The steps a poem lakshman's feelings on meeting urmi

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Posted: 9 years ago
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A poem from lakshman's perspective
My first ever try to write it out from a male view
Based on their reunion


The steps

Walking like a mad man , in rush
I recaptulated those brown eyes , that red blush
Those soft and pink lips , that smile
That enthralled and froze me for a while
Those flowy hair that brushed past the nature's scene
That charming face , so beautiful so serene
And finally those tears that gushed out of her magnetic eyes
That times of tests and tries
Those moments of pain and despair
Her sacrifice , her bravery , her love , her care
And finally I reached the room
Shedding my sorrow , my pain , my gloom
She lay on the bed seven steps from me
I looked at her with love and glee
But those steps , those steps seemed like ages
Like the test laid out by sages
I took the first one with a new promise in heart
To forever be her life's part
With the second a pledge was taken
To protect her and this vow to never be shaken
The third charged me with inner peace and will
The fourth reminded me of my duty and her skill
The fifth fifth me with love and trust
And sixth talked about things of should and must
In the final step I asked for a wish to the mighty
"Oh my lots , oh my diety
If you ever give me birth again
Then let this lady be my rain
That flushes every doubt from heart
And embellishes and cherishes my path
And let me too adorne her ride
Let me be her groom and she my bride
Let her be the moon and I be the star
Let her be the butterfly and I the flower
Let me be the truth and she my believe
Let me be her gateway and she my relief "
With this I touched her hand and she opened her eternal eyes
Inside which my whole world lies
I called for her , she murmured my name
And I captured the moment in my eyes frame
In her arms I found the solace of life
She is my my enchantress, my urmilla , my wife





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Posted: 9 years ago
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Charvi this is sooo beautiful...I was really emotional after watching tonight's episode and you made me shed a few drops more...way to go Bharat bhaiya



this is awesome


love
Rii
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Riya_16

Charvi this is sooo beautiful...I was really emotional after watching tonight's episode and you made me shed a few drops more...way to go Bharat bhaiya



this is awesome


love
Rii

Thankyou so much di😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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This is too too good😃😃

Loved it❤️

👏🤗👏

This is the first time I felt that the native feelings were perfectly and flawlessly conveyed in English😳

👏👏

Keep writing more dear😊😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Charvi I loved the last rhyming lines too much starting from let me be her groom, she my bride
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Posted: 9 years ago
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this was sooo beautiful

I loved the lines, I will be trust nd u my believe

This poem just showed ur beautiful thoughts nd mindset
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Keep writing sweetie
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wonderful Charvi
You seem to have put in a great effort to pen down this Beautiful and emotional Poem👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Marvellous and beautiful Charvi 😳👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Too beautiful to be described in words,Charu.
What should I say?You left me into tears.
Each step was just like each beat of the heart,each tide of the wave and each glitter of the moon.
The Wows❤️
The last lines were absolutely bliss.
Wow!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Unres
Char, Char, Char 👏👏
Lakhan's thoughts were so perfect.
Seven the eternal number. Seven heads, seven steps, seven meet, seven form. The symbolism was apt 😳
I got everything you are saying here, Char :)
The last line was so perfect, that the moon was so touched 😳

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