Originally posted by: T4Thahaanfan
Gripping, cute story - happy to see no evil as in CV stories 😆
But (here speaks a professional editor) look a bit at grammar and word order, my dear. The text now often made me read a certain passage twice.Readers are usually lazy folks 🥱: they want to understand a sentence in one go. Also because then the flow of the story remains intact.But do continue asap - it's really nice 😃