Three Shot: Dirt (Shivika/OmRu) COMPLETED

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello ladies! I know I have to update Dil Bole Oberoi (Early Chronicles). But-- as you writers know, sometimes a random concept suddenly sinks in and it wont leave you alone until you write the whole thing out of your system! That's what happened here, a small one shot that came to me. Its in THREE parts. All parts are now up! Please comment, and like!

DIRT
CHAPTER ONE

The line of four cars screeched to a stop in front of the police station just as Rudra and Omkara pulled up, swerving onto the sidewalk in Rudra's new Viper. Rudra was a split second behind Om since he paused to toss his keys to one of the security men to re-park. Om was already out of the car and running up the stairs before the Viper stopped---- but no one was as fast as Shivaay Singh Oberoi. He was out of his 150 crore Bentley and inside the station before Om got even half way up the stairs. Panting, just a half minute behind his enraged, manic brother, Om was just in time to see Shivaay vault across the sergeant's desk to grab the portly police-walla by his fat, bulging throat.

"Kaha.. Hai..?" gritted Shivaay, his ice blue eyes blazing an eerie silver in the fluorescent light of the station house. Perhaps respect for the powerful Oberoi name, perhaps shock, or --most possibly--- just terrified by the raw, feral fury in Shivaay's contorted face, no police man came to the sergeant's rescue. That man dangled from Shivaay's hands, spluttering and gagging as he clawed at the white, aristocratic fingers gripping his throat shut and turning him purple.

Woh..Kaha..Hai..? Shivaay repeated, his voice no more than a hoarse growl, trembling with unleashed rage. Omkara could feel the hair rise on his arms in response to that tone, as he tried to stop Shivaay from murdering a policeman inside a police station. "Shivaay, khud ke liye nahi, but for her sake, control yourself...strangling him won't make him to speak up faster!!" Om pleaded, as he tried to pry Shivaay's stiff fingers away from the gasping officer's neck. With Om's help, the sergeant managed to get away from the crazed Oberoi, and stumbled back, eyeing the madman in front of him with real terror on his face.

"Mr Oberoi...!!!" The sergeant stuttered, his voice now a barely a squeak. "Woh.. Kanoon ki sahayata karne ke liye...hum usko yaha..Gayatri ki case ki bare jaan kari... address pe gaya...mamuli ek chawl par tha address... aur jab ladki ka pehchan pucha, to kuch nahi bola mere ko...toh hum log toh naturally suspicious hua ...naam nahi batayi... yaha holding peh leke ana, jaankari ke liye do-char thappar...bohut kuch nahi !! Aisa kuch nahi kiya, yakeen maniye.. thik thak hi tha ..par jab cell pe gaya toh woh... waha pe kya hua yeh nahi ... maafi... aap.. aap... mere ko ...maaf..." As the damning words stumbled out, Shivaay lunged at him again, and it was all Om could do to hold him back from finishing off the cowering policeman.

Shivaay buried his face into Om's neck, shuddering as Om half carried, half dragged his terrified and almost uncontrollable brother away from the now equally terrified sergeant. "OM..." Shivaay whispered to his panting, teary eyed brother-
"Missing... 24 hours, Om, my chest hurt this whole time, but I didn't know, I didn't know anything... he hit her, Om... he hurt her..."


The sergeant, who by now knew exactly what a fatal mistake he'd made, was basically just praying that he could live to see next morning. Quickly he gestured to his frightened, silent guards to fetch the girl, when a scream--and then Rudra's shout of
"Bhaiya!!!!" pierced through the station.
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CHAPTER TWO-- PAGE 3
CHAPTER THREE-- PAGE 9

Please do give your reactions and comments, and if you guys would like to read more stories from me, please let me know! 😊

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Posted: 8 years ago
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dang that was mysterious
guessing her is obviously anika
but the bhaiya at the end? cliff hangers kill me, continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I've had my sights on The Night of the Wedding for a while but just haven't been reading much on the forum lately and so haven't gotten around to that one. I'm glad you wrote this one piece so that I wouldn't be deprived of your writing. 😳

A very intriguing piece, and absolutely beautifully crafted. Shivaay's emotions were raw and I could feel his anguish in the few words he uttered. His very first words reminded me of the famous ShivKara conversation in the show where Om had told Shivaay that one day he'd hurt due to her pain and cry for her. And his final words to Om only proved it true. If the piece wasn't intriguing enough, the cliffie at the end definitely made me hold my breath! I hope you won't keep us waiting long to know what ensues.

Cheers!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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that was well written 😊

Why did Rudra Scream bhaiyya...that was Scary hope she is fine...Continue soon cannot wait to read more 😉 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Like om had said, when she gets hurt he will feel the pain...the same thing is depicted here in an amazing way...
How was she missing for 24 hours?
The end scared me...
I wonder what the end of this two shot holds for us...
Would love to read more...
Update sooon please cant wait to read the second part
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Ohhh god cliffer hangers just kill me 😭
Please update soonish... I love This Shivaay who is fierce But Tender for Anika ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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hey dear😃
thank you so much for this🤗
am so glad i logged on IF only to find this wonderful surprise😃
it was brilliant👏👏
shivaay was awesome. Damn, that raw rage, passion and agony at the end❤️
i hope anika will be fine😭
your work always leaves me breathless and yet still gasping for more❤️
hope you complete this one soon and eagerly waiting for the Night of the Wedding too😃
take care

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Posted: 8 years ago
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omg ... i love to read ur night of wedding. n this was just mind blowing. but why a cliff hanger.. update soon na n for shivaay jis din show me aisa dikha vo we al will die n go to heaven 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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You've captured that mixture of fear and anger so well. And the streaks of guilt as well, which exacerbates everything, when he says "my chest hurt, but I didn't know". Anika's adamancy to stick with just Anika is seemingly at the root of her being brought in. A graphic example of the casual brutality the police mete out to people who they think are being "shaana" ...
I'm guessing Rudra saw a bloodied Anika being escorted towards the sergeant?
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: 3dancelover

dang that was mysterious

guessing her is obviously anika
but the bhaiya at the end? cliff hangers kill me, continue soon


Hi! hahaha, your comment cracked me up because I used to write a FF on IPPKND where every chapter ended on a cliffhanger, even when I didn't want them to. I swear people would get mad at me, and it just happened and it was like I had no control over my own fingers as I typed updates. I'll promise that wont happen here, its one more part only. I'll update soon, so I hope you will hold on!

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