid some1 else😆


Do continue to write even if the response is low.People read it.Just give dem some tym😊.Besides its a gud platform to be creative.😊.All the best.

Yes your fan.
Thanks for the motivation.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Part 2.

Neil was sitting outside, near the beach when sunheri came and sat beside.
"10 saal tumne yeh sochkar jiya ki avni Mar gayi and aaj tum usse mile, toh shock mein the, I know boht muskil tha, I won't say ki u are wrong but main yeh bhi nahi kahungi ki avni galat Hai. Tumhe saara Sach nahi pata Hai Neil, tum nahi jaante ho kinn halato Mei avni ko yeh decision Lena pada." Said sunheri.
"Toh batao mujhe sunheri, chup kyu ho, batao mujhe ki Meri Kya galti Hai, batao mujhe ki mujhe saza kyu mili, batao mujhe ki aisa Kya hua ki avni ko yeh saara decision Lena pada?" Said Neil
"I know Neil ki yeh sab batane ka haq avni ko Hai, lekin right now mujhe sambhaalna padega, main Tumhe Sach bataungi phir uske bad tumhi samjh jaana ki Kya karna Hai."said sunheri.
She said him everything about vidyut telling avni about prakash about how dayawanti appeared infront of avni and told her about what family means and she doesn't deserve a family, she is only darkness and she also tells him about avni's fear of losing prakash,Neil and his family.
She tells him how avni decided to walk on the right path and how avni follows his ideas, beliefs and how she doesn't choose shortcut.
She tells him about the orphanage and avni's thoughts about it. She tells him how avni has changed from fire to water.
"Sab sun na tumne Neil, Tumhe pata Hai saisha hi Misti Hai,avni ne boht ache se sabko bada Kiya hai, use bhi boht kuch Saha Hai Neil, ab tum bolo Kya kehna chaoge?"asked sunheri.
"Mere pass kehne ke liye kuch nahi hai, avni ne apne aap ko mere liye mita Diya, badal gayi woh, yeh sab sunke mein aur toot Gaya hu yaar, par mein apni avni ko waapis leke aungi , yeh Mera vaada Hai tumse sunheri." Says Neil.
Sunheri gets happy and both of them chat for some more time.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Part 3.

Neil goes inside sukkon house and meets the kids... When kids ask him who he is, he explains them the whole scenario in such a way that kids understand easily, he skips out many parts and tells the story..
Misthi comes to him and says " superman finally aap aagaye, angel need aapko boht miss Kiya, woh jaan di ban gayi par mere Dil me hamesha ke liye wo Meri angel hi Hai. And mujhe pata Hai ab aap angel ko thik Kar Doge." Saying so she cries and hugs Neil and he reciprocates it with tears.
He then goes to avni's room and sees her sitting on the floor... Scared and crying and his heart breaks into million pieces seeing her in this condition..
He thinks that "avni kitni badal gayi Hai...ladna choddh Diya Hai usne. But mein use waapis launga and yakeen dilaunga ki woh roshini Hai andhera nahi."
He goes and quietly sits near avni and softly calls out her name to which see looks at him with teary eyes.
"Neil main jaanti hu ki tum gussa ho aur hona bhi chaiye lekin Maine yeh sab tumhare liye Kiya , mein manhus hu aur paap hu aur sirf andhera hu, vidyut ne jab Mujhee daraya tab Maine soch liya Tha ki main apna existence mita dungi isliye tumse door challi gayi lekin mere har saans Mei tum ho aur har yaad mein tum ho, mere naye naam Mei tum ho aur mere ankhon me tum ho , Maine wada kiya Tha tumse ki khud see pehle hamesha Tumhe rakhungi aur uske liye hi Maine yeh sab Kiya please mujhe maaf kardo. Please , tum Jo decision loge mein accept karungi." Saying so avni breaks down.

"Tumhe Kya laga avni mein tumhe bhul gaya ? Bilkul bhi nahi avni. Tumhare mangalsutra ko Maine bracelet ki tarah pehna. Rj Neil Khanna ban gaya, logo ko apni pyaar ki dastaan sunai aur to aur apni jaan khatre mein daalta hu taaki tum sapne Mei hi sahi ,mujhe dikho , gharwalo ke saamne Khush rehta Tha lekin andar hi andar tootta rehta tha. Raat bhar jaag Kar rota rehta Tha. Jab tum mujhe dikhi aisa jaga jaise jannat sahi mein mujhe mil Gaya. Main boht Khush hu aaj avni, boht jyaada , hum dono ne ek dusre ko ek dusre ke liye mita Hai, humne pyaar ki saari hadde paar Kar di aur ab mein tumhe apne aap see kabhi door nahi karunga,yehi Hai tumhara saza, Tumhe mere saath Zindagi guzarni hogi, hum milke saare bachon ka dhyaan rakhenge aur tum yeh mat sochna ki tum andhera ho, tum humare parivaar aur mere Zindagi ki roshni ho, I LOVE U A Lot AVNI!!!" SAYS NEIL!

And here avni is having Happyy tears but she is lost in some deep thoughts which is troubling her.

Next part soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Part 3
Avni is lost deep in thoughts " mujhe Neil ko Bata Dena chahiye ki nahi? Bata deti hu... Uska haq Hai jaanne ka...par woh mujhse boht gussa ho jayega. Jo bhi ho mein use Bata deti hu".
(A is for avni , N is for Neil)
A : Neil Mujhe Tumhe kuch batana Hai. Please sunke gussa mat hona.
N (in tensed voice): bolo Avni Kya batana chahti ho?
A : Neil... Woh mogli haina...woh...woh... actually...wohh...
N: woh woh kya Kar rahi ho. Bolo na avni mogli kya!? Tumhe pata Hai woh Mera acha dost ban gaya Hai... Uske saath pata nhi kyu ek special bond feel ho raha Hai...
A: woh isliye Neil kyuki mogli humara beta Hai.! She dropped the bomb.
Shocked would be an understatement of what Neil was feeling. It cannot be described.
He was crying, sad , angry , Happyy, mixed feelings.
All he could utter was,
Kyu kiya tumne aisa, mere bache see door rakha mujhe, mere tiger se, ab main samjha kyu mein uske saath acha feel karta hu, apna sa feel karta hu. Mera bachha Hai woh.
Avni mein tumse gussa toh hu lekin main janta hu tumpe bhi Kya beeti hogi. Maine Tumhe iske liye bhi maaf kiya avni. Ab jaldi Chalo avni mujhe mere tiger see milna Hai please
Saying so he gets up with teary eyes and avni gets up her.
Her heart swelling with love for this man 10000 times.
They go to kids room where everyone is busy with some work and mogli sleeping because he was hyperactive the previous day.
Neil and avni go and sit beside mogli and Neil keeps staring at his tiger and keeps on weeping.
Hearing the weeping mogli gets up and avni cries too.
M:Arreee Neil bhaiya aap to kyu rahe ho.
Neil feels as if someone has pinched his heart hearing bhaiya and imagines avni's condition for the past years.
He feels bad for his son. Because he has to be addressed as an orphan to the world but it is all because of avni's decision. He should be angry for everything but he knows that his avni has changed and is scared of everything, she has become very sensitive and decides to keep everything aside and enjoy the moment with his wife and son.
He hugs mogli and also engulfs avni in the hug and they have a happy time whereas mogli is confused.
Neil and avni look at each other as they know that the gehrayi of this topic will be very hard to explain to all the kids!

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Posted: 7 years ago
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The truth is revealed
Very nice
Update soon

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