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Posted: 8 years ago
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PART 3 A

Next day harman wake up n make tea for himself n choco milk for chintoo bcz chintoo refuse to take anything from anyone .when harman was making tea for himself chintoo ask him to make choco milk for him also. Harman call maninder, bebe ,nani, surbhi too n ask them to come home .harman n chintoo were sad but preeto looking too happy at lunch she made pullao herself for harman n chintoo but both refuse to eat. Both come in harman room n lock from inside.raavi n preeto keep beating door n pleading them to open door but all go in vain all were surprised n shocked with chintoo behavior. In evening harman open door n both come down normal as nothing has happened.They straight went in kitchen ignoring all sitting in hall. harman make chintoo sit on counter n start collecting things to cook for themselves. Preeto n raavi try to help them bt harman warned them to saty away from kitchen bcz now he can cook for them self informing them that his gulabo has taught him , how to take care of house n how to cook food. While eating they start doing masti and pull each other legs. After eating both start teasing each other running behind each other. While playing they return in harman room.preeto n gang were feeling relaxed watching chintoo n harman normal unaware about coming strom. Preeto n raavi peep in room .both were sleeping holding each other.

At evening both came down hearing noise n laugh. There they saw punditji doing arrangement for some pooja. Preeto n maninder all were celebrating somya exit from house but surbhi n nani were silent n sad. Both talked each other while coming down.maninder n preeto again try to console harman n praised him what he did.

Both you did good job sending somya to her real place n come back to start new life with full woman who can satisfy your manhood desires.

Harak singh asusual welldone my shera. But saying this he had pain in his voice.

Preeto inform him that they kept pooja for well being of our house .black shadow has removed from our house.and ask him to sit in pooja harak sing shifted aside n make place for him but harman n chintoo refuse to sit there n sit on sofa far away from there

;they look from far as a United family ..

Suddenly Chintu standup fron his place and came near and ask punditji to leave saying ..As you know puja or prayers are done to keep family United and happy :we all pray for our families for goodness but what can mean doing puja for a family who hate each other and plotting against each other all the time .No one in Singh family wish goodness for the other and this is the truth:no one show hate but no one can hide it ...This family are cheating and lying each other..Everyone of them has his own plan to destroy the other life and they will pray for not eachother goodness or happiness but they will sit n pray asking god for how to plot against each other and how to destroy each other.harman came n handed over punditji his bag and request him to leave if he don't want to get insulted by him or chintu.

Punditji left immidiatly with bend head.bcz he know harman very well

Preeto n maninder try to say something but seeing harman they stay mum but again start there somya n nimmi insulting n his and surbhi praising session . harman controlled his anger while they were talking about nimmi .While praising session was going on saya entered with somya n her gang. Seeing them there all get shocked but seeing somya among them preeto start abusing her for coming there maninder also join hands with her leaving no chance to huminliate her. harman infrom them that he called him here n they are his guest n he want to talk something serious in front of all. So that no one can blame them.

Nani come near to hug her but harman stopped her by saying she is TARANA not your somya to whom nimmi maa protect n died. Whole life she spend in fighting n protecting from whole socity. Y socity even from her so called monaster father n dadi . so nani don't worry her real family is with her to take care of her.

Now enough of this chuha billi game.am fed up with all this n want to live in peace so want to clear all n want to ask questions or you can say want to say individually .so please take your seats. He ask all kinners also to sit beside his family on sofa.

All faces go white when harman said this .preeto try to intervine bit harman stopped her by reminding her when she joined hands with kareena and ravina.

Warning to all when I am talking no one dare to intrupt me in between until I I finish or I ask u to open your mouth. Hold your hearts before I start bcz may be you all will get heart attack specially preeto harak singh n harak singh.


Edited by meenji22 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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nice part di but i have a suggestion i want dialouges where soumya harman reflects their emotions inner feelings as till now writet didnt give us proper dialouges explaning both sufferings pain concerning this MU track i like hw u showed harman power his determination mixed with strength waiting for fourth part
Edited by nohasaleh - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: jyoti06

Woww thats a very good write up .. Now I really want to see Harman confronting Preeto in next part .. it will b worth watching .. Chintu is a true rockstar ..

And loved the dialogue of Harman that he tells Soumya in bangkok . I m sure while telling her all this , he felt like stabbing his own heart too but he had to say it to stop Soumya from doing that madness .. Hope Soumya realises her mistake soon that Harman is doing everything to protect her , something that even Saya failed too ..

Plss continue soon

Yes you're wright Joyoti Saya failed in her duties to protect Saumya and didn't stopped her madness but Harman sure will do even if this will hurt him too .
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Waw this third part was amazing ..Loved a lot Harman and chintu strange behaviors with the family ignoring them totally and how they locked themselves in Haya's room and after that leaving and acting independent in HS house ...It's wonderful...The bestest part is that puja and how Chintu stopped it unveiling family truth ;saying there is no meaning for puja in house where family are hating and ploting against each others ...Chintu delivering speeech and the interference of Harman was perfect..There is a lot of suspens what Harman will say specially he's welcomed Saumya in his house as Tarana and said to nani not hugging her she's not your Saumya...Harman is still punishing Saumya and Hurting her but I think he's doing this as as little revenge for his gulabo who hurted him badly and misunderstood him believing Preeto's words .I'm waiting next part ;i wish that you make HaYa dialogues in it ..This third part is good but it's missing dialogues..Keep writing we're loving you're story.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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part 3 b


Someone said right that

"Truth is like the sun.You can shut for a time;but it ain't going away.

"There is things can't be hidden the sun, the moon and the truth

Hmmm from where n whom I start he start facing all one by one

Ok preeto you are ring leader n head of family before my marriage I thought harak singh is head of family but I was wrong you are wholesole of house and other are puppets of your hand. Am I right? Even all family members you treated them as servant. You want everyone take breath even taking your permission. you always use them never love them or gave respect to them. At first I thought you cares atleast for me n can do anything for my happiness but on that point also I was wrong. You cares only for yourself. Calling you a mom don't want to insult a mon. even calling you woman is also insult of a woman. I know you never like somya from starting just because she is from poor house. But at that time I thought you are pure from heart n slowly start liking her. But you failed as MIL. After knowing her real identity you stop even treating her as human, you start torturing her but she remained silent never complain against you n family.

One by one harman unmasked preeto all crimes with help of rani n chintoo in front of all n that too how preeto is responsible for nimmi death.all were shocked hearing. Then he turned towards haraksingh .harak don't pretend yourself innocence you are also equally crime partner of her. you know each n everything she did and support her even in her crime

You both are most selfish parents never accepted Saumya as bahu and preeto and you fakly accepted her showing your interest ;your true interest iwas snatching Saumya from Harman heart and save your reputation in society by creating MU in her mind bcz preeto you know that m you son and never fall in your trap but she always trust u ppl over me n you know better you can trap her easyly your real interest too was having their own blood wariss :your son feelings and happiness come after that

Preeto is that selfish mom who never accepted Saumya in her son's life for being kinar;she destroyed her own son happiness and now you are showing interest for his marital life and saving his marriage n asking me for 3rd mrg.just to produce child for you. Am not children producing instrument. Harak singh you are also not less then preeto you trapped your own son in murder case and many more cases fakely.

Chacha chachi don't want to say anything to you ppl bcz I know you both are frustrated and are like bhandhua majdoor for preeto n harak singh you both tried your level best . I can understand your feeling and situations. But want to ask one thing when I and somya never did wrong anything wrong to you .i always respect you as my elder then why you did all to me. Chacha you send goons to kill me n chachi youuu you try to kill somya with help of raavi by pushing her from tarace that person due to whom your son is on earth alive,who gave breath to your son just because you want to snatch my happiness . you both also failed in your relations with me you both also never care for me just nvz I am preeto son.

Don't say anything to balwinder because he is outsider n don't know anything about this family.but raavi you too failed as sister ,nanad and as a mother. I gave you love n everything you want fulfill your wishes as brother n I always gave you respect of elder sister even somya also gave you respect n try to give your rights n force me too n she used to fight with me n get angry on me whenever I say bad anything to you she always stand for you and whole family against me. You totally became carbon copy of preeto never think about your son feeling or try to understand. you forget only due to me n somya you are with your husband n son n now again you are going to became mother only due to somya efforts. I know you was and are wrong you come here and start living here leaving your son and husband . when he send you diverce paper it was somya who convience him not to do that. Its ok you hate somya bcz she is a kinner But what you did in return to me as a sister .you always back stabbed me like preeto.you help preeto in snatching my son from me n now you all succeed in snatching my gulabo from me creating MU in her mind and on preeto command you poisoned somya n you all show fake concenerd to her just to increase MU of her.and you all succeed in your plan she who always trust you all specially preeto left me without giving me any chance.

And you, my younger brother varunji. According to me,You are well educated then why you fail as brother and dewar. What force you to not to accet somya as bhabhi instead of becoming lakshman of your sita bhabhi keeping your study aside you became spy and informer n slave of preeto. You follow us where ever we go n what we are doing. Ok I will not talk about this but want to talk about you. Surbhi come here.You said that you love surbhi too much and can do anything for her n will keep her happy for ever but what are you doing with her torturing her so that she don't able to find somya .you refuse to live here just bcz you want to live freely with you wife but you are still in preeto control doing all according to her commend see still surbhi is in drug influence , you start giving drugs to her to keep her sleeping and misleading nani. One advice to you in free if you want to live happily with you wife stop listening preeto bcz she is using you for her evil benefits . she want to torture her also indirectly when she fail in her plan getting rid of somya n getting wais from subhi.its your wish what you want to choose torture for your wife n getting hatered from her in place of love and then divorce .you again alone n suffering like me.god bless you n mata rave give you some piece of mind best of luck.

Maninder you,you failed in both neither you became good husband nor you passed father of both daughter exam. You never concider somya as daughter . you try to kill her many times but her good luck she escaped. Or I can say previously her protector was nimmi maa n now me.you consider surbhi your daughter n always think about her. even to see her married you forces her to marry varun and in same house in which somya married bcz its your n preeto plan to create MU in btw somya n her n to torture somya in front of her because she divorced her son n support her kinner sister n jija happiness over their evil planning. Ever you try to find out in which condition is your beloved daughter. how your damad is keeping her. where is she. Big no you never try you only blindly trust that cunning evil lady.bebe you are elder so don't want to insult you but one thing want to tell you .you also failed as dadi elderly person of house, as mother in law and as woman. You also poisoned somya on wedding day to kill her without thinking about a mother n somya husband feelings.

Till now harman had tears in his eyes but somehow he controlled it.

At last he come to somya gulabo you also failed in your exam of love trust and faith. You care every ones feelings except me . you trust all fake and evil ppl around you not me , you wasted your mother death and sacrifices . she always protect you and never allow anyone to snatch you from her.she never want you to live life in hell but you choose hell yourself over my n nimmi maa love and protection

Want to ask one question to you y always I give love test or prove my love to you acc to you hiding your kinner identity from socity I did crime that can't be forgive. It means maa also keep secrete about you identity then she also did crime and those who are really criminal are true well wishers for you that lady who is standing there sold you two times and try to force you in body selling , 1st try to kill our son then sold him are good and real in your eyes

Now it's your turn to prove your love n get me back in your life its my promise now you have to come to me I will not come to you and begging love n keep proving my love to you, one more thing girl look good with her husband or in sasural or in her mayka.but sad to say you don't want to stay with your husband and your sasural wale celebrating you exit n keep on celebrating it so no use of staying there one last place left your mayka that is mallika ji place kinner house so stay there as much time you want to stay or until curtain of your eyes removed.

I still love you n keep loving you till my death.the door of my house n heart will always remain open for you whenever you want to come you are welcome but leaving all past behind you.if you want to live kinner life then that also ok to me bcz I will spend my whole life with your n adi memories.

Till now his tears start flowing from his eyes .he turned his face other side so that somya can't see them. Wiping his tears harman turned towards saya mallika ji from now no one will bother your daughter n nor you all. No one will place tent in front of your house . mallikaji you now mee very well but you also never try to understand me or reason behind gulabo MU. but I can understand your feelings and acts so no complaints . kareena I know you hate my gulabo only due to MU so today I want to clear your MU too about somya you think somya is responsible for your mother death. You think she refuse to help you but you are wrong yes she stopped me from coming to hospital just because of that evil lady prestige .what happened varaun will tell what he did with that money instead of giving you n get treated your mother that was that lady plan.

He grab varun collor n bring him in front of karena and shouted varun tell all truth otherwise you know me.varun get scared n blurt all truth about his n preeto planning.

Kareena say sorry to harman and ask her forgiveness . harman smiled n said but only one condition you will take care of my gulabo n never trust this family.jo family apne bte ki sagi na ho saki wo tum logo ki sagi kaise hogi .kareena promise him.

Harman -Gulabo before leaving can I touch you .

but somya was standing like statue her mind was freezed in confusion she looked at preeto.

chintoo came running and shook somya offo mami itna sab sunane ke baad bhi aap udhar badi nanik taraf daikh rahi ho jinke karan ye sab hua. atleast now open your eyes and see her real face and stop caring for her. Dont take mama love n caring granted as you take always. allow him atleast to touch you he is not asking for hug,he just want to touch n feel last time.

Harman

Koi jab tumhaara hraday tod de
Tadpata hua jab koi chhod de
Tab tum mere paas ana priye
Mera dar khula hai, khula hi rahega, tumhaare lie

Abhi tumako meri jrurat nahin
Bahot chaahanewaale mil jaayenge
Abhi rup ka ek saagar ho tum
Knwal jitane chaahogi khil jaayenge
Darpan tumhe jab daraane lage
Jawaani bhi daaman chhudaane lage
Tab tum mere paas ana priye
Mera sar jhuka hai, jhuka hi rahega, tumhaare lie

Koi shart hoti nahin pyaar men
Magar pyaar sharton pe tumane kiya
Najr men sitaare jo chamake jra
Bujhaane lagi arati ka diya
Jab apani najr men hi girane lago
Andhero men apane hi ghirane lago
Tab tum mere paas ana priye
Ye dipak jala hai, jala hi rahega tumhaare lie

Till now somya come in her scense she was shocked with all n harman words she was feeling guilty but confused what to reply him .

Harman ok ok miss tarana can you dance here for me

Somya still standing but looked at harman with a question mark on her face

Harman what happen when you can dance on road for begging money then why can't here in closed wall .dont worry all these ppl who are standing there will give you money and I will also give you some thing .

Saya try to intrupt but harman stopped her no you will not interfere am asking which she want and you also want this then why objecting.

Somya harmanji what are you saying. how can you say this to me. you are insulting me you said you love me then how can you ask me to do so.

Harman- not insulting you am asking from tarana , my gulaabo also love me but not ready to accept it now my somay want to enjoy life of a kinner .now you are tarana not somya then what the problem in doing kinner job .asked just two things. one tarana dance and two to touch tarana .till now I touched my gulaabo .

harman extend his hand to touch her but before he touch her somya hugged him and ran away without looking back stopping her cry. all kinners went behind her. but neelam (kinner from sec group) stoped n turned towards harman hasitatly she ask harman whether she can call him bhaiya .harman allow her she happily bend down to touch his feet. harman get shocked with her behavior but she tell her that she had also a bro about his age n she loves tarana as her sister. she assure harman that one day his love will win bcz his love is pure and selfless .soon she will regret for her MU and not trusting him n doubt on his love.Whenever you need help ask freely I am with you . Saying this neelam also left. When all went maninder n babe n nani also take permission from them they know very well that if they say a single word then today will be there last day. Before leaving nani give blessings to harman n chintoo with teary eyes. Harman console her that ever thing will be all right so no need to worry.

When all leave harman chintoo talk in eyes. Chintoo run inside behind him raavi also come in room but chintoo ignore her and bring some papers from harman room.on other side preeto trying to justifying her crimes n haraksingh also repeating her words. Harman sitting there silently ignoring them .chintoo gave some files to harman. Harman take one file n handed over to raavi.

Harman whether you consider me as bro or not but you are my sister n will remain. You always complaint that haraksingh gave all property to me he gave nothing to you that's why you hate me and always try to harm me. Today I fulfill your wish. Here are property papers which harak singh transfer in my name. I transfer all my property in your name. so happy now.

He gave another file to varun here is your hissa, the factory which was on somya name she transfer it on my name but today I transfer it on your name so now no need to obey preeto orders n torture your wife in name of love if you really love her then give her equal respect which you want to get from her and love her soul not only her body . allow her what she want to do. Otherwise that day is not far when you will be suffering due to this evil lady or loose surbhi for ever.

At last he turn towards chacha n chachi chache I have nothing with me to give you because somya already gave you all her jewelry even nimmi maa jewelry she gave you .with that you start your new business if you want and start new life .beside this I can give you only this

Harman take a file from chintoo hand and gave to shanno. Chachi it's for my most lovely sister

Chachi what is it

Harman open and read your self

Chachi open file she get shocked seeing another land papers

Harman- its not for you its for my choti for her marriage I bought it 2 months back.

Preeto and haraksingh were looking at harman unable to understand what he is doing. In end harman come to them what are you thinking .i distribute all my property to poors of this house who want to kill me only for money .i know no one cares for me all are selfish and all have their own motives. You both have to pay for your crimes I will not handed over you to police because that punishment will be less for your deeds. You have to pay what you did to me n my gulabo you both will also feel same pain n sufferings .you have to taste your own medicine

My warning to all of you specially you preeto now don't dare to harm somya . bcz you know she is my life my breath. Never dare to play any dirty game with somya now your real face is revealed in front of all.if you do anything I will not take a sec time to kill you.

Come chintoo saying this harman hold chintoo hand and came in his room.

All were shock state what they thought what happened. At night nor chinto n nor harman came down . when all slept both come down with briefcase Silently without making any noise and left home. Next morning preeto peep in harman room but he was not in his room preeto start her drama just then raavi come out of room shouting chintoo name all surprised where both gone bcz their all belongings are on their places but pics on wall were missing .preeto n raavi were searching their sons but failed. Preeto take her ph to call somya just then a voice came no need to call somya read letter which is kept on center table in hall.

I n chinto leaving your preeto mansion and dont try to find us or to create drama. We can't live there. You all crossed all your limits. we are taking nothing with us only two pairs of dress which somya gave us as gift n my family pics n money box which me and somya saved from our earning. we are leaving. And never think of bothering somya .

Edited by meenji22 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awsome job (part 3 )b but my dear it's all Harman monologue ;you must do balance and you should create dialogues: dialogues can be talked or with eyes locks ...When you wrote scenario; can't be a narration of the story or all the time monologues dear...Scenarios need dynamism and this can only created with dialogues. ..The Story is good but you must think when you write like your story will be acted ;so you need lots of dialogues and descriptions of your characters. All the best
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Aunty I really loved Harman's style of justice here 👏 .. the way he took class of Preeto in the beginning followed by giving everything to Varun , Chachi and co so that they can finally live in peace and then finally leaving home .. this is what u call a superhit episode 👏

Also loved the way he tried to make Saumya realise where she went wrong .. now I really want to see how Saumya will manaofy her Harman ji in your next part .. I m sure she realised her mistake .. her hug says it all .. now its her turn to make all the efforts .. want to see some monologues or dialogues from her side which shows her love for Harman ..

Really loving the story .. plss updt soon 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: jyoti06

Aunty I really loved Harman's style of justice here 👏 .. the way he took class of Preeto in the beginning followed by giving everything to Varun , Chachi and co so that they can finally live in peace and then finally leaving home .. this is what u call a superhit episode 👏

Also loved the way he tried to make Saumya realise where she went wrong .. now I really want to see how Saumya will manaofy her Harman ji in your next part .. I m sure she realised her mistake .. her hug says it all .. now its her turn to make all the efforts .. want to see some monologues or dialogues from her side which shows her love for Harman ..

Really loving the story .. plss updt soon 😳


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