TEI OS: Raat Ke Nakhre

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hriddey requested a romantic OS about there weeks ago. Sorry for the delay bhai! Hope this lives up to your expectations. It's short and not much, but thats all the romance I can manage. The credit for the title goes to 'Teddyyy' the genius. Teddy you'll get your own dedication tomorrow after you are done with your exams!

One Shot: Raat ke Nakhre



Twinkle plopped herself next to Kunj who was distractedly typing away gibberish on his laptop without sparing a glance towards her. She heaved a sigh in, rolled her eyes and rolled over towards him, burying her face by his waist and circling her arms over his torso.

"Kya hua Twinkle?" he asked yawning, his eyes still focused on the screen.

"Tum mujhe bhav kyun nahi dete aajkal?" she asked in a fake-whinny voice that earned her an exasperated sigh from him. Not happy with his typical response, she tickled his sides and pushed herself away from him smiling.

"TWINKLE!" he cried irritated. "Kam karne do yaar! Mein kya din mein aake tumhe taang karta hoon?!"

She stared at him frustrated but at not getting his attention, she took all the cushions on the bed and created a wall in between them. "Abb jab mere taraf dekhte hi nahi ho tou din mein kya, raat mein tang karma bhi dur ki hi baat hai." she mumbled as she got up to close the door, took her night-slip dress out and headed towards the bathroom.

His attention finally shifted as he picked up the angry tone of her voice and the frustration that filled in her statement. He looked at her stomping towards the bathroom and walking out after the next five minutes and slipping underneath the covers without sparing any glance at him.

He heaved as sigh at her dramatic antics and closed the laptop after putting an early alarm for next day on his phone. He gently tapped her shoulder but had his hand shrugged off. He tired again but instead of shrugging it off, she tried to push it off by her hand. Beheld on to her hand just as it touched hers, and pulled her towards him turning her exterior around to face him.

"Kya hua?" he questioned, his hand still tightly wrapped around hers.

"Sone do!" she replied monotonously tugging her hand back. He let it go and saw disappointment flicker in her eyes but swiftly vanishing away as anger took over once again. She looked at him before turning back.


"Jab khood ka dil hota hai tou tou laga rehta hai mannane mein. Abhi khud busy hai tou sirf ignore kare ga! Sardo Saran!" she grumbled under her breath as she felt him leave the bed to turn the lights off. The bedside lamp on his side was the only thing left open in the dark room, allowing her to keep track of his steps around the room.

He felt her taking a deep breath as he climbed back onto the bed, somehow making him feel more satisfied then he should be feeling in current circumstances.

He slipped under the covers, draping his arm over her waist per usual habit and buried his face in the crook of her neck.

"KUNJ!" she uttered warningly at his actions.

"Kya? Tum ghusa ho sakti ho par apni biwi pe tou mera haq hai na!?" he spoke, pulling himself up and resting on his elbow.

The butterflies in her stomach felt like sing again but Twinkle knew she had to be strong. "Nahi! Aaj biwi pe koi haq nahi mile ga tumhe!"

"Kyun? Main ne kiya keya?" he asked trying to sound very-much offended at which Twinkle turned herself around to face him.

"Abb yeh bhi mein bataoin?" she gritted angrily, looking directly into his eyes to make him understand that she is the person in-charge right now.

"Acha sorry!" He replied slowly, trying to give one of the charming smiles that she had failed to resist so far however his plan went down the drain once he saw her roll her eyes and shake her head in disappointment.

She took his hand off her waist and was about to turn her back towards him once again when he pushed himself off and got on top of her. He felt her breath hitch as she looked at his hand rest beside her head. She felt her heart race up and had only uttered half of his name when he shushed her up.

"Tujh pe dhiyan deta hoon tou duniya mein kiya ho raha hai, kyun ho raha hai, saab dimag se nikal jata hai. Issi leye tou duniya ke saare kam pehle khataam kar raha tha take tujh pe baad mein jee bhar ke dhiyaan de sakoon."

"Tujhe dekhe bagair tou mera din shuru hi nahi hota Twinkle." he added on, pulling himself back into the position he was earlier. He smiled softly at her, trying to gauge her reaction.

"Acha.." she hesitated in speaking up, composing herself before starting up again. "Agar aisa hai tou last ke teen din tum mere uthne se pehle hi gaib kyun ho gaye the?"

"Twinkle!" he pursed his lips before gently cupping her face, "Aab tu hi bataya. Agar mein there uthne ka intazaar karta tou kiya time pe ready hota? Tumhe tou pata hai ke tere susti ki adadt mujhe bhi laag gai hai. Iss leye jaldi jaldi ki."

"Aab please maan bhi ja. Kam az kam pechle dinoon yeh to satisfaction thi ke tum khush ho. Aab kiya tarasne ke saath saath jinta bhi karao gi ke meri pyaari se biwi mujhe se rooth ke bathi hui hai?" He added after seeing her fall into a thoughtful trance.


She looked up at him and pulled herself up to place a light peck on his lips.

He saw the glint in her eyes as she fell back onto her pillow and turned her back towards him. A small smile gathered on his face as he knelt beside her ear and draped his arms around her waist while pulling her towards himself before whispering, "Waise mujhe tou laga tha ke tumhe mera raat ko tang karna passand nahi tha?"

He placed a kiss behind her ear and earned a soft giggle from her. "Kunj!! Choro mujhe!"

"Aise kaise chor doon. Itni mushkiloon ke baad tou haat aai ho ar itne din se tou tumhe aise taang bhi nahi kiya."

"KUNJ!" she took his name almost scandalously, turning towards him. Her hands automatically resting over his chest.

"Aaj tou tujhe taang karne ka pura haq banta hai!"


Her smile widened seeing the familiar streak of playfulness in his eyes. "Dekhtein hain! Mein bhi utna hi tang kar skate hoon!" She pushed him down, taking him aback and placed kisses trailing form his neck to chest.


The night died down between them with laughter and soft giggles echoing in their room. The sweet scent of love filled the air until Kunj's alarm rang two hours earlier then his usual time, which ended up earning him a light push from his wife to get up and face the regular responsibilities of the day.



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Posted: 9 years ago
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RES RES RES!
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You don't understand ke mere dil main kitni khushi hoti hai when I get the first spot LOL. And awwie the title creds part was awesome 😉 but me dedication? Meaning you're expecting me to post a story tomorrow? LOL.

Okay idk what you're gonna think of this but the beginning scene literally was my sister & I. Like I'm Kunj and my sister is Twinkle; I'll be working and she will harass me relentlessly but then everything else was only Twinj lmao. You know what I love about your writing? The subtle movements and body langauge that you incorporate cause more than kisses THAT is what gets me happy. Like Twinkle wrapping her arms around his waist and snugging into him hayeee! Twinkle is so adorable when she's annoyed and rightly so! I love seeing Kunj have to manofy her 😆

Areeba his dialogues!!! HAYE SO ROMANTIC. He can't focus on anything else if he's invested in her and the haq lines were sooo him LOL. Kunj Sarna loves throwing around his haq on romancing with his wife so that was a perfect addition! I literally had the biggest smile on my face reading the end with him finally convincing her and her not backing down from bothering him. Giggles and sweet love, just gets to me!

So well written and so so beautiful. How do you write romance without it being cheesy is my question dude!

EDITED AGAIN: WAIT. You're posting an OS FOR ME TMRW? Lmao omg!! Clarify before I fangirl for no reason lmao.
Edited by teddyyy - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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RESERVED😎

OMG!I did not know the extent to which I was missing their bedroom romance until I read this OS!When will we have such scenes in the show.Kunj has not stepped into the bedroom since the crappy marriage:'(

You wrote a purely Twinkle and Kunj OS after so long and I enjoyed every bit of it.

"Tujh pe dhiyan deta hoon tou duniya mein kiya ho raha hai, kyun ho raha hai, saab dimag se nikal jata hai. Issi leye tou duniya ke saare kam pehle khataam kar raha tha take tujh pe baad mein jee bhar ke dhiyaan de sakoon."

This dialogue!Im still digesting it!How simply he admitted to her!This was the highlight for me in this piece.

And the little details in the OS,their feelings,gestures and the dialogues everything was beautifully penned Areeba!

I want this in the show now!:)
Edited by --Natasha-- - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Bruh this was just. How adorable! I need Twinj bedroom romance back in my life
This was awesome!

It's just gone 7am and niw I'm going to be thinking about Twinj romance in my exam 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Tranquility123

Bruh this was just. How adorable! I need Twinj bedroom romance back in my life

This was awesome!

It's just gone 7am and niw I'm going to be thinking about Twinj romance in my exam😳


I miss their bedroom scenes so much OMG.

Nemo I was like she usually sleeps at 6 am it's 7 am how the heck is she up lmao good luck on your exam!!!

And I updated my spot Areeba :D
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: teddyyy


I miss their bedroom scenes so much OMG.

Nemo I was like she usually sleeps at 6 am it's 7 am how the heck is she up lmao good luck on your exam!!!

And I updated my spot Areeba :D


Hate exam mornings man seriously. I fell asleep at 4 so I'm running on 3 hours of sleep right now. Defo going to nap once I get home again 😆 thanks dude, good luck to you too!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Tranquility123



Hate exam mornings man seriously. I fell asleep at 4 so I'm running on 3 hours of sleep right now. Defo going to nap once I get home again😆 thanks dude, good luck to you too!


I had an 8 am so I woke up at 6 am after 3 hours of sleep so I feel you. Please nap omg. And thank you <3
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: teddyyy

RES RES RES!
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You don't understand ke mere dil main kitni khushi hoti hai when I get the first spot LOL. And awwie the title creds part was awesome 😉 but me dedication? Meaning you're expecting me to post a story tomorrow? LOL.

Okay idk what you're gonna think of this but the beginning scene literally was my sister & I. Like I'm Kunj and my sister is Twinkle; I'll be working and she will harass me relentlessly but then everything else was only Twinj lmao. You know what I love about your writing? The subtle movements and body langauge that you incorporate cause more than kisses THAT is what gets me happy. Like Twinkle wrapping her arms around his waist and snugging into him hayeee! Twinkle is so adorable when she's annoyed and rightly so! I love seeing Kunj have to manofy her 😆

Areeba his dialogues!!! HAYE SO ROMANTIC. He can't focus on anything else if he's invested in her and the haq lines were sooo him LOL. Kunj Sarna loves throwing around his haq on romancing with his wife so that was a perfect addition! I literally had the biggest smile on my face reading the end with him finally convincing her and her not backing down from bothering him. Giggles and sweet love, just gets to me!

So well written and so so beautiful. How do you write romance without it being cheesy is my question dude!

EDITED AGAIN: WAIT. You're posting an OS FOR ME TMRW? Lmao omg!! Clarify before I fangirl for no reason lmao.



OMG I LOVE YOUR REPSONSES TEDDYY !!
Nope, I'll post an OS for you tomorrow. I wrote it a while ago and it's just siting in my laptop.

I hate cheesiness. I love subtlety. The everyday occurrences are something natural so I try to incorporate that and i'm glad you enjoyed that!

I'm glad you enjoyed reading this! Makes me so happy!!

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Tranquility123

Bruh this was just. How adorable! I need Twinj bedroom romance back in my life

This was awesome!

It's just gone 7am and niw I'm going to be thinking about Twinj romance in my exam 😳



TWINJ Bedroom romance is going me so much nostalgia! I really hope we get a good load of bedroom romance after this track.

Good luck on your exam dude! I hope you ace it!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: areeba_blossom




OMG I LOVE YOUR REPSONSES TEDDYY !!
Nope, I'll post an OS for you tomorrow. I wrote it a while ago and it's justsiting in my laptop.

I hate cheesiness. I lovesubtlety. Theeverydayoccurrences are something natural so I try to incorporate that and i'm glad you enjoyed that!

I'm glad you enjoyed reading this! Makes meso happy!!


AWWW LOL it amazes me you enjoy my blabbering so much 😆 YO IM SO HYPE. Like best moment ever LOL.

And you're so good at subtlety! I forgot but omg the last line about the alarm clock waking them up for their normal responsibilities was so perfect because they are a normal couple with normal things and it makes me so happy that you always try to maintain that :)))

Hehe I did love it! I know Hridey is gonna looove it too!

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