NOVEL~*Hiding behind a Stranger*~ Thread 5~CHAPTER 10 - Upd 10th JULY - Page 132

Originally posted by: lashy

Originally posted by: sashashyam

This is truly lovely, Akka. It brings out perfectly the helpless, agonizing heartache one feels when faced with sudden, gut-wrenching loss . You are a wizard at locating such poems👏, Akka, I do not know how you do it!

Shyamala

Originally posted by: sashashyam

My dear Divya,

Dear Periamma, thanks so much for your thoughtful response

I am so glad that you flagged this for me, otherwise I would never have seen it as I never trawl thru Lashy's gargantuan threads. They intimidate me!😉

You are not alone - I lost your response as well!

This is a genuinely fresh and original concept, using only the zergul flower as a leit motif, to which you have managed to link almost every aspect of any significance in these chapters. Very clever, my dear! It was not easy, but you have managed it. But then you can manage just about anything, and it works perfectly.

Thank you - it means a lot 😳

I of course, as you might have seen from my post, abandoned the zergul flower completely, and went on a different track altogether. That is the fun about a gripping tale with complex characters, one can look at them in so many different ways!

Yes, but I think your keeper of th flame describes how I felt Akbar wanted to protect the "zergul flower"

My favourites among your Top 10 are marked in blue.

Thank you - some of my favorites too

One small caveat. Poise, formality and decorum in Akbar and Heera, do you say?

To my mind, he is anything but poised; he is barely able to maintain the facade of being so. She does manage to look poised, but inside, it is all a roiling sea of confusing feelings. Decorum, yes, but not formality, no. If he had been properly formal, he would never have asked Heera those very personal questions about her eye problem. She is scrupulously decorous and formal, but then a young lady of her birth and breeding would hardly have been anything else with a young man she has just encountered.

A very good distinction and agreed ... He is definitely not in as much control

Shyamala Periamma

Originally posted by: MelisaBernards

My name is Melisa Bernards. I saw that my poem Behind the Mask was in a post about this novel. I have only recently discovered the attention it had been getting. I really like how it was used. Thank you for crediting me.