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fanraya

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Posted: 7 years ago

#151

Wow, beautiful last two updates, loved it so much,looking forward to the next one👍🏼

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Cheesybites

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Posted: 7 years ago

#152

Damnnn. Girl oh girl. I just read 4 chapters in a go! Wow. Just wow. The way you're building up the story, it has SO much potential. It's so so beautifully written, focusing on all emotions, all feelings. I'm super impressed by your standards and I'm sure that future chapters hold nothing but pure bliss. So really really looking forward!

Also, I kinda feel like we'll be feeling sympathetic towards Asfand very soon, hope I'm wrong, but sounds like the guy is about to go through some heartbreak.

Good luck, and cheers!

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octaverider

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Posted: 7 years ago

#153

Originally posted by: DeewaniMastaani

Haha. 😆 Mujhe maar kar zinda bhi kar diya! 🤣

Tum bhi tu humain qatra qatra mar rahi ho in cliffy's ke saath! 😆😉

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Mehnaz

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Posted: 7 years ago

#154

Chapter 13 - Waqt

A/N: Here I am! And. Here I am!

Let's get ahead, ppl!

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Zubiya stood at her balcony and gazed down at the lawn.

Time

That's what she had asked for.

She still had a hard time in believing that that conversation had actually taken place between her and Asfand.

She desperately wished she had someone to talk to about such matters. She suddenly felt a desperate longing for her mother. Her mother would have definitely helped her make the right decision. She would've known what she should do in such situations.

She sighed heavily and looked up at the clear sky.

Why did you leave me, Ma? Why? I need you, Ma. I need your help..

"Zubi?" Zubiya straighted up as she heard her name being called out. She quickly wiped the remnant tears from her face and turned back, acting as normally as she can.

"Ji, Gaiti bhabi. Did you call me?" Zubiya asked Gaiti with a strained smile on her face.

Her smile slightly faltered as Gaiti looked at her closely while walking in to the room towards her as if she was trying to read something on her face.

"Were you crying, Zubiya?" Gaiti asked softly and held her face between her palms.

"N-No, bhabi.. It's just that my eyes are watering because of the windy air. And I've been standing in the balcony for a very long time." Zubiya lightly lied to her.

Gaiti bhabi watched her closely and then shook her head as she stated simply, "You're lying, Zubi."

And then Gaiti bhabi pulled her inside and made her sit on the bed while she quickly made her way to the door and locked the knob. She came back to the bed and sat in front of Zubiya, legs crossed with a pillow on her lap.

"Okay, now. Spill. I'm listening." Gaiti stated.

Zubiya, stunned stared at Gaiti bhabi with mouth agape.

"Bhabi, I'm- " Zubiya tried to speak but was interrupted.

"Don't you dare say that you're 'alright'." Gaiti bhabi interrupted her as she made quotation mark signs with her hands. "I can see right through you, Zubi. And do you know what I've found? I've found that something's really bothering you. So, please don't try to deny it. It's not going to work with me. And if you don't trust me enough to share your pain with me, you can tell me right now. To my face. I'll back off and will not trouble you again. I promise."

Zubiya stared at Gaiti bhabi for a minute and then letting her arms fall around her helplessly, she sat with downcast eyes sighing heavily.

"He proposed to me." Zubiya finally whispered slowly, her cheeks turning a crimson shade as she remembered the conversation they had the previous day.

"Oh my god, you're blushing. And he - he, who?!" Gaiti bhabi whisper exclaimed, moving her head closer to Zubiya in excitement.

"Asfand." Zubiya whispered back, not taking her eyes away from her lap as she waited for Gaiti bhabi's reaction.

Gaiti stayed silent as she stared at Zubiya's downcast head. She opened her mouth numerous times to say something but had to close it again because for once she didn't have a single thing to say.

She couldn't believe that she had no idea of this! How could she not know that Asfand liked Zubiya?!

Zubiya finally looked up to see Gaiti bhabi looking at her with a wide smile on her face.

"This is a good thing, right?" Gaiti asked slowly, trying to rein in her excitement.

Zubiya shook her head and covered her face with both her hands as she mumbled something into them.

"What? Can you please repeat again..", Gaiti asked as she looked at Zubiya confusedly and waited for her to reply.

"I have no idea!" Zubiya suddenly exclaimed as she uncovered her face and looked at Gaiti with a frustrated look on her face.

Gaiti, stunned stayed quiet for a minute before she slowly said, "Zubiya... I have no idea what you are going through. So, please tell what you are thinking. Please, share your thoughts with me."

"Gaiti.. I- I don't think I want to take a risk again. I've already fallen in a trap once. I've seen how my father has always treated my mother... how my brother treated his wife. I know not all of the men are like them. I know. I'm totally aware of that. Everyday I see how Mamo teases Mami.. how Daniyal bhai listens to your every word.. they make me realize that they are not like my Abbi and Bhai. Not at all. But- but I still fear. I- I am just scared that something will go wrong. And unless I'm able to have any sort of control in my life.. which I've still not achieved, I am not willing to take the risk again." Zubiya explained and waited for Gaiti to say something, probably that she was wrong or something.

"So, you're saying... that you are not ready now. But you will be once you are independent enough to have control in some aspects of your life. Is that what you are saying?" Gaiti slowly asked.

Zubiya stared at Gaiti while she thought over her words.

Is that what she meant?

"I don't know.. I guess, yes.." Zubiya mumbled softly as she nervously fidgeted with her fingers.

"Oh my god, Zubiya! You almost scared me half to death! Okay, just answer this.. and honestly, please. Do you like him? Do you think there could be any future for both of you? Just think, please." Gaiti requested and sat quietly giving her some time to think over.

Gaiti felt really bad for Zubiya. She never thought having two bad role examples and getting cheated by another can have so much impact on a person. And her life.

She looked over at Zubiya, who had head bent down slightly with her eyes closed. She just hoped Zubiya would say 'Yes'...

Finally, Zubiya opened her eyes and looked up at Gaiti with a stunned look.

She had just envisioned herself walking in an open area filled with wild flowers trying to grow one upon another. When she had looked up for some reason, probably to look at the sky.. she suddenly realized that there was another person beside her. Trying to figure out who it was, she tried to take a peek at the person beside her... but his back was turned towards her. As she went closer to the person, he all of a sudden turned towards her. And her eyes fell on the person she had least expected.

Asfand.

Zubiya slowly nodded her head and then Gaiti engulfed her in a warm hug.

"I'm so happy for you, Zubi. You deserve all the happiness in this world and I can give you full guarantee that Asfand will make sure of it. You have no idea, Zubi. These Usman boys love with their whole heart.. and once they fall in love with someone, they are determined to make them their wives. You haven't heard Mamo's story, have you? We'll ask Mami for the story later as she describes it best.

Trust me on this one, Zubi. You don't have to worry about Asfand over this. He will keep you happy till his last breath. If you want time, he will give you time. He will wait for you. Until you are ready. And the moment you give him the green light.. nothing will stop him from making you his!" Gaiti laughed as she sat straight and looked at Zubiya, who seemed to be blushing as she listened to Gaiti.

His.

Why did she feel so happy when she thought of being termed as his?

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Zubiya stood at the terrace gazing at the sky as she waited for Asfand.

As another 15 minutes passed and there was still no sign of him, she sighed frustratedly.

"Dammit, Zubiya. You're the one who asked for time and when he is leaving you alone as per your request, you start missing him!" Zubiya ranted loudly to herself as she paced from one side to another.

"Did you just say that you miss me?" A voice interrupted her thoughts and she glanced up with a deer-caught-in-headlights expression.

She watched as Asfand made his way slowly towards her while she moved a few steps back only to be stopped by the hard wall behind her.

Asfand stood in front of her, gazing into her eyes with such passion that she almost felt weak at the knees.

"So, you missed me?" Asfand asked softly, bringing his mouth closer to her ear.

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PS: Okay peeps. Let's, put a stop here. I hope you liked this chapter! Please like and comment your opinions!

Love! ❤️

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DarkPhoenix93

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Posted: 7 years ago

#155

Another cliffy

I adore the way Gaiti helped Zubiya and I can't wait for Asfi's reaction to Zubiya's answer!

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PNA88

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Posted: 7 years ago

#156

What a gorgeous update!! Again left us hanging by the same cliff Zobia was on in the last episode of YKS... 🤣

Jokes aside i am eagerly awaiting the next chapter now! THANK you so much for this chapter, beautiful description into Zobia's feeling and emotions. Love that talk with Gaiti bit also. <3

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Mehnaz

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Posted: 7 years ago

#157

Originally posted by: PNA88
What a gorgeous update!! Again left us hanging by the same cliff Zobia was in the last episode of YKS... 🤣

Jokes aside i am eagerly awaiting the next chapter now! THANK you so much for this chapter, beautiful description into Zobia's feeling and emotions. Love that talk with Gaiti bit also. <3

I JUST CAN'T HELP IT! Everytime main sochti hun ki haan aaj cliffhanger nai dena hain.. but then I swear, the chapter stops at a cliffhanger. 🤣

Glad you liked it tho! 😆

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Cheesybites

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Posted: 7 years ago

#158

Woww, beautiful as always! Girl there's just some magic in your writing that draws me to it. Thank you so much for working on this, really. And can't wait for more!!!

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octaverider

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Posted: 7 years ago

#159

I love how you slowly showed Gaiti and the rest of the family building a bond with Zubiya. As Molly calls it, milieu is there in your story. Zubiya feeling alone and having that void of a parent is sad but beautifully penned.

She misses him and he knows!

Girl, keep em coming!

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Mehnaz

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Posted: 7 years ago

#160

Chapter 14 - Gair Kanooni (Unofficial)

A/N: Okay, my dear Deewanies and Mastaanies. 5 days, was it? I am truly sorry for taking such a long time. But do I ever disappoint you guys? Nai, na? I always get back with a BANG! Now, that's my style. Okay, enough talk about me and my style.. Agar main baat karne baith jaaungi to... karti hi rahungi. Lol. Let's just head back to where we left them shall we, now?

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Recap:

"Did you just say that you miss me?" A voice interrupted her thoughts and she glanced up, startled to find the person who had taken up her entire thoughts standing in front of her.

In a trance, she watched as Asfand made his way slowly towards her while she stood still for a few seconds. Coming out of her trance she quickly moved a few steps back only to be stopped by the hard wall behind her.

She gasped as she felt Asfand trapping her between himself and the wall as he stood very close in front of her, gazing into her eyes with such passion that she almost felt weak at the knees.

"So, you missed me?" Asfand asked softly, bringing his mouth closer to her ear.

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She shivered as she pulled back, and looked down in shyness. Asfand stood back himself giving her some space. She looked up to find him smirking at her as she collected herself. She gasped as the first thing she noticed from close was the lack of his long locks.

Her hand automatically rose to touch his hair, forgetting her previous shyness.

"Your- Your hair?" She asked him, as she looked at him quizzically.

"Cut them. I think it was big time I cut them. Ammi has been pestering me for a long time. Why - don't you like this hairdo or do you miss my long hair?" Asfand said, smiling at her teasingly as he ran his right hand through his hair.

Zubiya's throat dried up as she found that little action really distracting.

She cleared her throat softly, "No. I mean- it's not like that. You look good with both the hairdos."

"Why - thank you!" Asfand said as he did a little bow, making Zubiya chuckle softly and shake her head at her own foolishness.

Asfand smiled softly as he gazed at her with an endearing look. Zubiya looked away shyly, unable to bear the soft look he gave her.

This feeling was out of the world as she had never felt so cherished. Not even with Rameez. She had always felt her sixth sense or something in the pit of her stomach trying to forewarn her with Rameez. As if she already knew that his motives weren't good. But with Asfand, she felt safe. She felt... top of the world would be the perfect term. Yes. She felt exactly that. Top of the world.

But why did she still feel as if she didn't deserve this? Why did she still feel as if she was living a dream? How can a person be so lucky as her?

"Please stop looking at me like that." Zubiya softly said as she looked down at her hands.

"Like what?" Asfand asked her back calmly, and waited for her response.

"Like- like you care for me! Like you love me!" Zubiya exclaimed at him, frustratedly.

"Why should I stop when I do all of the above that you just mentioned?" Asfand fired back at her.

"You shouldn't! Because I don't deserve you! And you don't deserve me - you deserve a girl, much better than me.. who doesn't carry so much baggage in her life!" Zubiya finally shouted out, leaving her almost breathless.

A thick moment of silence spread between them.

Zubiya didn't dare look up at him, lest her resolve breaks the moment her eyes fall upon him.

"Zubiya... you deserve the world. You deserve nothing but the best. Stop portraying yourself so low. Zubiya, people do make errors in their lives. It's a common thing. But it doesn't mean that they don't deserve to be forgiven or they don't deserve a second chance at their lives. Frankly it's your family members, i.e., your father and your brother that don't deserve to be forgiven. Instead of putting your fears to rest and making you understand they just put the blame on you and outcaste you in the middle of the night. During the ups and downs in one's life, it is the unity of one's family that matters. Not the reputation. And they chose reputation over family. Zubiya, please stop blaming yourself. Because we don't. Your past doesn't matter to me and neither my family. I love you because of who you are. I care for you because of who you are. And my family will be happy to welcome you permanently as a family member. We are just waiting for you to say yes. If you are not ready yet, then we are willing to wait. I am willing to wait. I am willing to wait until you finally say 'yes'. Until you finally accept that you care for me the same way as I do. Until you finally admit that you love me." Asfand stopped speaking as he moved forward towards Zubiya. He slowly wiped the tears with his fingers that had rolled down her eyes as she quietly listened to him and gazed at him with an unknown expression. He could only hope for what he wanted to see there. Trust. More than anything in this world he wanted her trust. Her belief in him. Faith in him. And later, if Allah willed, Love.

Zubiya watched Asfand as he softly wiped off her tears. His touch was soft.. soft as a caress. She gazed into his eyes and found something in them that she had always dreamed of. And read in fairytales.

"Will you marry me, Asfand?"

Zubiya, watched Asfand freeze in his actions and slowly move his gaze towards her.

She hadn't expected these exact words to blurt out of her mouth but she didn't regret them now. Her resolve was made. If Allah had planned all of this for her, who was she to stop them. She could just leave it all to Him and hope for the best.

"Wh-What?" Asfand whispered, gazing at her in disbelief.

Zubiya smiled at him tearfully as she said, "You know, I think you are purposefully making me ask again..." Asfand shook his head and was about to speak when she asked in clear voice, "Will you marry me, Asfandyar Usman Ali Khan?"

Asfand laughed out in disbelief and said, "I can't believe you are asking me... this was supposed to be my line, you know! And yes! I will definitely marry you, Zubiya Khalil!"

Asfand lifted her in his arms and rotated on the spot making her hold onto his shoulders tightly and squeal in surprise while he exclaimed out, "We are unofficially engaged! Wohoo!"

"Asfand- Shhh! You will wake everyone up! Please put me down now!" Zubiya half-shouted, half-squealed.

Asfand slowly put her down and held on to her waist as she slightly stumbled upon him, still dizzy from all the rotating.

"I don't really care. I want the whole world to know, now."

"Asfand- what about my family? I mean, how can I marry without their blessings?" Zubiya suddenly asked. Asfand quietened down as he looked at Zubiya's pained expression.

"Zubiya.. I don't what to say about this. I have asked my parents about this. And dad is adamant that he won't ask for your hand to your father. He will just let him know and give him the invitation when our marriage will be held. If your family wishes to join us they will, and if they don't then they will not. The decision to give you away will not be of your father's because he has officially lost that right the moment he let you out of your house." Asfand softly said, to which Zubiya numbly nodded as she looked down to their entwined hands.

"Zubiya, please don't worry about them anymore. Let's move forward now. Think about our future. Together." Asfand said as he lifted Zubiya's head with his fore-finger making her smile.

Zubiya slowly nodded her head accepting his request. He was right. She should let go of the past and welcome the present and future with open arms.

"Okay, so when do you want to get married?" Asfand asked Zubiya as he stood holding her waist, and looked at her with a wide smile on his face.

"How about... maybe after 5 years?" Zubiya asked lightly. She bit her lip as she looked up to watch Asfand's eyes slightly bulge in shock as he exclaimed out, "5 years?!"

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**peaking out of the curtain** So.. Did you like it? Yes? No? Please let me know! **fingers crossed**

And if you did, please don't forget to like, comment and share it with your friends, please.

Love! ❤️

Edited by DeewaniMastaani - 7 years ago