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Posted: 9 years ago

#61

Hi Archana,

Thank you for the link to your Index.

Really enjoyed Colored Halos. Absolutely adorable. I loved how you brushed them both with layers of calm... yet she is still kooky and impulsive and he is... well he is like Ferrero Rocher. Dry akhdoo exterior and gooey center... and that soft core... that soft core is for her eyes only... no one must know that Arnav Singh Raizada cuddles with his wife. Couldn't help but laugh at his predicament. I appreciated that he regretted his behavior towards her and doubly appreciated that he didn't go overboard in his remorse. I liked it that he stayed true to his ASR self.. at least outwardly. I loved his complete acceptance of her importance in his life. I loved his thoughts that things, days, occasions are important to him only because of their association with her. And I loved that she understood him completely... understood his regret, love and desire. And above all I loved that she felt comfortable not just accepting but initiating intimacy.

Very well written Archana... I can't wait to read the rest of your stories... and thank Ruchi for introducing me to you.

Love and regards,

Sam

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Posted: 9 years ago

#62

lovely beautiful os.
loved it and just hope why couldnt such scene come up in ek jashn.it will be so wonderful to watch

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Posted: 9 years ago

#63

Your an intelligent writer and that is what was playing in my mind while I read this One Shot. Of course, I will come to the OS later on, after I am done writing about the 'writer' first. I liked the idea that you have used in the OS, along with the mood of this piece. I am not sure if this happens to anyone but what I read does impact me in more ways than one. The OS is very feel-good and lightens up one's mood instantly. I liked how you have kept the tone as 'matter-of-fact' touching upon the sexual aspect in a seemingly teasing way and yet not dwelling into it. The note mentions that this was your first attempt at a fiction Shot and I must say it was more than 'likeable'.

The title Colored Halos defensively defines Khushi as Arnav's angel, his to keep and cherish. THAT was one intelligent find. To justify that, you have also mentioned how Arnav and Khushi have moved past the Shyam fiasco. And Khushi refers to him as Arnav and not Arnavji, that was a progress. Does your Khushi work BTW? Anyway it was nice to read that Khushi considers Arnav as his own, in all the sense of the world. And your Khushi isnt a shy prude, another progress from the show and aptly keeps the spirit of 'happily ever after ' alive.

The piece was in one word, sweet. It touches upon the intricate relationship of a husband and wife in love and as a work of fiction this was by far one of the better pieces I have read in my limited time here. Apart from the language which I liked, I am glad you have brought up Aman and Anjali in a sarcastic way, defining their shape as a catalyst in Arhi's life and yet not demeaning either in any way. I am not too sure about others but I for one have never been fond of Anjali in the show post the hate marriage track. Anyway, the bit on mamiji troubling HP was rather cute. I liked what I read and I am willing to read more of your work. Hopefully you will have a loyal reader here.

PS Do check your PM.