Akdha SS || Love A Forbidden Fruit || uptd chap 2 pg 12 25/9/17

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eshalli

@eshalli

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+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#91

Awesome update dear
Loved it
Poor ja slapped by jo. ..
Continue soon
Thxc 4r pm

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GOLDIEE ABROL

@Gold.Abrol

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Posted: 7 years ago

#92

Amazing part

Continue soon 😊

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binduprasad41

@binduprasad41

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Posted: 7 years ago

#93

Omg harshu and avika di started new story together. ..

I am excited.

Beautiful title and nice concept of the story.

Chapter 1

Very well introduced jodha family,

Jodha father is very conservative and his sister also.

Both really don't respect other religion. ... that's really sad to know.

And here jalal is totally different from jodha family who respect all religions, very hard working guy , a perfect son and perfect brother also.

In the first meeting jodha father dislike jalal without proper reason .

Small akash is cupid in the story, he is very cute.

Very well portrayed jodha character, she is very sensitive and very caring also , thank God she is not like her father.

Woah in the first meeting jodha won jalal heart.

Poor guy forgot everyone after seeing jodha .

Chapter 2

Kunal share very special bond with jalal.

Both are more than friends, both can read each other minds.

Poor jalal nobody response after hearing his introduction but yes jodha notice him .

Love the way Kunal teasing jalal.

So beautifully jodha uplifted her father mood.

She knows and love her family too much.

It's interesting to see in future how she fall in love with Muslim guy.

Jodha father amaze to see Muslim guy followed hindu rituals.

Poor jalal ,jodha misunderstood his action and slap him.

Bad day for jalal.

I love the scene in dhaba .

Jalal is just too good ,how beautifully he teach lesson to everyone.

Jodha is impressed.

Finally jodha make a move to asking forgiveness to jalal.

Nice cute scene between jodha and jalal.

Jodha admire jalal .

Now waiting for next chapter. ...

Thank you so much both of you for this story.

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dellaakdha

@dellaakdha

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#94

1st Congrats for ur new Story Harshu and Avika...🤗

Sorry for late reply..I dont know how I missed pm...Sorry..

AND Harshu welcome back as a writer..Have u finished ur Retro threads Harshu?

And Avika u have couple of other stories and managing between ur busy day..

👏 for both of u...

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dellaakdha

@dellaakdha

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#95

Chapter 1

I felt it like a movie start...Acharamana starting..Ha.ha...just for joke yaa...

Jodha's father is very conservative and her aunt also...

Like the way of Jodha's introduction...Kind hearted girl...

That kid is cute...Jolaa..Ha ha..

Jalal is hardworking person and his dedication towards work is very nice..Appreciable...

Why this man is unnecessarily angry on jalal just because of his religion...But still there are some people...

The storyline is very intriguing and interesting...

Thanks for pm friends...

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dellaakdha

@dellaakdha

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#96

Chapter 2

Awesome Update dears..

Jalal is clean bold by Jodha's beauty...He is in dream land and his dreams were broken by his friend Kunal...

Nice bonding between the friends...He knows Jalal's thoughts without saying in words...

Jalal is always surprising Jodha's family in his explanation of the tourist place and following their way of behaviour in temple...

Jodha's way of consoling her father is very smart...Gudiya..

Jalal already Dreaming about Jodha with rest of life...So Fast Man..

The explanation of Architecture and the history behind the temple is very nice...Interesting and Informative..

I like how Jalal handle that Shana owner and others by using the correct words that hit at the correct place...Not by beating them...But he made people understand how to treat a woman in Home...If it is started in Home then there will not be any problem in the society...👍🏼

Poor jalal got a slap from his angel...

I like the way How Jo apologies to jalal for her acts and their way of introducing their names are nice...Jolaa...

Very beautiful and interesting story friends..

I find it a perfect combination of Avika and Harshu style of writing (correct me if I am wrong) like the package of some historical and extra information regarding the temples with a beautiful love inside it...

The way U are using the religious matter is appreciable 👏

Totally a combination of all together...

Thanks for pm girls...

Waiting for the next part...Eager to know how the story moves...

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Kuki715

@Kuki715

Rocker

Posted: 7 years ago

#97

Harshu di and Avika di 🤗

Really sorry for late comments.. 😛Wonderful chapters 😃

Chapter 1

A road trip to Vaishanodevi taken by conservative people with a muslim guide... quite surprising 😲 and to top it Jodha's father is pretty vocal about his aversion to this muslim guide ..

Jalal seems very much used to all this...besides he is doing this to support his education and family... Sweet brother 😳

Johla... I mean Jodha 😆...late lateef all because of bird...caring.. and is different from her family especially her father... good for Jalal 😃

Love at first sight for Jalal 😃😆

Chapter 2

Kunal.. Interesting addition...atleast Jalal isn't all alone in this trip and his shayari... Uff🤣. Hope he and Vishal will help our couple in future 😳

Jalal seems very specific about the water consumption and timing of nature's calls😆

Birla temple... Nicely described 👍🏼...

Jodha slapped him .. And it was very understanding of him to not react at that time but afterwards expected some strong words 😛... Jo apologized which was good ⭐️

Jalal stood for that girl and his mini speech was so right.. just shows where we are lacking

Thanks for the update dis... Waiting for next 😃🤗

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NONIE

@Nonie12345

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Posted: 7 years ago

#98

Wonderful chapter Harshu and Avika

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priyadogra

@priyadogra

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Posted: 7 years ago

#99

cute chappy
Liked the way jodha handled her bapusa's bad mood
And jalal telling jodha her name to be jhola was the best
Update soon and thanks for the pm