Twinj + Cherry OS: Afsoz

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Natasha

@--Natasha--

Voyager

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Posted: 9 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: teddyyy

LOL Natasha I'm pretty sure you mean angst + YOU is the perfect combo :P hope you read it soon! :D

Teddy!You flatter me a lot!😳

If you had not mentioned how much time you took to write this,I would have asked because master pieces like these aren't written in a jiff!

I felt as if things were playing out in front of me,this was just absolutely so perfect Teddy!

You made me feel what every character felt, Twinkle,Kunj,bebe and Cherry too.

and the dialogues!Gosh!I don't know what to say!They were so truthful and beautifully penned down.

The parts where Twinkle and Kunj are self reflecting is so woahh!

And I'm so glad you made Kunj apologize to Twinkle, coz he shouts on her when he is angry and then very rarely we sew him apologizing for the same even though he is sorry,in the show I meant.

I totally loved this!Only if we could get sowmthinh like this in the show!

I told you not to judge yourself😆 You can both write Angst and Fluff.

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MinnieRose

@MinnieRose

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#32

This is so damn good, Teddy! As funny as he can be and pull of some great one liners, I still can't get over what he did. I'm amazed at how cvs didn't even think once to acknowledge his wrongdoing in the show and proceeded to show him positive as if nothing had ever happened. I understand this is an Indian show and I should put all my logic and expectations behind before watching but like dude come on, every human has a little bit of conscious. And I'm so glad you awoke that through this OS. I'm still waiting for the day when he confesses and apologizes to Twinkle but seeing how his track is coming forth, it seems almost non-existent.

Anyway, I'm so really glad Kunj was present while he confessed. I could just imagine what Twinkle must have been going through after learning the truth of her brother-in-law. And then Kunj apologizing to her after. I CANT MY HEART. OH GOD MY BABIES.

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Raina S.M

@rainaM

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#33

I'm on a reading spree today, yay.I should be focusing on my edumacation but ehh, degrees are overrated! So yes, the OS. What the chocolate fudge Teddy! Since when did you become such an amazing OS writer? Why don't I know about this hidden skill? #Raidy needs some work! 😆

First things first, MY BABIES ARE SO FREAKING ADORABLE, I CAN'T EVEN! Protective Kunj makes me swoon and a Sorry Serna makes my heart melt. Poor Twinkle! sometimes the people closest to you can mean the most harm and she's experienced that way too many times be it with Yuvraj or Cherry.

I don't know how I feel about Cherry tho, honestly. I definitely want to see some self-reflection, redemption and a lot of regret but do I want a confession? I'm not sure. You've inspired me to make a post LOL I don't know if i have the time to tho #stupidfinals. Maybe I will soon!

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-WalkThatWay-

@-WalkThatWay-

Voyager

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Posted: 9 years ago

#34

Do pardon my late arrival, personal life did not permit me to prevail on to this forum for quite sometime now, can I just mention that I can't get over your extreme cuteness..you wrote a story on the subject I adore the most..I am highly honoured!

Do I even need to let it be known what a sublime writer you are..the simplicity of your words and enthralling build combined with intriguing paragraphs that denies me of not stopping from reading such a wonderful piece..you have certainly left me flabbergasted with your awesomeness

Portrayal of the characters was very realistic to that of the show which makes it sound all the more convincing, Cherrys regret which is yet to come would be such a treat is it played out the way you have imagined it..Kunj's possessiveness is something I will always fawn over, his love for her will override come what her way, his reaction will probably be the same as you have penned down, and I can totally see Kunj reacting in the same manner as the Kunj in your story

Twinkles forgiving nature is something I really admire, but upon finding out what Cherry tried to do to her will hurt self-esteem and possibly affect her trust from here on

Lastly Bebes evident fear due to the Motherly nature and love she has for her kids was quite emotional, her disgust of knowing the sin was carried out by one of her very own sons..what makes Bebe just is the fact that she will always side the right even if the wrong is carried out by a person of her own

Loved it dearly..and thank you for writing a theme which I love, looking forward to more!

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teddyyy

@teddyyy

Rocker

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Posted: 9 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: ...Shakti...

unres
i LOVED how you redeemed cherry here! tbh i feel like he can't be redeemed until he is held accountable for his actions!
kunj's reaction was ON POINT!! teddy you wrote kunj so perfectly and so fitting to the situation, i can't even begin to tell you how much i loved it!
and hayee twinkle in the end, what a sweetheart! i absolutely loved it!
you really need to write more! it's a demand 😃😃
loved it teddy!! 😊😊

You know the reason why it took me so much time to write this was because I didn't know how I exactly wanted Cherry to be redeemed so thank you for telling me you loved it hehe 😆 Omg you know for my first OS everyone told me that I did a really good job portraying the characters to their true essence so I was so worried I wouldn't be able to do it again, BUT omg you literally are making me breathe so many sighs of relief right now 🤣

Thank you so much dude, means a loot coming from you! 🤗

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teddyyy

@teddyyy

Rocker

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Posted: 9 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: MaliciousAngel
Teddy 🤗
Dude, this is so frickin' amazing. How do you all write so well? I really wanna know. All i can write is english, wouldn't even call it an essay cus its that lame. Anyhow girl, I agree with you on not enjoying Cherry's hilarious side fully because i seriously can't let go of what he tried to do with Twinkle. Such things ought to be punished and Cherry needs to face Kunj and the whole family's flak. At this point i feel that cvs forgot such a thing ever happened
Always wabted Cherry to pay for his actions and this is exactly how i wanted it to be! Like really. Do you know what goes on in my head? You read my thoughts perfectly and oh boy the way you explained Kunj punching Cherry, I literally had a vision of that happening lol.
Each and every line was so beautifully written. Teddy you are A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!
I want more stories 'kay? Imma bug you for them now😎

Athira you sweetheart! Thank you so much 😳 I never thought I could do creative writing because like english is not my crazy good strength but Twinj really pushed me, with tons of motivation from Natasha so I'm sooo happy you liked it!

Yeah seriously, I'm sure no one here fully is able to accept Cherry until he shows regret and is somehow redeemed. Since it doesn't seem to be happening on the show anytime soon, I decided to write about it 😃

LOL awww thank you thank you thank you!!! I love you a bunchies & I'm really happy you enjoyed that part because it was super fun to write! 😆 And yes, I shall try again soon hehe.