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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Kritika-

firstly thank you so much for the comment i know in these days you are not using india forums but as a regular reader you read my all stories and comment as well and if you are busy you messaged me on fb and do appreciate my work thank you so much for motivating me and like my stories as well 😳😳😳


Heyyy Kritz I Will Always Comment On And Like On Whether I'm Late Or Not But I Willl Comment... And U Don't Need To Thank Me... 😊 Infact I Should Thank U 4 Giving Us Beautiful Story... 😊 Plus Continue Soon... 😊 Highly Waiting 4 Next Update...😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Heyy Kritz I Just Read Ur CS Well Must Say I Really Like Them... 😊 But Sis As I Guessed That In Ur Previous Thread U Had Posted The Picx Tooo... But Here I Failed To See Picx .. 😔
Kritz Do Post Them... 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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important note

haye every one here i am updating fear makes love chapter 1 because this part was already written before... so i just do copy and paste but in this story i actually changes lots of situations so its a request to my readers if anyone read this story before it doesn't matter you read it or not but if you did so please forget what you read and read this one and I want to say something to silent readers guys please do comment and like because i m a writer i know how it feels when i do work on any story and give my precious time on that but than you guys doesn't respond on that you know guys its very irritating . Why i am writing this stories because i don't have any other work to do ? Do you really think i am velly? NO because of you guys i am doing this its not just about me i think every writer want this that silent readers do appreciate there work its not a difficult task you just press like button or do a small comment i am not saying you give a long comment but a small one at least
i know you guys like my work

PS: firstly this is not for my regular readers this is about that kind of people who read my stories but never do comment and like and sorry if anybody get hurt i don't want to hurt anyone its just my out burst i m so frustrated with silent readers and if you guys didn't do any comment or like than i am not going to update any story sorry but i stop writing...



fears makes love
chapter 1

someone sitting on a chair look at the window side and try to think something very deeply and in a moment sudden change on her face expression smile crept on her old face she take a pen look at her empty dairy who is resting on her study table she take a deep breath and start writing...

dear dairy ... (14th April 2016)

haye dairy today i am going to tell a story it was not a fairy tail it was not just story ... it was a life changing experience some old memories to give me strength to undergo this f**king society... today is my birthday and i am turned 45 years old i am so happy... my children's planning surprise me today they both visit in India without informing me and visit my place they actually gave me happiness what i want so long... i remember since 1996 on the very same day i turned 25... people gave me lots of wishes lots of gifts but on the very same day some sort of reckless thing happened in my life my mom decided that she tore apart from my father like forever i don't know what is wrong with her ? i actually asked her billion times but she is not ready to tell what happened between her and dad i am 25 years old i am not a kid anymore but they are behaving like i am small kid i am not just 25 years old women i am yuvrani of devghar but they didn't tell me what the reason behind there divorce on a very next day i got kidnapped ... yes this is my story... 😉

she stopped writing she touched her necks locket and smile again and than again start writing...

i know sometimes i am being melodramatic but this time situation make me this...

she remember that day when her life give a chance to her a new life

Ms yuvrani manyta kumari do you know the reason behind your parents separation ? this voice came from behind she frozen on her spot for some seconds she breath heavily her hawt tears came out from her puffy eyes she turn around look at a person who was standing behind her with disgusting way MIND YOUR OWN BUSINESS MR. JAGAT RATHOR

he look at her with ARE U SERIOUS LOOK? he came forward put her chin up look into her beautiful brown eyes and said mind my words girl THEY LEFT YOU ALONE FOREVER AND THAT DAY WHO WILL SAVE YOU FROM ME HUH ? YOUR FATHER IS A LOOSER MANYTA HE IS ALREADY CHEATING ON YOUR MOTHER CAN'T YOU SEE THAT I NEVER THOUGHT YOU SUCH A DUMB !!
BAM!!!
jagat received a tight slap from her ... he never thought she slapped him so hard...she said angrily WHO ARE YOU? WHO GIVE YOU ANY RIGHTS TO SAY SUCH BAD THINGS FOR MY FATHER ? IF YOU DON'T KNOW ANYTHING SO KEEP YOUR f**kING MOUTH SHUT !!! she barked loudly SHE TRY TO GO ANOTHER SIDE but stopped some one pull her wrist ... and force her to look at him she look at him and said LEAVE ME JAGAT U JERK

i can't princess i can't ... no one can dare to slap me... HOW COULD YOU ? NOW I WILL SHOW YOU WHO THE HELL AM I?

REALLY ? do you really think your so called threaten scared me ? (she said look straight forward into his eyes )

i promise miss ... now no one can save you FROM ME... he said with devilish look
manyta burst out laugh in front of him

he look at her like what so funny ?

manyta look at him and said why don't you join any other comedy show your timing is so perfect and that place is better for you... n listen to me very clearly she said with warning tone DON'T FORGET IF U R JAGAT RATHOD THAN I M NOT A COMMONER I M YUVRANI MANYTA KUMARI OF DEVGAR NOW LEAVE MY HAND MR. STAY IN YOUR LIMITS she complete herself and in a second HIS GRIP is loosed !!
manyta look at him n said GOOD BOY !!! with smirk

in a second moment she goes from there without looking back

jagat :U R SO DEAD MANYTA !!! he complete himself with greeting his teeth

I THINK NOW EVERYTHING WILL BE FINE BUT AGAIN I M WRONG ...

FLASH BACK ...

MANYTA MANYTA MANYTA !!! someone shouting knocking her doors...OPEN THE DOOR MAN !!

JAY PLEASE STOP SHOUTING I M NOT A DEAF WAIT A MINUTE !!! she opened her room gate without give her any look jay pushed her and enters her room
manyta look at her and said whats wrong ?

manyta he ask me for date jay jump on the floor

manyta: what whom u are talking about ??

j: akash!!! (with excitement)

manyta turned and look at jay with shocking way are you out of your mind ? she said with shocking way
AKASH VERMA THAT akash verma who try to flirt with me & raged you on a very same day do you remember our first day of college?
yes i do remember she said with a dreamy way

HE IS A JERK'S BEST FRND !!!

J: jerk ? (confuse look)

manyta: JAGAT RATHOD !!! she complete her self disgustingly

J:comon manyta its just a prank why you hate him so much

manyta: because he is nothing to me he is a jerk nothing else !! she said loudly

j: comon he is a hawt stuff !!!

manyta: what ? WHO THE HELL R U TALKing ABOUT JAGAT OR HAWT ? that WORD NEVER suites ON HIM HE IS a JOKER
fully cartoon ... FOR ME

J: THAN WHAT KIND OF PRINCE CHARMING U WANT ? PRINCESS ?

HIS CHARM WOULD BE LIKE IAN SOMERHALDER

IN OTHER SIDE...

bhai kaam ho gaya ... sab kuch vvesa hi hua jese aap chate the (BHAI work is done ... and everything is did like you want)
GOOD !! he said with loudly his eyes visible his chocolate brown eyes ... any girl can drool on them he look at the person who standing behind him n said

ab vese hi hoga jese mai chata hu one voice came from other side par bhai adu bhai ke gang ke admi humare adde pe ana chate hai BHAI app bolo tho jo humare raste m ayega salo ko vahi tokh dete hai !!!( now everything will be happen in my way suddenly one voice came from behind him but bhai addu bhai's gang members want to come in our place bhai just give me command and i will shoot all the basted ho come in our way)

ABHI NHI !!! MAI UNHII KE ADDE PE JAKE UNHE THOKNA CHATA HU ..( not now !! i want go his place & shoot them all) now his hands visible who was resting on his knees

IN OTHER HAND ...

so you want every girl do jealous from you ?

manyta: yes she said and wink at her

his personality look like some kind of hero
IN OTHER HAND ...

BHAI YAHI HAI VO BANDA JISNE ADDU BHAI KI GANG KO HUMARE ADDE KE BARE MAI BTAYA HAI ( bhai this is the real culprit who told about our place to addu bhai's gang member

mujhe maaf kardo bhai mujhe maaf kardo ... ( please pardon me bhai please pardon me )

his face was not visible because of dim light but his voice give a goosebumps to others he asked teri akhri kwaish kya hai ?( what is your last wish? )

BHAI MUJHE MAAF KARDO ... !! ( bhai please pardon me) he is crying like hell


the person who was standing behind coming forward n pull up his collar n shout on him

BHAI KO DHOKA DEGA TU BHAI KO ... ( how could you betray bhai how could you? )

he put his gun out

yahi thok dalunga tujhe saale ... !!! ( i will shoot you here )

RAGU !!! (THAT VOICE MAKE STOP THAT PERSON WHO HAVE A GUN IN HIS HAND )

PAR BHAI !!! (BUT BHAI...)

CHOD USE ... !! ( LET HIM GO)

HE suddenly LEAVE HIS COLLAR !!!

IN OTHER SIDE ...

and ?

BAS YR VO JESE BHI HO SIRF MUJHSE PYAAR KARE ( that's it whatever he is? i want he always love me) (she said in a sweet voice)

IN OTHER HAND

SMIRK APPEARED ON HIS FACE N HE LOOK AT A PERSON WHO WAS ASKING HIM SOME MERCY HE GAVE A EVIL SMIRK TO HIM AND SAID

that man came forward slowly n suddenly his face visible

UDAY VEER SINGH KISI KO BHI 2ND CHANCE NHI DETA ... !!!(udayveer singh never gave second chance to anyone )

dear dairy...

my assumptions about prince charming was wrong but what can i do i m just 25 years old who lives in fantasy because of him i changed my life ...



KRITZ 😳😳😳


Edited by -Kritika- - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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heyy kritz u know that i have already read it this update but then i think i havent commented on ur previous thread so here is my comment well kritz what should i say to u... ur every story fascinates me alot... and wanted to read its all chapters in one go but then u unfortunately update it once in a blue moon... 😭
well first update of ur story is very nyccc... and funny... and the greatest part of ur story is that u had editted a picture and then post it which ''jisne chappi ko chaar chand laga diye''... 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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awesome update
poor manyata her parents got divorce
didn't even tell her what happened
oh hell that jerk jagat kidnap manyata 😡
thank god manayta didn't scare at all 😃
ouch whatever manayta want in her prince charming uday exactly opposite
continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
#36
Wow !!!! Mind Blowing ...
Super - Duper Amazing ...
Awesome Update ...
Loved it...
Continue Soon...
Thanks for the PM... 😳 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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WOW!! beautiful start dear...loved the update
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Posted: 9 years ago
#38
Hey Kritika
How are you
The chapter was really nice
I liked the scene between Manyata and Jagat
And also how Manyata shut Jagat up
Uday's gunda wala avtaar is really interesting
I really like him that way 😉
Do continue soon
And thanks for the PM
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Posted: 8 years ago
#39
Pls continue its a great concept.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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sorry sweet heart i know you're actually waiting for my updates ... but im lil busy in these days because of my clg life ... u know studies n all but don't worry im updating i never falling for you chapter 6 its already half written ... just wait for 1 hour n today im surly updating 😳😳

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