Once Again[AU]~A ShraMan FF(PART 10_PG 24)15.02.17 - Page 6

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Posted: 9 years ago
#51
It ok take u r time...
But what about u r other story Finally not updated... Epilogue is pending... Plz update ...

Thank you...

Vinu
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Posted: 9 years ago
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awesome...
take your time...
..will wait for the update...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#53
It's ok take your own time!!!
All the best for your camp!!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello...Happy Lohri to everyone...Mera kal ka paper postpone ho gaya...so free hu aaj...issiliye here goes ur update...I have a clarification to make..sumo ke profession bhi alag hai...So jinhone meko camp ke liye wish kiya unko THANKS...will try to give one more update before going...So enough of my rant ...here goes the chappy...ENJOY...No Proof read


ONCE AGAIN

Next morning

The bell rings...

Priya opens the door...

"Ma'am courier"

Suman...tumhara courier aaya hai..."

Priya signs it and tries to take it but Sumo emerges from behind taking it from the couriervala forcefully...

"Suman...!!"Priya is shocked

Suman is checking it...Examining whether it is damaged or not...

"Kahi kharab vagera toh nahi kiya na...ye dekho...ye scratch kaise laga..."To the couriervala"Koi cheez aapko dhang se nahi aati...aagar andar damage hua hoga na toh dekh lena..."saying this she runs to her room to see whether it is damaged from inside...she comes out after 5 mins

"Thik hai...aap jaa sakte hai...kuch nahi hua courier ko..."

The man went away in huff...

"Suman aisa kyat ha usme ke tu uss bechare courier vale par bina matlab ke baras gaye..."

"Maa usme voh -"

"Aunty aap kaha jaa rahe ho bag lekar??"

"Hum log nikal rahe hai beta...bas ek din ke liye he toh rehne aaye the..."

"Kya aunty...Ek hafta toh ruk jaate na..."

"Nahi suman...Ram humara intazaar kar rahe honge vaha...aur tickets bhi booked hai...agli baar.."

"Nahi aunty...please...aap humesha agli baar kehte ho..."

"Beta mera kya hai..mai toh ruk jaaungi...par ram waha ghussa honge...aur.."

"Aunty aap ramnath uncle ki chinta mat kijiye...mai unhe samjha dungi..."

"Aur Shravan ka kya..."

"Uska kya??Aagar usko jaana hai toh woh jaaye..."

"Par..."

"Par var kuch nahi aunty...mai abhi ramnath uncle ko bata deti hu..."sumo ran to her room to call ramnath..

"Ziddi ho gayi hai bilkul...hai na priya..."

"Ha...dekho kaise baacho ke tarah zid kar rahi hai...Nirmala aagar tumhe jaana hai toh..."

"Aare nahi...reh jaaungi yaha...vaise bhi waha par toh ram ka he kaam hai...mera kuch bhi nahi...waha aakale bore hone se aacha mai yaha enjoy karu..."

"Toh humlog ruk rahe hai na maa...??"Shravan ask excitedly..

"Haanji..hum log ruk rahe hai..."to priya"Ye bhi subah se keh raha tha ke ruk jaate hai..."

"Dono ke dono ziddi hai..."Priya said...

"Maine bata diya uncle ko..aab aap pura hafta yahipe rahengi..."

"Aur mai??"Shravan asked

"Tum kya??Tumhe rehna hai toh raho varna jaao..."

"Suman??"Priya glared...

"Woh...mera matlab hai ke tumhari marzi...aagar tum rukna chahte ho toh ruko..."

***

Its was evening...Sumo was sitting in her room..

Aab parcel khol leti hu...sab log busy hai...

She went towards it and stopped

Sabse pehle darvaza toh band karlu...

Sumo closed the door nad then opened her cupboard to take the parcel...

She unrevealed it slowly...

She pulled the stand closed to her and put the canvas on it slowly...

Hmm...kaise complete karu mai tumhe ..ha...tum itne difficult kyu ho..???Aaj tak kitne logo ke portraits banaye hai...Kisine itna taang nahi kiya mujhe...tum aise kyu ho..."Suman was talking to the portrait...unaware that she had a audience...He climbed in from the window and stood behind her...

"Kaise complete honge tum...3 maahine se bana rahi hu...aur bas itna sa he hua hai..."She took the picture which she had...

"Tum-"she saw his reflection in the picture and turned behind in jerk...almost slapping like his face with her hair...

"Tum andar kaise aaye...?"

"Photo se baat karne ke bajaye directly mujhse baat karti toh mai respond bhi karta na..."

"Mai..woh...Tum andar kaise aaye????"

"Khidki se..."Damn...she forgot to close the windows..

"Aur ye kya hai..." Shravan looked at the canvas behind her...

"Woh...tum..tumse matlab??"

"Aaare...Kiska chehra hai ye sumo..."

"Tum niklo yaha se..."she tried to push him...but no avail...

"Aise kaise...oh ha...portrait aadha hai...aur refrence ke liye meri pictures hai...toh mera dimag iss natije par pahuncha hai key eh mera portrait hai...Hai na...??"

Sumo turned her face away...Shravan went to her face side and asked...

"Bolo na...mera he hai na..."

"Ha ...tumhara he hai...bas..?? Ho gayi tassalli...aab niklo yaha se..."

"Jaa raha hu...bas ye batao ke iss STRANGER ke tasveer kyu banayi ..."Shravan asked and sumo's hands stopped him pushing...

"Kyunki ye wahi pe display hone vaali hai jaha mera dost mere liye stranger bana tha...jaha usne dosti ke saari haadey par ki thi..."

Shravan's eyes kept her staring..

"Sun liya..aab niklo yaha se..."

Shravan headed without a word...

"Aaah...Ouch..."

Suman turned back in a jiffy just to see Shravan standing near the window clutching his left forehead..

"Kya hua..."Sumo rushed towards him...

He removed his hand from there and sumo saw blood oozing out...

"Pagal ho tum...Kya kar rahe the..."

"Who...tumne kaha issiliye bahar jaa raha tha...khidki se..."

"ARE YOU OUT OF YOUR SENSES SHRAVAN...KHIDKI SE..."Sumo was totally enraged..

"Ha...matlab vahi se aaya that oh..."

"Tumhara dimag toh thik hai...darvaza kya show ke liye banaya hai...aur apna size dekho aur khidki ka size dekho...lag gaya na...baitho idhar..."Sumo dragged him towards the bed...

"Kya kar rahi ho...choodo..."

"Chup..ekdum chup...tum pagal ho gaye ho...chupchap yaha baithe raho..."She rushed to her cupboard and came with the first aid box...

"Kyu kar rahi ho ye sab...ek STRANGER ke liye..."

Sumo looked at him with a deadly stare...

"Hum dono bhi jaante hai ke mai ye kyu kar rahi hu...toh please bhagvan ke liye apna muh band rakho aur mujhe dawai laage do..."

The whole time Shravan kept thinking of the past...of what he had done way back...devalued her feelings...

FLASHBACK

10 years ago...

"Please Shravan...mai saach mei tumse bohot pyaar karti hu...pyaar na sahi toh kam se kam dost to reh sakte ho na tum.."

"Jaan gaya hu mai saab kuch...maine tumhe aacha dost maana tha..aur tumne..Aishwarya se baat kar kar bohot badi galti ke..."

"Shravan maine jaanbuch kar kuch bhi nahi kiya...woh Jhanvhi ne mujhe force kiya tha...please suno meri baat...mai...

"kuch nahi sunna mujhe...aaj ke baad mujhe aapna chehra mat dikhana..."

"Shravan...shravan please ruko...shravan..."

But he had not listened to her...she kept shouting his name...but he did't turn back...It did hurt back in his corner of mind...but he had ignored it...

Next day...

School ground..

Jhanvhi, Sumo's best friend came to talk to him...

"Aagar tum Sumo ke bare mey baat karne aayi ho toh please...niklo yaha se..."

"Mai Sumo ke baat nahi karne aayi...mai tuhare bare mey tumse baat karne aayi hu..."

"Matlab.??"

Shravan tumne kal jo kiya ...bohot bura kiya...maana ke tum school ke handsome ladke ho...saari ladkiya marti hai tum pe...par iska matlab ye toh nahi na ke tumko kisike feelings ko devalue karne ka license mila hua hai..."

"Usne galati ki thi...usse Aishwarya se baat karne ke koi zarorat nahi thi...who jaanti hai ke..."

"Shravan maine usse force kiya tha..."

"Aur tum bhi toh ye baat jaanti ho na ke aishwarya ne kaise mera dil tooda tha...mai usse saach mey bohot pyaar..."

"For god sake Shravan woh pyaar nahi tha...who tumhari crush thi..."

"Jo bhi ho...usse aishwarya se ye baat karne ke kya zaroorat thi ke mai usse abhi bhi pasand karta hu...uska abhi bhi wait kar raha hu...I hate her Jhanvhi..."

"I am sorry Shravan ...meri galati thi...maine sumo ko force kiya tha...usko toh bas maine..."

Till then Aiishwarya comes to him...

"Shravan ..I am sorry ..maine kal tumse jhoot kaha tha ...Suman ne mujhe bas ye kaha tha ke tum bohot hurt ho...maine he tumhe bana ke woh sab kaha...Suman tumhe bohot pyaar karti hai..."

"Kya...how dare u...tumne...tumhari vajah se...SHIT..."

Shravan had realized him mistake..but sumo didn't come back...

FLASHBACK ENDS

After inquiry Shravan ko pata chala ke Suman had applied for a course in New York ...which would be of 5 years...Shravan tried calling her...but she never picked it up...afraid of any other showdown...

"Ho gaya...""Shravan..."SHRAVAN???"Sumo tapped his cheek...

"Kya??"

"Ho gaya.."She pointed at his forehead...

"Oh...Thanks.."

"Aab dekh ke chalo..."

"Hmm..."

Shravan left the room ..lost in thoughts...

So guys...Kaisa tha?? Hope I matched your expections...Lamba hai...do tell if you want a smaller one...And do not forget to type the like button...and silent readers..do comment...karke dekho aacha lagta hai...

meet y'all soon..

Love,

ANU😳

P.S _ Constructive critisizm is most welcome

P.P.S_ Tomatoes and chappals are most welcome...par no eggs...Mai vegeterian hu..😃Nazuk kali hu...rehem karna...


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Posted: 9 years ago
#55
RESS...me pehle
...
UNRESS
dekh main apna chapter likhna chodh kar tera padh rahi hu
vaise more than worth tha
bohot cute tha but yeh shravan kaan ka itna weak hai😭
any ways voh dialougue
"agar portrait ki jagah mujhse bhi bat karti to main bhi respond kar deta"
🤣
and phir the succeeding scene was shoo cute
belo belo papadh shravan malhotra apni sumo ka dil dukhaya hai tumne😆

Love
Arpita
Edited by ArpitaSingh1806 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#56
Meri nazuk kali tujhe kese koi mar sakta h...finally back with a such an awesome update😊👏 the past😭😭bichari sumo...shravan ne sahi nahi kiya but all cause of misunderstandings ...ye mu k chakkar me show me bhi problem hui thi...and sumo was making his portrait awww and he saw it🤣 lol!!! Read it before the p.m ...eager me u know. ..chal try to update soon
Love ya🤗
Dolly😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#57

Originally posted by: ArpitaSingh1806

RESS...me pehle

...
UNRESS
dekh main apna chapter likhna chodh kar tera padh rahi hu
vaise more than worth tha
bohot cute tha but yeh shravan kaan ka itna weak hai😭
any ways voh dialougue
"agar portrait ki jagah mujhse bhi bat karti to main bhi respond kar deta"
🤣
and phir the succeeding scene was shoo cute
belo belo papadh shravan malhotra apni sumo ka dil dukhaya hai tumne😆

Love
Arpita


Arpi...🤗
U kno mai toh kehti hu ke tu sabkuch chod ke bas khana he khati reh...jaldi hospital se bahar aayegi...
Glad u liked it...
Ye toh 10 saal pehle ka flashback tha...Aur ek baki hai..😉
Tysm once again...

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Namiksfan

Meri nazuk kali tujhe kese koi mar sakta h...finally back with a such an awesome update😊👏 the past😭😭bichari sumo...shravan ne sahi nahi kiya but all cause of misunderstandings ...ye mu k chakkar me show me bhi problem hui thi...and sumo was making his portrait awww and he saw it🤣 lol!!! Read it before the p.m ...eager me u know. ..chal try to update soon

Love ya🤗
Dolly😊


Dollu...🤗
Glad u liked the update...😊
Tu toh besabar baachi hai...😆
Will try 2 update soon...
Love,
ANU
😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: minho

Nice 👏 👍🏼


TYSM😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
#60
This is the misunderstanding between these two...someone came & told something about her & he believed...kaisa admi hai yeh kaan ka kacha...how can someone trust him...

Has he feeling for her now, is she love him even now also...

Vinu

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