AvNiel: Sepration, Love, Life [Ch 1.25 Page 7] 20/11/2017 - Page 2

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Posted: 8 years ago
#11
woww .. first of all congratulations ..
you are the first one to kill avni ..👏
anyway i love whtever u write ..
i was expctng first chapter ..
😔
update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: vidz2122


woww ..

😊😊😊

first of all congratulations ..

Thanks

you are the first one to kill avni ..👏
NOT DEAD

anyway i love whtever u write ..

😊
i was expctng first chapter ..😔

Chapter will come soon

update soon


Thankyou

Keep reading, liking and commenting

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Posted: 8 years ago
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PROMO 2


Bol Riya Shweta aur teri Dadi ki choti soch mein fark nahi hai. Hetal says

(Riya speck there no difference in your Dadi and Shweta narrow thinking)

Hetal ji aap aapne beti ka... Shweta says

(Hetalji you are you daughter's... )

Maa hone ka farz tum mujhe Na samjhe tumne toh aapne beta zindagi baarbad kar de. Hetal says

(Don't teach me a duty of being a mother you have spoiled own son life)

Hetal. Neela says shocked

Neil main jaanti hoon tum meri baat toh kya mera chahera bhi nahi dekh Na chahate ho. Magar yeh baat tumhe batana bhute zaroori hai mujhe laga tha Anuty ne aabhi tak bol de hogi. (Looking at Shweta) Avni zinda hai khain voh toh mein nahi jaanti par zinda hai. I say

(Neil I know you don't want to talk or listen to me or even see my face but this very important for me tell you. I thought Aunty would have told you this till now Avni is alive I don't know where she is but she is alive)

Tum yeh baat 4 saal se jaanti thi kyun Shweta ko chorke kissko nahi bataye. Prakash says

(You knew this for four years why didn't you tell anyone except for Shweta)

Magar kassie. Neil asks

(But how)

Uss din Neil hume ek check post par roka aur hume utar ne ko bola. That they check the taxi. So we got out. Voh toh aapne phone par the toh mujhe laga ki voh Tera se baat kar rehi hai. Mujhe Amol ka phone aaya voh puch raha tha ki hum khain hai toh main usse bataya. Kuch time baad ussne mujhe se khaha ki usse aapna koi friend mil Gaya uss ke saath jaa rahi hai. Uss nikalne ke kuch time baad Amol aya vahan I came back with him. I say

(That day Neil we were stopped on a check post and we were told to get down. That they can check the taxi. So we got down she was busy on her phone I thought she was talking to you. I got a call from Amol he asked where we were so I told him. A little while latter she said she met some friend of her and she is going with her. After she left Amol came and I came back with him)


Edited by AvNeil_TV - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#14
Hi 😊
Lovely concept, would love to read more...
with regards to the promo's:
Promo 1 was cute - loved the fact that it was written in Neil's point of view.. love how he says he knows that she is alive because he can sense it and that he will always be her's
Promo 2 is quite interesting...
please update soon 😊
Thanks for the pm
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Posted: 8 years ago
#15
CHARACTERS


MAIN



NEIL KHANNA



AVNI AYESHA/ AVNI NEIL KHANNA





ASHNEIL NEIL KHANNA





AYESHA NEIL KHANNA



IMPOTANT



MEHTA FAMILY


NEELA MEHTA




AVNI MOTHER (Supportive)


HETAL MEHTA




AVNI'S AUNT(Supportive)


RIYA MEHTA




AVNI'S SISTER (Supportive)


AMAN AMOL ASHISH MEHTA




AVNI'S BROTHER (Supportive)


KHANNA FAMILY



HARLEEN KHANNA (BEBE)




NEIL'S GRANDMOTHER (Supportive).


PRAKASH KHANNA




NEIL'S FATHER (Supportive)


MANDEEP KHANNA (MADDY)




NEIL'S AUNTY (SUPPORTIVE)


SHWETA KHANNA




NEIL'S MOTHER(Negative)



KAREENA



NEIL'S SISTER (Supportive)



OTHERS



FATIMA BIBI




AVNI'S GRANDMOTHER (supportive)


ALI




AVNI'S BEST FRIEND (supportive)



DEAN DAYAL aka DD




(supportive)



YASHASWAT DESHMUKH aka YASH




AVNI'S CHILDHOOD FRIEND (Supportive)



ANJALI aka ANGEE




AVNI'S CHILDHOOD FRIEND (Supportive)



SIDDARTH SINGH RATHORE





NEELA'S NEPHEW and AVNI'S COUSIN, BEST FRIEND and COFIDENT

(Supportive)

Edited by AvNeil_TV - 8 years ago
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Sorry I couldn't put picure of characters here a link where you see the pictures
Edited by AvNeil_TV - 8 years ago
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Guy
Yet again I makes some changes in story line you see soon
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Kuch Kam


It been long. Neil has changed their was time be would message me every few days he always had time for me he would say 'Jaan mein aur mera saara time tera hi hai. Tera begar yeh Neil Khanna kuch nahi hai'. I sometimes times think people are distance makes heart grow founder. Six years of separation but before that also we it was always 'we' 'us' but now it's just him. Initially Ali khahata that 'New Love that's why it's like that' that time Avni would dismiss but now it looks like he was right. From last few days he been making a effort to make her fell special probably Billu or Bebe or Papa or Maa or even probably Shweta Maa told him to.

Keyword being EFFORT things were effortless it was just them being them. It now seem like a dream. Oh ha they have been married for 25 years now. Neil wouldn't even remember since Pinku started talking all he has time for 'his princess'.

Oh ya I forgot we have two kids. First is my our son Udayveer our Billu. Now all ready to go to college he is 18. I would always tell him he is Tillu ka Billu but he would say no I am your Billu just like his dad.

Then is our daughter Ayesha Khanna. We decided to keep her name on Ayesha Ayesha Maa name. Neil always no matter she will always part of you identify with her Jaan. She is 'Neil's Princess'. Maa Dad and my side of the family call her Asha Khanna's call her Pinku.

Since her Neil's all time is her. Last 6 years.

So today is Neil and Avni's anniversary funny 8 years ago it was our anniversary but now it's two different names. Today is the anniversary party.

Maa... Veer says

Billu you look handsome you have grown so fast. I say hugging with tears in eyes

Maa you look beautiful today. You actually did get ready. Veer says

Avni Self Talk] Commissioner Sahaab's wife have to live up to status. I have look good in parties. But for whom do I stay sane so here I start my shots. Then I get drunk and Papa will be forced to send me up there goes another party.

Neil Self talk] Jaan looks beautiful as always. Where have been so long how could I forget Jaan. How did we become so far from each other. I know all I been doing Jaan thinks is lie I have done this my self I have win my Jaan. If she died in that mall which was very nicely executed by her to look like accident she was trying to commit suicide. That was it that day my eyes opened to what everyone has been telling me. Bebe, Dad, Mom, Maa, Bua, Kareena , Amol, Ali, Juhi and Riya have been trying to make realise I was not ready to see. Even Billu has been saying it for a while. He truly Avni's son he keeps his family one and me I have come so far from MY JAAN how could I do it. If I lost her...I can't even think of it I would have lost myself for sure NO ONE THAT IS NO ONE REPLACE JAAN IN LIFE. I make it up to how every long it takes I WILL GET MY JAAN BACK.

Avni Self Talk] Another party so many have gone by just with a fake smile on face. I don't know why I am still why didn't just let me died why did they save me. My family I love them but I have had my share of life. Life and death is unfair why. Not even god is with me Ayesha Maa why me. Please call me Maa.

Neil's Self Talk] Jaan was just here where did she go. (Smiles) She might be thirty. Why is Jaan crying

Di what are doing. Aman says

Neil's Self Talk] Why is Aman stopping her. Is she drinking no she won't she doesn't like it. But then why

Aman tu. I was thirsty. I say

Here have water. Amol say

Amol one please.I say

Neil's Self Talk] What are they arguing about

Doesn't work Di. You will start and make it reason that Uncle sends you from here. Aman says

Chinni he is right. You know it. Sid says

Chinno please. I say

Let's go from here. Sid says

Neil Self talk] Jaan is drinking. She hate all this she didn't let me I never need it

Chote Mamu, Lamboo Mamu, Aman Mamu. Asha says

Asha beta. Sid says

Come with me I have show you something. Mom you look beautiful. Asha says

Neil Self talk] Jaan's addiction was so high I never needed anything else. I have made Jaan to take refuge in alcohol I have hurt her so much I am so ...(Neil fist his hand over the glass it brakes. No one react party is full swing. Avni still notice. She walk towards him. He smiles he knew HIS JAAN will always come to his rescue) she was so broken because of me... me only me

Dada you hand is bleeding. I will get first aid. Asha say

Neil Self talk] My Jaan's heart is bleeding everyone knew it but me I was so blind to her attempts of renewing our love we have lost spark. Spark our love which I promise her will never change

Jaan in a few years and Pinku will grow up. Avni says

Jaan she will fine everyone is here. Neil says

Jaan will you still love me still once Pinku is old. Avni asks

Jaan she your daughter are you jealous. Neil says

Nahi... just asking. Avni says

Jaan look at me, NO ONE THAT NO ONE CAN SANTCH ME FROM YOU JAAN. Neil says

Promise...Avni says putting her hand like a kid

Promise Jaan. Neil say holding her hand

Avni kiss him on lips.

Neil's Self Talk] I broke my promise I let Jaan's biggest fear come true. Yes Pinku is her daughter she loves her as a mother she would never any harm come to her but I broke Jaan see what I have done she wants a reason leave our anniversary and it took me 8 years realise this yes it's not 8 but when it comes to still less is more.

Dada show. Asha says

Pinku it's fine. I am fine. Neil says

Avni Self Talk] Where did Neil go. He is hurt he didn't let Pinku aid it even. I will ask Kareena she will do he will listen to her uski behen hai akhir. Finally they left me alone I can do what you want. (She picks glass starts drinking) There was time I hate the taste now it keeps me alive.

Neil Self Talk] Why did they leave her alone. At lest Aman could have stay with her . Let me go. Today I will not let her go I have a surprise for her. Jaan YOUR JAAN IS BACK AND YOU WILL SEE IT and you brain will also believe it I know your heart already does THIS BRAIN OF YOUR ALWAYS COMES IN BETWEEN BUT YOUR JAAN KNOWS HOW TO GET YOUR STUPID BRAIN IN IT'S RIGHT PLACE.

Veer goes to stage on the mic

Today is my beautiful Maa, Avni Khanna and my dad Neil Khanna anniversary I have a superise for you. Love you both. Maa I love even more. Veer says
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End Note

Bold is flashback

On the slide Shivangi Joshi as Kareena Shivan Deshmukh

The start yes it's sad ...

25th anniversary

They are together have 2 kids but not one two different people not AvNeil.

Let's see what happens now


Edited by AvNeil_TV - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#19
Interesting ...pls unfold the mystery
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Haha old avneil ... q8 yr old billu .. tillu ka pillu hona chahiye tha ..
Its diff ... update soon ...
I liked pinku ... dada ...is cool

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