Poetry:The Renaissance

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Posted: 8 years ago
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So, I am back here again, this time with a piece of poetry. This one is on Arjuna and Draupadi and dedicated to Moumita(Girl,here goes your impending treat. Hope you like it!) and quite obviously to my little ArDi gang!
This takes place after Arjuna, post his encounter with Lord Shiva in the Himalayas and his adventures in Indraloka, retraces to the forests where his brothers and draupadi are. You see this through the eyes of draupadi as her longing heart at last finds peace.

PS-Its exceedingly short.šŸ˜›


THE RENAISSANCE


Collapsing into his arms, i finally felt whole,

Healing the bruises on my crest-fallen soul.

Yearnings bore tears, perpetual fears post,

In the tranquil warmth of his palm, i so wanted to get lost.

He forayed into my eyes,

Heart beats held high,

Slender fingers entangled my hair,

Infinite unuttered words of love and care.

Giving away tales of warriors and woes,

Speaking of martial and ferocious foes.

But i knew none of what he preached,

For my treacherous ears had long surceased.

Substantiating my gaze to his toes, i gasped,

Brooding over the distances that they had lapsed.

From somewhere above the clouds, an earnest stream passed,

Renewing the charm of life and love, Renaissance it was.


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Posted: 8 years ago
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What a lovely piece of work Ramya. Can visualise the longingness of Draupadi and the tranquilizing effect Arjuna had on her soul and mind. 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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An abridged edition of an era's yearnings and an enchanting lady's longings for her lover-husband !
Beautifully written tribute to a hankering wife's reunion with her long lost admirer somewhere in the forest !
A well written lyrical tribute to the special bonding shared by Draupadi and Arjun Ramya !šŸ‘
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Posted: 8 years ago
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The love ArDi shared, written is beautiful words by my Donnuuuttt šŸ¤—
Rammy, you are an amazing poetess ā¤ļø
The Renaissance is an apt name for this poem. There is romance and light sensuality, wrapped in a love that was portrayed beautifully. Well done Rammy šŸ‘šŸ‘
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello Writer-ji.
Now you know I don;t call you that for nothing! šŸ˜†
You are a freaking genius- I love your writing style.
There was a romance, a beautiful sensuality to it. A passion. Spot on, and wow! How you captured their emotions.
I wanna see more.. *grins mischievously*
See, I gave review, ab toh CG pe dede šŸ˜†
So proud of you my Donut! 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Their eternal love and reunion after separation has been well woven by ur words. Well expressed.
Do write more of poetry :p
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This was an absolute treat! Draupadi's yearning finally comes to an end as she loses herself in Arjun's arms. The poem was beautiful and had a very smooth course! Loved it! <3
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Beautiful
Thanks for the pm šŸ˜›
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Posted: 8 years ago
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WHAT A BEAUTY !!!😃

Wonderful Poem Rammy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 😳

Ardi Have always been one of my favourites in the epic, but you gave such a contemplative light of their separation, its so amazing 😳😃😃
It displays such a wonderful array of emotions and I love the scheme you have used !!

It was almost like a song, the kind of which become Love Themes with the violins and grand piano (apologies for the musical imagination šŸ˜†šŸ˜†)

But truly, its a masterpiece :)

Do write more!

P.s. Awaiting the Thriller ASAP after Boards šŸ˜†
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This is SO beautiful, Ramya. You have aptly described Draupadi's yearning for Arjuna, and their reunion was written so sweet. You really have a flair for poetry. šŸ˜²šŸ‘ I suck at it. šŸ˜†

Can you write one on Bhima-Draupadi after he kills Dushashan and washes her hair with his blood?

And Yudhisthir-Draupadi as she sees his repentance and assuages his guilt, and finally forgives him.

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