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Posted: 8 years ago

Svetlana the Avenger


"Di, you promised me! It was the last thing I had to do. No more now! I did all you asked of me but enough is enough! All I want is to be happy and marry my girlfriend. My real girlfriend Neha!


Dev spoke to his elder sister with annoyance and impatience. What started as a quest for vengeance for the both of them, turned out to be an out of control sickening thriller his Di could not let go off. He looked at her face, lit up by the lights in the garden of the beautiful mansion. She was pretty, but the hate for the Oberoi's had made her look old and even ugly despite of her beauty.


"All I ask of you is to stay back and handle damage control. See whether the cameras are on and get the tapes. Just switch them. Steel it or bribe the watchmen, I don't care! Just get it done. And I promise you.. You will marry the woman you are in love with. Now go!!


~~


"Prinku? You are home already? Did you have a good time? Tell me all about it. It was Jhanvi, who was waiting for the kids to return home. A mother is always worried about her children staying out late at night, but in this particular case she was happy that Priyanka had decided to go out and party along, as youngsters do. She had waited for Priyanka to hear her stories.


Priyanka had been in a hurry to go to her room and to find out what Ranveer had bought for her. He had actually taken the time and bought her gift. Her... The boring stuttering Oberoi..


"Mom, you are still awake? Yeah.. The party was fun. I enjoyed a lot. There is not much to tell.. We have been dancing. The DJ was very good. Rudra bhaya has done it again. Best party of this year for sure.


"What's that? Jhanvi pointed at the box. "Oh.. It is gift.. Uhm.. Rudra bhaya arranged that. It is like a goody bag.. A goody box..


As much as Priyanka enjoyed and appreciated Jhanvi as the concerned and involved mother she had turned into more and more, she was not in the mood for chitchat. All she wanted is to find out what was in the box. She kissed her mom goodnight and hurried upstairs to her room.


As excited as she was to open the gift, she prolonged the feeling by not opening it yet. What could it be? His voice resounded in her ears. Why did he say "If you choose to accept this gift... She accepted it when she stepped out of the car with the gift in her hands didn't she? Apparently, he is expecting some kind of answer of me tomorrow...


A feeling of uneasiness replaced her initial excitement. Why would he trick me, after all we have been through? No.. It is nothing like that.. She spoke to herself to gain courage and opened the box. It was a beautiful golden brooch with fine filigree of flowers interspersed with stars. She touched and caressed it as her fingers followed the fine soft shape of this amazing piece of jewelry. Her fingers touched and swiped over the center. She felt something she could distinguish. She walked up to her desk to admire this work of art. Priyanka would be up for the most part of the night, contemplating the gift and threat text message.


~~


At the same time, Ranveer arrived at the venue, thinking of his Priyanka. There was no doubt on his mind. She was his, and his alone. "God Ranveer, you sound like an obsessive freak! He wondered if she would show up tomorrow evening. He had one more surprise, and one more gift up his sleeve for her.


Shinde was already waiting for him. "Shinde? You are here too? "Sir, I knew you would come here. Ranveer was lucky to have Shinde as his colleague and as a friend. "We should hurry. The party is coming to an end. Why don't you get hold of copies of all the camera footage and I will check for clues and the guest list.


"OK sir. Shinde was ready to get started but Ranveer stopped him.

"Shinde?

"Yes sir?

Ranveer was amused but still continued in a very serious tone of voice: "It might be a good idea to wipe off that lipstick from your cheek..


~~


Shivaay was the first to notice the ACP and walked up to him. "Is everything ok? Any problems bringing Prinku home?


"No worries. No problems. Your baby sister is safe and sound. Have some faith in me. I won't let anything happen to her.


Strange enough Shivaay had no issues believing the ACP. His instincts did tell him that he would take care of his sister if this was required.


"Don't mind me asking, but why are you here? I mean, I thought you also would go home yourself.


Shivaay Singh Oberoi could have become an inspector actually, if only he would not have problems in getting his hands dirty, literally.

The case being a secret and a sensitive project, he could not reveal his true intentions of returning to the party.


"I came to check if Neha needs a ride home and whether all youngsters go home safely. We promote a don't drink and drive' policy. Once a policeman, always a policeman. He smiled and Shivaay nodded.


~~


"Oh God! What will he think of me now? Nisha is his close friend. Maybe his girlfriend even. I mean she came as his date. It was not even a kiss. Not really. Sort of. Oh God.. Just focus on the here and now..!


Shinde was on his way to the control room, after he spoke to one of the watchmen. He had a case to solve. Who was scaring the lovely sweet Miss Oberoi? And why?


He heard some noises he could not clearly distinguish. It sounded like someone had fell on the floor. He notified Ranveer and went in alone.


"Stop right there! Identify yourself! Shinde caught someone stealing the tapes. "I said stop right there! You are under arrest!'


Shinde could not see who this man was as he had masked his face. The thief made a move to flee, Shinde tried to stop him by overpowering him, with success.


When Ranveer arrived and removed his mask, both Ranveer and Shinde were shocked that their suspicion was correct.


"DEV! DEV CHHABRA! You bloody... I knew you could not be trusted! It was Shivaay who blurted this out.


"ACP, what's going on? What did he do? Dev? What's going on dude? Rudra had so many questions.


Shivaay, Omkara and Rudra had followed Ranveer, demanding to know what the hell was going on.


Ranveer signaled to Shinde to take Dev with him, discreetly, before he turned to the OBros, especially to Omkara. Afterall, he would be able to convince Shivaay in this matter.


"Leave it to me. If I have any information worth sharing I will. Good night.


~~


On the police station Dev was allowed to make one phone call.

"Di, Please come get me. What will happen now.

"Stop crying Dev. Just make sure you keep your mouth shut and let me handle the rest. The Chhabra's secret should remain a secret!

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Posted: 8 years ago
AAAND THE CIRCLE IS BACK!!!
Rishu, what a gloriously suspense-filled update! So this is what you and Sarce had cooking between you two... Loving this!! ABSOLUTELY LOVING THIS!!!!

Oufff!!!!! So, Svetlana has been planning this revenge on the Oberois since when? And why? How are the Chhabras connected to the Oberois?

Will Dev keep his mouth shut as advised or will he bend to the will of the OBros and our ACP???

Also, Shinde kissed ACP's friend...👏

Superb, YOU TWO!!!! YOU GUYS HAVE BLOWN ME AWAY!!!!!


Edit: I will go next. Expect an update by some time tonight. 😳
Edited by twerping - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: twerping

❤️Sarce!❤️

I am in some kind of blissful heaven right now!
☺️

This was absolutely fantastic! You are seriously such a brilliant writer!
The threat note was brilliant! Loved the rhyme! And the way you set the tone between our PriVeer was perfect!
ACP is on the case now and this time Prinku is no longer the antagonist.

This is getting really interesting now. I won't be able to do justice to the brilliance that you have just weaved but I shall give it a go. Will post something by tonight.

Love,
Twerps.



Thank you, Twerps! 🤗

Glad to know that you enjoyed it. Since The Oberoi Affair, I really like the idea of poetic threat notes, irrespective of how simple they may be. 😆

Can't wait for your update whenever you have the time. And hey, you're the Queen of Brilliance when it comes to writing. 😎
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: emerald39

What a wonderful gift I have woken up to today. The Circle is back with a bang! Sarce, that was brilliant!!!



From the comfort both of them seem to slowly slip back into (can I just say how much I love your subtlety with these two), to the suspense of the threat, to him (FINALLY!!) giving her the gift he got her...and then, Svetlana. Eeeks, I am so excited for what's to come already! And what rusty writing skills? How is that rusty??😆

Looking forward to Rishu's update😳



Thank you, Anu! 😃

It's time that things up between these two, so he had to give her the gift and also the dynamics needs to start changing. 😉

And the writing, I felt is rusty, because...well, because I could do better. 😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
Rishi, fantastic update!

Nisha is fast, if nothing else. Poor Shinde! 🤣 What an embarrassing moment for him when that comment came from Ranveer. 😆

Loved the update! Can't wait to see what Twerps takes this ahead to.
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Posted: 8 years ago
@Sarce, regarding your rusty writing skills, we, here at the Circle, shall keep forcing you write for us!! 🤗
And since you are so epic already, it will be a pleasure for us to 'torture' you thus!
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Posted: 8 years ago
To all the writers of the circle,

Not sure how many of you remember this, but in the extremely initial updates of the circle, we had an update from the future. Check out the sixth post from the first circle. It is on page 16. I was wondering if we could lead our current track up to that, eventually, before closing the story. The only key thing there is that Prinku's love realisation happens there. And that update also ends hinting towards a separation between PriVeer... Which means, despite everything we're doing here, she won't realise before it's too late. 😆

We could lead this track to its climax and then end this track before PriVeer get a chance for the real conversation, and maybe even let there be separation between PriVeer due to some misunderstanding and also ObBros, which could lead to Prinku's later realisation...

Just letting out some ideas here. Feel free to share your thoughts, accept or reject the suggestions, whatever. 😆
Edited by -Sarcy- - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
And then we can continue the story to PriVeer's happily ever after before ending the circle and starting a new PriVeer story afresh. 😆
Edited by -Sarcy- - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Sarce,
thanks for that timely reminder.
Yes, my suggestion is that let us for now focus on solving the mystery behind the accident. Rishu has some ideas, will PM you and Anu about it. We need to work together now to get the story to a proper conclusion. Once the mystery is solved, we can then create a misunderstanding and a separation followed by a compromised union. But that will mean we shall have to continue with this story only instead of starting on a new one. 😆

Feeling a lot like a serial writer now! But should we discuss plot development here?
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: -Sarcy-

And then we can continue the story to PriVeer's happily ever after before ending the circle and starting a new PriVeer story afresh. 😆


Yes, with so much ground to cover, we shall easily reach the end of this thread by the time we get to their happily ever after!!!!
😆

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