ShraMan-KRISHNA AUR UNKI RADHA....os...

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Hello friends...i am Piyali and a huge fan of ekdv...wish to see the show on rank 1 so thought to contribute a little by writing an article here so this os...well this time it is a converted version of another couple on whom i wrote before but as soon as i get time i will write one os only an only on ShraMan...well hope you like this one...😃

The scene starts with a girl playing basketball in a basketball court , a few other girls are accompanying her , but she is playing very well , her face is not shown , only her eyes are shown.

She is wearing shorts with a loose t-shirt , she throws the ball towards the goal but it doesn't hit the goal and while it is falling back , someone catches it.

His face is covered by the ball while a few boys are accompanying him.

The girl stopped and a girl from back in her ears : yaar , he catched it so well...

The girl eyes the boy's face covered with ball and says : oh , it was just a coincidence ,no one can play better then Suman...Suman tiwari...

She smiles proudly while the boy removes the ball from the front of his face and his face is revealed to be Shravan.

A couch comes from back and sees Shravan and then says to Suman smiling : Suman , he is the captain of the next intercollage competition of collage so you'll explain him all the rules...

Suman eyes him shocked and says : but sir , i am the captain of girls team and also of the mixed girls and boys team from past 1 year , why this change now...

The couch : Suman , he is a great player and everyone should get chance so...

Suman eyes him angrily while the couch goes.

Suman comes to him and says angrily : oh , so new captain but no one can be better then Suman...

Shravan smiles and says : oh , so thats why your short got missed...

Suman eyes him and then : it was just once , you'll soon see...

She goes from there with her friends saying this while Shravan stands there smiling.

Next day:

Suman is sitting in canteen with her friends while Shravan enters the collage.

She hears a girl saying ; see , so handsome na, you know he was called Krishna in his last collage...

A girl smiles and says : oh Krishna...then you all become his gopian , his radha will only be me...

Shravan comes to her and says : of course...

He smiles shaking hands with her while Suman smiles and says from her table : yaa ,, you steel makhan only and i'll make my collage win the match...

Shravan comes to her and greets her friends and says to her : we'll see...

Suman eyes him angrily as he goes.

After a few days :

Shravan is becoming the charm of collage while Suman is getting angry by every step of his.

In basketball court:

Shravan is practising there with his friends when suddenly Suman comes there with her friends and starts playing with him.

They both are giving each other equal competition when suddenly Suman falls , she is badly hurt on her knees.

She is not about to stand up while people are surrounding her , everyone else is playing when Shravan leaves the ball and picks her up , she eyes him angrily while Shravan makes her hold his neck comfortably.

After they both left , everyone stops playing while Shravan makes her sit on a nearby bench and is about to do first aid.

Suman stops him ; no..no..no...it will hurt...

Shravan smiles at her childishness and says : so , a tough basketball player like you is also afraid of these small injuries...

Suman angrily : oh hello , i am not afraid of anyone...i am very strong...these small injuries can do nothing of Suman and you...you would tell me huh...i am Suman ...ok leave just do first aid...you'll see i'll not even scream a little...

She eyes him eyeing her innocently and says : now do na...

Shravan smiles , holds her shoulder and says : you are really strong, you didn't even scream a little , you are really brave...

He points towards her injury , he had done first aid.

Suman eying it shocked : when did you do it???

Shravan smiles and says : when you were speaking continuously...

He laughs while Suman too laughs.

Shravan : so friends...

Suman nods smiling.

After about a month :

Now ShraMan are best friends , everyone in the collage knows this , but no one ever thinks that they can be in a relationship because they think that Shravan would never be interested in a tomboy like Suman and Suman and boys is just an impossible thing but they don't know that both Suman and Shravan now have feelings for each other.

They are afraid to say it to each other being afraid of the fact that the other may not like it and break their friendship.

One day:

Suman is walking in the collage when she comes across the canteen , there she finds Shravan talking to the "most beautiful girl of the collage "(tagged by people) , the girl, monica is trying to woo him and trying to get closer to him, though Shravan feels uncomfortable but refrains from saying anything as that would really look bad.

Suman sees this and his heartbroken.

She moves from there to go when Shravan comes to her and stops her and says : Suman , tomorrow is my birthday...i wanna introduce someone special in it...you will come na...

Suman agrees instantly as she just wanted to go to her home now and cry.

Shravan smiles and leaves .

He has invited the whole collage , Suman while going out in parking hears someone say: yaar , who will he introduce ??

Another girl : maybe Suman...

First girl : oh please , Suman , that basketball player , she can never be his choice , he would like some hot chick na...i guess monica...

Suman remembers the scene she just witnessed and goes to her car and drives home angrily.

She cries the whole day and at night calls Shravan and says : Shravan , i won't come tomorrow , i am having some important work...sorry ...happy birthday in advance...

Shravan angrily : oh hello, if you don't come na, then i'll come to your home and take you by picking you up so do come or else...

Suman angrily thinks : idiot ..

She then says : ok , i am coming ...

She cuts the call saying this.

Next day at party :

Suman has worn a beautiful blue gown while Shravan is in simple black formal suit.

Every boy is staring Suman as she never before wore girlish clothes and today she was looking like a fairy.

Shravan was always stared by girls so it was not new.

Shravan suddenly goes to stage and takes the mike , he says smiling : guys , so its my birthday but one more special thing today as i promised you all that i'll introduce someone special today...as in maybe my radha...

He laughs and says : when she smiles na , i feel like she is the most innocent girl in the world(he remembers how he first saw her smiling proudly ) when she laughs , it feels like no one else is around and only she's there(he remembers how she laughed that day while he applied medicine) she is very innocent , 1 in a million for me...

A girl from back says to monica : you monica...

Suman listens this and goes from there angrily crying , she goes in a room on 1st floor and in the rooms washroom , she starts crying there locking it from inside.

She suddenly feels a knock at the window, it is a translucent window.

She wipes her tears and opens the window , she is shocked to see Shravan who is climbing on a ladder.

Suman afraid : Shravan , you'll fall...come fast...

Shravan jumps inside smiling and says : why did you came to washrrom and crying here??

Suman angrily : you go...introduce your someone special na...why wasting time here??

Shravan smiling : how will i do it without you??

Suman angrily thinks : so he wants me to see that how beautiful that monica is...

Suman angrily says : Shravan you go na , introduce her...its your birthday...go...

Shravan smiles and cups her face and says : the time i spend with you is the best time in my life , don't dare call it waste my someone special...

Suman is shocked and then says : were you talking about me???

Shravan makes her face the mirror and says : see , this innocent face , 1 in million...

Suman smiles and he says : see , my innocence queen...

Suman laughs and he says : who even sometimes becomes bomb...

Suman beats him playfully , she is a little shy while Shravan smiles.

Suman suddenly remembers something and says : but Krishna ji had so many wifes??

Shravan beats his head at her innocent question and says : but i only have one radha who is my life's every queen...

Suman smiles and hugs him while Shravan suddenly says scared : you didn't see this room na??

Suman eyes him questionably and then quickly runs outside the washroom and sees the room , there were curtain all around , even on the walls.

Shravan : Suman , no need to see na...

Suman angrily : why , are there any heroine's paintings , i''ll surely see.

Shravan tries to stop her but she opens the curtains.

She is shocked to see her face painted on the walls , her playing basketball , ShraMan first meet scene , Shravan caressing her wound , their friendship scene...

Suman smiles and says : you painted these walls with my face but why...

Shravan smiles and says : if i have painted my heart with your thoughts then these walls are not big things...after seeing you, i couldn't get a better topic for my paintings.

Suman stares him smiling and again hugs him.

Shravan : oh hello, where my gift...??

Suman shows him a wrapped gift and he opens it and finds a ball which had a photograph of a boy and a lady.

Shravan is shocked to see it and says : where did you got it?? ma gifted me ...it had mine and her photograph...you know i lost it in childhood...(Shravan's mother is no more)

Suman smiles and says : i saw it in dustbin while playing in childhood , it had this photo so i thought it must be someone's special thing so i kept it and when i saw your mother's photo na then i got it that its your so gave it...

Shravan hugs Suman and says thanks a lot Suman.

After five years:

ShraMan are now married and Shravan is now a national level basketball player while Suman is a writer which was her dream and teaches the underprivileged children to play basketball.

They are back in their collage as chief guests for a function.

ShraMan are told to share their views.

Suman : you know , i was a mad person always with that spark that i have to come first in everything...

Shravan says : and i was a person who just knew nothing beyond basketball...

Suman : we both achieved our dreams ...but the thing that matters the most to us is that how we achieved it...

Shravan : people say that behind every successful man there's a woman and i agree with it ...

Suman : but i say a new saying and that is that behind every successful woman there s a successful man...

ShraMan smile seeing each other.

Shravan : our love for each other gave us the way to our dreams , after our marriage we separated ourselves from our families to prove ourselves , when i used to come late from practises Suman used to be awake , no matter what the time was but she used to never let me sleep without eating anything...

Suman : and when i used to go early morning 4 a.m. to teach children , he used to never let me go without having breakfast and was to have it with me...no matter he ate his dinner just an hour ago...

ShraMan smile and together say : so achieve your dreams but the best thing would be to achieve it with someone by your side ...

They suddenly see a girl and boy between the crowd.

The girl : oh hello , no one can be better than me in studies...

The boy : oh , so how were you not able to solve the question which i just gave...??

The girl : that was just once , you'll see soon...

ShraMan smile as they remember their first fight and Suman asks the principal : who are those??

Principal : oh god , these both , the boy is new admission Pushkar and the giri is collage's topper Preeti , they always fight only...sorry ...

Suman smiles while Shravan : one more love story begins...

The end.

So guys , i hope you liked it .

Edited by Piyaliiii - 9 years ago

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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was superb yr
New concept
Lovely OS do write more
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi piyali!!!
The title "Krishna aur unki radha" is itself very special an eternal lovestory
So apt for shraman
Lovely story, very different 👏
Do write more..

-----Priyam------
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello Piyali🤗
The concept was so different ,unique and awesome.
You did a great job.
I loved the way you used Krishna and Radha here.It stole the OS for me.
Your title is so apt and beautiful.
Writing style is bang on.
Do write more.

-Mitali❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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thanks a lot dear...😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Zenab78

It was superb yr
New concept
Lovely OS do write more


thanks a lot dear...will try to write more for sure...😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: kennashreign

Aww... This is so cute!


thanks a lot dear...happy you liked it...😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sapphire3

Hi piyali!!!
The title "Krishna aur unki radha" is itself very special an eternal lovestory
So apt for shraman
Lovely story, very different 👏
Do write more..

-----Priyam------


thanks dear...i am happy you liked it...i will surely write more on our sharman ,i am really happy that sharman are on rank 1 now...wish we maintain it...😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: SleepyPsycho

Hello Piyali🤗

The concept was so different ,unique and awesome.
You did a great job.
I loved the way you used Krishna and Radha here.It stole the OS for me.
Your title is so apt and beautiful.
Writing style is bang on.
Do write more.

-Mitali❤️


thanks a lot mitali dear...i am soo happy that you liked it...will for sure write more on our sharman...😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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i l7d d way u ended it i mean its really a wonderful n heart touching os

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