PAAR-The other side of river (new chap@ pg 2) - Page 2

Originally posted by: Khushi_Dillse

Wow... What a awesome update...

I'm too excited about next chapter...

Originally posted by: Dreamful

Thank you for the interesting start 😊 It reminded me of Baahubali a bit 😊

Originally posted by: ErisedWitch45

Great start.

I find it difficult to show action through writing and you have done that so seamlessly. I could picture each line in my head. The 'mountain throwing an arrow of icy wind' etc was beautiful. You could sense the female's (DS, I am assuming) strength of character here, without having to explain it.

Waiting to read more. :)

Originally posted by: ErisedWitch45

Absolutely loved it! The way you described the action scenes - I could picture it in my head. Also your description of Mother Earth and her creation who later on started waging wars to promote their superiority was well done.

I love your writing. It's not a drag, everything is clear and to the point yet you retain the beauty. I like the part how you have humanised Indra Dev and Mahishi Devi. With the passage of time, people (of each clan) immortalised them as Gods but they were mere humans - extraordinary but human. It reminds of an Indian author - Amish and his Shiva Trilogy books.

were ready to behead each other's head in searching for PEACE

This line was so good. It shows the contradiction - killing to find peace.

Looking forward to the next chapter.