rikara os based on lizzie's idea. untitiled

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Posted: 8 years ago
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So lizzie I take your prompt and here the OS... I decided to go for a n OS because I have no time... but another idea is too in my mind... I will pen down it after my never ending exams hopefully...

Lizzie..., I am going to disappoint you because its not something that satisfy me... I am waiting for your comments and a big sorry for this dissastorus...

The Oberoi men walked few feet away from wailing ladies of the Oberoi house.

"Thank god Ansh is safe. Rudra said with a relief grin. "No problem anymore.

"I am not sure about that. Said Shivay with a thoughtful face

"Why do you say that? asked Omkara looking at his brother

"Because the caller said that he has kidnapped an Oberoi son...

"But... prompted Omkara

"But everyone is safe here, under this roof. Shakti completed the predicament.

Just few minutes after the members of the family indulged in their daily activities the phone of Oberoi mansion bought uncomfortable news. "An Oberoi son is under our custody. If you want him safe then follow our instructions. Will call back soon. The call was brief and to the point. Jhanvi Oberoi who answered the call fell down with a hysterical shriek. Midst chokes and hiccups she narrated the message to Daadi, Pinky, Annika and their chief security in charge, Venkat.

Shakti and Tej, who were away on a business trip to Pune were immediately called back. Omkara who was busy in his work space was summoned with frenzy. Rudra, who was shopping with Bhavya for their impending wedding rushed back home worried. Shivay was contacted by Annika with a plea, "Shivay, Ansh has gone to school.

Shivay knew his priorities and right away hurried to collect his four year old from school. The ladies of the house sighed with relief only when their eyes blissfully caught the sight of all Oberoi men in a single frame.

"Maybe it is just a bluff call. Rudra said the most possible hypothesis

"I don't think so. Shivay said and turned to his bade papa for his view. Owning to years of business expertise he was sure Tej Singh Oberoi understood the depth of the matter better. "Bade papa? called Shivay looking at him obserDhruv in deep thought.

"An Oberoi son Tej said to himself aloud. He immediately picked up his phone ignoring curious looks of other men and dialled a number.

"Are you safe? he asked the person in other line. "And Dhruv? he asked with a slight panic. Tej listened to the person in other end with sweat forming on his forehead.Why didn't you tell me? Don't worry I will send someone there immediately. He said before cutting the call and looked at other men.

"An Oberoi is indeed kidnapped. " Tej said in a serious tone

"Who is an Oberoi and not under this roof? An Oberoi who we are not aware of? asked a sceptical Omkara.

Tej ignored his son as he was already trying to get commissioner on line.

"If you are talking about product of any of your numerous affairs, then... Omkara fumed

"Dhruv is kidnapped. Said Tej looking at his son

"Dhruv who? asked Omkara

"Dhruv Singh Oberoi, son of Omkara Singh Oberoi. Announced Tej.

Dadi collapsed onto the chair holding jhanvi's right hand

'omkaraji...' Everyone's eyes darted to the feeble voice coming from the upperstairs... There she stood like statue not understanding the latest accusations of her father-in law...

'gauri...' It was a mere whispher... Om took a long strides towards her to take her in his arms... The tears that started to forming in her eyes is enough to make him shatter into thousand pieces.

'dhruv..., your son?' It was a statement more than a question ...

'gauri... Trust me.., I don't know... I didn't know...' He kept his trembling hands in her protruding baby bump...

'yes ,my son you didn't know...now what you going to do about your illegitimate son... ' Tej's voice echoed inside the living room...

Fresh tears weld up in gauri's eyes...

Shivay looked at his brother and his wife... The girl,light of his temple like home... This is not the time to stand still. The great wall sso is need to be back.

'bade papa... What are you talking? Om's child?how it is possible..?' Shivay looked at his sister before turns to tej.

'yes shivay.., omkara singh Oberoi's son... The product of his five years relation...' Tej spit the last word looking at his non valid artist son...

'gauri... Its not truth... I... Rhidima... We... I don't know...' Gauri closed her eyes before the tears make it way through her cheeks...

'go and make sure they are safe...'

'gauri...'

'go omkaraji... I will wait for you...' She turned and walked towards her room for the last five years... She wanted to hide somewhere in her own misery...

Why it is all happen to her... Their relation is perfect, no was... Untill a moment back... They faced up and downs but never let the other one suffer alone... First her husband rejected her, then finally she made a place in his heart his past is coming back to her life... What will she do...? He has a son,an Oberoi heir... Heir!,she kept her trembling hands to her abdomen... His,their child is growing there... She know how much he loves his child... The day he accepted her as his wife..,their first kiss,the day she whispered to him about the little om... Another set of tears roll down from her eyes...

Trust... She trusted him... He trusted her too... Something they build up together in their life... But will she accept his past in their present? She can't deny his child's rights... His first child... But their child..?

She wiped the last drop of tears that escaped from her eyes... She looked around... It was almost night... She take the large suitcase from the shelf and started to pack her clothes... She loved him...he too loved her... But she is a women with her own self respect... Dadi will never allow an Oberoi child to live as illegitimate... She is not weak... There was a GKS before GOS who have the strength to fight the devils in her life alone... She never waited for anyone's mercy... She is a surviver,a fighter,a winner... She closed the bag and kept her hand in her abdomen...

'baby, mom loves you... We are gonig...'

When she desent through the stairs she saw the Oberoi brothers walking towards the living room trailing behind a almost a five or child and a beautiful lady... She can guess who they are... And why they are here... She saw the guilty in his eyes... The sympathetic looks of other two Oberoi sons

'gauri...' Om looked at her and the bag she holding...

Everyone turned towards her... She know what they all can going to say... She walked down with determined steps...

'omkaraji... I decided what good for all of us... I... We can't deny him anything...I know she was your past... But... It is good if I leave...' She tired to not look at him... How much strong she is that much vulnerable is she in his love...

He nodded agreeing to his wife's decision...

'you can go Gauri... But one minute...' she wanted to run from there... She expected him to say stay... But...

Om turned towards ridhima,the girl in his past...

'ridhima... I know I can't change anything...if I know its earlier I will try to do something... I know I can't deny him any rights of being an Oberoi... You two can stay as long as you want... I am not the one one you know years back... I changed, she is the one changed me... This is a new om who believed in relations,family,in love.., morethan that in her... I promised her me, I am his the one who loved me without conditions... Who loved me without my surename... So ridhima... I can't offer you anything that is her's...'

he walked towards his wife and take the big suitcase from her...

'i hope you packed my dress too...'

She nodded...

Finally holding her hands he walked towards the gate without a backward glance..., even towards his brothers...

He know his is doing a wrong to dhruv but now the girl right next him is his great right...more than her he don't anything in the world...

End...





once again sorry for dissappoint you all...

i will try for a ff for the same idea...


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Ms.Lizzie thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey what are you talking about? You didn't disappoint me in fact you surprised me. I never imagined Dhruv could be Ridhima and Omkara's son. That really was a surprise. Trust me

Gauri's decision was right. Dhruv deserves to be brought up as an Oberoi. Knowing Oberois (and Tej) they would have definitely tried to take in Ridhima and Dhruv. Sometimes best decision is to leave taking whatever little left of life.

Omkara's decision was true salute worthy. To leave back everything he held dear for the woman he loves. That shows how much he needs Gauri in his life.

Good One Dear

Keep it up !!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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What are you talking about. You should be confident in this lovely piece. You made it so different than what i was expecting that it was a very good read. 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ms.Lizzie

Hey what are you talking about? You didn't disappoint me in fact you surprised me. I never imagined Dhruv could be Ridhima and Omkara's son. That really was a surprise. Trust me


Gauri's decision was right. Dhruv deserves to be brought up as an Oberoi. Knowing Oberois (and Tej) they would have definitely tried to take in Ridhima and Dhruv. Sometimes best decision is to leave taking whatever little left of life.

Omkara's decision was true salute worthy. To leave back everything he held dear for the woman he loves. That shows how much he needs Gauri in his life.

Good One Dear

Keep it up !!



i am relived... first i thought about gauri being the mother... unfortunately i don't have time to write a long ff...still my mind is stuck with the story... so i decided to put it as a OS... but i am not sure how much you all agree with me about om having a child out of marriage and he is already going to a father child with gauri.

gauri being a selfless girl she will choose to leave if a situation like it arises
but om leaving everything behind is what i wanted in the show...

thank u lizzie for your kind words and encouragements... i love to hear from you...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: AMIEO

What are you talking about. You should be confident in this lovely piece. You made it so different than what i was expecting that it was a very good read. 😊



thank u dear for your kind words...
when i write it i have lot confusions regarding you all precieve it...
now i am relieved eventough the low responses... i am happy
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Posted: 8 years ago
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It was a surprise dear...
I thought dhruv would be Rikara' child... But it was really a surprise...

I like that when Om decided to give Dhruv and riddima what they deserved as Oberois...
and the way he stay by Gauri's side and leave with her ...

Nice OS dear...
Can you pls continue this as a ff...

Waiting for your decision ...
Thanks for the Awesome story
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: priyadil

It was a surprise dear...

I thought dhruv would be Rikara' child... But it was really a surprise...

I like that when Om decided to give Dhruv and riddima what they deserved as Oberois...
and the way he stay by Gauri's side and leave with her ...

Nice OS dear...
Can you pls continue this as a ff...

Waiting for your decision ...
Thanks for the Awesome story



thank u dear...
i am happy that you liked it...all credits to lizzie...

i thinking about writing an ff rikara being the parents
for the continution i don't know...
there is chance for a revenge story... but i think this is better...simply they lived happily ever after...just like dhruv and ridhima inherited omkara's shares and rikara builds a new empire with their art... and happily lived with their many more childern in somewhere in the universe
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice one..
Loved it..
When I had read the prompt, I had imagined something like omkara hated gauri throwing her out, she bringing up their child etc..
But this came in as a surprise..
I loved the scene where om supports ri..
Loved that scene..
:-)
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ash2029

Nice one..

Loved it..
When I had read the prompt, I had imagined something like omkara hated gauri throwing her out, she bringing up their child etc..
But this came in as a surprise..
I loved the scene where om supports ri..
Loved that scene..
:-)




Somewhere I readed that when you choose the untravelled path you become different...
My thought revolved around another path... Now I am quite happy ...

Thank u dear...

Rikara comes a long way from all the misunderstanding to a journey of life together...
They needed each other here and willing to leave everything behind them...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice os!!
Loved it.
Very well written.

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