Standing Together Throughout the Journey: Part 3 updated on Page 3

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Ok guyz so I want this story to be implemented in the serial as well. Plz enjoy...
Avni goes missing from the house since 2 hours. Neil is in his room worrying about her and trying to connect to Avni.
Desperately, he went to Neela to ask for help as he couldn't anymore. It was raining very heavily outside...

At Neela's home:
Neil: Avni has not reached home since two hours. I am very worried. Has Dayawanti done anything???
(Worried) Oh God! I have to do something. If anything happens to her, how will I survive?
Neela(smiling) :No, Dayawanti can't do anything. I think I know where she is...Today is Asha Ji's death anniversary. Avni stand strong throughout the year but can't control herself on this day. She needs support Neil.Go Neil Go!!!
Tears fell from Neil's eyes which disappeared due to rain.
He went to that place and found Avni there, shedding tears and shouting...
Avni: Maa, why have you left me alone here...
I feel so suffocated here. Even Neela Maa left me alone. How will I manage all this Maa? I miss you Maa I miss you alot. Please guide me what to do...
Neil felt like his world stopped at that moment. He could feel Avni's pain and wished he could do something.
Suddenly it rained more heavenly. Avni felt very cold. Neil ran to her and made her wear his jacket.
Avni looked his eyes. They both were crying and had an eyelock. Neil looked at her and felt like giving her a tight hug.
Avni couldn't control anymore and felt into Neil's arms. She opened her heart out and cried. Neil felt helpness and gave her warmth in his arms.
Neil: Avni I know its extremely difficult but you have to fight back to give Asha Ji justice. Avni I am with you throughout this journey. I will never leave you alone, I m with you, I m with you.
Avni felt a sense of relief through her body.
Avni narrated her heart out to Neil and told how her father left her mother and ditched her...
Neil again hugged her tightly and they both cried together. Neil controlled himself and lifted Avni head.
He again repeated: I am with you, remember this always
He gently placed a kiss on her forehead and made her stand.
Neil: Avni its raining very heavenly. We should go home now.
Avni: But I want to spend some time with mumma.
Neil: She stays in your heart and will always accompany you...
Avni smiled and went with Neil.

I know its boring but I thought to give it a try...
Thank you
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice start...Avni crumbling is hard to read...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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hey...nice shot dear..
continue soon😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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It's not boring gal!
Definitely it's an awesome shot.
I will totally love it if it happens in real.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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That wasn't boring at all dear.
Infact that something more than tremendously amazing.
Really very niceee yaar.
Please do write next part soon.
And thanx for this one😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Superb start
It's their journey of finding justice and themselves
Update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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U know even I want this to happen in show.n I feel that it will happen in show for sure.it may be after she succeed in taking revenge
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey nice start
Continue soon.
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Thank you for the helpful reviews everyone...
Will update the next part soon...
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Avni and Neil sat in the car. Although trying very hard, Avni couldn't stop her tears. All the moments with Ayesha flashed in front of her eyes and the cruelty of Dayawanti and Ashish...
She closed her eyes with anger holding her saree very tight.

Neil saw her and his heart was aching like anything. He was helpless and couldn't lessen her pain.
Neil: Avni, Are you ok?
Avni was lost in her own thoughts and couldn't listen to his words.
Neil kept his hand on her shoulder with care and affection. Avni couldn't control anymore and broke down. Neil stopped the car near a park. The rain had stopped by that time.
He held Avni's hand and made her seat on a bench...
He held her Avni's hand and tried to comfort her...
Her tears fell on his hand and he looked at her with the most caring and lovable expression...

Neil: I can't even imagine the situation you have gone through. But Avni try and understand. You can't lose yourself like this...
Avni: Neil you know whenever I try to forget everything, it just flashes in front of my eyes.
Neil: We will together make new memories to forget all the bitter memories of your past. I promise that I will never let pain come even near you
Slowly in the breezy night, he took Avni in her arms...
Neil: Look at that moon Avni. It is alone, it has scars but it never fades away and give light to others. Ayesha Ma would also be seeing you from there. She should be proud of her Avni instead of being disheartened to see you like this.
Avni looked at that moon and smiled...
Avni: I love you maa...
Avni turned towards Neil and smiled...
Neil( in his mind): Avni from now on I will make sure that this smile fades away from your face...
Neil to avni: Shall we leave?
Avni: Yeah, I m feeling much better now. Thank you for your support Neil...
Neil smiled, held her hand and took her to the car.
They drove together to the home...


I hope you guyz liked it. Plz leave your valuable comments if I should continue it😊

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